A Song of Breaking Formations in the Distant Mountains

My feeling after reading this book is that it tries to cover up the paleness and emptiness of the content and plot with gorgeous words, giving people a feeling that it is high on the surface but actually there is nothing at all inside. After being pointed out the problem, I even said that readers are not suitable for reading your book. You want to write literature I don't object to the work, but at least you can at least read more like this, instead of using the online writing process to test your so-called "literary works". When an author can't even listen to the most basic criticism, then you can only say that you are happy. Silver Fox begins with the author knowing everything he has done.

After reading over a hundred chapters, it was empty and boring. The main line was unclear. I had no idea what the author wanted to write. The protagonist also thought about things one by one and had no plans for his future.

When I saw this, I had the idea of ​​​​stopping and waiting. It's over 50,000 words, but I still don't know what story 2 Fatty wants to tell. Is it history? Is it fantasy? Or science fiction? As a reader who has followed along the way, I once fell into an extreme book shortage before the book was published after Tang Dinner. I have always found 2 fat history books to my taste. I was full of expectations when I saw the appearance of this book, but the reality is that there is no beginning to lead people to sainthood, but it has been exhausting my heart. After reading it for a long time, I still don't understand what it means. 2. The test results you want are here. The traditional literary writing method of online articles is not pleasing to me personally. We are here to relax and listen to stories. The history books are not here to burn your brain or doze off to help you sleep. It's okay to be unconventional, but only in moderation. For example, the first sentence at the beginning of "White Deer Plain" is "Bai Jiaxuan later boasted that he married seven women in his life." The reader is sucked in at once. Although the subsequent story has little to do with this sentence, it is still a very good opening chapter. Looking back at the distant mountains, I saw first the Yun Family in the Hexi Corridor, then Long, then Aobing, another giant bird, another Hekou Village, another buried in swimming, and another stupid general. It's a bit pretentious, and it's too big to make sense. Maybe Fatty 2 has a big plan this time, and ordinary people like us can't see it yet. In short, I will definitely subscribe based on the previous reputation, and wait patiently to see what kind of world Brother 2 will build for us this time.

I don't know what I wrote, it's nonsense, nonsense, every article is full of these things, I guess everyone knows, you need to know. Then it was followed by a piece of trash talk, mixed with personal information. Writing novels has also taught me a lesson. A passage is metaphorical, ironic, and metaphorical. After I finished writing it, did I read it again?

As soon as I got to the table, the cold beer had been poured and the bone-spitting plate had been placed in front of me. The second fat man was standing next to the table wearing a chef's hat and a black apron with his hands behind his back. I smiled and nodded to the chef as a greeting and said softly: "Let's serve!"

I have stabbed readers in the back many times. Others paid real money to support me, but the result was that the books were either unfinished or the content was meaningless. All the characters were the same, just with different names and skins.

First of all, the writing is wonderful, the plot is okay, the writing is even better, and the opening chapter is a particularly amazing idea among all the books I have read. It's not that his plot design is exquisite, nor that his settings are good, but that his writing style is really special. The opening chapter he wrote has a very strong charm, not the direct and clear, crisis-ridden, tense and exciting feeling of excellent new writers. It's not like most excellent old writers, who can outline an extremely alluring grand picture with just a few strokes, making people unable to help but stop and take a closer look at the landscape. But that sense of perversion that either breaks out in silence or becomes perverted in silence, a little crazy, a little depressed, and a little insane. It's a very unique experience. Compared with the beginning, the subsequent plot is somewhat cliched. It can't be said to be formulaic, it's just that many things have appeared repeatedly in his previous articles. Dian within Dian is this heroine. I feel that after these few books, there seems to be no difference between his heroines. They all have the same virtue. At most, there are slight differences due to different experiences. As a result, every time I read it, I felt it was quite unique the first time, why was it still like this the second time, disgusting the third time, numbing the fourth time, and now I really don't want to read more, but this book is really interesting. Reading it as a whole, I think the comment made by many people that the author has been immersed in his own art is indeed correct. I can only say that he still understands that he has to make money, so what he writes can be understood by most people. It's just that he didn't think about actually engaging in art or creation in the past. He was not a foxtail or a bear, a wolf, or a dog, but someone who had really mastered a certain art creation. That is, although their books were a little crazy or a little crazy, you could feel that they were still engaged in literature and art. I am not a lunatic like a master of dark arts. I focus on a relatively pure patient who enjoys writing books and writes whatever comes to mind. The author's book gives me the impression of my title. He is not engaging in art, nor is he going crazy. He is a pure pervert, seriously writing a book that wants to make money, with a small amount of self-expression interspersed in it. Anyway, judging from the current trend, this book has mixed reviews. People who like it like it very much, and people who don't like it also criticize it. But I have one thing to say, I think this has nothing to do with appreciation ability, there is no need to label it as a noob or something. It's just a question of whether you like canned herring or not. I have a good appetite and mixed tastes, so I read this book with relish. If you are young enough to read the book, I would not recommend reading this book, because it is not good-looking at all. This has nothing to do with messy edema, but if you do this for a long time, some originally severe stimulation will become mild and even enjoyable. It can only be said that it is very abnormal.

Excellent works are like a piece of jade. There are always people looking for faults. If you don't like it, just go away.

In the past few days, the author has been more slow to read some of his previous works. In comparison, I feel quite emotional. The first is the description of the origin and process of the protagonist's time travel at the beginning of this book. This should be regarded as the first time that I have read such a detailed time travel process. Other time travel literature Mostly in the blink of an eye. So why is it written like this? I think a large part of it is to make the plot stand up to scrutiny. I wonder if you have ever thought about whether this is a bit unreasonable when you read other historical time travel stories where the male protagonist naturally uses some modern technology or poetry. Who in a normal family is so "knowledgeable"? If nothing else, do you still remember what you learned in class recently or the ancient poems you memorized? It should be rare, so the male protagonist is not an ordinary person, so there is such an artificial intelligence Secondly, this is the inner breath of the cultivation system. I think it is also very appropriate and reasonable. After all, in reality, one person can beat two or three people very well, but facing ten or twenty people, it is difficult for two fists to defeat four hands. But the author also wants the male protagonist to go to "Thousands of Mountains" "Water Versatility" So there must be such a "fantasy" element in it, but at the same time it cannot take up a large part. Because this is a fantasy novel, it is just a rough "thousand generals" and a rough judgment standard (pinch a stone) Then under these reasonable frameworks, extraordinary stories are laid out, so the sense that this book brings to me is - refreshing

The author seems to have written a primitive-themed novel once. I think I have read it. I feel that this time the world view is more grand, and I feel that although the author has ideas, he must be careful in writing, because my personal feeling is that the author is afraid that I will not understand the world, and the description is more detailed and trivial. Of course, there is also a feeling of confusion. How should I put it? It's hard to describe. Maybe it's because there are only animals and no one in these photos. This kind of novel is not popular now, the pace is a bit slow, and there are no exciting or explosive points. The plot is also a bit difficult to follow. However, it may be that the author has not adapted to the new subject matter. Generally speaking, I can understand the author, but as a reader, it still seems uncomfortable. I hope the author can get into the rhythm as soon as possible. I wish you good luck!

This is the latest masterpiece of Jie Yu 2. At the beginning of the novel, it may be different from the author's previous style, which may cause some readers to dislike it. However, as long as you get through the short period of interstellar travel, the subsequent plots will become more and more exciting, and the author's profound literary skills will gradually be reflected. Especially the scene of burning the mountain is super burning, giving you a sense of déjà vu in a blockbuster. This is a masterpiece with great potential.

Can't you continue writing? Or hunger marketing? One chapter every day? This is written...

There doesn't seem to be a robot swiping the screen in this one. It's probably not a studio, it's for fantasy.

A kid and two are a kid and two! Top notch storyteller!

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A wonderful interpretation, the author integrates his own thoughts into the story, making it a smooth read. Hope the author recovers soon! I read it three times, it was so painful!

Looking at the previous books, aren't they all the same routine? People would read them purely as stories. But when it comes to more professional knowledge, the author leaks flaws. For example, the plot of Qin Qiong's blood transfusion in Tang Zhuan's book is purely poisonous. Literature, I really don't have that ability, okay?

I don't even need to look at the author, I can tell who it is just by looking at the introduction. The characteristics of his writing are as follows: forced sensationalism, sometimes without even knowing what it means. The characters' dialogues are awkward and their thoughts are shallow. Reading Bai is like a stage play. I think I am literary and artistic, but in fact I am not down to earth. The logic flaw is so obvious.

Qidian's historical text is really dead

Among Qidian writers, the most promising person to win the Nobel Prize for Literature👍 It is a pity that a talented person like Jie Yu writes online articles at Qidian. If he had just put a little more thought into traditional literature, there would be nothing about Mo Yan Yuhua🌹🌹🌹

As a long-time fan of Zi and Er. I can't stand it anymore. If you are a master of history, just write history in a down-to-earth manner. Don't engage in these crooked ways.

If it weren't for the platinum title, the editor wouldn't have accepted this book.

History is dead. . . . . Not a single good book

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All kinds of forced sensationalism and dogma, the protagonist must be written in accordance with the author's own three views, the following poisonous points As a foreign colonizer, the war between the Han and the Onifa makes it appear that the Han is himself, but the protagonist forcefully acts in his own way, and hates the Onifa people from the beginning to the end. Even though both sides have expressed the tendency to coexist, they still advocate the extermination of the Onifa people. Anyone who has an opinion is a traitor, making himself the one being invaded. The protagonist kills people more and more as he pleases, because the other person is not a human being. The consequence of the protagonist's behavior of stealing dragon eggs may be to kill everyone including himself. The adventurous spirit without knowing the clear benefits is extremely stupid. Oh, although dragons are highly intelligent creatures, they are not human beings, so breaking the dragon eggs does not mean killing. And as long as it is profitable, the protagonist will self-guidedly expel the opponent, such as Roshan. The protagonist is a strong one from the beginning, and many of his actions are not for survival needs. The benefits to the common people in the book are only taken out of the strong's pity for the weak, dogmatism and ideological arrogance. He thinks that such actions are progressive, great and useful, rather than simple morality and empathy. On the contrary, ghosts are not human beings, so these do not apply and must be eliminated. In short, if you assume the role of the protagonist, you will be replaced by a self-proclaimed noble and correct refined egoist, who is both responsible and independent. If the magic sect is to survive at any cost, this one is to do whatever it takes for its own spiritual totem... Forget it, this book is too public knowledge. I really can't stand it

There is a saying, traditional literature is not written this way! Don't push traditional literature hard. This whole description is a prejudice against traditional literature. This writing method is to set off, highlight, exaggerate, and express emotions with scenes. But your opening chapter is extremely unsuccessful even if it is placed in traditional literature. Traditional literature will not have such long sentences without emotional progression. It is just piled up and loses the conciseness of words and sentences required by traditional literature. The biggest difference between traditional literature and online literature is that it pays more attention to the logic of the plot and does not pay attention to the number of words for the sake of updating. Instead, it strives to accurately describe and express the storyline and the author's thoughts with the minimum number of sentences. . . A platinum author actually thinks that this is the traditional way of writing literature

Write your historical article well. The new one is written in a mess, and there are still people cleaning it up! The author is almost unable to write at this age, so you should keep improving and write one or two historical articles, and bring a beautiful ending to your brilliant online writing career! Stop innovating randomly, it doesn't look good at all, okay? ! ! Having been in the online literature industry for many years, don't worry about literature. It's refreshing and refreshing. Pretending to be profound is not clever. Just do it for yourself~

From this introduction, a sense of cheapness comes over me. If you write fast food web articles, just write them well. How can you pretend to be a literary youth for no reason? A hypocritical group

Why do the protagonists in the author's books always give me the feeling of being a weakling?

Why is it uncomfortable to read? Because I feel that the audience of this book seems to be for a certain type of middle-aged people. The writing is not bad, but there is a generation gap in what is expressed, and the author is not willing to explain it clearly, so he must riddle it. If some people like this kind of writing, some people will definitely reject it. This is one of them Second point As a student who is not a liberal arts major but is also taking the postgraduate entrance examination for politics, I feel that some of the themes that this book wants to express have a sense of fragmentation and drifting like "using metaphysics to talk about Ma Zhe". If you write about aristocratic families in a clear way like "Xuanjian Immortal Clan", you write about family sacrifices or... There are no other problems. The main thing is that you are adding a modern background + grand narrative to create this set. Anyway, I find it difficult to substitute. After thinking about it, it is still a problem of unclear world view, and it does not give people an experience that is isolated from reality. There is a logical connection between the three views of reality. It feels like fighting with each other, so it's uncomfortable to watch Third point, the story is too arrogant, and it feels like it's just for the sake of plot and outputting opinions. "Writing a story as you like" and "writing a good story" are two different things. As a stranger, I feel that you didn't intend to get rid of your boss in the previous chapters. For people other than fans, I understand your feeling of letting yourself write freely, but I feel that as an online article author, you really did not write a story seriously for readers. When other authors rack their brains to retain passers-by with three golden chapters, at least as a passer-by, I am really confused. I feel that you sacrificed storytelling to strengthen your personal characteristics and output of opinions, so I feel that the audience for this book is indeed not me, but for old readers. I carefully coded and wrote down some of my own feelings. This is probably it. Everyone is welcome to discuss rationally and share what you like about this book. Anyone who is emotional and careless should turn left when going out.