When the Sword Leaves Emei, I Am Its Edge

At first glance, it seems a bit heavy on the rouge flavor and the love between children, but upon closer reading, I feel that it is full of heroism and chivalry! I hope that the protagonist will not only dominate the world but also the world. It would be better if more poems by the author were interspersed.

The style of ancient chivalrous writing is smooth and comfortable, and the writing style is good. It can be regarded as a rare traditional martial arts masterpiece. But after a brief reading of one or twenty chapters, there are two poisonous points: 1. The so-called golden three chapters, but the first three chapters of this book poisoned many people. Since it is a traditional martial arts, filial piety and righteousness are naturally the first priority, but it is not appropriate for the protagonist to make a faction. It would be better to say that not only will the teacher not be fond of him, but it will be counterproductive. Although the author made amends later, some readers may have been poisoned; 2. In the world of martial arts, there are actually no temples and courts, and it is easy for the flavor to spread. If this is the case, then the relevant historical figures can be mentioned in one sentence. The text is described in large quantities and has the meaning of licking, which makes the smell of happy grudges, carefree heroes and the pleasure of reading disappear a lot.

I have read a lot of martial arts novels or Jianghu novels from different perspectives, and both of the author's works have a different flavor - that is, "Thoughts are clear". Nowadays, fantasy and martial arts in Qidian are more popular in the system style of invincibility and single-handedly breaking all laws, or the behind-the-scenes style of hidden edge and calculation. The words and deeds of the protagonist usually reveal a ruthless mentality of retribution and calculation - it is indeed very exciting, but it lacks an ability: many times The various conflict scenes written by young writers make us feel stiff. Most of the reasons are the lack of "life skills" as a lubricant, the inability to avoid unnecessary conflicts, the abandonment of potential interests/collaborators, and the only options are "do it or do it later." Writing in this way will actually make the protagonist appear incompetent. But the character of the author's protagonist is very likable: he has emotional intelligence and a domineering spirit. In many situations where conflicts may arise, he uses his emotional intelligence and personal charm to handle things smoothly, and even achieve a win-win situation. This kind of plot design sounds simple, but in fact it is a test of the author's ability and experience in dealing with people. Otherwise, one party will always appear to be "intellectual" and then have to make a blunt compromiseas the author hopes. And there is a very important point: describing a touching relationshipother than love. This is also one of the missing points in many fast-food novels. I not only want to see beauties and grudges, but I also want to see family ties, master-disciple relationships, the kindness of acquaintances, and the kindness of providing help in times of need... Only with these emotions can people feel that the characters are alive, and with these plot arrangements, can the protagonist's thoughts really be understood. After talking about the advantages, let's talk about the areas where I think this book can be improved: It may be that the author has been fighting on two fronts recently and is busy finishing old books. This book has been updated for nearly a week. The plot has become stuffing strange objects into the protagonist's mouth, giving away skills, giving away skills, giving away swords... It's a bit vulgar. In the future, you can stop writing adventures in such a hurry and just intersperse some with the main plot. The early plots and the recent plot in Wudang are very good. I will continue to support writing at this pace 🙏🙏

Those who are usually very picky about martial arts have been fostered by Jin Liang Wengu in the past. I haven't seen such martial arts in many years, but the updates are not strong enough.

Brother, your books are always so short and weak

Anyone who writes martial arts fan fiction should learn from the writing of "The Swordsman Coming from Hengshan", how to create the character of the protagonist, how to write emotional scenes, and how to capture the readers' enjoyment. Except for the slightly slower pace of that book in the early stage, it was too much compared to this book in the middle and late stages. It can be said that I am the number one martial arts fan so far.

If you write about martial arts without copyright, be careful to compensate millions. You may not be able to earn the compensation money in your lifetime The Legend of Heaven and Dragon Sword is a very famous IP, not an unpopular IP like Lianchengjue. , TV dramas that are as popular as Heaven and Dragon Sword are usually adapted from TV series... TV series copyright fees are quite high. Even if you want to maintain influence in the future, you can adapt cartoons. How can you allow others to get it for free, so the editor's request is correct

I have been reading this book for half a year, and I just finished reading it. There are two major points that make me unhappy. The first point is that the development of the plot is too coincidental, and the advancement of the story always relies on some extremely accidental encounters. For example, when going down Mount Emei, I ran into Xiao Feiyang passing by, on the way west to the King Kong Gate, I ran into a Vajra disciple who was chasing Shi Huolong, when Ji Xiaorong returned to the Golden Whip Gate to visit relatives, she ran into the Tianying Gate who was about to kill his father, on the boat, I ran into the Hu brothers and sisters who were being hunted, on the way in the Kunlun Mountains, I ran into the demon sect gathering to discuss the encirclement and suppression of Emei, and at the edge of the Salt Lake, I ran into the Qinghai sect who was chasing them. The Kunlun faction and Mie Jie returned to their hometown and met Song Shuming on the street to discuss how to embezzle their own property. On the way to the Tianying Gate General Forum, they met Zhu'er and his wife, who were being chased by Ye Yunfei... Chance encounters do exist in life, and some key plots can be advanced by chance encounters, but there are too many chance encounters in this book, to an unreasonable level. In terms of plot arrangement, more timeline-type events should be used instead of point-in-time encounters. For example, when Ji Xiaorong returns to the Golden Whip Sect to visit relatives, she encounters the Tianying Sect who is about to kill her father. It would be more reasonable if her father had been imprisoned by the Golden Whip Sect for several months. The incident of "my father was killed" only lasted a few hours, and the probability of encountering him by chance is too low. However, if he has been imprisoned for several months, it would be very reasonable to meet him when he returns home to visit his relatives. The second point is that the force value setting is unreasonable and the single-target force value is too high. Around Chapter 269, the protagonist enters the palace to get the soft hedgehog armor. It can be said that he is fighting in and out of the palace as if he is in a deserted place. His majestic power is so ridiculous in front of the younger generation of masters. It would not be easy to expel the Tartars in this way. The masters of the Jianghu could just assassinate the emperor and courtiers without any time. In the court, ten emperors and five batches of courtiers were replaced in three years. The court would collapse without a war. This book is about martial arts, and martial arts is about a person's involuntary wandering in the world. Qiao Feng, as the number one person in the world under the sweeping monk, still commits suicide in the face of the hatred of his country and his family. Guo Jing is on par with the top five in the world, but he still fights against the Jin Dynasty. Failure leads to death, this is martial arts. No matter how high a person's martial arts value is, it is only a drop in the ocean in the face of the torrent of history. As the apex of power, the palace should never be a place where a martial arts master can enter and exit at will. In short, the author is still of good quality, the overall story arrangement is quite nice, and the characters are distinct. However, I hope the author can pay attention to the above two poisonous points. Listen to the author's words. This book is just for practice. The next book will be the original work. I hope I can go further when writing this book.

When I read the latest chapter and met an old friend again, I suddenly remembered that when I was in junior high school, I had just come into contact with "Kunlun", "Canghai", and "Lingfei Jing" written by Teacher Feng Ge. It made my blood boil with excitement when I was young. There were also comments and comments from my classmates, and the words between the lines were like those of my classmates. A set of paper copies is kept in hand all day long, covered with white cloth and kept in the utility room on the third floor of my hometown. Later, my father's friend borrowed it without my permission, and the pages were smeared with oil and dirty, making it difficult to read. I felt angry and regretful about it. …Well!

I am also a fan of Yitian. During the serialization, it was in the top ten of the whole site. It was originally called Yitian Dragon Fights Bahuang. The reason was that the name was not changed. Even if the starting point of the book Lao Qiang is not required, the defendant will be taken off the shelf or file a lawsuit to pay compensation. Saying that the author is convenient for film and television is overthinking, and everything is too far away.

Seeing that poems like "Clear Dreams Overwhelm the Starry River" can be used to forcefully give away a daughter, I really couldn't resist it, and I didn't intend to read any further. I can accept a single female protagonist or even no female protagonist. Martial arts and love are two different things. If you don't want to write about emotional entanglements and a harem, you don't have to write about it. But I don't think I can accept this kind of situation where I have to write something even if I don't have to write it, and if I do, I have to forcefully send it away. It only represents my personal opinion. Authors with good writing skills generally have their own ideas. For example, Jin Yong likes Xiao Longnu's loss of virginity to set off the love between the two, Yang Guo Ruoshui takes a scoop of three thousand, and Zhang Wuji finally chooses Zhao Min after being indecisive. I might have been able to appreciate it before, but forget it now. Although the writing is good, if you only look at the writing and don't talk about entertainment, maybe it's better to read classics.

It feels really average. I don't know why the comment section is so bragging? The plot is a bit long-winded, and the fights are not crisp at all. There are various psychological activities and dialogues during the fights, and there is a bit of water. I can only say that I can watch it, but it is not as good-looking as some people say. Personally, I don't like it, so don't criticize it.

I haven't seen this kind of martial arts for more than ten years since the ancient martial arts version. Lao Qiang lets me write by hand. I will order as many as I write.

A good and upright hero has become a bus. The protagonist's strong character should make it interesting that heroines from all walks of life are seeking but not being able to compete with each other for supremacy and jealousy. As a result, everyone fell asleep after taking the medicine once, and instantly lost all character. The plot of "Yitian" did not develop, and was rambled on every day... There is also an old nun in the original work of Miejie Shitai, who was ambiguously written by you and the disciple, but the result was not enough. Xiao Longnu and Yang Guo are not much different in age, and they still have the appearance of gods. With the perfect foreshadowing, the plot of Master Jiejie is simply mind-boggling.

In the third chapter, he died of poison. In the beginning, the protagonist's parents and family were hunted down. When everyone else was dead, the protagonist killed one person and was saved by the head of Emei. Then in the blink of an eye, the protagonist started to smile and please. I just want to ask you, your whole family just died, are you not sad at all? Chapter Commentary Some people say that the protagonist just traveled through time and didn't know, but didn't the protagonist guess that he was a member of his family? Even if you can't guess the relationship or don't know it, but the person who protects you has just died, is it appropriate for you to smile playfully and pretend to be cute? Let's talk about the head of Emei. As soon as he rescued the protagonist, he gave his disciples an analysis of how the protagonist killed people at the age of seven. Then he secretly felt happy in his heart when he was complimented by the protagonist. His beautiful eyes flashed with joy (original text). This IQ is not to mention that the protagonist's personality is so different. You didn't notice that you were so flattered by being complimented? Is the protagonist a reincarnation of a succubus who can attract women with just a few words?

I think it's okay to change the name without copyright, but has the protagonist of your time-travel become an indigenous person? I can't recognize anything, and I'm still shocked. What the hell, the Six Meridians Divine Sword, can't I recognize it? Abandoned

Single female protagonist or multiple female protagonists? I don't read fanfics with single female protagonists.

I personally read the public version and also skipped to read some subscription versions. Let me talk about the overall feeling. The writing is smooth and the martial arts plot is more graphic. However, in terms of plot design, it feels like the author has crammed in a lot of things in order for the protagonist to have more adventures. The first is adventure: for example, two or three hundred years ago, Ding Chunqiu, Zhuang Juxian, and Xiao Feng were all dug out and used as tool men to deliver treasures to the protagonist. It's not enough for Dugu Qiubai to give away the treasure once. He has to push someone's grave to give it away again. That doesn't mean you can't encounter adventures in martial arts novels, but I hope you can restrain them. Qi Encountering martial arts secrets is still relatively reliable within a hundred years. It seems that after three hundred years, the Xingxiu Sect's secret book from the bottom of the lake will not be affected by moisture? Won't the handwriting be blurry? You see in Jin Yong's novels, the paper secrets obtained will not last too long. The second is the encounters with historical figures, which are too frequent. Our country is such a big land. You can easily encounter Zhu Yuanzhang as soon as you enter a ruined temple. You can encounter Madame Shexiang as soon as you walk on the mountain. You can encounter all kinds of crouching dragons and phoenixes as soon as you enter an antique shop and draw a map. That is to say, martial arts novels are very inclusive. If they were classified as historical novels, they would be criticized 100% of the time. These famous generals and ministers of the co-author all live in the same village as the protagonist?

In order to connect Jin Yong's novels, the author forcibly created many original characters and plots. Now it can hardly be regarded as a fan. The plots are all original and relatively old-fashioned, and some of the characters' names have also been changed. There is also the protagonist who knows the plot for a while and then doesn't. His behavior is like a martial arts-enhanced version of Linghu Chong. He plays all kinds of clever tricks. He originally created all kinds of adventures, but in the end, the fights are basically a 50-50 split. I believe that when you read martial arts novels, you basically watch the protagonist miss other people's adventures, practice martial arts to become stronger, and then make up for the regrets in the original work. But this novel is all the author's original stories, and the fights are not fun. I can only say that everyone has their own preferences for radish and cabbage. This novel is not suitable for me.

What's going on? They are all opposed to destroying the tribulation. I support destroying the tribulation! Although this is a martial arts novel, it is also an online novel. Is master-disciple love considered a taboo in online literature? None of that. By the way, the female character that attracted me the most in the early stage was Miejie. Besides, Miejie in the book is a beautiful woman. She is the closest woman to the protagonist. Why not accept someone who is neither ugly nor old?

It's anticlimactic, this book is worse than The Eunuch, and the more I write, the more disgusting it becomes.

The author said that the previous book had a high start and a low start. In fact, this book is the same. The overall style of writing is great, which is also the attractive point in the early stage. But in the middle stage, basically all the characters in the original work are almost dead... Zhao Min and Zhou actually have very few roles, so there is nothing to write later, so I started to write about the struggle for hegemony. But to be honest, this struggle for hegemony is really awkward. I deleted the book at that time, and accidentally found that I had finished the book. When I came back, I saw only a few pictures. After finishing it, I felt that I could still write about the apocalypse. It ended like this, which was a bit unpleasant.

The plot of Mingjiao attacking Emei is really crappy. Chapter 173 says that the protagonist's eyes turned red when he saw lay disciples and true disciples suffering heavy casualties. As a result, in Chapter 176, a group of people from Emei were chatting about gossip, a couple from Kunlun and Yang Xiao were fighting, and Miejie was standing by to guide the disciples on this move and that move. After the death of the Kunlun couple, the next plot was actually about Song Qingshu and Yang Xiao competing? ? ? Isn't it inconsistent to say that a group of masters rushed in to lead the Demon Slayer Cult? Later, when fighting against the corpse demon, Yitian Sword was forced to be offline throughout the whole process. The Mingjiao came here to exterminate Emei. So many people died in vain. The story of the war to exterminate the clan is like playing a house. I ordered all of the previous version of Water Margin, but I was very disappointed with this one. There were few updates, the plot was outrageous, and even the poems occasionally came out.

Even the supporting characters in other martial arts novels have personality traits, and you, the protagonist, are worse than a buffoon. You are stupid and do not know it.

I want to ask, is this book not about flirting with someone but not marrying them?

It's so well written, I guess many people haven't seen it yet, it has the potential to become a hit.

😁🤓🤭 Jie Jie Jie~ Second bullet: Come on, come on, keep guessing 😜 Will update later~ Third bullet: 😁 Oh hahaha, come on~ She's so beautiful 😍 I'm super I like it~ 😜 Compared with this big treasure, the sword I used to use, "Little Heizi", is just like a firewood girl in the country, so I decided to throw the little Heizi in the corner and let it eat dirt in the future. This is not a case of liking the new and hating the old, it can only be said to be the survival of the fittest~ 🤓 I'll take a photo of the old sandblasting fruit later, do you want to see it?         😁：～

Recently I was reviewing the novels of Jin Yong and Wen Ruian, and then I saw this book by the author, so I became interested in it. After reading more than a hundred chapters, I found that the style is indeed traditional martial arts, but there is nothing new, which is quite disappointing. In today's novel world, if there is no novelty, there will be no success. To be honest, now that I am re-reading the novels of Jin Yong and Wen Ruian, I still find many flaws. For example: 1. In Jin Yong's novels, except for Tian Long Ba Bu, other world views and big scenes are too small, and the plots are relatively simple, nothing more than the grievances and hatreds of a few people. For example, The Legend of the Condor Heroes is nothing more than the story of Yang Guo's search for Xiao Longnu. 2. Wen Ruian's novels are too simple. Most of them are about two different hostile forces, one good and one evil, and then the two sides start fighting, and finally the evil faction is destroyed. For example, Trial Sword Villa and Changxiao Gang. For example, Jinfeng Xiaoyu Building and Liufenbantang. During this process, the protagonist keeps fighting with people, one after another, and then finally fights the big boss. The plot is completely consistent and unchanged. So! Even the novels of Jin Yong and Wen Ruian are not very attractive from today's perspective. If the authors don't write new ideas, how can they shine? It is recommended that the author's plot should not connect scenes from many martial arts novels and let the protagonist run around the map. From the Ruyang Palace map at the beginning, to the Yanmenguan map, to the Wudang map, and then to the Xingxiu Sea map. Then each map gets some martial arts. Such a plot is so boring. It is all about running the map deliberately to collect martial arts, rather than running the map because of the development of the plot. On the surface, there is a line running through it, but it feels to me that this line is too thin and the connection is not high.

It was pretty good at first, but later on it was renamed and dropped points. The whole process was full of mindless fights and I was tired of reading more than 100,000 words per fight. I didn't like the emotional scenes and dropped points. I practiced too many techniques and was too complicated and not good enough. I gave away points for free. Various coincidental routines met and dropped points. After I ordered it, there were dozens of chapters left and I didn't want to read it anymore! But the author's writing skills are definitely there, which is a pity! In the previous film, Wu Dalang saw the dialogue between the protagonist and Yue Fei and that was the moment when he gave up the book. It shouldn't be treated like that.

The rush was expected, the story in the new book is too bloody. Especially the chapters where the male protagonist Gu meets the female protagonist, I felt too childish and completely out of touch with fans of this book.