The Thunderous Starry Sky of Devouring

After obtaining the Locke Divine Water, he insisted on giving Luo Feng 40% of it. In the end, Luo Feng insisted on not taking so much and only took 20%. This wasn't a big deal, since the three of them came out together and supported each other. It's just that his 40% was indeed a bit too much; he didn't even consider giving Hong a share.

I've read most of your first two books, but not all of them. How to put it... Maybe it's because your writing style is a bit pretentious, like you're trying to use a cheat code but not too much, but it feels like you're taking your pants off to fart—a weird, pointless cheat code that's very useful in the early stages but seems unsustainable in the later stages, yet somehow recovers from it…

I don't understand why your cells, when hungry, shouldn't be absorbing cosmic energy using your guiding techniques instead of roasting some meat to replenish themselves. You're really trying to bend the rules.

What kind of nonsense is this? Five major human corporations' branch offices are vying for geniuses? What kind of geniuses haven't they seen? Do they even need to fight over them?

That's ridiculous. If there's a female lead, why label it as having no female lead?

Dude, write this book carefully, don't abandon it!

A mere few ninth-tier cosmic-level slaves cost one Hunyuan unit? That's utterly shameful. One Hunyuan unit is equal to one trillion cosmic coins, and one cosmic coin is equal to 3300 Qianwu coins. As for Black Dragon coins, I'm too lazy to calculate. The author should go back and check how much a slave cost in the original novel, then do the conversions correctly before writing the book!

Write it in more detail and make it more vivid; Zhang Haobai's early stages were quite good. Later on, stop having him cultivate all ten laws simultaneously; focusing solely on the Lightning Law would be much better, and maybe explore other paths as well.

The beginning was passable as a lighthearted read, but the last few dozen chapters were completely unreadable. Many settings were completely different from the original work; for example, the initial universe became some kind of "three strange and mysterious realms of the primordial universe." Utterly speechless.

I don't understand why your immortal being has a corpse after death. In the original story, a corpse only appears when the soul is destroyed; when divine power is annihilated, only treasures remain. You're not absorbing anything from this.