The Immortal Abode in the Jade Pendant

I have some questions for Chapter 1: If one dies fighting for the sect, their descendants with mediocre talent will be expelled from the sect, and their path to cultivation will be essentially cut off. Then who dares to die for their sect? Especially for cultivators of average talent in their descendants? Does that sect still have cohesion?

Another story about a useless character with five elemental roots starting off. It seems like none of the recent novels featuring this type of character with five elemental roots and a useless immortal abode have exceeded 200,000 words. I'll bet on whether this one will surpass that.

I suggest changing merit points to destiny points. Start with a low-level destiny point and upgrade it. Merit points are hard to define; do you calculate merit points for helping relatives, friends, or your sect? If you do, there are loopholes. Just open a porridge stall in a mortal city and give alms to beggars and homeless people every day—that would accumulate immeasurable merit.

I've read 50 chapters and I'm starting to have trouble reading any more. The main problem is that the map looks a bit unreal. Just how big is the Five Elements Sect's mountain gate? How big is the Five Elements City? How large is the territory under his jurisdiction? How many people are going to provide support in the Southern Monster Forest?

To be honest, and I hope the author doesn't mind, you're really not suited to writing. You have the perseverance, but absolutely no talent. You've written so many words, yet you haven't shown any improvement. The plot is watchable, but the writing style is truly indescribable and a huge strain to read. Even a primary school student should have shown some improvement by writing that many words.

I overlooked some minor issues earlier, but then came the auction. A Qi Refining stage Five Elements Manual, which had repeatedly failed to sell, was up for grabs. Someone bid, but the price was too high, so the protagonist withdrew. The auctioneer then approached the protagonist, saying the previous bidder didn't want it anymore, and since the protagonist had initially bid 2600, they'd lower the price to 2500. Anyone with common sense would have realized what was going on at that point.

It's completely incomprehensible. The parents died in the war of expansion, and the descendants have this kind of start.

The first chapter alone alienated at least half the readers. It wasn't that the five-elemental-root concept was bad, it's just that readers were genuinely tired of it... Eight out of ten books feature the five-elemental-root concept!

This doesn't seem like a cultivation novel; it's more like an urban fantasy story, and many of the logic is flawed. Is this your first time writing a cultivation novel? It lacks any sense of immortality, the setting is sloppy, and the cheat system is useless. The writing is utterly nonsensical; anyone who can read dozens of chapters is a genius.

Prices are absolutely outrageous! Spirit Stones are not as good as Happy Beans!