One Piece: Uncle B Is Invincible

The character of the protagonist is not suitable for a dangerous profession, let alone wanting to be a supporting brother, which makes people feel disgusting.

The plot is too long, and the protagonist is often not online to describe other things, which makes me want to skip reading.

There's nothing exciting about it. I feel like it's the same as writing a golden lion. It doesn't feel exciting enough.

You have written more than 10 chapters about this small battle scene and haven't finished it. It's too long-winded. When it comes to the big battlefield, the Grand Route, the new century, and the war 20 years later... Oh my god, I can't imagine it.

Don't listen to what they say about the plot being too long. The plot of any good novel is too detailed. Just write it like this. It's pretty good, but it's just not interesting enough

Justice is different for everyone! But in my opinion, the heart that wants to protect family, friends, and kind people must be righteous!

How to say? Most of the navy is just. Although there are some pests among them, there are many people in the navy who have sacrificed their lives to protect people. It is really ugly to see the protagonist slandering the navy because of some shady things (the protagonist is an adult with normal three-dimensional views in modern time travel) As for pirates, although there are some chivalrous people, more than 90% of them are It's garbage that burns, robs, and does nothing to produce. It's a bit disgusting to see the protagonist have a good sense of the pirate group just for a few good people among the pirates. Think about it, the Tianlong people, in the waste, how many people are they, how many people can they harm together And some small pirate groups can already massacre villages or even large pirate groups massacre islands, and the number of pirates is countless.

The author succeeded in making his book so unpopular that it was not even pirated

I read the first two chapters for a long time and didn't understand them. Is it because I didn't graduate from elementary school? Too profound for ordinary people like me to understand, retreat, retreat

At the beginning, water, timeline, chaos, completely incomprehensible, this brother is just like a waste? Are you writing cool articles? The author has been reading cool articles for so long. What is the poisonous point? He has no clue in his mind? I'm so convinced. In my last life, I lived in the era of the information explosion. Is my thinking still so naive? The protagonist is just like a charlatan (so far)

Opened the invincible cheat, 400,000 words, and it has not been published in Novice Village............. Although family ties are very important, it is not unreasonable for many authors to give the protagonist an orphan status... Because in many cases it is not only troublesome but also awkward to deal with. If your protagonist dares to risk his life because he has a family, that would be irresponsible to his family. But if your protagonist doesn't fight hard, how can he become stronger? Even if you become stronger and can cheat, what about fighting? Even if the battle can be fought in seconds. Oh, then you are invincible, so what else are you writing about? In reality, family is a harbor, but in novels, family is a burden. This is also the main reason why in reality, everyone works obediently and goes to work, because they have to worry about their families. The Gu family can't cause trouble.

The status of the protagonist's younger brother is too high. It looks very distorted and makes him look like he is gay.

This younger brother is really a poisonous person and will cause trouble for the protagonist all day long. The protagonist is fighting for his life, but he is gunning for Robin's mother. The protagonist is knocked underwater by a meteor volcano and the second half screams "beyond fear and beyond justice!" It's really disgusting. Author, please stop entertaining yourself. Can the younger brother's role be reduced a bit, or maybe just let him die?

There are various narrations and flashbacks, but the author doesn't have the skills to write them, which makes it feel very confusing. It just feels like an inexplicable twist.

This book is really good (ω<)★

After reading the first 10 chapters, well, I don't know what I'm reading. Every word is messed up, and there are problems with the ordering. It's so densely packed. As for the narrative, I was really annoyed by it. After reading 10 chapters, I can only say that I can see that the author has a lot of ideas and wants to write in detail, but the story description method is really poor. As a person who has been reading for 10 years, most readers actually don't read very carefully, unless they are the kind of author who can make people immerse themselves in the world of the book. Obviously the author still needs to work harder. 👍

I didn't understand it at the beginning. Now it's Maven and now Bot. Who is who? Otherwise, don't write about your identity before time travel. If you write it, you don't use it. I don't understand it.

Please stop inserting flashbacks, my head will explode.

Chapter 51 Is it too poisonous? The influence of the berserker has destroyed your brain? The pirate who was pretending to surrender grabbed his colleagues and younger brother and threatened them to kneel down and cut off their hands 😁 Forgive me for not being interested in this kind of forced plot.

Is the author reading too many Japanese comics? Writing a novel is also called Manfeng's various flash memories. This is a novel, not an animation. Using memories indiscriminately and the timeline gives people a very messy feeling. If you are not good at writing, don't use memories indiscriminately. You are still a little boy. Doesn't Uncle B want to have a Loli? When it comes to you, you have changed it to a younger brother. The Japanese manga style is too strong. This is a novel, not a comic. There are many people who write it and it is confusing. This is a novel. It does not have the visual sense of comics. If you don't have the skills, just use the normal method to write. What you wrote makes me feel like watching Naruto animation, but your skills are not up to the mark. Without the visual sense, it is very messy.

Newcomers should not write so many bells and whistles. They neither show much skill nor win the favor of readers. Has the author never read a single novel? ? Internet articles should be straightforward and refreshing. How can it be difficult to take time to read each word carefully? When you read the novel yourself, it is like reviewing the questions? ?

The beginning is chaotic, chaotic, chaotic. If you don't watch it carefully, it suddenly feels like it's skipping the scene. However, the opening scenes don't attract people to watch carefully. There is also an important point. The protagonist is an absolute younger brother. It feels like everything is for his younger brother. I don't have any goals, I just live for my brother. 😅😅😅😅😅

The idea is good, but the technology is lacking. I won't talk about the random narration and interludes in the early stage. I just want to complain. Is the pace of your writing so slow to keep in line with the progress of the comic? I wrote more than ten chapters about a small naval battle, which really tests one's patience...

What the hell😥😥😥😥😥

The writing is not good, even after publishing a single chapter. Brother's writing is very annoying.

As a dominant figure, the Golden Lion competed with Roger Whitebeard and pinned Roger down to beat him. The sword in his hand was either a high-speed sword or a large sword. He had many subordinates, so it was impossible to only hold a good sword. Didn't this spoil his identity? As an overlord, he couldn't afford to lose this person. I was stunned for a moment! !

My child, you succeeded in making me give up even after Chapter 1. The writing is not enough to make up for the colloquial words. The most important thing is that your colloquial words are not fluent at all.

Authors without self-awareness have good ideas but insufficient skills, and the works they produce are extremely effective in persuading people to quit. I saw chapter 9.2. . .

It's very confusing. Chapter 1 and Chapter 2 are all a mess.

It's so long and stinky. It's like shit.