Playing Literary Characters in a Steampunk City

Goldfinger's presence is too strong. Emphasizing the existence of cheats and emphasizing the contents triggered by cheats are very suspicious of hydrology. Whether the protagonist is a thoughtful and content person, or a simple golden finger trigger, the interaction between people is interesting. You should at least talk about this map of the world. There's no need to tell everything right away. Upper city, middle city, lower city. Are these three urban areas a ring, or are they artificially segregated by urban planning? You said you were talking about the Sherlock Holmes case, and Watson. It stands to reason that from the perspective of a detective, it is easy to discover the ills of this society and the picture of this society. Have you used it well? It's all shadows, it's all hooks, it's all foreshadowing. , Are you talking about extraordinary things or cases now? The narrative logic regarding the extraordinary path is also ridiculously chaotic. Apart from the advantages that Goldfinger brings to the protagonist, I don't see the protagonist's talent in extraordinary ways. In this extraordinary path, is it better to prioritize knowledge or destiny? It would be good to tell at least one. You can either open a single chapter where the protagonist connects with the stars through metal. Speculate what other metals represent and symbolize? Get this section straight. How to improve your extraordinary power will be described in a new chapter. It's really messy to mix things up like this. Why don't you just focus on the extraordinary power of detectives' daily confusion? Explore the world slowly, or focus on your extraordinary powers. Immediately understand the structure of this entire world. Begin the adventure of extraordinary paths. This feeling of confusion is really terrible.

Many women chased her 😍😍😍

The story is well written, but there are a lot of typos and sentences that don't make sense. The author needs to check more later, it will affect the perception very much.

Mercury is the metal that best matches Hermes. Hermes is Mercury in Roman mythology. Medieval people used mercury to treat venereal diseases, because venereal diseases were contracted from the market, and Hermes was the god of the market. Things themselves have energy and a power that can cause changes. This power is consistent with the meaning of things. This is the theory of response. Therefore the cause and effect of things exists outside the mind and depends on their meaning. The so-called acting can also be considered from this perspective. Similar behaviors are part of a cluster of meanings, which lead to corresponding things.

The story is very pure, from the beginning to the exciting world view, it is 70,000 words long. While it has gimmicks, the writing also maintains the delicate tone of the details. The character creation and reasoning process of the protagonist are very touching and touching. Like a vest created by a big guy, if it can maintain its level on subsequent shelves, I feel like I have to order all of them.

Are there any requirements for playing the protagonist? Does it have to be a Western character? Are Eastern characters okay? It has to be an imaginary character, can it be a real character? Sherlock Holmes seems to be fictional, right? If possible, the protagonist can directly engage in religion, play God or something like that

Harem story, you can run away now, goodbye!

The biggest reason for the outpouring of opinions from readers is actually that after more than a dozen chapters were released, they expected to see some kind of plot turning point/explosion point secretly revealed, a major event surging/a super important or super powerful character appearing and explaining important worldview information to the protagonist/a major upgrade in key abilities, and a super power visual scene. And if it is put on the shelves, it is best not to delay the release of the hot spots that people are looking forward to for too long, so that people can follow it and have more expectations. But the plot of the update posted by the author can be summed up as a gathering with a few low-class scrap metal scholars, and by the way, they muddle through the official search for unknown reasons. If the protagonist did gain a lot of things, such as formulas/weapons/knowledge, there was no loot counting and review and daydream sessions, but it was not important. How to decipher the method of hiding from the official manhunt is very important in terms of plot plausibility, but it is not the most important in terms of keeping readers interested in pursuing more and satisfying the cheap dopamine stimulation of online fast-moving consumer goods From a foreshadowing point of view, because of the devil star, the opening of the big event in the capital has indeed begun, but as the last chapter As for the initial order, the short plot you chose does not reveal any particularly attractive worldview/settings/upgrading nodes/super villains/high-level strong men/changing world dynamics. It is just a small party on the roadside hiding from the police. That will make readers very impatient: it is still talking about such an important node when it is released. Then when will we have to wait until the substantial progress is made? 🙂 So it is too hasty to put it on the shelves. It should be put on the shelves when the major events in the capital are at its peak.

It's so long-winded, it only introduces two contents in more than ten chapters, one is about solving a case and the other is about the director's daughter! I keep emphasizing that I don't know the characters!

There are too many redundant sentence patterns, which makes my head hurt. Try to keep the text as concise as possible, with three or four subjects in one sentence. Doesn't it look awkward to the author?

It can be seen that this book is indeed excellent, even "Prison Bus" and "Ruin Library" are based on this book 😏

Isn't it too miserable for you to be extraordinary? Every time you level up, you have to suffer a huge blow?

People still look down on me when I soul travel to a gangster at the beginning. This introduction method is too old and can easily become a poison. I don't know how it will perform in the future.

When I saw that the author had updated 13 chapters, I felt that it was strange that the author had updated too much. Then after reading it, I found that the plot was too little advanced, and there were a lot of narrations and reflections. Although it seemed more enjoyable, the small number of words limited this. In the final analysis, it was still because there were not enough words.

The setting is quite attractive, but the pace is too slow. It's not that the plot is not that slow, but that both the major plot and the minor plot are extremely long, and the dialogue and verbal exchanges are a bit unnecessarily convoluted.

I feel that the first few chapters of the author may have been revised by others. The writing level in the following chapters can only be said to be slightly different from the previous chapters. Each has its own beauty 😰

It's awesome. I feel like the author must have had a past life. I hope it can be revealed. I still like this style.

The resume is better, but only the four words "Steam City" in the title of the book attracted me. I suggest the author reconsider the title. The second is the acceptance speech. The author has handed over all the details. Just like what is written in your book, although readers are not Sherlock Holmes, they can easily detect the strong smell of street rush in it. This can easily give people a negative association that your book will not last long and whether I should follow up. The writing is good, just correct the typos. A little bit of writing has nothing to do with the baggage. If it doesn't affect your reading, just read at your own pace. Don't be too influenced by the outside world. I wonder which author who writes online articles is not good at writing (funny) The author is talented, don't waste your talent. After writing for three months, you will have to work full-time or something like that. Just put this idea under the toilet in the early morning.

The writing is good, but it's like the heavy dependence on goblins I've read. Water, very damn water, a lot of inner description, and the protagonist has not yet entered the extraordinary world after more than 80 chapters. It's so similar to that book that I was scared anyway. After all, money doesn't come with strong winds. Just read it if you can bear it.

The setting is very good, at least it looks comfortable to me. But the rhythm of the narrative was exhausting for me. I chased it for several days, but the potion was not solved yet🥲 I read a little bit every day. I was really exhausted, so I'd better keep it up.

The writing is okay, but after more than sixty chapters, the setting is still missing. . . It's really tiring to read. . .

The content of "Bhagavad Gita" is about Krishna deceiving Arjuna with his rhetoric before the war and selling his theological thoughts. I feel like I only need to find a prince who is also ready for war but hesitant to try to use the same rhetoric to deceive him. Krishna is said to be the incarnation of Vishnu, but in fact most of the Vaishnavism sects have taken over Vishnu's body together with Rama (I feel that only the Sri Vaishnavism still inherits the Ramanuja tradition and recognizes Krishna as the incarnation of Vishnu, the Gaudiya Vaishnavite sect's highest god is Krishna, and the Pushtimag sect that specializes in worshiping young Krishna, and the Ramananda sect that the highest god belongs to Rama, and also recognizes Krishna's status as the supreme god). A prince can secure the position of the supreme god of Hinduism by just talking. I don't think there is anything faster than this (in fact, Rama, the supreme god of the Ramananda sect, can also play the role of Rama in "Ramayana". These two are the same. It is probably enough to find a sadomasochistic love affair with Princess Sita and promote the Dharma at the same time. However, "Ramayana" is too long and it will be difficult to increase the completion level)

Speaking of which, is the Bible considered a masterpiece?

This is actually a bad phenomenon. The author is indeed a new author and does not have a good generalization ability. The Hunchback of Notre Dame and Crime and Punishment are so-called masterpieces. There must be someone who understands these characters and knows what you are writing. I don't know, the information obtained by novices is completely different from the information obtained by people who have read it and the author. I think it is right to quote famous works and to innovate, but it is wrong to generate corresponding problem-solving plots based on famous works. Everyone must see that the world you show and the characters in your novels are now taking over the spotlight. The focus is always on character building and world building. Now I close my eyes and imagine the characters in the online novel. I can't imagine any of the characters' expressions or subtle movements. The protagonist doesn't even have the shadow of Sherlock Holmes. Forgive me for naming the author's protagonist, Rational Man. As a reader, the thoughts of the protagonist that I see are peeled off by the author himself for me to see. There is plot in the discourse but no characters. He is a rational person. What he does is consideration, what he thinks is content, when he is focused, he is academic, and when he answers questions, he is very polite, but a real person will not be like this. That shouldn't be the case.

Your bet is too long and the pace is too slow. It's too wordy.

After reading the latest chapters, I can see that the author has a lot of ideas and laid a lot of foreshadowings. The author also has a deep literary foundation. When I had the opportunity, Sanjiang also said that a good work will be successful if there are people reading it. As long as the author writes according to this rhythm and does not say too much, there is absolutely no problem for this book to become popular.

Play a role🤔? Got it, it's from the person wearing the character, Aubao😋

People who don't understand chemistry will feel like dying when they read the author's thousands of words about the protagonist doing chemical experiments, and their heads will be blown away.

There is no sense of immersion in Soul Travel, and the layout is too dense. I can only say that it is not suitable for me 🙏

Although the copper was sold, it was not sold until it was put on the shelves.