A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: From the Start, I Became the Disciple of Adept Qing Yi

Holy crap, after reading the latest chapter, it's unbelievable! No matter how poor Qing Yi is, he's still a Nascent Soul cultivator. But you've written him as so poor he's practically urinating blood. You'd feel sorry for him if you gave him a Qingming Needle Talisman, and he'd be moved to tears by the protagonist's plight. Of all the fanfiction I've read, this is the poorest Nascent Soul cultivator I've ever seen. It feels like he'd have to wear the same pair of underwear for hundreds of years.

I wonder if the author started writing the novel after reading a few fanfics? Not only is there a problem with the plot, but it seems that the author doesn't know much about mortals in this novel. For example, a fake elixir monk by a passerby can reach the early stage of elixir formation with all his strength, and the elixir formation at the age of 6 or 70 can barely be regarded as a genius in…

Nonsense, wishful thinking. A fake core is equivalent to Foundation Establishment, but you think a fake core can unleash Core Formation power? 666

I finished reading it. It cost quite a bit of money, and the plot was alright! It's just that the writing style is really bad. Out of 2.5 Million words, about 500,000 are just filler. I hope the author reads it over and rewrites it after finishing, since 500,000 words of filler could cost the price of a meal of braised chicken and rice! Right?

He sold nearly 100,000 spirit stones in the same shop during his three years at the Foundation Establishment stage. He called himself Li Feiyu and always emphasized that he was cautious. It's laughable.

They all have the resources to cultivate, but their cultivation level is low and they like to roam around, calling it "looking for trouble and seizing opportunities." They fight and talk big, portraying themselves as little kids, brainless. Let's change their character settings.

Author, you actually wrote a Nascent Soul cultivator as being so poor he's practically urinating blood. Even a single Azure Needle talisman feels like a piece of his flesh being ripped off. And resources below the Core Formation stage? He doesn't ask for more, but he has them in abundance. After all, a rogue cultivator who reaches Nascent Soul—you can't imagine how many corpses he's left behind.

The spirit beast advanced to level eight, and without imposing any restrictions or holding back any tricks, he was simply made to swear an oath to protect the sect for a thousand years. Look at the losses the old demon suffered in the original work. Basically, every time the spirit beasts and spirit insects advanced, the restrictions were updated, and he still suffered great losses.

Honestly, it's normal for ordinary people to have female characters, but I never expected you to write an original female character. Putting everything else aside, even Fan Zuo Shi (a famous court official) is better than your original female character. There are many other things that aren't clearly explained or clarified. Your writing is worse than Tomato (a famous Chinese writer), how did you even think of making a living on Qidian?

Is the author trying to lick Han Li's boots? What's so great about a fictional character like him? He's using the guise of licking Han Li to try and lick Wang Yu's dermatitis (a character from a popular Chinese novel).