Ascended Photon Dragon

Stop writing a 4,000-word chapter. You really have no talent in this area. Tell us honestly that you are not dead in 2,000 words.

The author's game writing is truly outstanding. From Star Abyss really shocked me at the time.

It turns out to be the author from Xingyuan. I am waiting for Shen Nong to see if the author's Wenqing disease has improved.

I really like this setting, but the plot is a mess, especially starting from the title of Thunder, I don't know what I'm writing about. I really can't hold on any longer.

That man-in-law Kazideji looks like he is about to join the team. In the latest chapter, he wrote a "whitewash" such as "He did not turn into a black man himself, but was controlled by the esoteric cult." The psychological activity of the protagonist clearly stated that "compared to the middle-class dark and disabled boy in the future, the soft, weak and cute look now is better" 😰 To be honest, it's a bit disgusting🤢. Niche xp belongs to niche xp, but some niche xp are poisonous, such as Fu Rui and Nan Niang. Most ordinary people cannot accept this. So... The author, can you please be a bit apologetic and restrain your special taste?

The Empire and the Federation feel that they can rely on Warhammer and Helldiver. Neta, it just so happens that the Super Balloon has recently been linked to 40K. The description of the Federation still has a super balloon flavor, and the Empire can also rely on Warhammer. The most shitty thing now vs. The shittiest thing in history is quite interesting. The parent books are both American and Soviet, and if they want to be more science fiction, these two are good references. Of course, you can also mix it with other things, such as the space station colony in front, which has a bit of Federation and Zeon flavor. Regarding human supremacy, there are also shadows of the Human Alliance and the Earth Alliance. They are all based on the fantasy of the Cold War, and they are all parent materials, so I feel like we can learn from them.

The more I write about it, the more it smells like a lesbian drama. The main character transforms into a bunny maid, finds a female protagonist to train his teammates, and becomes a bestie setting between the eldest lady protagonist behind the scenes of a secret sect and her teammates of a princess in distress. The plot setting written by the author becomes more and more twisted and disgusting. This plot setting is still a large-scale description of the key plot, and the more I read it, the more it stinks.

I think there is nothing wrong with writing a plot outside the main plot. The protagonist is equivalent to time travel, and there is no emotional concern before time travel, let alone after time travel. If there is no emotional support for the protagonist, and the protagonist is just a pure egoist with no emotional motivation, I don't think it's not good-looking, I can only say that it is better to expand some character relationships. The only bad thing is not to write too much. I hope it can be included in the main line before it is put on the shelves.

Why write about so many men? It feels like besides the male characters, there is only one female protagonist?

There's nothing cool about it. I don't know if it's been too long since I've written a cool article. Maybe the author's idea of ​​coolness is different from mine, or maybe the author wants to write something more in-depth. When I saw the protagonist pretending to be a gangster in an underground black boxing place, I thought it was going to be cool. But I didn't expect that the fighting was just a small part of the picture. Most of the rest was about psychological description and introduction to the world view. It talked about a lot of social discrimination against aliens, the love and hatred between aliens and humans, cannibalism and so on. I have been crazily setting up the settings in the past, and I can't stand it anymore. I'll wait until I can write cool articles normally and then read it again.