A Candlelit Banquet in Kalos

To be honest, the author's basic quality may be considered good in the online literary world. There is no problem in the whole book from plot to characterization to writing. But to be honest, the reading experience is not very good. After reading about half of the current update, it is clearly a book about resistance and revenge and the exploration of ancient secrets, but the rhythm is like a daily outing of youth. Nearly one million words without a real climax. From a structural point of view, the blood-stained wedding section should be one of the biggest climaxes in the early part of the novel. But to be honest, I don't feel it at all. The protagonist team has no deep hatred and no life and death crisis, but it is not an invincible novel and is brainless and reckless. In other words, the author's writing did not exaggerate this aspect. To the point where it's not that satisfying to tell the truth, and from a niche literary perspective, the author's settings and characters are too routine. Let's take the wedding as an example. First of all, readers do not hate the red archbishop. The previous description does not portray the church or even the archbishop as a hateful villain. So this archbishop is ultimately a funny character in our hearts, and his death even made us a little sad, thinking that he could still provide some jokes or something. In this case, his death will not give the readers a refreshing feeling of getting revenge with the protagonist Then, from the perspective of the protagonist team, the entire development of the situation can be said to be under control, and it is not based on profound planning but one-way transparent hanging. So much of the plot follows the protagonist team that the readers have no emotional fluctuations at all, and there is no tension and excitement in the release of the final resolution of the incident. In fact, would it be more interesting to read if you write the tension from the girl's perspective and then let the clown fall from the sky? Finally, the arrangement of the battle is obviously a one-sided defeat. According to the previous description, the boss has a combat power of 100 plus 200 auxiliaries, the clown has 10 combat power plus 20 auxiliaries, and the red coat has a combat power of 15. Just like Liushen's adc plus mid laner plus a solo on AFK, the jungler plus an assist can level the high ground. Where would the sense of this kind of battle come from if it didn't include the show-off part that everyone loves to see? (It seems that the author is not good at describing pretentious plots) So what should have been a climax ended up being an outing involving drinking beer and singing this song. So the whole reading feels like there are no ups and downs in the plot, no danger, no pressure, no failure and no suspense. The emotional ups and downs of the characters in the plot are not dramatic, at least not in writing. Then the reader's emotions will not be mobilized. So the whole book gives people the feeling that it is a pity to discard it if it is tasteless. There is nothing wrong with it in every aspect. But it just doesn't make people want to read much. Is the protagonist team sympathetic? Let's hope they get out of this? Not really. Is the Holy See so hateful that we want to kill it quickly? Neither. Is it a slap in the face to show off during the journey? Let us experience the fun of horror? Not yet! Is the plot full of secrets? Is it irresistible? Even less so. So what am I looking at?

I'm very idle and naive, so I drew a few pictures based on my own impressions... There are too many private settings, so I kneel down first to respect... I will always be a fan of Carlos 👩🏻👩🏻, Wuhu (Although such complicated clothes are impossible to wear in a fight...🙈

I came to participate in this event after seeing the updates from the Operations Officer of "Unknown Fantasy". Currently there is only one review post by Brother Menghai MH, so I will give it a try~ "Carlos' Candlelight Dinner" is written by LV3-level writer Dawn C. It is classified as Fantasy·Epic Fantasy. Currently (at the end of January 2020), the word count is 180,000, the total number of fans is 10,000, and the total number of recommendation votes is 10,000. It was put on the shelves on January 17, 2020, with a collection of 5535 and first orders of 440, ranking 27th on the first order list of works released on that day.       ， First let me talk about Some minor issues that I haven't fully understood yet (I have read about 20 chapters so far): 1. Why does the Forbidden Holy See insist on eradicating all supernatural beings without considering any factors? For example, if the pope, pope, archbishop's children or other relatives in the Holy See are found to be supernatural beings, will they also be eliminated directly? (If the Holy See allows secular marriage) 2. Since the Holy See wants to eliminate all supernatural beings, why did the protagonists Carlos and Farinta escape easily after breaking through the city wall? (Although it has been explained that the two of them have very strong supernatural abilities, it is like cheating) At the same time, they can also easily rescue Saiteli from prison? 3. The article says that the Holy See has special means to quickly find awakened supernatural beings, but it does not explain it clearly, which is difficult to understand. In addition, the Holy See and the supernatural beings are on opposite sides, so on what basis are the Holy See's magical weapons "holy weapons" and power based? Of course, there are many advantages of this book: (1) The character situation, world background, etc. Are clearly introduced It can be said that the author has clearly explained the situation of several main characters and the world background. Helena World has four kingdoms; the story now unfolds in Vorom Kingdom, one of the four kingdoms. The ruling power of this world is The Holy See of Light (or the Forbidden See), a name that everyone must be very familiar with; among them, the Forbidden Knights have appeared (which sounds quite cool)... The three main characters who have appeared so far are as follows: Main character "Carlos": A supernatural being (just awakened), male, fifteen years old, an orphan from the orphanage in Milog Town, the leader of the supernatural organization "Candlelight".：——；       ""：，，，（）， Supernatural ability: [Translimited Perception] [Psychic Communication] (Unknown Prophet) can scan the approximate location of all supernormal beings within half of the Kingdom of Worom; suitable for assistance                                                                                                                                                                                                        "Setli" Supernatural ability: [Molecular Vibration] (2) The writing style is lively and cheerful; at the same time, it is mixed with heavy content As a fantasy work, "Carlos' Candlelight Dinner" always makes me feel like it is a light novel when I read it. It may be because the author consciously created a relaxed and lively atmosphere, such as the frequent use of modal particles such as "ah", "he" and "la": "Yes Yeah, you have to know that just a week ago he was an aspiring young man who was seriously learning to make bread with the orphanage mother and determined to become a pastry apprentice..." "What's nextYeah?... I have never climbed over the wall beforeYeah!" (Chapter 1)  "What's more, you must be able to feel it, right? Victory is a very happy thing!" (Chapter 4) "Okay, we passed smoothly..." "You must know that the leader of Candlelight is actually only fifteen years old this year, and his thoughts are very simple in many things." (Chapter 7) The author displays lightheartedness in other areas besides diction. For example, the protagonist Carlos uses his supernatural power to wash clothes in order to exercise his control ability; for example, the circus leader was embarrassed when he accepted Sedley's gift of money: "I don't need too much of that, it's just that... Ahem, it's just... Well, that's it." Etc. At the same time, the light-hearted description is also mixed with heavier content. For example, one of the main characters, Saiteli, is a member of the lower class of society. After his parents died, when he was a teenager, he cut his mouth with a knife to survive for himself and his two sisters, and became a smiling clown who always wears a twisted smile. When I read this, I did feel a little sad and contagious. (3) Consciously describe the environment and pay attention to details It can be seen from the description of the environment that the author is very careful: "The sunshine in the lush forest is covered by the dense branches and leaves of the trees, and only a vague dark halo is revealed from behind the thick green shade. The breeze sways beside the tall tree trunks, and the leaves often make huge and slow rustling sounds when they rub against each other. , The emerald green color not only covers the ground covered with dead leaves, but also sets off the quiet morning. Guests who come to the forest will definitely feel the breath of early spring from the cold wind blowing in their ears, because the bits and pieces suspended in the air are still quite cold dew" (Chapter 3). There are many details that are worthy of praise, such as the detailed description of the soldiers guarding the city gate when entering the small city of Ocasius. (4) The logic is clear, the contradictions are clear, and the main line is clear Logically, the first thing is to establish the main contradiction: in order to maintain the stability of the world, the Holy See of Light has a taboo knights to destroy all the supernatural beings discovered. The protagonist "Carlos" is a supernatural being. At the same time, the time traveler "Farin Tower" is also a supernatural being. Both of them were orphans in an orphanage. After being discovered by the forbidden knight, they fled together and established the supernatural spiritual organization Candlelight. After that, with the help of Falinta's superpower "translimited perception", he found another supernatural being who had just awakened: Satelli, the circus clown. Later, using Satley's background, the supernatural organization "Candlelight" disguised itself as a circus or theater troupe and traveled around the world. (5) Attraction or highlight For me, the appeal of "Carlos' Candlelight Dinner" mainly includes the following points: ① The protagonist's inexperience, stupidity, or cuteness (after all, they are all teenagers); ② The rich and colorful supernatural powers Forces, such as [Molecular Vibration] and [All Things Celestial Attraction], etc.; ③ The time traveler Farinta serves as an assistant to help the indigenous Carlos gradually become a qualified leader; as well as the interesting frictions and collisions in thoughts and behaviors during this process.

The author has changed from writing dark stories to mainstream routines. The protagonist is not only kind-hearted but also has a girl next to him who is suspected to be the heroine. In the past, the girl next to the protagonist could not live long and was killed by the protagonist himself.

Book title: "Carlos' Candlelight Dinner" Author: Dawn C Type: Fantasy Number of words: 170,000 words Status: Serial Content introduction The supernatural spirit has awakened! Are you going to tell your family? In order to obtain more resources and advance to the next level. Or should we keep a low profile from now on? Until it was a blockbuster. If your choice is the above two, it is the wrong choice! You can no longer see the sun tomorrow! And there is no chance to do it again. Your right choice is: hurry up, run away immediately, run as fast as you can, run as far as you can. About the author Ling Ming C is a starting point L3 writer and has 2 completed works. This is the author's third work. A supernatural being is a person with special abilities, that is, he has the "supernatural ability" to control water flow, control lightning, control fire, etc. As a homeless boy in an orphanage, Carlos was extremely panicked: he found that his supernatural spirit had awakened! Helena is an ancient world, ruled by the Holy See of Light. They firmly believe that there is only absolute order. For example, water should flow from high to low, and nobles should rule the common people. Only in this way can the peace of the world be maintained. The "foreign spirits" who change the "natural laws" are absolutely prohibited existences and belong to an obliterated species. Reincarnation also requires skills. If a supernatural being is born in another place, it can be said that he will be on the road to Qingyun from now on. But you were cast in the world of Helena by mistake. You can only hate your parents for why they gave you two legs to make you run so slowly! Loss felt extremely miserable. The ignorant boy ran desperately outside the city while dodging the arrows of the forbidden knight. From now on, he will face the pursuit of the forbidden knights. Book Review So far, there are 15 chapters in Test Poison. The following is the book review of chapters 1-15: the writing style is grand, the writing is mature, and the story is wonderful. 1. The world is grand The story begins with Carlos's escape, aiming for innovation and change. At the beginning, the supernatural beings, the Holy See of Light, and the forbidden knights are entangled in them. This may be the author's label: epic fantasy. 2. There are many interesting points and suspense So far, although the article has not many words, various interesting points and suspenses have appeared one after another, making people unable to put it down. The author does not go into too much detail, often passing by in one stroke, but he has laid a lot of foreshadowing for the development of the following chapters, leaving boundless imagination for the unfolding of the story. 3. The style is humorous and interesting. Although the content of the book begins with a description of the escape journey, the author uses relaxation and humor throughout the text. It was originally a bloody and ruthless suppression and killing, but in the author's writing, it is described like this: The Forbidden Holy See has always been committed to the "sacred" work of "erasing all supernatural beings". Originally, the two people who were being hunted had no way to escape, but they jokingly called it: self-exile. The "Candlelight" organization has been established, and various supernatural beings are already in place, waiting for you to come and start the dinner party!

What the hell label is added to this book? I change it every day in my recommendations. People who read Apocalypse Prediction also like to read this book. People who read Gamer Super Justice also like to read this book. What you wrote has little to do with the running group board game Cthulhu Dragon and Dungeons. You might as well add some cute dolphins with a two-dimensional group likeness or something.

The writing is very mature, I hope the next plot will get better and better

I actually prefer the splendor of Netheril

The Splendor of Netheril is a good dark book with little starting point. It's a pity.

How about writing novels about wizards and mages like Netheril? Not many good novels of this type have been written recently, and there are a few good ones with monthly subscriptions of several hundred. It might be better to write it in the same way as your first one.