I Became a Swordsman in Ancient Japan

Character Card Name: Ogata Issei Gender: Male Class: assassin Alignment: Neutral Evil Attribute: Human Strength: A Dexterity: A Durability: A++ (the first three are understandable because they are immortal) Magic Power: E (Ogata himself There is no energy-based means from beginning to end) Luck: D (Ogata spent the first half of his life wandering around) Class skills Aura masking: A (Shiranui-ryu stealth technique) Innate skills Immortality: A Recover a large amount of health points, and continue to restore health points each round (3 rounds). Selfless Realm: EX The performance of one's own strength, speed, and skill command cards are greatly improved (1 turn), and the power of the Noble Phantasm is increased (3 turns). Wuwo Sword Style: A Acquire a large amount of charge, double the number of attack hits of your normal command card (1 turn), switch the form of the Noble Phantasm (1 turn) Color Card Power Swift Skill Noble Phantasm Pass Penetration of Self·Shura's Strike: C Anti-personnel Noble Phantasm/10hit/Green Card The own attack power is increased (the effect is increased when overcharged), causing huge damage to a single target (level 1), and the self gains dodge status (1 round) Destroy the army and kill the generals·Unparalleled in the world: A Anti-army Noble Phantasm/3hit/Red Card Cause huge damage to all enemy characters (level 1), reduce the opponent's attack power and defense, increase your own critical hit rate and critical hit damage (pass (The effect increases when recharging) Voice ——Combat—— Start 1: Why are there always idiots who overestimate their abilities and come looking for death... Start 2: Line up for me, there are many people who want to kill me, "Executioner Ittosai". Skill 1: No one told you that I seem to be immortal? Skill 2: (breathing sound) Okay, let's get real! (Because the breathing sound of the source's breath is too long, I omitted it) Skill 3: Two-sword style of no self, Shura ginseng! Command card B: One-sword style of Sakakibara·Waterfall! Command card Q: Two-sword style of no-self! Blade return! Command card A: Times have changed! Ogata style· Kasumi Nagi! (Ogata Style Spear Drawing Technique hahaha) Noble Phantasm Card 1: Cut off the head with just one blow! Noble Phantasm Card 2: It's like a god at this time! Noble Phantasm Card 3: Sanada's spear is sharp, my sword is not at a disadvantage! (Red card limited Noble Phantasm) Noble Phantasm 1: Seeing that your spirit is a little slack, I will kill you with one sword - it's that simple! Transparent selflessness·Shura's blow. Noble Phantasm 2: I am myself, but I am also the world! Transparent selflessness·Shura's blow! Noble Phantasm 3: The roar of the class moves, a cavity of blood surges up in the throat, and the shadow of the sword breaks through the sky! Destroy the army, unparalleled in the world! (Limited red card Noble Phantasm) Voice ——Summoning and Strengthening—— Summoning: Assassin, Ogata Yisei, is a ronin for the time being, and may have other nicknames, but I will introduce them later. (Quietly): Thank God I didn't turn into a woman. Upgrade 1: Well, Master, I seem to have had this experience of making my body lighter during my lifetime, but thank you anyway. Upgrade 2: Well, my strength and agility have increased, although they are not as good as before when I was alive, but thank you anyway. Second Ascension 1: After changing my clothes, I seem to have regained the feeling I had when I was free of feudal clan and wandering around. Ascension 2: Speaking of which, it shouldn't scare you Master. At this time, my nickname is Human Slayer and Executioner. Second Coming of the Spiritual Base 3: Da Shi Tian and Da Zi Zai... Master, thank you for helping to find them. With them, I can exert some of the power of the Wuwo Sword Style. Ascension 4: The most unparalleled sword in the world, Ogata Yizhi joins in! Although it is a bit shameful to say this, but after all, I can't live up to your expectations, Master. Even in front of ten thousand armies, I will definitely be able to cut a smooth path! ——Personal Space—— Bond 1: What do you mean, swordsmanship is very handsome? That kind of thing exists just for killing people, and there is no point in talking about whether it is handsome or not. Bond 2: Ah, yes, I once used the pseudonym Majima Goro. What, Majima Goro also has a lot of wild stories? Well, I hope you didn't write me too outrageously. (Ogata's inner OS: Misstep, I guarded against Ogata's power but not Majima Goro!) Bond 3: I heard that there is a book that says my hairstyle is Tsukiyo hair? How is it possible, that hairstyle is too ugly, hahaha! Bond 4: Assassinate the feudal lord? I don't deny that I did these things, but it seems to be a pity that my other companions who assassinated that scumbag once were not able to be passed down to the world in the end. Bond 5: The sky is thousands of miles wide, but the sword is only three feet long. Even if you have the ability to restrain the gods and send generals, you can only kill things within 3 feet. Therefore, although I am just an ordinary person who knows some swordsmanship, I will cut through all the obstacles within three feet for you. Go forward boldly, Master. (Ogata's inner OS: You are not here anyway, so I'll use it to show off first, hahahahahahaha) Dialogue 1: You are that Nioh... I have really admired the name for a long time. Should I say this to you again, Tachibana-kun? (Holding Tachibana Aoden) Dialogue 2: Every time I see you, I feel that my current body is really great, thank God. (Possessing Miyamoto Musashi) Dialogue 3: I heard that you are an unknown swordsman. That's really awesome. You actually usurped Sasaki Kojiro's position with an unknown person. It's amazing. (Possessing Sasaki Kojiro) Dialogue 4: Oh, you actually came to Chaldea? That's really like meeting an old friend in a foreign land. (Anyone who holds the Calabash House) Dialogue 5: Although I am also Japanese, I always feel that he is very different from the character in my memory. (Possessing some Japanese Servants) Dialogue 6: Although you may not believe it, but maybe I was Chinese in my previous life? Um... Or should I say a previous life? (Possessing a Chinese Servant) Dialogue 7: You said you have eaten mermaid meat? There is actually a second such scourge in the world, tsk tsk tsk. (Possessing Sesshōin Kiara (MoonCancer)) Dialogue 8: Although you are very young, after all, you are the ancestor of an elder of mine, and I will still maintain a certain respect for you. (Possessing Fuma Kotaro) Like things: Do you like things? Well... There are quite a lot of food, wine, and beautiful scenery, but what I like most is the peace and healthy life for me and my family and friends. Things I hate: To be honest, I don't hate many things, but I really hate those guys who don't treat ordinary people as human beings. Those kind of people should die. About the Holy Grail: If there is such a universal wish-making machine, I would really like to try to make one. Although I haven't decided what to wish for yet, maybe I can try to make a contradictory wish?

Ogata has been summoned to modern times

I quickly read the free chapter in the morning, and I can sum it up in two words: a pity. He has the qualifications for food and grass, but lacks experience and accumulation. It can be seen that the author has done considerable preparation and homework in collecting data. However, as a literary and artistic work, the most important thing about the novel is the performance effect, not a simple accumulation of data. This is reflected in the weakness of the plot in the first and second volumes. It seems that everyone in the drama knows what they are supposed to do, such as leading Noh Noodles to perform. On the other hand, readers have no expectations for the plot, especially for readers who have watched a certain amount of Japanese movies. The plots in the first two volumes are nothing more than Yamada Yoji movies. The combination with Daibosatsurei and the villain played by Tatsuya Nakadai (one actor and two roles) is just a little less attractive. Basically, you will know what to do next after watching the beginning Since we started talking from the perspective of movies, let's use movies as an example to expand. There is a simple standard for whether a movie's narrative is full of characters, that is, whether the character's psychology has changed and grown, and whether the reasons are sufficient. Take the early plot in the article as an example. If more interactions with the proprietress Afu can be added to the plot of the wandering house instead of simply becoming a monster spawning point, then the catharsis in the subsequent fight will not be so embarrassing ("What, what, my friend's clothes"), and the emotions will have a process of building up momentum; the second is the scene. Needless to say, its ability to shape the character image, but the author is somewhat weak in this aspect of the narrative. So far, I I don't know what our gyms are like, what the castle lord's residence is like, and what the castle town is like. This can help to shape the master style of the supporting characters and the character of the city lord on the territory. The third is the lines. The novel's genre limits the main way to shape the characters. It is still a dialogue. From a personal perspective, the tone of the characters in the author's narration is too plain and does not match the scene enough (basically all of Ah Fu's language). However, there are also good ones, such as the city lord killing people and "clothes are dirty". This is a reading experience brought about by a movie feel, which should be promoted. It is a seedling after all. If the above is just a bit of complaint and a short-term improvement of the ability problem, the following are the measures that I think the author can immediately improve the experience for readers - length. The plot needs to gain momentum, and the reader's emotions also need to gain momentum, which is reflected in the continuity of reading in the novel. However, the current chapter length is generally only seven to eight pages. In addition, the text is too plain, and the reading feeling is discouraged and becomes a running account. The optimal number of reading pages in standard font size should be 13 to 15 pages. Any longer is generally only available for historical texts. In other words, the author may wish to increase the number of words in a single chapter by 40-50%. This requires adjusting the rhythm of writing or increasing the workload of typesetting, but the effect is bound to be there. The above is just a complaint, I hope it is useful.

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"Greetings! Las Vegas Royal Competition~Swimsuit Swordsman Seven-Color Showdown!" Held! Event Limited★4 Servants "Ogata Issei (Saber)" You can get it by clearing the event! Event period: June 15 (Tuesday) to July 6 (Tuesday), 2021 The interference between servants caused by summer—— The so-called summer scenery poem... This year's swimsuit season has also arrived as scheduled! This time the stage is Las Vegas! Participating is the gorgeous "Swimsuit Swordsman"! It is a fierce battle of quantum dance! This battle is the "Seven-Color Battle of the Swimsuit Swordsman"! Bet on one, bet on two, bet on three, and bet on the throne of "The Strongest Swimsuit Swordsman"! Come on, come on, come on, let's decide the winner one by one in an upright manner! ★Ogata Issei★ Class Saber Information Even Miss Ogata Issei, a great swordsman who travels all over the world, cannot resist the temptation of the sea in the hot summer! "Now that we have come to the beach, If we don't change into a swimsuit, we will definitely be regarded as an alien! If it weren't for the purpose of blending in with everyone, I wouldn't wear such shameless clothes!" I put on my sunglasses and thought I was well disguised, Miss Ogata Ise, who had a slightly red face, muttered softly. "You can't let others see this look... "It's decided! From now on, my name will be Hanyu Ichi!" (I originally wrote it at noon and sent it out, but I don't know why I didn't send it out... If I had known better, I would have saved the draft first)

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To sum up the advantages: dramatic and tense plot, excellent character portrayal, and in-depth and detailed study of ancient Japan. Disadvantages: Too much pursuit of drama leads to a plot that is too forced, good-looking but without surprises, and too many interjections and memories lead to an incoherent plot. If this is a sword and halberd film, it is undoubtedly very good 👍, and the tense description is indeed wonderful to watch. But this is not the case. Without the actors' performances and the fast-paced narrative of the film, the author's dramatic approach would appear to be very draggy. If a battle is not finished, the camera will change and memories will begin, which is the same problem as in the later stages of Naruto Shippuden 🤔. You must know that a movie lasts two hours. No matter how many characters you have during the battle and how many narrations you add, it will be finished in 10 minutes. The plot will not be interrupted by memories (the audience has not yet come down from the climax, the memories have already been played and continued 😁). But novels are different. A battle can last for half a month or even a month. The protagonist has just faced off against the opponent, and you leave him alone for two or three days to write a supporting role... It's really uncomfortable 😰. I hope the author can properly handle the relationship between dramatic narrative and story coherence. Although the next one will probably be more group-like, I guess this situation may be more serious 😅

After reading, the author has a characteristic in his writing. Every time someone is about to die, the protagonist just arrives. This feels very bad. Is it better to write the battle between Genichi and Nobuhide to kill Genichi? After all, the fight has reached that point, and the protagonist just happens to arrive to save it. There are also clips of Rin Kinoshita. It is equivalent to saying that the villains are all dead, but the good guys will never die. This scenario occurs again and again. There are also Hatsuko and the leader Yi Nin. I was really speechless in this scene. I have forgiven countless rebellions. Don't righteous people die?

Thanks to Gud for making the map! I have marked some important locations in this book with red circles. Ogata's hometown Izumo, Calabashya's base Owari, Shiranui's base Omi...