Come at Me, You Wicked Witch!

I will continue to cry until the great demon is resurrected😭😭😭

The quality of the whole volume is very high, there are no twists and turns, and it is full of the charm of old-school martial arts novels, which I particularly like. Da Jian himself said that he drew a lot of nutrients from Gu Long's works, and book friends also felt that it was like Gu Long. However, I think Kingdom of Gods and Burial of Gods have a stronger flavor of Gu Long. The inner charm of the second volume of The Witch is somewhat similar to the works of Liang Yusheng and Jin Yong. Unfortunately, it feels like Da Jian still hasn't fully thought out the revised plot. During the killing of Lu Qi, it was obvious that the plot was moving forward in a hurry, and the emotions were not heightened. It is not a good thing for a writer to learn Gu Long when his writing skills are still flawed and the plot outline is not solid. It is very likely to "work more and gain less". You may spend some time studying Jin Yong's three later books (Xia Ke Xing, Swordsman and The Deer and the Cauldron). It is more important to first learn how to plan a solid chapter layout. As for the change in direction from single female protagonist to multiple female protagonists. I have always believed that the opposition between single female protagonists and multiple female protagonists in the online literature circle is completely a false proposition, and is a problem that only exists for authors who are not strong in writing. The so-called single female protagonist does not mean that the male protagonist cannot develop relationships with other girls, and the so-called multiple female protagonists does not mean that the male protagonist can have no scruples in relationships. Is it a problem of having too many female protagonists that the final emotional arc of Kingdom of God and Burial God collapsed? Not at all! It is the male protagonist or Teacher Da Jian who is unwilling to make a choice and take responsibility, throwing the question of who to choose back to the readers. There are so many heroines, and each of them is well written. The author does not want to offend any readers. By the end of the book, the male protagonist becomes a greasy scumbag, and the female protagonists all become clowns. If you, as the male protagonist or author, are unwilling to take responsibility, you will be scolded. In the final analysis, when the book "Monster Girl" started to talk about writing a single female protagonist, it was just a way of escaping from the problem of my ability to control the plot, and it was not really about writing a single female protagonist. Today's online article writers and readers have a too shallow understanding of emotions, and simply equate multiple female protagonists with a common harem where the couple sleeps together. A writer who is really good at writing will show you the difference between a romantic interest, a romantic relationship, a confidante, and a deep love. I particularly like the boy and girl Su Zhen and Xiao Xiao. Their relationship is simple and pure, and their characters are independent and brave. If at the end of the writing, Su Zhen is written as a greasy scumbag like Ning Changshou Xi, and Xiao Xiao is written as a clown like Xiao He, then it is not a matter of writing skills, it is simply a serious illness in the brain, and I suggest you get treatment. Finally, I support rolling updates on the one hand, which is obviously a more suitable mode for you. But I must remind you that you can never think of everything before writing. You should force yourself to write at least 2,000 words on the computer every day. Even if what you write is based on the defense, the last word will not be used in the third volume. You must maintain this habit, just as if you are doing a daily serialization that no one will read. For any masterpiece, no matter how great a writer is, his first draft must be imperfect, and good articles must be revised. Don't believe that inspiration will come after you have accumulated it for a long time. Only if you revise every day, inspiration will come. I hope the third volume can bring us more surprises.

The artist completed it step by step from draft - line draft - coloring, not AI~ The one in the picture is the heroine Shao Xiaoxiao.

I heard that I read Jianjian's new book, and now I've read the latest chapter. Let's talk about the advantages first. Sword and Sword originally felt like it had Cthulhu elements, but this one is more obvious. However, the writing is also distinctive. The madness is hidden in what the protagonist sees and hears, and unfolds along with the world view. This feeling is much deeper than the previous book. The first chapter is quite attractive, including the plot of the world of immortality starting from Chapter 13, which is also very exciting, and the writing is also quite good. These can almost offset my prejudice against the shortcomings. But the shortcomings are obvious and need to be mentioned. That is to say, the plot of this real world is really unbearable. It has a feeling of "hurry through this part, I want to see the world of immortality". Moreover, the first seven or eight chapters are all about the real world. I suspect that many readers will be directly persuaded by these chapters or struggle to resist the plot of the world of immortality. Such separation is not a good way to attract readers. All in all, I really like the plot of the world of immortality. As for the real world, I'll wait until it successfully connects with the main plot. I hope the above personal introduction will be helpful to the author 🙂🙂

The First Year of the Demon Girl: After the story of the first volume comes to an end, Su, Xia and Xiao are preparing to enter the real world, while Yu Yue places herself in the ice chamber of Jiu Miao Palace; After the unknown event, Su Zhen's body and soul, Xia Ru's body, and Yu Yue's soul (suspected) remain in the real world; Xia Ru's soul is affected by the blood contract and enters Yu Yue's demon body, trapped in the Jiu Miao secret room; Xiao Xiao's soul returns to the false world Nantang and found her sister's message; After a while, Xiaoxiao found her sister, and then joined the Libra Girl Project, helping her collect incense while receiving her sister's spiritual education to enter Xijing Kingdom Year of the Demon Girl: Su Zhen's body and soul came to Xijing Kingdom, Yu Yuehun and Xia Ruchu were missing; Xia Ruhun was in confinement; Xiaoxiao accepted her sister's "final exam" and passed After that, he also came to Xijing Country and joined the Baihua Sect after traveling for several months; A few months later, the Baihua Sect was attacked by the Ghost Beast Cult for killing the Ghost Beast Cultists. When the Baihua Sect was about to be destroyed, Xiaolu washed the red lotus and the two met for the first time; After a while, Shuanglu left Xiaoxiao voluntarily because he was being hunted; Xiaoxiao was accepted as an apprentice by Master Lingmu of Nixiang Mountain for unknown reasons, and then entered Nixiang Mountain, secretly inheriting the secret language. The inheritance of the ancestor Chan Yuzhenren began to practice in secret; The second year of the witch: Su Zhen met the ancestor of the Yellow River during his travels, but failed to find the cause of amnesia. Later, in order to solve the mystery, he took on the task of finding the thousand-mysterious mother-in-law, with the goal of "The Scroll of Words"; Xia Ruhun was in confinement; After failing (Chapter of Ghost Planting in the Xingling Sutra), she was about to be swallowed up by lust and die, so Xiaoxiao took advantage of the situation and sealed the witch on Shuanglu; Xiaoxiao returned to the mountain, and Shuanglu officially embarked on the road of hunting the remaining heirs of the Spiritual Sutra; A few months later, Xiaoxiao used the power of Nixiang Mountain to destroy the Ghost Beast Cult, and the leader escaped, hoping to find the elixir to replenish the heart; Three Years of the Witch: Su Zhen is looking for the Qianmi Mother-in-law, and is looking for the four Qianmi successors who have received the fragments of the Qianmi Secret Secret Xingling Sutra; Shuanglu successfully hunts a Qianmi successor and is captured by Chen Wan (pseudonym of Su Zhen), and is forced to follow Su Zhen to find the remaining two successors; On the way to find the last successor (located in Taiyi Palace), Tong and Su meet the father and daughter named Xi from Taiyi Palace. , In order to quickly find the successor, the two went with their father and daughter to the Taiyi Palace Conference; On the way, several people were attacked by the three-eyed Gu body boy and Lingyuan Daxian (a monster thug enshrined by Liumen) who coveted the father and daughter's elixir. During the attack, Su Zhen killed the Gu boy and was parasitized by the spell in his body. In order to ease the separation of the evil thoughts from Shuang Lu and others, he followed the traces of Lingyuan Great Immortal and killed him in Liumen; In order to solve the curse, Su Zhen faked his death and disguised himself as the killer Chi Mian and followed Nan Chang back to Jiu Miao Palace; In order to rescue Shuang Lu from the predicament, Su Zhen used Chi Mian's identity to deceive Nan Chang into taking Shuang Lu away, and then made Shuang Lu fall off the cliff. Escape; Shuanglu thought that Chen Wan had been killed by Jiu Miao's forces, so he traveled far away to seek help from Xiaoxiao and his master Nixiang Mountain; During the Jiu Miao incident, Su Zhen obtained the secret of Li Sha and became a first-class master. , And later rescued Xia Ru, forced Nan Chang to death, and beheaded Lu Qi (suspected). After the incident, Shi Daoqing and Xia Ru fled to the Demon Kingdom to avoid being pursued by the forces of Xijing Kingdom; At the same time, they communicated with Shuanglu After receiving the news, Xiaoxiao learned the news of Su Zhen's "death" and was disheartened. She and Shuanglu followed the guidance of Master Lingmu to hunt down the three "Qizhi" people; On the side, Su Xia and Xiaolu met, and the second volume was completed Compilation of some force information: The forces sitting in the realm of heaven and man: Nixiang Mountain: There is no Taoist Qiying; there are six peaks in the mountain, except for the main peak Nixiang. View; there is a junior disciple in the first one, named Grandmaster Dameng; it is divided into two courtyards, the north and the south, of which the south courtyard is possessed by the devil Baiyun City: The Remaining Sword Immortal Li Yunzhou The Four Divine Palaces (the palace owners are all the same) Flow master): Qinglu Palace: The strongest person outside the palace master is the Nine-turn Immortal Bai Jin (a first-rate master; according to rumors, his cultivation level is slightly better than the palace master; he participated in the Jiu Miao Incident and teamed up with Lu Qi to kill "Yu Yue" ) Fu Zang Palace: The strongest person outside the palace owner is Yan Shengchuan (a first-class master; fought with the Taoist in Qingyi who was suspected of being Fang Yezhu, but was defeated by the Taoist using half of Yunluo Immortal Palace; the master of Yu Mingshuang, a lacquered insider) Mingsui Palace: Because the palace owner Jin Xuejun died in the Battle of Luoshan (Lu Qi stabbed her in the back), the palace owner's daughter Shi Daoqing was kidnapped by the police, and her influence plummeted after the war Tianhua Palace: was affected by the demon tide of the old craftsman, The losses were heavy; among them, Mo Jian Bai Guanci is one of the few swordsmen who ranks among the first-class masters Thirty-two palaces: varying strengths Wild first-class masters: Twelve Evil Arhats, Jue Luan, Fang Yezhu (background unknown) Qianmi Yiyi (now Tongtian Sect): Qianmi Granny (Qianmi needs to accommodate Yan Shenjuan) , but did not want to lose control of the Xing Ling Jing, so they divided the Xing Ling Jing into four parts and raised them in four carefully selected containers, that is, Shuanglu and others, and used the method of cultivating gu to breed new bearers of the Xing Ling Jing. The further purpose is not yet clear) Tongtian Cult Leader: Wan Kui (the red-booted and black-robed demon who is suspected of trying to abduct Xiaoxiao. The demon locked Xiaoxiao as Guigu according to the prophecy of the "eldest lady" daughter, indicating that she is the key to bringing back ghosts) Four Heavenly Kings: White Clothes Tent (not strong in hard power, mainly relying on conspiracy and trickery to win) Xi Qianhun (possessed an invisible divine whip, which can shepherd people's souls; once almost died at the hands of Yu Mingshuang, when he was about to die, he took the initiative to become a slave of the divine whip to save his life) The person who claimed to be Fazhao (once claimed to be benevolent, but was changed to benevolent after being broken by Su Zhen) Fazhao; during the fierce battle with Su Zhen and Xiaoxiao, he punched the energy of the Styx into Su Zhen's body with one palm) Baixiang Longshou (leader of the Ghost Beast Sect; a girl whose appearance can change to hundreds of looks, and has many aliases; three years ago, she used the pseudonym Che Yuan to try to seize the secret of Li Sha, and now uses the name Yuan'er) Mysterious and unpredictable strength (may be close to heavenly beings or even already heavenly beings): Yellow River Ancestor (in Jinyou's country), Qianmi Granny, Lingmu Zhenren

10,000 Years ago: Xuancai Xiaoguang Laomu has begun to rule the mountains and rivers of the world of Xijing Kingdom, day and night in all seasons 8000 years ago: The Four Divine Craftsmen came to the world of Xijing Kingdom The Demon King already existed in the Demon Kingdom at this time 8000-4500 years ago: The Four Divine Craftsmen killed Xuancai Xiaoguang Laomu, his body was devoured by three tigers, and his soul was suppressed under the yellow sand of Jinyou Kingdom 5500-4500 years ago: The Four Divine Craftsmen built the Four Miracles The Laojun appeared The Seven Kings worshiped the Demon King and obtained the Seven Volume Heavenly Book Eight The king killed the four divine craftsmen, and the four divine craftsmen cursed the eight kings before they died The seven kings killed their masters, and the devil was eaten The peacock became a demon, the Buddha killed the peacock, and the peacock's remnant soul escaped into the golden world. Kingdom Five Kings Ascend Zi Yin was born 4500-3500 years ago: Zi Yin Fei The rise was interrupted, half of the body flew up, and half of the body sank into the lake Xuanji slept at the bottom of the lake 3500-2500 years ago: Miaolian ate the remains of Ziyin and ascended after a period of time 1295 years ago: On September 16th, Lu Zhaiyuan, the year-killing god, flew to Nantang

When I saw the post about Amway's book from Longkong, I originally planned to criticize it, but I ended up being fascinated. The writing style is really like watching an anime. As a writer who is obsessed with the street, my heart is broken when I see it, and I feel that I will never be able to capture it in my life. Especially Chapter 1, it's simply invincible. But there are still problems. 1. The title of the book is seriously inconsistent with the content and style, which will be very discouraging 2. There are several very good female characters written in the book, but the author clearly stated that the book has only one female protagonist and only has 1 million words, so I am dissuaded from reading it 3. The urban plot and the plot of the immortal world are too separated. I hope the author can make up for it in future plots. 4. In the text, there are occasionally a few words that ruin the atmosphere. 5. The rhetoric in the urban chapter is sometimes a little too strong, and it looks a little wordy, but it can actually be streamlined a little. I posted a message to Longkong to push you, but you were treated as a troll. The author came on hard and wanted to whitewash me.

What you conceive in your mind is just a story, and it becomes a novel when you write it down and show it to others. In the most recent chapter, Miss Tong is blind. Miss Tong has great martial arts skills and naturally has higher perception than ordinary people. Therefore, we don't need to worry about whether she can easily listen to voices and argue positions without being seen, or flirt with Su Zhen - after all, as readers, we also like to read, so it doesn't matter. However, there are still problems in the basic description. The problematic paragraphs can be divided into three groups The first group, 1. [Chapter 204] "Tong Shuanglu looked back at the more than thirty people who were in shock..."; 2. [Chapter 205] " Tong Shuanglu's beautiful eyes turned to Su Zhen..."; The second group, a. [Chapter 204] "The sea that has been sunny for many days suddenly became dense with fog, 'What's wrong? ' Tong Shuanglu became alert"; b. [Chapter 205] "(Su Zhen manipulated the monk)... Tong Shuanglu knew that Su Zhen had stolen the other person's memory..."; C. [Chapter 205] "Tong Shuanglu recalled the dark lake..." D.[Chapter 206]... The maid immediately brought a box to them...(There was a letter in the box, and then there was a strange visual description of the letter)...(Tong Shuanglu asked) 'This is...'" The third group, A.[20 Chapter 0] "When they were leaving, they suddenly saw a woman with a curtain covering her face at the door of the cabin... Tong Shuanglu looked a little happy when she heard the words 'fairy couple'... Just then, the sea breeze suddenly blew open a corner of the curtain, revealing Tong Shuanglu's face stained by poison..." The first group of questions is the most obvious, why can a blind person see/see, or why can a blind person make very flexible movements with his eyes like a normal person? The second group of questions cannot be seen at a glance, but if you think about it carefully, how does a blind person react to purely visual information? Since Tong Shuanglu can't see, how can she know the changes in the dense fog, Su Zhen's movements, and even the color of the lake? Cheng Tong touched the side of the boat with his bare hands and felt a little damp. He was about to ask, but Su Zhen had already made preparations? (We know that Su Zhen is in good health, and it is faster to detect dense fog directly through the eyes than through the indirect influence of dense fog). > The third group of problems is the most hidden. First of all, the author must be praised for the great idea here: using the invisible double exposure to let her pretend to be unaware of the change in her appearance, and then let others accidentally break this point, and then Su Zhen was able to Realizing Shuanglu's trick, the two finally let the two talk about love naturally, etc. However, one detail almost ruined this exquisite idea: since the core trick of the quotation part lies in this veil-it is precisely because passerby A can't see the face. People are frightened only when their faces are exposed under the veil, so why do they describe the child's double face as slightly cheerful? If it were the film's failure, it would be more intuitive - originally the two people were talking and fighting, and they couldn't see what was going on under the veil. Only when the wind blew did it surprise people. , This is a good way to shoot. But the director didn't shoot it like this. In the middle of the dialogue, he suddenly moved the camera behind the veil to give a close-up of the character's face. So what was there to be surprised about when the veil was blown away? Let's see what the great writer wrote: Why did he come? ... He broke his leg... In the second half of the day, there was no customer. I was sitting with my eyes closed and suddenly I heard a voice, "Warm a bowl of wine." "Although the voice was very low, it sounded familiar. There was no one at all. I stood up and looked outside, and I saw Kong Yiji sitting under the counter facing the threshold. His face was dark and thin, and he was already in shape. He wore a ragged jacket, crossed his legs, and put a cattail bag underneath, hung on his shoulders with a straw rope. When he saw me, he said, "Warm a bowl of wine. The shopkeeper also stretched out his head and said, "Kong Yiji?" You still owe nineteen cents! "Kong Yiji looked up dejectedly and replied, "This... I'll pay it off next time. This time it's cash and the wine is better. The shopkeeper smiled and said to him as usual, "Kong Yiji, you stole something again!" "But this time he was not very argumentative and simply said, "Don't make fun of me! ""Make fun of? If he didn't steal, how could he break his leg? "Kong Yiji whispered, "Fall, fall, fall..." His eyes looked like he begged the shopkeeper not to mention it again. At this time, a few people had gathered, and he and the shopkeeper laughed. I warmed the wine, took it out, and put it on the threshold. He took out four coins from his ragged pocket and put it in my hand. I saw that his hands were full of mud. It turned out that he came here with these hands. Since Kong Yiji His legs were broken, so readers would like to know how Kong Yiji walked over. However, the suspense could not be revealed immediately, so the design made me sit behind the counter with my eyes closed (in order to let me close my eyes and emphasize that business was average that day), so that I could not see Kong Yiji's walking posture for the first time. Then, because Kong Yiji was sitting cross-legged under the counter, I could only see him when I got closer. Those muddy hands. Although Kong Yiji did not wear an invisibility cloak to block his legs and hands, the limitations of my position and line of sight also served this purpose. Furthermore, these three sets of problems are actually the same problem, that is, the author must grasp the differences in perception between different characters, and even the third-person narrator. If there is a lack of information, then we must find a way to give her information through another sense, rather than letting her act according to the non-existent sense. The problem of the third-person narrator is much more complicated, when to use an omniscient one, when to use an omniscient or even misleading one, how to use an omniscient narrator to achieve effects, etc. The way to use it is in the heart, I believe the author can write better.

Are there any similar novels? The writing is good and the plot is good. I feel like there is a bit of a shortage of books.

Author, you have to maintain a good standard and tell the story well. This is what you should do. Ignore those people who are crying about single female protagonists or multiple female protagonists. If the story is told well, no matter whether there is a female protagonist or not, or how many female protagonists there are, everyone will enjoy watching it. Don't be kidnapped by them. Changing it again and again will cause the story to fall apart. This is completely a waste of time.