Jiajing: What? My Son Cultivates Immortality Too?

It's too long-winded. I wrote a lot, all of which are introductions. I feel like it was written in AI. The common problem is that the words are gorgeous and there are too many useless sentence patterns. I wrote a lot, but I just can't get to the point. The whole introduction is a little unclear and the context is not smooth.

I read the four chapters in two days, but there was no sense of plot advancement. I could even finish the four chapters in one sentence. In fact, this book is quite imaginative, I think it's better to finish it at 50 chapters.

In fact, the writing is not bad. If you read it as a Machiavellian novel or a fan of Ming Dynasty 1566, the name of the novel makes people think that it is a novel about cultivating immortals, which does not attract the real audience. Machiavellian novels may not be written carefully enough, so the propositions are somewhat conflicting. The author can weigh it himself. The book itself is still okay.

No wonder no one is watching. After reading twenty chapters, I have only one feeling: the author has seriously gone off topic. First of all, the subject matter of the novel is good, but the plot can dissuade most people. First, the protagonist's request at the beginning is in vain, and then the system of cultivating immortals is awakened. Regardless of other factors set by the author, first of all, the protagonist can cultivate immortality. According to the current progress, the foundation can be established in seventy years. Think about it, how long can a foundation builder survive and how strong does it have to be? Shouldn't the first thing on the protagonist's mind be cultivation, cultivation, cultivation? What's the result? When he met Jiajing, he flattered him in all kinds of ways, and even knelt on the ground with a sincere attitude. Really, you can cultivate immortality, do you need this? To put it bluntly, even if you stop at refining qi for the rest of your life, it's not comparable to ordinary people, right? Second, the various descriptions at the beginning say that the protagonist is different before and after. In the past, he could not speak in front of Jiajing, it was just like that. The protagonist has traveled through time since he was a baby, okay? There is no back-up, it has always been his consciousness. What do you want to express with your inconsistent description? Third, with the magic formula for cultivating immortality and the mission, what is the protagonist doing? There are twenty chapters, and the length of cultivating immortality is less than one. Are you sure you didn't go off topic? All kinds of trivial things, even if you don't talk about them, it will make people uninterested. After all, your subject is cultivating immortality, not asking you to write about history and tactics. Are you seriously off topic? The key is that the protagonist is the same. If he doesn't practice peacefully and peacefully after he has the skills, he will go to study and practice martial arts, which is really... The fourth one is also the easiest to persuade people to quit. The protagonist's task is to practice the skills given by the system to a certain extent in five days. The second task is to upgrade the alchemy to a great level within twenty days, and then reward the thunder method. As a result, the protagonist stopped doing business, left the class, and went to practice martial arts. Talented, let's not explain whether the dynasty has advanced martial arts. Even if it does, can learning martial arts be as good as cultivating immortals? The key point is that this novel is about cultivating immortals, but the author forced it to focus on martial arts training. This logic... Is this putting the cart before the horse? With a plot like this, how many readers does the author think it can retain? This is a theme about cultivating immortals. You want to write about history, politics, and martial arts. It's true. In the end, it's all different, and it's a waste of time.

It's so procrastinating. Every time I write about an incident, I have to spend several chapters writing about the reactions of all parties. There's no need for this at all, it's such a waste

Not a cultivator? Why are 90% of it written about court intrigues? Even the introduction about improving national luck was not done. This link was deleted and replaced with strong luck without affecting the plot.

Don't be completely invincible. At least it's scientific. Since there is no aura, you can build a foundation and be invincible for a while. But after using up the aura, you can't recover in ten and a half days. It's better to just eat for at least a few years to recover. Of course, the system rewards the ability to convert electromagnetism or light into mana. That's another matter.

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