The Sun Clan’s Immortal Path

The success of the family lies in persistence. In fact, Qinglian is not good at all aspects of writing. She may not be good at the front but not at the back, but her grades are still stable because besides the advantage of writing first, the author said that she writes to the fairy world.

Sun Xiaochuan, the number one genius of the Sun family, is on the list! ! !

It's so unreasonable for you to advance to one level in fifty years. How long is the lifespan of the Foundation Establishment stage? With such an improvement, the protagonist will not be able to reach the later stage of Foundation Establishment until he dies of old age.

It took more than fifty years for the pig's trotters to enter the fourth floor of the foundation building. It feels like ten years to complete the fifth and sixth floors. Isn't this time setting very unreasonable? Moreover, how could Sun Mingzeng be so slow? How could Sun Mingzeng be so strong and the second spiritual root is so good? There is no reason to be so slow in one foundation building period.

The writing is too poor. If you don't have much in your stomach, just write normally. Don't use idioms and allusions indiscriminately. On the contrary, it will be ridiculous. For example, to describe a family that is strong, just write strong. If you write about strong strength, it will not be useful at all. Tong, not cheap is used to describe value, not strength. For example, Sun Xunkang failed to build the foundation and died. If he is remote, he will write that he lost his life. What the hell is the life of a beautiful woman? A man who is dozens of years old, what a shitty life he has? There are many more like this. You can tell at a glance that the author has no ink at all, and he also likes to pretend that people use words indiscriminately, which is disgusting.

The protagonist himself has already broken through the third level, and has experienced the feedback from the spiritual veins. He also has dozens of mid-level second-level elixirs, which not only increase his mana, but also have miraculous effects on breakthroughs. As a result, the protagonist has spent 50 years practicing day and night and has just broken through the fourth level. The dual spiritual roots are still on the third level after 50 years. It is written like a kind of feces.

After the Nascent Soul Ceremony, a wave of invitations are needed for the 800th birthday. Holding one is equivalent to collecting the resources of the Song Dynasty. The lifespan of the Nascent Soul stage must be explained, and the lifespan of the Divine Transformation stage must be explained. It is recommended to make it more reasonable. Otherwise, each major realm is nine levels, and the lifespan is simply not enough to cultivate to the next realm.

I mentioned the natal magic weapon twice during the golden elixir period, but it turned out that even at the eighth level, I never mentioned it again. The Phoenix Stone is a natal magic weapon. If you don't want to write about it, don't bring up this concept. I mentioned it myself, but never wrote about it. It felt very uncomfortable to read.

The sect that lasted for tens of thousands of years was gone in one fell swoop? And when it's not very weak? Don't you even have a few means to support others? I think the other three major sects must have lost a little bit of their high-end combat power, or if they just want to escape in this realm, they can only escape one or two, right? Why do you feel like every time you go there, people are dying, but you don't feel any pain here? I think when you reach a certain level, you won't be beaten to death so easily. Besides, you don't have any formations, so it's not like you can't run away. Just a personal opinion.

It's well written, not too sinister. I just want to say that you can give the protagonist some opportunities, such as obtaining high-level elixirs in the Beast Control Mountains. There is no need to write too much about the Qi training realm. The main thing is to explain the setting and background. The development of the family after the foundation is the main content.