Planeswalker: The War of My Plane

I saw the middle part despite all kinds of poison, but I really couldn't accept it later. Your fireball spell was as powerful as a mortar, but the monster that couldn't be killed by the fireball spell was shot to death by that Baizuo woman... I feel like you are starting to disrespect my IQ, so I won't continue reading...

This literary idea and world view are top-notch, and in the hands of a master, it can be very brilliant. But except for these two points, everything else is lackluster. The plot is cliche, and the narrative is straightforward and has no rhythm control. The writing style is also dry and there is nothing attractive about it. The details all depend on the intelligence of the protagonist and supporting characters. The author's personal opinions often appear in articles. The author seems to be still in school and lacks some common sense in life. It's really great for newcomers to have this idea and world view. I hope that I can polish my writing skills and life experience more, and I will definitely write better in my next book.

I'm starting to hate this policeman's sister. I'm a soft-spoken person but not a tough one.

I can't stand it anymore when I write about it abroad. It's so disgusting. Sister policewomen, this otaku fantasy of a 78-year-old man makes me want to vomit. You use the DND system to play with firearms. There are countless complaints. Please Baidu. Countless people have compared the DND magic of firearms. Can you die if you do research in this field? In 2000, I read you as a book for people who read it. After reading your story, I basically stopped reading online articles in a few years! Well

If you play less games and update more, people who read books should become great gods long ago.

Yes, it is my favorite classic game Isekai. However, there are a few suggestions that the author can refer to. ① The beginning is too bland and wordy, and completely inconsistent with the beginning of the three golden chapters. Otherwise, if the author had a million-word book, I would have abandoned it. It is recommended to reduce psychological activities, and do not let the protagonist speculate about why he traveled through time, as it would delay the rhythm of the plot too much. Hurry up and enter the initial boss phase, defeat monsters and unlock golden fingers. I also suggest that you explain the specific functions of the golden finger. Can you add some more? Can I exchange something? And it can't be too weak, otherwise it won't be enough. Then the protagonist is a bit clueless in the early stage. You can set up a long-term main mission, such as upgrading and becoming stronger, or saving a beloved plot character (Amber flow), or defeating the mastermind behind the big devil. I don't recommend choosing a main storyline that requires you to go home. It's too boring and has nothing to do with the plot. Finally, it is suggested that in the early stage, especially the new book period, it is best not to let the protagonist feel too depressed, suppress it first, and then promote it immediately. ②Since it is set in the Chinese Western Zhou Dynasty, don't use Western fantasy terms, as it feels too inconsistent. The mage can be replaced by an alchemist, and the magic power can be replaced by mana, spiritual power and the like. ③It's best to ask for recommendations, it feels too deserted. You can go to the Qidian author group and ask the big guys to help you divert traffic. The wine is fragrant but the alley is too deep. I can also help you promote the book on the public account. It is recommended to submit an article to the public account of Chiji's Book Relief Center. It is very popular and does not charge money. The author can also be in the front row if he submits his own contribution.

A stranger and a foreigner comes to find out your details, take advantage of you and threaten you. Just because she is a woman, the protagonist is afraid of all kinds of things? Please don't admit it if you know magic. If it were a man who probed and threatened to take advantage, do you think you could survive two chapters? It's a dead end in one chapter. Does the author still think it's reasonable?

? Why write about a cunning and cunning little girl who deprives the male protagonist of his interests? The protagonist became a planeswalker but his IQ dropped to -50.

Western Zhou Dynasty + dnd + amber flow, just these few elements are stacked together, and it feels like it is already a difficult novel to write. As a result, we still need to stack up the real-life PVP of the big sniper game. The author, you are just busy stacking buffs. There are many and confusing elements, and they conflict with each other and reduce the enjoyment. To go with this unappealing title. . . . Author, you are really brave. . .

I started to persuade you to quit. There is really a lot of nonsense. In war, you also need to be surrounded in all directions. The center is blooming. Why are you focusing on everything? It's all self-pleasure.