The Celestial Serpent of the City

Come on, author, your work, whether it's Juggernaut or later The Crown, is very good, but you have to be faster, so that you can be popular. When you are popular, you have motivation, it is not easy to be unfinished, and you are more popular, forming a virtuous circle. 🎁🎁🎁

How many manuscripts have been saved for Fatty's new book? . . Don't tell me to write one chapter a day. . . I highly suspect that it is because you never save the manuscript and write it now that it collapses in the later stages of writing. . . This time, you learned your lesson, saved some drafts and gave it some time to polish it carefully. Your writing skills can be good in conception, but why does the plot collapse every time in the middle? There is no late stage sword master at all. The hard replacement of the map in the late stage is barely finished, and the sword master in the late stage is directly killed by the outline. . . I hope the new book will improve it. . .

3 Major breaking points of this book 1. Writing about a good-for-nothing wife, slowing down the pace 2. Always writing about Guo Jia plot, and not being able to handle the middle points 3. After writing the subject of cultivating immortals for a long time, I still can't defeat the martial arts practitioner. He is like a grandson, doing whatever others ask him to do.

Already invested + chasing investment, fat man, don't let your loyal readers down!

The layout is too small. At first, I thought it was about a fairy seeking enlightenment, but later it turned into a clumsy third-rate romance drama. The key point is to keep writing. Later, it leads to the interstellar world, and a lot of black technology was mentioned. I thought it was a very advanced interstellar civilization. In the end, it is still a third-rate science fiction system in which one person's power overwhelms everything. Now it has introduced the story of family and friends. If the author wants to write a romance, he should cut it off early. The next book will be a full text of romance.

Every book is poisoned by your heroine. The key is that you have to write about the heroine in every book. You can't write the relationship well, but you still have to write it.

The emotional line is not well written, it is inexplicable, it seems to be just a love line to add to the plot, and it makes people feel alienated.

The writing is very good, but the text is wrong. A snake is a snake, and it turns into a dragon. Why don't you just change the name to Urban Tianlong? It was so embarrassing that I couldn't pick it up several times! ! ! !

Can the heroine be written to death? Only if she is written to death will it be interesting.

As proof, if this book reaches 200 pages, I will eat up my phone📱! I welcome the author's slap in the face, I guess he won't give me a chance.