Laying Low as a Talent at the First Holy Demon Sect

Hajihe's recommendation to the Dogmatic Demon was really crucial. As a newcomer who didn't know anyone at the beginning, I was really touched. A Silver Alliance thanks Hajihe for his help, and hopes to open a new book as soon as possible so that I can continue to learn and imitate ()

Promise me, I'll learn how to copy from Wenzhi Public School

The important thing is the feeling(●• ̀ω•́ )✧

The scenes before and just after foundation building are the most interesting. After that, each one is smarter and stupider than the other. It seems that your protagonist is the only smart person in the world. Take Mrs. Chongguang as an example. The author has always emphasized that she is Mrs. Chongguang. She is usually well protected, so she is stupid. The question is, hasn't she lived several lifetimes, and was she born as Mrs. Chongguang? How did such a stupid thing reach perfection in the middle stage of foundation building, and it was still practiced in the Chu Sheng Sect. Compared with the previous one, Yu Su is really smart. Most of the time, it's fine to just watch it without thinking, but later on, when you take a closer look, you will find that there are flaws and loopholes everywhere. More than 90% of the powerful enemies that the protagonist fights are tribulations. This kind of common sense can make the protagonist fail every time. It's like the protagonist is the only one who can hold an umbrella on a rainy day, and no one else can. The author forcefully lowers the intelligence and lowers the intelligence. Don't fix the patches that can't be put on the table. If you don't have the writing power, don't write this big framework. It's over.

We may once again see a new author become a god with a book. There are many visible flaws at the beginning of this book, such as too many jokes that make people tired, the lack of a plot of their own, and the protagonist's eagerness to restart the book that makes people say that their IQ is off the line. But after seeing 450,000 words, these problems disappeared. The main plot is the main tone, and the jokes are the embellishment. After the world view is unfolded, it becomes more and more interesting, and the plot becomes more exciting. Especially the various birth operations of the protagonist make people unable to put it down. There is also a big advantage here, that is, the supporting characters are not witty. The supporting characters are not clever, and it is satisfying to watch the protagonist being born. Otherwise, it will be like bullying a kindergarten child, and it will just be boring.

Regarding Ang Xiao's ending, I hope he won't be included in the banner. Ang Xiao is a proud man. He has overcome obstacles all the way, and during the long five thousand years, he has continued to strive for what he wants in his heart. The arrogance of "not willing to be inferior to others" is engraved in his bones. Even if the road ahead is full of thorns, he has never flinched. For him like this, the ending should be upright and vigorous. At the last moment, even though he knew that his skills were inferior to others, he still had an unyielding fire. He will face death calmly, with the most heroic attitude, maintaining the heart of "no regrets even in body and mind". After five thousand years of persistence, he lost the result but never lost his spirit. He could accept failure and accept death, but he would not accept becoming someone else's slave or lower his proud head. As Hemingway said, "People can be destroyed, but they cannot be defeated." The body may disappear, but the stubbornness and dignity engraved in the soul will always shine brightly and will not be defeated by any force. The above is my personal opinion, just a suggestion

I feel that the realm is set beyond the standard, and you can play with luck and cause and effect in the foundation stage. If you reach perfection in Qi training, you will die if you mess with the cause and effect. It is only the early stage of the foundation stage. Things can be calculated casually. Without plug-ins, others can't play at all! You can practice the Sage Way during the Qi training period, it's beyond the standard! What kind of immortality can you cultivate if everything is bound by fate and fate?

I thought that the later stage of Simulating the Road to Immortality had collapsed in recent years, but I didn't expect that this game could be better than its predecessors. There are a lot of posts about it, so I won't go into nonsense. Here, as a writer, I'll make a few comments. The core of the plot is balance, whether it is information gaps or patch stack settings, they all serve the purpose of balance. Balance is to ensure that the protagonist has gold fingers and cards in his hand, and at the same time, the opponent's character also has gold fingers and cards in his hand. The advancement of the plot is like a game of cards that advances each other in layers. If the protagonist is good at operations/cards, he will make a profit, and if he does not play well, he will suffer a small loss. But it can often be revealed by Goldfinger to prevent readers from being frustrated, and it can be used in the next time (this book is for the next life) Since the protagonist has only Goldfinger, the opponent's advantages are generally poor information, poor cultivation, poor status, and even personality strategies, etc. The situation is balanced, the game is effective, and with the advancement of the plot, information reinforcement and upgrades and other gains, readers like this kind of story. The biggest problem in this life is that the progress is pushed too fast, the game is insufficient, and the balance is chaotic. I guess it is because of the rush for updates and the poor state of the outline stage that this life feels far more rigid than the other lives. For example, a large amount of information directly reinforces the characters without effective foreshadowing, and strengthens the opponent's characters. The protagonist Lu Yang, the reader, has a God's perspective so he cannot enjoy this treatment + Goldfinger compares himself to a supermodel. This part is definitely upsetting to the readers, and the frequency of comments about patching and stacking boxes has soared. Secondly, regarding the advancement speed, in this life, the Heavenly Palace was completed, the Conferring God Technique was completed, Si Zhong was rescued, and almost all Taoist masters were opened. The final result was that the First Saint was strengthened, and Lu Yang had no key information gain (similar to the key information related to Ang Xiao, which is really useful, but the Taoist information is actually based on the personalities and personalities of these Taoist masters. It is okay not to know it Copying the interests of the first saint will make the readers feel perfunctory. And in this life, you can still predict the Taoist master accurately, which will further reduce the information gain) The benefits from a large amount of progress seem to be great, but the essence of the benefits is to make the readers happy. The big problem in this life is that the benefits seem to be great but the readers are not happy. Reinforcements and a large number of new settings have further intensified this feeling, which broke out here in the early saint and half shared gold finger. To put it simply, the plot progress management collapsed. Then there is the worst specific plot at present: the first saint and half share the golden finger, and the description of the relevant chapters is not clear enough and confusing. If the reader cannot understand the game between Lu Yang and the first saint at a glance, then this is a failure, because the reader of this book cannot read it with the meticulousness of reading Xuanjian. At present, it is impossible to understand clearly at a glance. After taking a closer look, I felt even more unhappy. Another lightning point is the introduction of Mojie and Yangmou into the Book of Hundreds of Worlds. Lu Yang's struggles and attempts are not enough. It gives readers the feeling that they have suddenly accepted this setting and have to accept the unfair game introduced by Chu Sheng. (Although the book of Hundreds of Worlds is bigger, it is poisonous to write it like this) In the end, I think the idea is still too limited. Since the offense and defense have been reversed in this life, the progress cannot be stopped. If it is certain If we want the First Sage to come back again, then let the First Sage defeat Lu Yang as the boss, reopen the First Saint's Sacrifice Road and all his strength + information and experience advantages, Lu Yang has the numerical power and cultivation advantage, introduce a new world line to allow Lu Yang to develop well + catch the First Sage + test his secrets, and finally, after the First Sage finally wins, show the number of pages and records of the Book of Hundreds of Worlds. This kind of idea can also be written. The values ​​and settings of the brainless First Saint are not as good as continuing to be an operational native. It is better to strengthen the First Saint than to weaken it to rationalize the decline/defeat of the First Saint's style. Because there are too many reinforcements, readers will be tired of reading them. The boss does not have to be invincible/undefeated/win to the end. Readers like some of Ang Xiao's plots precisely because he lost the b-square and became weaker than Lu Yang. After switching to a different character, he is still a very fierce opponent/teammate. I don't understand why the first saint must win, win, win, even in a way that harms rationality.

To be honest, I only thought this book was good after reading the plot about asking for money, especially the part about Chongguang. I have never read Xuanjian. If this part is original, then you have the ability to be platinum, just write it well, but if it is plagiarized, it is just a piece of cake

Can it be less God's perspective? The logic of inferring causes from results appears too much. It's really awkward and the logic is very far-fetched.