The Sun Clan’s Immortal Path

The strength of family-based novels lies in their persistence. Qinglian's writing style is actually lacking in many aspects; it's good at the beginning but not so good later. However, its success remains consistent because, besides the advantage of writing first, the bigger reason, as the author stated, is that it delves into the immortal realm.

Sun Xiaochuan, the number one prodigy of the Sun family, steps forward!

Your fifty-year advancement by one level is unreasonable! How long is the lifespan of a Foundation Establishment cultivator? At this rate, by the time the protagonist dies, they won't even have reached the late Foundation Establishment stage.

It took the protagonist more than fifty years to reach the fourth level of Foundation Establishment, but he seemed to have accomplished the fifth and sixth levels in just ten years. Isn't this timeline quite unreasonable? And how could Sun Mingzeng be so much slower, given his consistently strong and exceptionally superior dual spiritual roots? There's no reason for him to be so much slower in the Foundation Establishment stage.

The writing is terrible. The author has little substance; just write normally. Don't misuse idioms and allusions; it's superfluous and makes you a laughingstock. For example, to describe a powerful family, just say "powerful," not "impressive." "Impressive" describes value, not strength.

The protagonist had already broken through to the third level, experienced spiritual vein feedback, and possessed dozens of mid-stage second-tier pills that not only increased his mana but also had miraculous effects on breakthroughs. Yet, after 50 years of intensive cultivation, he only just broke through to the fourth level, while the dual-spiritual-root character, after 50 years, was still at the third level. The writing was utterly nonsensical.

After the Nascent Soul Ceremony, another round of invitations is needed for the 800th birthday celebration. Holding each one is equivalent to collecting resources from the Song Kingdom's cultivation world. The lifespan of the Nascent Soul stage and the Deity Transformation stage needs to be specified. It's recommended to make these details more reasonable; otherwise, with each major realm having nine levels, lifespans simply won't be enough to cultivate to the next major realm.

I mentioned my natal magic weapon twice during the Golden Core stage, but after reaching the eighth level, I haven't mentioned it again. As for the Phoenix Stone and natal magic weapons, if you don't want to write about them, don't bring up the concept. You brought it up yourself, but then never wrote about it. It's very frustrating to read.

A sect with tens of thousands of years of history vanished in an instant? And when it wasn't even that weak? They didn't even have a few ways to take others down with them? I think the other three major sects must have lost some of their high-level combat power, or at least one or two of them could have escaped if they really wanted to.

It's well-written, with no major flaws. My suggestion is to give the protagonist some opportunities, like obtaining high-level spiritual herbs in the Beast Taming Mountains. The Qi Refining stage doesn't need to be described in too much detail; the main focus should be on establishing the setting and background. The family's development after Foundation Establishment should be the primary focus.