A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: Starting at the Falling Cloud Sect

Introduction is like child's play! You can travel across the secret realms of various continents but still can't get rid of the control of the magic gate? The basic logic doesn't hold up.

I also want to eat the traffic of the harem, and I also want to eat the traffic of the single heroine Song Yu. I don't understand what the author is thinking. Yuan Yao has been with the protagonist through life and death so many times, and has always been firmly on his side. Then he didn't give him a title, and he didn't give any training resources. Then he had an affair with Zi Ling and Mei Ning, and he kept vacillating. He didn't want to speculate in the stock market. It's pretty cool for a mortal fangirl to write you a female character like this.

Song Yu

The mortal world view is more suitable for a single female protagonist or a female protagonist. This is the truth, and I agree with this. But from a three-dimensional perspective, after reading a lot of mortal fan fiction, I feel that regardless of whether they have bad grades or good ones, they all have harems. Basically, there are more than two female protagonists. This is the choice of the market. I have an impression that some of the books with better scores, Scientific Cultivation of Immortals in the Human Realm, should have two female protagonists. Later, I read book reviews and said that the spirit world will also accept other female characters. Immortal Immortality is a pure harem story, and I have included all the books that can be included. I read "The Rogue Cultivator" too early. The serious female protagonists that I have an impression of include Xin Ruyin, Zi Ling, and a bunch of concubines whose names are not mentioned. The book about fighting monsters and upgrading is also a harem novel. Although the Legend of Mysterious Bones only contains Madam Wen and Yuan Yao, it is because they were cut off. Based on the development, Ling Yuling and Zi Ling will probably also be included. Beware of Mr. Mo and the Patriarch of the Demonic Way is probably the best-performing book among mortals at the moment. Both of them are harem novels, especially the first harem, which contains almost all the original works. So looking at the entire mortal fandom, there are almost no books with a single female protagonist. But looking at it, no matter how big the harem is, there is actually only a difference between female characters with pendants and female characters with flesh and blood. As for the portrayal of the heroine Song Yu in this book, it is so complete and vivid that it is difficult for other female characters to replace this first heroine. I wrote in a chapter review a long time ago that how the protagonist of a book handles his relationship with female characters depends on the author's writing style and whether he is willing to put effort into writing. Most readers hate harems because the protagonists and female characters in some books have no story and no connection. The portrayal of these female characters is also the same or even almost non-existent, and the result is that they are inexplicably put together. So I think the most important thing is whether the author can control a single female protagonist or multiple female protagonists, and whether the logic of the story development in this book is smooth due to these emotional dramas. If you just watched the trailer for the New Year episode of Mortals, you will find that Song Meng, who has long since disappeared from the original work, was saved and survived until the border war, as was Zhong Weiniang. If the author has already portrayed some characters well, there is no need to cause regrets. The author of this book has no problem with the logic of the story and the characterization of the characters so far. However, due to the special nature of the heroine Song Yu, the protagonist must be filled by other female characters in some events and dungeons. Zi Ling, Yuan Yao, and Liu Yu currently play this role. Can Song Yu replace Liu Yu? No, because Liu Yu does some mundane chores and is the protagonist's white glove. The protagonist will not bear to let Song Yu do it, and Song Yu doesn't have time to do it. Can Song Yu replace Zi Ling Yuanyao? No, the protagonist still has no way to confess that he can go to the Sea of ​​Stars. The only female characters in the story of Sea of ​​Stars can only be these two people. Therefore, the logic of the author's current story is no problem, and the interactions with these female characters are also effective. So far in the story, except for the heroine Song Yu, I personally think that the portrayal of other female characters, especially Liu Yu, is very successful. How to write the follow-up, whether to actually have a relationship with these female characters besides Song Yu, depends on how the story develops.

Chapter 2 The protagonist is only in the qi training period, but he can be divided and banned by others. I would like to ask, is there a primordial spirit during the qi training period? Even if there is, if this realm is divided, the soul cannot become demented on the spot 🤤

Personally, I think this book is obviously a detailed one and does not deliberately describe how to advance. For example, it does not describe the process of foundation building and pill formation in detail. It is more advanced through adventures, missions, secret realm dungeons and other plots. It is one of the few fans who does not follow Han Li's trajectory in the original work and does not try to steal Han Li's opportunities. It is also one of the few fan fictions that can reasonably create plots and copies based on the original work. For example, after Xiang Zhili came out of Yellow Maple Valley, he continued to appear in the Luoyun Sect as a low-level disciple, the Yunmeng secret realm of the three sects of the Xi Kingdom, and the Shanhai Island secret realm where he met Zi Ning and Ling Yuling to get the Yuan Dan, including the first encounter with Han Li and the mutual trap that caused Wen Tianren to come to Tiannan due to the ghost fog. These are obviously new plots, but they can give people a strange, familiar and reasonable feeling. Sometimes it seems that the progress of each chapter is very slow, and it takes patience to read the chapters before and after and connect them together to make it interesting. Personally, I think fellow Taoists are getting tired of reading the kind of fan fiction with Han Li entering the Yellow Maple Valley and teleporting together to the Chaos Star Sea (well-written exceptions). Instead, the fan fiction with the protagonists coming from the Chaos Star Sea and the Tiannanxi Kingdom has begun to shine. This Luo Yun Sect handles it very well. Most of the time, the protagonist and Han Li have their own opportunities, and they occasionally intersect without licking or suppressing them. It does not deviate from the original timeline, but also makes the plot feel fresh to a certain extent. Compared to being born in Chaos Xinghai or Dajin, the author chose the protagonist to be born in Luoyun Sect, which is very innovative. For Taoist friends who have read the original work, the plot and copy created in this fanfic will provide a reading experience that is both strange and familiar. For example, if Xiang Zhili appears in Luoyun Sect, fellow Taoists will not feel it is awkward because they know that Senior Brother Xiang will also go to Tianfu Sect😁

1. General readers can ignore the protagonist's triple spy identity. 2. The protagonist's cultivation is slow, and the evil master next door has more than 100 chapters, so we can ignore it for the time being. 3. The protagonist is a poor man. He has no herbal resources for the time being and cannot afford to support too many women. He can tolerate the early exposure of such a major event as Chaos Xinghai. 4. The protagonist's skills are miscellaneous, his magical powers are featureless, his original spirit beast servants, and his skill design are a piece of shit, which ordinary readers can tolerate. 5. [Only when I look at the catalog, I can't stand it because Cheng Tiankun is dead and the protagonist has not yet begun to break through the Nascent Soul. Do you know what the tape period is? ! ?

Most of those who can read the fanfics of Mortal Cultivation to Immortality are old bookworms, and old bookworms prefer more refreshing articles and emotional dramas (most of them are old perverts) The author, your writing style is okay, the storyline is also very compact, the logic is clear, and the characters are well created, But you should appropriately improve the combat power of some protagonists and show more golden hands. The advantage of referring to it would be better if it makes the article more exciting You can take a look at [Mortal: Just formed a pill, the system asked me to be careful about Mr. Mo]. This book was released at about the same time as you. It is a cool article among cool articles. The book is very simple, and it is as refreshing as you want. The writing style is not necessarily better than yours, but other people's monthly votes, popularity, or other results are much better than yours.

Watched it several times. I can't hold on. The first few chapters are really witty. Why is it banned by the devil's split soul? And as soon as they meet, Song Yu tells the protagonist that he is an undercover agent. It's so nonsense.

No, do you know that what you are writing is a fanfic? What are you thinking about? It's just a foundation building. How long have you been procrastinating? What are you doing?