The Qinghe Immortal Clan

Overall the writing is pretty good. Just a few questions: 1. Even if the character builds a foundation, he still has no psychological progress after forming a core, and he is "hurried" and "stuck" in various ways. 2. He practices too fast and is already at the same speed as the geniuses of the sect. No matter what adventures you encounter, in the final analysis, it is just sufficient resources. Even if 4 Lingen has no worries about resources, he should not be so fast. Otherwise, large sects should be full of such "second-generation resource-based geniuses". If you have 4 spiritual roots to break through to the big realm, you should at least use more than half of the life span of the current realm. It is already very fast, but in the article, you can break through less than 1/3, which is the treatment of Tianlinggen. 3. Lack of experience makes some behaviors and systems very unrealistic, and there is no way to change this for the time being. The author writes very carefully, but there are still areas that can be improved.

The whole book felt really bland, even the Beast Tide chapter, and I didn't feel ups and downs at all while reading it. The writing is poor This book only interested me in the plot between the protagonist and Feng He, Huo Feng and Xia Mo. The heroine is still careless. Anyway, I have no feelings for Huang Siyuan. I prefer Xia Mo and even Huo Feng from the demon clan would be accepted as the heroine!

1. First make sure that the book is not bad, first make sure that it is not unfinished, and stick to your ideas. The story is full of details, has a strong sense of substitution, and is readable 2. Secondly, increase the progress appropriately, highlight some contradictions, and give the protagonist's family some expression. , For example, when you become stronger, you will have a certain courage, have more say, develop independently, etc. 3. Furthermore, there are some high-level spiritual objects received by the secret realm in the early stage. But I hope to stick with it

Overall, the writing is good, there are no big hooks, there are some adventures, the treasures obtained by the protagonist are reasonable, and there is no invincibility. The family literature is top-notch, and no protagonist is successful. The whole family is building a foundation and slowly rising. Shangzong's rule over the family was reasonable. The author continues to write. This kind of book needs millions of words to become a masterpiece. If you write a book like this, only old readers will follow it and read it.

It's quite interesting, especially the hardships and growth of the protagonist. I also read other people's family cultivation novels, but most of them are geniuses and I don't think they are very interesting. Either they have difficulty finding a backer, or they find a bigger backer. In comparison, this one is still worth reading.

Congratulations on the excellent product! So inspiring! ! ! By the way, I would like to recommend my little book.

After reading Xuanjian Immortal Tribe, I wanted to find my favorite fairy novels. I found this book on the recommendation of Qinghu live broadcast room. It is a good book. The first few dozen chapters are good. The writing is smooth and the rhythm is good. It does not have the bitterness and hatred. Nowadays, the pace of life is too fast and the pressure is high. This kind of book gives people a very eye-catching feeling. It advances slowly and unobtrusively. It is very good and highly recommended!

This is a new picture, more accurate

Let's experiment and see if it's really eight o'clock?

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Playful Fire Phoenix🤪

This picture is so beautiful😎

I hope all fellow Taoists will support me in this new journey... Keep moving forward and meet at the top!

The more I read, the more outrageous it becomes. What's the point of writing this heroine? Just to give the protagonist an extra bottle of oil? Also, this family feels like the male protagonist is spending money to support the family, and why? I feel like the male protagonist has to take care of every little thing in this family. At the end, the male protagonist has to personally find and distribute every boiled egg. Do you think it is reasonable? Why does the male protagonist have to be the leader of the clan and an ancestor to support the clan from behind? Isn't it good not to come out unless absolutely necessary? There are also some poisonous points. I want to write that when the male protagonist Qing Qing knew that he was a demon cultivator when he killed Du, he still insisted on blowing up his truck. Did he really think that the Song family would not be exterminated? Even if you want to write about a protagonist who is sure to kill him and make him die, you should understand that if you want to show off, you shouldn't talk about it after you control the other person's life. If you really want to write something in-depth, my suggestion is to stop the heroine when she reaches the golden egg, and finally die in the hero's arms after her longevity is over.

It feels like this book is just written under the guise of a family cultivator, and it has nothing to do with it. Except for the beginning of the Qi training period and the foundation building, the family was reluctant to give more support, so they gave some spirit stones. The protagonist has always been the same as poverty alleviation, or more accurately, he has the same personality as Lao Mazi. Apart from pulling a big family, I haven't seen the clansman's support for it. The protagonist has a little help, but it feels like the whole family doesn't have to do anything. They are all waiting for the protagonist to feed them, and all the secret techniques, foundation-building pills, and pill-forming spiritual objects are delivered to their mouths. The whole family is a waste snack, and no one relies on themselves. The protagonist says that he can't help the family all the time, while sparing no effort to move things home. I don't understand what the author wants to write? It would be great if the protagonist could just join a big sect or become a casual cultivator without any worries. No one would bother him and he would be worry-free. I feel so angry and suffocated when I see it!

The most awesome thing about this book is that it almost turned into a god. The heroine actually ran away, and another junior sister came. Harmoniously, it became multiple heroines. They were not widowed, but the author forced a harem. I admire it.

Although the novels here are not very popular, they are already better than 90% of the immortal novels on the Internet. But friend, you have to believe that a masterpiece will never go unread. I feel that after the author has finished writing about the human world, there is no need to continue writing. Further writing is a waste of his own energy and time, and his own body is also very important. It may take you a day to write two chapters, but others will finish them in two minutes, which is not necessary. The common problems of family cultivation novels are the same, so not many people read them: 1. After A is upgraded, B is upgraded, then C and so on, the plot is very clichéd. 2. The whole family relies on the protagonist to guide them. Many people are like machines and have no soul. 3. The plot is too bland and has no spark. Although there are many cool articles, if you look carefully you will also find its shining points. I feel that the novels here are mostly like recording running accounts, such as the Nascent Soul Ceremony, weddings, etc. The novels here appear many times, and they are a bit watered down. As a result, the novel here is 6 million words long, and the protagonist has not reached the upper realm. The plot is bloated, not concise, nothing thrilling, and nothing impressive. A person cannot see what he looks like. When writing articles, it's easy not to see your own problems. Six million words is already a long, long, long, long, long, long, long time. If there were no new ideas and the way it was written in the human world, not many people would actually read the chapter on the spiritual world. It just changed the map. The protagonist and his two wives went to the spiritual world, and together with the master, they connected to the human world. They brought their family members with them to the human world, and then they broke through the realm of refining, integration, Mahayana, etc. In fact, there are already many plots like this, so why bother. Finally, I hope that every author will pay attention to his health. It's okay. It's impossible to do anything. Maybe stop and rest for a while, or read again what you have written before. Maybe you can see a lot of your own problems, and then you can improve yourself and create another masterpiece.

To be honest, for me personally, this novel is indeed very good. It is rare to see a novel about cultivating immortals that is not so dark. The human race is relatively united. The sects such as Xiaoyao Sect are serious sects. The most impressive characters should be Feng He and Huo Feng. Senior Brother Li and Senior Sister Bai are also very well portrayed. They are relatively poor in words. I don't know how to describe them. I have also subscribed to about a thousand chapters. I read this book last year. I noticed Ascension two days ago, so I reviewed it again. The chapters I subscribed to in the past were all good, but what to say later, I was quite disappointed. A good family cultivating immortality novel has turned into a stallion novel. Basically, the main female characters who appear are in pairs of cultivating couples. I don't know if others can accept it. Anyway, I find it very awkward. Moreover, the wording is very repetitive. Interested readers can search the entire text for the words "It's a pity". I think one of the major flaws of this article lies in the female characters, which make people look very unnatural: 1. Huang Siyao's appearance is very abrupt. To be honest, there is no emotional line with the male protagonist, and it is the product of compromise; 2. Song Qingyu's portrayal is not pleasing, you always I can see the shortcomings of selfishness and willfulness in her; these two characters are nothing without Song Qingming; 3. I don't know how the character card of Xia Mo was judged, it's just like that, especially the part where she made an agreement with the male protagonist to have a baby and help, it was the most inexplicable, although later The lead is the Fire Phoenix Line of Northern Xinjiang, and later it is explained that it can detect the secrets of the sky, but the essence is to deliberately use the male protagonist. The two inexplicable pacts make people feel uncomfortable, and they always have a feeling of superiority. I don't understand what the author portrays Song Qingming is thinking in his heart; 4. I don't know how to describe Li Xuanyi. Like Song Qingyu, he is a giant baby who will not grow up. Huang Siyao is not disgusted with this kind of people. She is pure ntr. There are too many things and the emotional line with the protagonist is too abrupt. Lingxuzi asked you to take care of her, did you take care of her in bed? 5. Fire Phoenix is ​​very good. I like it every time it appears. Why didn't I finish it in the end because I skipped the plot in the later stages of Yuanying? 6. Bai Yuxian is the best. The heroine should be given to her. She is relatively mature and stable, but in the end, does she have to double cultivate with the male protagonist? Isn't it awkward that these three people have to be called husband? It's really better to decide on the outline and the heroine from the beginning. There are many heroines but I can't understand them. Hey, come on, author. I found it difficult to stick to this book after I ascended. After all, I read it a second time, and I couldn't express some of my inner feelings. After all, I spent money to read it. I hope the performance of this book can pick up, and at the same time, I also insist on writing. This is the Internet age. Some people like it, and some people will hate it.

Later, Yuanying monks were really inferior to dogs. In the later stage of Yuanying, they were everywhere.

I talked for a long time. Only the last two pages are the text.

The author, I have seen this all the way to this point, and I would like to express my thanks for your hard work🙏. I won't follow you in the spiritual world anymore, sorry.

Three years later, I finally gave birth to a son. Congratulations to Lao Song for getting rid of the title of Queenless Immortal Clan. It's not easy! 😭😭😭

It's full of fairy-tale flavor, and I couldn't stop watching it. The protagonist survives in the cunning and deceitful world of immortality step by step, and leads his family to the top step by step. Forgive me for my lack of words, it's so good! Ambrosia! ! !

This chapter also hints at the majesty of the Ancestor of the God of Transformation

The poor ancestor finally broke through and became a god

Opening the anti-theft chapter will increase revenue by one-third. Many people are reading it elsewhere 🙂

After so many years of updating settings in Xianxia novels, the realm lifespan has changed. Which one do you think is more reasonable? [Realm Lifespan]: Conventional setting (other) Qi training period: 120 years (150) Foundation period: 240 years (300) Golden elixir period: 500 years (800) Nascent Soul period: 1200/1300 years (1500) Incarnation period: 3000 years (rarely changes)

It can be read, and skipping ten chapters does not affect or leak information 🙂

The setting of the spirit world is a bit unreasonable. Even a god can live for about 5,000 years. Refining the void requires a catastrophe every 1,000 years. On average, it only survives five or six times. Doesn't it mean that the average life can only be five or six thousand years? It's not many years longer than becoming a god. Refining the void should be set to a calamity of 3,000 years, with an average lifespan of 15,000 years. Hedao should be set to a calamity of 8,000 years, with an average lifespan of 40,000 years. In the Mahayana, a calamity of 20,000 years is expected to live an average of 100,000 years.

This book was well written before Yuan Ying, but it got me in trouble at the end. I'm still reading it, but I just saw that it has an ending now.