At This Hogwarts, There Is No Chosen One

The last paragraph is a bit spoiler After reading it for more than 10 years, this book ranks first among my HP fans, and I will give you all 5 monthly passes! The story is very imaginative. It was the first time I saw that the prophesied savior was killed by Voldemort more than ten years ago, and Voldemort directly won. This beginning is very attractive. The writing is great, it is no longer a children's story, but a very realistic war era. The plot concept and character creation are very realistic. Why I killed Harry that night, what happened, and the reasons behind it are very interesting to me. The students experienced escape from the beginning, and they gradually became mature. Each one of them was a little adult, and everyone wanted to work hard to get better. I read the book reviews before reading it, and some of them said it didn't want a female protagonist. Why should there be a female protagonist, not Hermione and so on? Maybe everyone thinks that HP fans are all her, and they are tired of seeing it. But the portrayal of Hermione in this book is particularly good. To borrow from a chapter review, "Without those plot jokes from the early years, and without her two useless men, how powerful she would have become." From the moment she appeared in this book, I felt the charm of her personality, especially the scene of escaping from the school at the end. What impressed me deeply was entering the sea and changing the ship and killing the couple in front of everyone, especially the second one, which gave me a strong visual impact. The ending is a pity. There is still a lot that can be written. The author is too tired to write, but I still hope to update the extra chapters of this book occasionally. I personally like to read fan fiction, and I am not so interested in original fantasy works, but judging from your writing style in this book, I am looking forward to your new book Finally, I wish you better and better results in your next book 🤭

Some people say it's not fun enough, it's too depressing, there's no heroine, no breather, that's what I like, the author ignores them, it's good now! I love big scenes that unfold slowly!

The exiled Hogwarts on the carriage, and Harry Potter who died at the beginning, opened up a completely unexplored field in the field of fan fiction. In a normal world view, a certain magical Hogwarts describes the daily life of students to its peak. In the abnormal timeline, Hogwarts without a savior makes the confrontation between adult wizards very realistic. Both books gave me a feeling of being better than the original. The HP fanfics that I have read that expand the fields of transfiguration, blood, magic, magic, transfiguration, alchemy and other fields are all at a disadvantage. Either the strength level cannot be grasped, or Voldemort and the plot progress cannot be grasped, or the world view can only be copied from the original work. The gap is huge, which makes me think about other fanfics in the future and how can I continue to read them.

The Luna Party and Hermione Party are too outdated. I am directly LilyParty

The Triwizard Tournament has come to an end, and I always feel like something is missing. Because I really don't have time to help pull it all over again, so I will make some suggestions based on my impressions. First of all, the character conflicts are not handled very well. The overall feeling of the Triwizard Hegemony is that of children playing house. It lacks practical description and is a bit superficial. The second is the handling of Voldemort. It is actually not handled well when it is divided into two. It is better to let Lao Deng explode and kill one directly. It not only creates a climax but also concentrates the crisis. It is recommended that this point must be dealt with in the next paragraph. Otherwise, it will always give people a sense of defeating the four kings and the eight kings. The pressure brought by the big boss will be directly halved. Actually, I originally imagined that this novel might turn into a multiverse melee in the later stage, but for now, it seems that it will still be a dojo in HP's screw shell. This is actually a test of skills, and the author is obviously a little tired. My suggestion is that the author can write more essays and a summary of the main plot in the later stage. The more original it is, the harder it will be to write in the later stage. Even old Martin can't get over this hurdle. I hope the author can work harder.

You tell me, if wizards have an advantage over Muggles. Why is there a confidentiality law, and who is it used to protect? Why should a world-class wizarding competition be held in a remote and uninhabited place? Isn't it better to hold it in a city? Why don't wizards just enslave all Muggles like they did house elves? No one would think they have too many slaves, right? Quite simply, the Statute of Secrecy is there to protect wizards themselves. The reason why wizards don't hold competitions in cities is because they can't do it and the Muggle government doesn't allow them to hold them. The reason why wizards don't enslave all Muggles is because they can't defeat them. In fact, you can see from this book that even though Voldemort is so powerful, he only dares to play tricks on wizards and persecute mixed-blood and Muggle wizards. Why not persecute Muggles? So advocating blood theory, for so many years, more than ten years, we have been killing all the British Muggles. Why don't we kill them? Do we not dare?

It's all subjective personal score: 7.9/10 [Die Jia, someone was so hyped when recommending the book to me, so my expectations were too high when I read it. As a result, the book was invisibly compared to other HP fans. The so-called problem is amplified, so it may be a bit offensive, so don't criticize if you don't like it] I was forced to come here by a friend. When I recommended it, it was said to be a growth group portrait article. After reading it, I felt that I was cheated, because it is completely different from a growth group portrait. In my opinion, a growth group portrait should at least be able to see the growth of others as the event progresses from the perspective of others, and it should not only echo, provide clues to, and intersect with the growth of the protagonist, but at the same time, the proportion of the story from the perspective of others should not be lower than the proportion of the story from the perspective of the protagonist. Therefore, in my opinion, this book is not a group portrait article, but a personal portrait article with a more brilliant portrayal of the supporting characters - although the group portrait means that the ultimate purpose of advancing all perspective events is to solve the difficulties faced by the main perspective now or in the future, but the goal motivation of other people's perspective and the goal motivation of the main perspective are always completely consistent, which will easily cause readers to be tired and lazy in understanding the motivation of the characters, causing people to lose interest. This is also a problem that occurs in the middle and later stages of the book. So in comparison, the treatment I prefer is [the supporting characters use their subjective initiative to use their own insights to solve the current difficulties faced by the supporting characters from their own starting points, and then the results of solving several difficulties are combined to logically promote the solution of the main perspective difficulties] In addition, I feel that this book is not a growth-oriented fanfic, at least the proportion of growth is small and can be ignored... I will talk about the specific reasons below. The opening theme of this book is novel, and the mental game of competing for students is even more impressive. The rendering of the tragic situation made the original author's emotional investment resonate far beyond that of other fans. Therefore, the opening chapter left readers with an excellent impression and raised their expectations very high. Then there is the Blizzard Mountain Villa-style werewolf killing and hunting down the mole that is interspersed throughout the early stage of the carriage line. From the hardships of the students' joy during the journey to the support of teachers' faith, from the pressure of survival from the encroaching foreign enemies to the secret instigation of rebellion by the insiders, they all created a lively and lively Hogwarts on the carriage, but also undercurrents and walking on thin ice. Among them, the plot of the Order of the Phoenix's undercover agent Huo Xiao and the French usurpation of power by Voldemort's counterattack are even more eye-catching. The IQs of both the pros and cons are on the line, and the plot of the battle of wits is intertwined. Not only is it rare to see Voldemort having such a strong sense of oppression, but the author is also able to portray Lao Dengtou in the direction of strategizing. The creation of an indistinguishable outcome between the pros and cons can be said to be quite valuable in today's era of fan fiction, so any reader who sees this will basically look forward to the author's follow-up performance. After the navigation line left the professors in the early and mid-term, the event triggered and entered the mode of a road movie, but the unit plot also has quite outstanding aspects. However, except for the tearing up of the contract, the plot of the struggle on the Witch Level did not intersperse well with Hogwarts on the sea. It is a pity here. At the same time, it feels that the plot on the sea ended a bit abruptly. I don't know if it is my illusion, but I always feel that the author may have changed the outline and deleted the content... The mid-term teaching venue was moved to Durmstrang on the shore, and the protagonist met Grindelwald. Logically speaking, I thought the author would slow down the pace after such a violent toss and leave a regular development period for the protagonist to allow readers to digest and integrate the information obtained in the early stage. But big events like the Arctic expedition and the Triwizard Tournament followed closely behind. It is true that the plot is still better than other novels, with Barty's vicious serial scheme and Hermione's lurking MVP, but it can also be seen that the author has begun to show fatigue in the plot processing: the plot of the Arctic maze and the ghosts wearing invisibility cloaks through the wall and petrified have solid loopholes, the design of the competition events and Voldemort's arrangement in the school are gradually sloppy, and the emotional incitement of hanging the pure-blood cub is too superficial compared to the early stage... This kind of sloppiness and ingenuity coexist is really strange. Although it can be filled with reasons such as Voldemort's hope that Jon will win the game to complete the plan and the second setting, the decline in perception caused by the interruption of flow caused by the drama during the reading process is also inevitable. All in all, there are no major problems with the plot structure of the first half of the book. The compact plot promotes events, the fierce and exciting conflicts of the game of wits, and the defense of freedom and rights in order to save the nation. Both the protagonist and the villain have done their best from their perspective. This is the reason why this book is a high-quality book, and it is also the reason why it can attract readers in the early stage. But success is also a failure, and the reason why my perception of the book in the second half of the book declined seriously is that these three elements were not well balanced in the later period. The biggest reason why it failed to achieve balance, or even be said to be somewhat serious, is that the author added an unlimited hook to the protagonist in the middle and late stages that should never have been added: [Phoenix Animagus] This is also the crux and failure that hurts the overall perception of the entire book the most. Phoenix, a deactivated group that returns to the city, can flash AOE when entering, can be fully restored in one second as a wet nurse, and is a long-range strategic missile that can be resurrected directly when it is resistant to damage. There are two directly in the protagonist's camp. Who in the hostile camp in this game is not allowed to call him a "shit mastermind"? Before that, it didn't matter how the protagonist's ring was against the sky. Because no matter how powerful the ring is, it is still limited by the protagonist's total magic power or the total amount of pre-storage. Although it is a bit supermodel, it is not a big problem. After all, there is still the fear of insufficient firepower! But the appearance of Phoenix directly broke the most basic balance of the camp's combat power. This bird's ability greatly improves the fault tolerance of the strategy. Want to protect people? When I insert the hair, I can locate it and send it when I encounter danger. Can't beat it? The teleportation slipped away. Accidentally dying? It's okay, I can still be cute after being resurrected... This completely eliminates the depressive feeling caused by the struggle between black and white forces in the first half of the book, which was created with the bloodline class theory that destroys human nature - no matter how serious the situation is, Phoenix can save his life! Yes, everyone knows that in the story, the protagonist will not really die when he shouldn't. But if your narrative tension, the excitement of the plot, and the excitement of the story all rely on readers to spontaneously blur the concept of "the protagonist is immortal" when reading, then isn't the existence of the Phoenix Animagus equivalent to sacrificing the perception and cutting off one's arms? I don't even know if the author was so overwhelmed by his writing that he added such a setting to prevent him from accidentally killing the protagonist. Because of the existence of hexagonal plug-ins like Phoenix, the content and significance of the battle of wits have been greatly reduced, and the suppression of salvation has also made people lose their sense of substitution. Only the events are still dense - but even the part that is supposed to be the climax of the plot is the revelation of where the other Voldemort came from. Compared with the previous article, there are too many ups and downs, which makes the reading experience here infinitely like a step-by-step, running account of confronting the original text for the sake of confronting the original text. In this case, I think it is not a big problem that in such a cruel world, few acquaintances have died or the relationship between Ma and Wu is not dealt with in detail. (Of course I love these characters, but serving the plot is their job, so as long as the plot is suitable, I will accept the death of my favorite characters). Although I know that this may be due to the author's poor condition in the later stage and the multiple revisions of the outline, I still can't help but feel extremely sorry for the story that was finally presented. In general, it opens high and goes low, but there are flaws and advantages. At present, HP fans generally have the problem of homogeneous themes, so the author should be encouraged to boldly try new themes and dare to break out of the Hogwarts framework and choose to write stories in the larger European wizarding world. At the same time, it can also be felt that the author is trying his best to present this story to everyone. Maybe the result of dancing in shackles is not satisfactory, but I still wish the author to keep moving forward! ! ! So can the extra chapter be updated?

Voldemort's concept of pure-blood supremacy can really establish a pure-blood supremacy constitution. I have doubts. As for how the twenty-eight pure-blood families in the UK can support this system, civilians and mixed-blood wizards must be the absolute majority. The division, enslavement, discrimination and oppression of classes with extraordinary power is simply crazy. This is not how society goes back. Although no one mentions the War of Magical Nations, I think the British Ministry of Magic is like this. Any outside force can easily dismantle it.

Make the protagonist handsome (no)?

Can Voldemort defeat Dumbledore? The original boss can only make trouble from behind, how can he be so awesome? Voldemort's strength is too low! !