Living in a World of Swords and Magic

People mostly only see the thief stealing food, never the thief getting beaten up; the class stratification in D&D is basically unsolvable. Mages require high intelligence and literacy, two things that essentially isolate them from the lower classes.

The most valuable thing about a person is to have self-awareness. To be honest, the protagonist does not have extraordinary wisdom. He is just average among ordinary people. If we insist on writing him as having extraordinary wisdom, we can only say that he has the advantage of being a child. That makes him seem slightly better than others, but that's all there is to it.

What I find most unbearable about this book is the use of Gu worms in a world of swords and magic, and Chun Chun's supposed serious illness. Do you think this book can possibly appeal to a single audience? Speechless.

After reading, let's nitpick. First, it's too bland. I know you want to write something realistic, but what you actually portray is just a diary, one event after another, but there's no connection between the events. It's just a repetitive cycle of encountering and solving problems. Second, the presence of cheat codes and magic is too weak.

It seems to be written by a female author. I've read twenty-four chapters; every day is spent cooking, like a vacation. It could be read as a light novel, but I'm leaving now. It doesn't seem to have much to do with the title.

1. The author isn't ignorant of Dungeons & Dragons; on the contrary, he's extremely knowledgeable. His ability to describe the multiverse of the Kingdom of Heaven and the Torrian multiverse proves he surpasses 90% of authors on this subject. However, the gods and churches he depicts are very strange and awkward.

I'm a bit confused. In the latest chapter, it seems the protagonist isn't very focused on becoming stronger. Aren't there methods to become stronger? Why doesn't he learn them? Why does he just create a stone gu and run off to make money? And after creating the stone gu, doesn't he test its power on a rat or something? How can he use it in battle without practice?

Current flaws: 1: The description of the "golden finger" (a powerful, magical ability) is bland and its appearance is extremely rare. 2: The background world is said to be Faerûn, but it's actually a low-magic Western fantasy world with very little sword and magic elements. 3: To put it bluntly, it's a slow-paced farming story, but the process... Is described rather blandly.

It opened high but closed low. Seriously, this author must have started out writing medieval farming novels. A fantasy adventure world, but you're not writing about fantasy or adventure. The organization is unclear, and it feels like the author doesn't know what's attracting people to this D&D-like world. What are we looking for? We D&D readers want adventure and fantasy.

Typical yaoi/BL (Boys' Love) writing style: dragging out the pace, slow main plot development, random and haphazard depictions of the extraordinary world, and a magical world with a Gu worm? 😓 I don't understand what you mean by this?