Swallowed Star: Zhang Haobai

In the Earth arc of Swallowed Star, using fists is too ruthless. Fighting monsters with swords and spears is more efficient and less strenuous. A sword can penetrate a monster's neck, stomach, or rear. How can you fight with your fists? Monsters are several meters to tens of meters long; you need several times, even ten times, the strength to kill them.

The Genius Battle doesn't test everyone's comprehension of the laws, does it? Why does the protagonist's Genius Battle emphasize physical strength so much? And it's definitely not some kind of secret technique enhancing physical strength, because it mentions using the Myriad Spirit Purple Blood Essence to increase physical strength, and there are also instances of increasing physical strength in the Genius Battle.

The Earth arc is currently the best fanfiction, detailed and realistic. The leveling up is reasonable. However, the plot feels a bit thin after entering space. It would be helpful to create several longer dungeons during the cultivation quests, and to develop more detailed stories and plots for each.

The protagonist's comprehension of the laws is too slow. Although it is not low, the battle of geniuses is about to begin. If the protagonist is not given a cheat code soon, it will be too late. Even if he does not defeat Bolan, he should at least enter the Primordial Secret Realm.

The original novel's seventh chapter, chapter 28, "Endless Geniuses," describes the Genius Battle as follows: Everyone possesses the same physical attributes. Regarding the protagonist's cultivation technique, if you argue it enhances his understanding of the laws, then I think it's fine. However, the later the Genius Battles unfold, the more something seems off.

Sigh, the writing went off track. The story in the Thunder World arc reached its peak. In the primordial universe, instead of comprehending the laws, the author kept exhausting all their energy cultivating the so-called Seed of Law. I had a feeling the author couldn't continue, because this plot development would only create increasing conflicts with the original story.

Personally, I don't think there's anything inherently wrong with Zhang Haobai's character. Many people criticize him for mindlessly flattering Luo Feng and deliberately helping him awaken as a psychic, but I think he no longer sees himself as a villain.

On one hand, they don't want to be enemies with Luo Feng, but on the other hand, they still hire people to kill Luo Feng according to the original story. Isn't that insane? And they even have the audacity to claim they're afraid of affecting Luo Feng's growth...

Let me share my thoughts on fanfiction. Generally speaking, it requires a well-designed, interconnected plot, and at least superficially plausible logic. Using a system-based system requires clear limitations, conditions, or costs; it can't be too easy to level up, otherwise the power balance will quickly become unbalanced.

Of all the fanfiction about devouring, yours is the most original and not bad either. I hope the author will write more about the role of clones and amplify this overpowered ability.