Sword Immortal of the Mortal World

. These three seriously hindered the author from expanding the plot!!! As follows: 1. Because of the description of the protagonist being prude and having pure love with Huang Rong, the author was unable to develop the plot with the protagonist going to various worlds to pick up girls, and the plot that could be written was cut in half. In other words, I have made love with Huang Rongchun and learned swordsmanship. The two main lines set by the author have been written. The author himself harmed himself, so why not write the plot around picking up girls? It can be seen from the Tang Dynasty that the author did not want to destroy the character, but he was too in love with the beauty, so he wrote girls in shackles and sent them to him one after another. As a result, the plot of picking up girls was not good nor bad. He wanted to start writing but couldn't.                                                                                                                                                         not but the protagonist could not take the initiative to cause trouble due to his serious character and the upgrading of force. The author does not want to follow the original plot, so there is less than half of what can be written. The author can only arrange some plots in which the original characters take the initiative to cause trouble, such as Zuo Lengchan, Li Mi of the Tang Dynasty, Bi Xuan, who come all the way to provoke the protagonist. Is there any suspense in this plot? The reader has no sense of expectation, because the author in order to make up the plot, so the plot arranged is isolated. It can neither connect the previous nor the next and has little impact on the overall plot. The meaning of this kind of isolated plot is to tell you that the protagonist came to this world to participate in a little plot. Don't say that the author didn't write this world.     3,,,,,, Moreover, the character of the protagonist is also determined. If the protagonist goes to a world of low martial arts, the plot will not be exciting or have twists and turns. 4. The author is resting on his laurels, writing too little world and plot, no new ideas and repeating old routines, Due to the above reasons, it is impossible for the protagonist to perform in the Tang Dynasty world. For example, wearing a mask, playing the role of an extraterrestrial devil and a messenger of justice, handing out a few magic arts or emperor's martial arts, stirring up trouble in the world, and then using the identity of the devil. Train the fairy and the enchantress, stage a scene where the messenger of justice sacrifices to save the girl. When the fairy sacrifices her life to feed the devil to save the protagonist, and the enchantress becomes a good person for the protagonist, and then arranges for the two of them to cooperate inside and outside, thinking that they have killed the devil and avenged the protagonist, but they take off the mask and find that it is the protagonist. If it weren't for the author's setting not being done well and the plot structure being single, there would still be many worlds that could be written, and there would be a lot of content that could be written , there is no shortage of sexy activities, and there will never be a situation where the plot can only be pieced together. There are only two worlds written in one book (Datang and The Condor Shooting), and then the last Journey to the West announced the end and repeated the routine of the previous book. You can pick up girls and upgrade, but these are incidental and never not the focus of the plot. Readers read Zhutian novels not to see the protagonist's sweet love. I'm not here to ask you to tell my protagonist what he has learned in this world and how many levels he has upgraded. What readers see is that the existence of the protagonist himself causes unpredictable plot trends in each world. This is not reflected in several worlds in this book. Just because the protagonist exists and a few people are missing, the original plot is destroyed, but the author fails to make up for it with a more vivid plot, so each world is bland. To summarize, I hope the author will organize his thoughts and focus on the next book. He will not turn the martial arts world of pleasure and hatred into a story about a girl who makes pure love in various martial arts worlds, but will write the carefree journey into a running story about me rushing to upgrade in the world of heaven.

It is recommended here to directly delete the setting of the main world, or replace it with a normal modern society, without monsters, ghosts, snakes, gods, or government officials. Just rest and relax, and then there will be female characters who have traveled from other worlds in the house (men can also work, the effect is less effective), and the protagonist will take them back to the original world to create a sense of expectation. , or change to the world of Xianxia and Wuxia. Otherwise, I feel that it will affect my performance in the later stage.

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I have long said that I would write about Fengyun first, and then Zhuxian, or Shushan, or Immortal Sword. In worlds like Journey to the West, I can no longer write it anymore. I have to write extras every day. Has the main world of Ta Ma been forgotten by the author, or have people who were chased from the main world back to the dungeon world not gone back? Author, do you really have an outline?

To be honest, I don't mind reading a harem book, but the Huang Rong described in this book is too delicate and three-dimensional, which makes people really like the character of Huang Rong. If there is another harem at this time, to be honest, I will be a little bit unable to accept it. If you want to write about a harem, you don't need to describe too much about getting along or feelings. Just simply describe how beautiful and seductive the character is, and arouse the reader's sexual desire. But if you use pen and ink to describe getting along with each other and describe the emotional basis for the heroine, so that readers can like this character because of his personality. At this time, it feels very unnecessary to let the male protagonist have a harem, because this method attracts most readers who are looking forward to a single female protagonist and simple love. Well, I'm not sure how many people have the same idea as me. Why don't you all vote? Let's see how many people want a harem and how many people want a single female protagonist?

I heard about this book a few months ago, but when I saw that the character card only had a single female protagonist, and there was no sound in the comment area, I kept it on the bookshelf refrigerated, waiting to be read👀 It wasn't until today that I saw the author stating that there is no single female protagonist, so I can start giving it a try 😠

It's no wonder that my father-in-law doesn't want to write about Zhutian. There are too many knowledgeable brothers in this well-known martial arts, and Duan's comments are full of arrogance.

I've ordered everything for nothing, but it's all unfinished!!!

The writing about the world of martial arts is very good, but after traveling back to the real world, the writing falls behind.

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