The Fog City Monster-Hunting Journal

The author is too keen on interacting with readers. In my opinion, this is a loss of pride as a literary creator! A literati who does not have the character of a literati is not worthy of having people click on your works. So, I chose to remove this book from the bookshelf, not because I don't like it, but because the author doesn't love himself enough, which makes people lament it.

Before reading it and putting it on the shelves, there are a few serious problems that the author should pay more attention to. Smooth writing and rigorous settings are advantages, but the current setting and use of settings make mistakes similar to those of the Whispering Poetry, or even more serious. For example, the effective settings are points obtained for hunting monsters, points for hunting are decreasing, the tail of the loot is useful (later unlocking the key), and the main path/professional characteristics. These are OK, the display is greater than the explanation, and it is more natural. Invalid use refers to alchemist elements, spells, and current levels (levels). It is basically a pure explanation. Awakening multiple elements means nothing compared to Simon's two elements. Readers do not have the most basic understanding of the spell structure. This leads to the spark spell being regarded as an explosive seed rather than a natural burst of spirituality. The ring positions have the same problem. The second ring battle with Ouroboros + turning enemies into friends makes people feel vague because the readers lack basic feelings about the situation at that time. The second ring incomplete black contract vs. The protagonist with composite abilities will be difficult to read without any general expectations. (Of course, it's possible that I didn't read carefully enough, but this is the starting point. This book is a new one. I can confirm that my concentration and reading precision are definitely higher than the average level of the starting point. I really missed it. You can also consider whether there are any clearer or more impressive ideas.) If the setting is purely illustrative or does not establish basic impressions and feelings and is not used to serve the reading experience of the subsequent plot, it is obviously a relatively ineffective development. Some people like to read worldview and setting texts, but this book does not have a similar tone. I would recommend reading Shala's new book Wan Sheng Mo Mo. It is the one that I have read in recent years that uses settings most fluently and is embedded in the plot. You can learn from it. You can also read Lord of Puro. The second problem is that the driving force/character of the protagonist still needs to be polished. At present, it seems that the writing is a bit embarrassing, because it is a bit like the Lord of Mysteries but did not learn it correctly, or subconsciously imitated it but got it wrong. The essence of Klein's poor god character and character drive is that he is a person who enjoys life relatively and has relatively real material desires. He has always wanted to eat well and live well but has no money. He is particularly envious of being rich/because poverty is a bit troublesome. There is a lot written about money, income, work and spending power. This book only talks about money, but it is not rich in all aspects of money and what money means to the protagonist, so it is very empty. For example, what is the price system in this book except for houses and some food? How much does a blood vine flower normally cost? The plot of the purchase commissioned by the professor only states that the protagonist bought it through spirituality, but did not reveal whether it is possible to make some money and complete the task at a more reasonable price. If I can't write about his mood or his feelings about money. At present, the money-obsessed/poor ghost character design is quite likable, but I think the current treatment can generally be reconsidered. That is, what kind of person is the protagonist, what are his driving forces/three views, how does he conduct himself in this world, and all aspects of it reflect that this is him, not anyone else. Expand further and go back to college - the information drive line for hunting rat demons again is not clear enough. There are several links in the middle that are missing. For example, why can demon hunting be upgraded before skipping to finding a way to learn demonology - and then return to the sewers. Should we investigate the monster spawning points (are there any leveling areas outside the sewers)? Why is demonology helpful (it can be Japanese) Zhi said that the university library has information to help you understand the target of hunting, and then you encounter obstacles and professors when searching for information). Does the protagonist need to know this information to make a smooth decision? I need to get basic demonology/related books to look up - find the rat demon's fear of water and related weaknesses - the sewer is currently the best place to spawn monsters - and then enter the sewer, this will be scattered in the chapters to make it smooth. And the most important question, why does the protagonist need to upgrade? Although I can see that there is an upgrade system and readers like to read and upgrade, why does he need to upgrade? His original motivation has not yet been shown. Is he a faction that wants to go home or a conservative faction that wants to protect himself and control his destiny? Is he a enjoyment faction that protects the weak lawful good faction within the scope of his ability? Or is he a hapless faction that has to solve countless crises? At present, it seems that it may be from the walking unlucky guy group. Now that it has been put on the shelves, is it necessary to let readers know initially why the protagonist is a group-killing engine and the reason/conjecture that he will always be a group-killing engine in the future? Finally, the unit/unit of the story, the main line, the branches, the truth of fate, etc. Are the main branches, which must be exciting. The sub-line and the rich world view/character design/interpersonal relationship of the protagonist must be a little ingenious. It is best to be interesting/embed a small foreshadowing of the main line, or simply make the readers happy. This work is very complicated, but it has already been put on the shelves. You need to have basic ideas and frameworks, otherwise it will easily collapse after 800,000-1.2 Million words, and it will go crazy if it reaches 600,000 words faster and cannot be written anymore. In general, it is food that does not collapse. I think it is not a big problem if you do not randomly add high-quality products. There is hope for Wanding or Gao Qianding, but it depends on whether there is growth in the future, otherwise there is a high probability that high-quality products will be launched. Personal opinion, hope it helps.

Why are all the heroines female? Why do I need to charge after listing? Why is your book full of words? (｡•́•̀｡)

It looks unreal, and I feel like the author has never been exposed to what he wrote.

This is the first time a newcomer has written a book, and some immature parts are still being improved. I'm glad that so many friends like it! ! The elements of this book are very complex, and a lot of content is stitched together (supernatural, gods, demons, whatever you stitch together). I hope that on this basis, I can bring you a good story that is interesting enough! The early development may not be as fast as expected because the world view is relatively large. Please forgive me. I will definitely write better and better! There have been a lot of friends who have read books recently. I hope you can read more, because after the revision of the starting point, reading is a hard target. The author is here to ask everyone for help! I wish all my friends good luck, peace and happiness, and make a fortune in 2026!

It's well written, and it's similar to my experience as a witcher. It's just a little flawed. There are too few witches. At that time, we were playing with witches every once in a while.

It's fully booked now, let's talk about your evaluation of the work Overall evaluation: Liangcao Big advantages: The writing is good, the writing is smooth, and it is very comfortable to read. The small advantage is that there are illustrations in the book, which are quite novel Let's talk about some flaws of the plot from my personal perspective: 1. Insufficient motivation: The author initially set up a short-term dilemma for the protagonist : an orphan, unable to pay the rent, and lack of money. That's why the protagonist is motivated to join the demonology professor's research group. But what happens when this problem is solved? What motivation does the protagonist have to continue hunting monsters? Although becoming stronger is a reason, why does the protagonist pursue becoming stronger? What does he think about strength? For example, to control one's own destiny, to protect others, and so on. The author basically didn't explain this. 2. The protagonist's character is thin: I particularly don't like the way of labeling, but so far, when I think of Byron, I basically can't think of what characteristics he has and what kind of person he is. Is he good or evil? What to pursue? What are the disadvantages? I basically don't know this. This is actually a problem with motivation, that is, the author lacks portrayal of the protagonist's inner world, reducing the protagonist to a ruthless plot driver. Byron's character is not even clear to the team members. I think it would be better for the author to appropriately include the protagonist's emotional fluctuations and the protagonist's views on various events. 3. The relationship between the protagonist and the Demon Hunting Note: The protagonist has complete trust in the Demon Hunting Note, and will even take the initiative to ask questions about the Demon Hunting Note, but why? The author has obviously seen Mysterious Resurrection, so even if Yang Jian needs parchment in Mysterious Resurrection, he is still wary of parchment. Even though the Demon Hunting Notebook may be an item that the protagonist can completely trust in the setting of this book, the reason must be explained, right? Facing something like the Demon Hunting Notes with mysterious origins and outrageous effects, the protagonist completely trusts it as if he was hypnotized. Is this reasonable? Either the Demon Hunting Notes must give the protagonist a reason to trust it in the early stage, or the protagonist should not trust the Demon Hunting Notes unconditionally. 4 Let's discuss the issue of witchers in the next paragraph. The protagonist is the last witcher. The term witcher is mentioned repeatedly, and it is also very special (for example, you can take multiple paths at the same time), but the protagonist has never taken the initiative to find relevant clues about witchers, such as university libraries and church databases. What, the only clue is found by the protagonist through automatic pathfinding by generating electricity. It is found passively. In fact, it is completely possible for the protagonist to investigate the clues about the witcher before the automatic pathfinding section. However, I hit a wall. Anyway, I went to the university library several times before. I mentioned it by the way at that time, and the impression would be much better. Then there is the issue of settings. Some settings are purely nouns, such as the alchemist's spell structure. The author has never explained what the structure is. So much so that the scene when Byron understands the spell and defeats the professor is like the protagonist's halo explosion. This setting is not a setting that needs to be hidden. Simon can explain it when he is enlightened. However, as of Chapter 137, the author has not explained the details of constructing the alchemy formula. Generally speaking, the author can carefully polish the plot logic and details. Based on the writing style of this book, I think it is not difficult to produce a high-quality book. Now it seems that there are only more than 100 book readers who have subscribed to it. I think the quality is still relatively low compared to the book. I voted for three monthly votes to support the author. I hope this book can be launched normally.

But what is this real adaptation? Have you ever been a demon hunter?😏

The traditional Western fantasy novel that incorporates many elements of steampunk style is different from the fun Western fantasy novels that have been common in the past year or two with fun-loving male protagonists or frequent plot jokes. In my opinion, the latter is just a "light novel" that highlights the author's writing style based on the Western fantasy background. It is a more classical-style Western fantasy novel. The articles tend to follow the grand worldview background and extraordinary elements of mysticism, focusing on a growth route from "nothing" to "something" and continuous exploration in the "unknown". This work written by a newcomer also shows the shadow of books such as "The Lord of Mysteries" and "Mumbling Poems". As a "foreigner", the male protagonist quickly adapted to his new identity after his soul traveled to another world, relying on the memories that remained in his mind and the inexplicable "gold finger" that appeared in "Demon Hunting Notes" to solve the crisis. The "gold finger" with certain intelligence is the "dark blue plus point" to accelerate the male protagonist's growth. " System is also the "guide" who guides him to explore the extraordinary system and the truth of the world. This growth method, which is not an easy numerical improvement, can make the "Western Fantasy" elements purer. The words that appear from time to time in the notes are not only a record and supplement of knowledge, but also a kind reminder for the male protagonist's subsequent actions. After the male protagonist takes back the relics of the "original owner" of the notebook and fills up the golden finger, the plot of communicating with the church members through the air as the "Lord of Babel" also reminds me of the famous "Lord of the Bathroom". To be honest, the key is to imitate the styles and elements of many works. How to better integrate and apply it, and as a newcomer, the author can be said to have done his best in this regard. The continuous daily communication and plot setting discussions with readers at the end of the chapter also ensured the stickiness of fans and the enthusiasm of book friends to follow, which is rare for a newcomer. At the same time, the author's research on Western literary classics and his frequent use in the book also won my heart. In my opinion, for a Western fantasy novel with a pure style, some "literary youth" content and writing methods are indispensable. The former enhances the mystical color of the work and is more in line with the readers' curiosity about the "unknown" in the book, that is, the male protagonist himself constantly ridicules the "riddler" behavior of taking notes; while the latter uses the "mysterious and mysterious" language characteristics to describe how the world will be different in the Victorian era and under the shadow of extraordinary powers, and to shape what kind of life chapters ordinary people and extraordinary people living in such situations will compose, and the way of [group portrait] is also among them!

It's okay, but the design feels a bit heavy. The author's invisible hands are too obvious. Whether it's events or the rewards the protagonist gets, they are always related to each other. The events are also one after another, with no breathing space. As soon as the previous one ends, the next one comes, as if the event is pushing the protagonist away. The protagonist seems to have a certain degree of freedom, but in fact he does not. It's better not to frame it too rigidly, with tightness and looseness, and give some time or daily routine as a buffer between events.