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This is a new work by the originator of the Cuolian style. The last book proved to be criticized by eunuchs. It has been sitting there for several years and is still written in red. Seeking the truth even if it means death is as iron-hearted as it belongs to. The author intends to promote equality for everyone in a Haihu world view and copy Haihu every day, but even Feiliang himself knows that it is unrealistic to carry out reforms in such a grooved world. To authenticate this kind of thing, you need to have a good understanding of history, politics, philosophy, and economics. This is not something that every author must master. But if you don't have that level, don't bother with controversial things every day. Others write books for readers, and the author is already immersed in his own art. He loves giving political lessons to the ancients so much. He would probably be moved to tears by this kind of scene. A level 5 author only has three comments per chapter on average. Everyone is telling him not to write these things, but he still has to be a lonely rebel. Others write books to make money and serve readers, while he writes books to satisfy his ideological exhibitionism.

It is said that he is abusing his food, leaping over the ranks every day, and making some mistakes in his writing. The main reason is that except for the gimmick of torturing vegetables, other parts are very boring, and the NPC character creation and world view creation are mediocre. This is the route those writers who are not good enough like to take. They use gimmicks to attract attention, but they lack the ability to write the gimmick part well. In the end, they can only deviate from the original design and go towards the same old routine. I'm always thinking about how to level up, how to pace the post, and how to attract readers. To put it bluntly, some of these things can be written in the post. If you don't delve into the basic skills, you will end up with such a mediocre work.

At the beginning, I copied a well-known song and adapted it in such a way that it was really embarrassing. Later, the protagonist's diary will appear in the academy and be read by others, and his voice will be made public. The author stated that he would not write about social issues later on, but he started by scolding the aristocrats. The follow-up will not go towards Wenzhaogong, but it will copy songs in the beginning. The follow-up will not write about nobles and common people, but it will scold the nobles in the beginning and encourage the mood of drunkards in bars. If what you write at the beginning has nothing to do with what follows, what is the point of the beginning? So far it looks like a very mediocre Nishigenryu.

Yakuza-ryu, other Yakuza-ryu imitate superficial elements, but this book really has some essence in it. The depressing current situation, different forces with their own evil intentions, an unknown world full of mysteries, a calm and rational protagonist, and the explosively powerful Golden Finger. When the protagonist describes his golden finger as a talent, he really has the humor of "Dark Blue with Dots". But this author has a bad record, the world view is too big, and there are too many hidden lines. Many people are worried that it will collapse in the later stage. It's still very exciting so far, at least on a large cup level. Take a look first

The end of each chapter and individual chapters express my resentment. I didn't write well enough here, and I didn't handle it well there. Most of the readers encouraged him and told him that he wrote well, but in the end his mentality collapsed and the book was unfinished. I really don't know what he was feeling internally. Do those platinum masters write good books that they like? A book written about the ultimate devil will go away faster than a bad one. Teacher Dagu's new book is like this, and he keeps writing single chapters to appease the readers. The black firebrand who wrote Hell Apartment is now writing weird stories about rules where the male protagonist can change the rules while riding on the traffic of the same track. Yuan Tong, who wrote Sword of the Dawn, is now running wildly on the fan track. Even if it is a squid, the new book collapses like that. Everyone is messing around. A small author has higher requirements for himself than anyone else. He gives up when things don't go his way. To put it bluntly, he is narcissistic. I won't write a book that is not the best. The early plot and pacing of this book are great, but it falls apart in the middle, but it's worth a read.

After reading hundreds of chapters, I was quite disappointed. Yuantong has basically degenerated from a great author with a unique style and excellent writing style to a niche author who is a fan of the track. A lot of the plot is about what the protagonist did, which shocked the police, the friends, and passers-by. What's interesting is that the expression of shock takes up far more space than the incident itself. The comment section said that Yuantong writes fairy tales for adults, because the stories he writes are very one-sided and conservative in their descriptions of darkness, and they are basically just backgrounds and deal with conflicts in the same vulgar way as in fairy tales. I say it's a little unworthy to say it sounds ugly. Fairy tales are a genre aimed at children. Its characteristics are the vulgarity of logic and contradictions and the binding of the objective development of things to factors such as morality or whether children are obedient. But at least one thing about fairy tales is that he is still honest and serious about the contradiction itself. The wolf grandmother who eats little girls, the evil witch who seduces and kidnaps children with a candy house, and the cousin who cuts off her heels to pretend to be someone else. Their conflict itself remains serious. What is the contradiction that currently occupies the largest space in this book? It's because the name Miss Doll is not decent enough, it's because he's making fun of the doll's height, and it's the male protagonist who made Director Anomaly work overtime a few times. My elementary school classmate watched two episodes in which the struggle between Young and Dangerous for the leadership of the Green Dragon Gang was more intense than this conflict. Affectation When the cultists and physical monsters were making trouble, the male protagonist was arguing over the name of a puppet, and his humor was completely lost. In fact, I have always wanted to say how Yuan Tong developed this inexplicable sense of humor. The kind of pure humor in "The King, Forgive Me" is more interesting. Far Eye's joke cannot even hurt any individual, it is so harmless that it cannot even be classified as any kind of humor. For example, does anyone really think it's funny that you can never defeat humans or geese? Copy the most superficial elements and stitch together the most boring expression. With the same design, how many times is Suqing's funny ability compared to Sword of the Dawn? What's so funny about the 66cm doll? What's so interesting about an anomaly that makes your head fall off? In fact, this problem was not serious at the time of Sword of the Dawn, because whether it was a big fireball or an inability to defeat a goose, these things took up a very small space, and his plot was very dense and the writing was very good, which concealed this. When I read the Captain's book, I was shocked at every turn, and passers-by speculated about the Captain's thoughts at every turn. Writing about the reactions of passers-by is even better than describing the protagonist himself. A large number of meaningless chapters dilute the amount of information in the book like a sea. The originally exciting and interesting plot was cut into pieces. This book has become even more complicated, and the plot itself has shrunk to less than one-third of the space. The purpose of reading this book is to watch a few weirdos play some artificial tricks. And look at the NPC's psychological reaction to the house performance. It's been a long time since I've seen shocking words in Yuantong's articles. The plot where the god acted as a mother while protecting and restricting was really amazing.

The pinnacle of Go Away, the origin of Dark Blue with a little bit of background, and the origin of Yakuza Ryu. The refined writing style in the early stage, the weird atmosphere, and the exciting moment of using the modifier, it is really a cool book that makes you feel like you have transformed even if you cheat. The problem with Get Out is that the protagonist lacks internal drive, which results in the male protagonist only endlessly pursuing power (although most male fantasy movies are written this way). When the strength reaches the point where it can no longer be improved, the formula is changed to the map and the announcement is made all over again. He has been thinking about this for many years and has yet to come up with a good solution, so the article "Go away" always looks good in the early stage, and then throws it away when changing the map. Every time I change the map, the quiet rhythm and concise plot from before are suddenly gone. But the early pacing and plot shaping are indeed wonderful, and it's a refreshing read worth reading. When I saw this title, I thought it was very corny, so it's not a bad idea to click on it and read it. Large cup is high quality

One of the many imitators of the table strategy "Three Days and Two Sleeps", Quan Ding said that he was blocked due to pacing issues in the later stage. I took the screenshot to the comment area of ​​the new book and asked if I could unblock it. The new book was also permanently blocked for me.

The writing is messy, and I block people very diligently.

There are three golden chapters in someone else's book. The first seven chapters of this book neither advance the main plot nor introduce the world view. The seventh chapter describes some dormitory activities, which attracted a large number of people to read. It was due to his invincible writing style. I can always be ranked among the top in the division every month. To put it bluntly, this is what Internet writing is like. It doesn't matter whether your writing is awesome or not, it doesn't matter your character or rhythm or what type of writing you write. That's how good or bad the writing is. The author doesn't seem to make a living by writing books, so updating is a problem, but he writes well. This book is a Western fantasy novel with an indigenous protagonist as the main character, and war as the main line. There is nothing wrong with the gods in Western fantasy novels, solid writing, superb characterization, and outrageous knowledge reserves. Unlike most people on male videos who write that women are just vases or cups, he even writes about love in a casual way. At that time, I fell in love with the writing immediately after reading it before it was released. Unfortunately, I personally don't like this kind of plot with war strategy as the main line. A proper super cup

There's not much to say. The gods in road novels are the type who have no goals and relatively light conflicts. The plot is just a group of protagonists floating around. Feige Chocolate has incredible writing skills. A large number of ancient and modern Chinese and foreign literary allusions are skillfully applied in the plot. Not only is it not boring, but the reinterpreted classics are surprisingly beautiful. If you have good literary skills, you will have more fun reading. It's a pity that I don't really like this kind of conflict-free writing. Extra large cup level

It's a suspenseful novel. The writing is okay and the logic is not bad. It mainly focuses on wits. I haven't seen any superpowers so far. The plot in the early stage is useless. In fact, I admire the author quite a lot. Each of the first dozens of chapters has hundreds of comments criticizing him, but the author still insists on his own opinion. He doesn't even open a single chapter or explain the plot at the end. He is very temperamental. After the plot develops later, the rhythm is very comfortable and refreshing, but the information given to the readers in the early stage is too little, and the protagonist repeatedly commits suicide on the same problem. This kind of situation where the protagonist is tortured while there is no breakthrough in the plot, while repeatedly being "stupid", really dissuades a lot of people. Although the plot is supplemented with new settings later to make it seem reasonable, it is still uncomfortable. The post-positioning of information does help create a suspenseful atmosphere, but I personally feel that the design could be better. I haven't watched much yet, I'll rate it later.

The best time-travel novel with a dark dungeon world view that I have seen so far. The writing style is very comfortable. There is no old-fashioned formula of taking out the original heroes and marginalizing them to set up a protagonist. Instead, it takes apart the elements of the original worldview and redesigns an interesting world. It is actually difficult to write a dungeon fanfic. After all, Dark Dungeon is a game in which one person controls a group of people. If the protagonist is written as a certain character in the team, it will feel that the protagonist's subjectivity is very poor, because the influence of teammates will be particularly large, which cannot be decided by the protagonist. And if the protagonist is strengthened to the point where he can be killed by one person, then many of the designs of this worldview will not be reflected at all, and it will be very boring. Writing a group portrait is both too difficult and cumbersome. This book provides a very good idea. He writes the protagonist as the leader of the team, who gives orders to control the team, which not only maximizes the subjectivity but also ensures a sense of immersion. And because teammates are living people, they will not completely obey orders. The contrast between this and the situation in the game further helps the author to shape the characters and world view. Very good seedlings, wait and see

Black Tinder is also a veteran author of weird novels, and writing it now like this really makes people laugh. At the beginning, there are reincarnators and newcomer guides. Once you enter the dungeon, you will find a hidden profession. The name of the subsequent dungeon is simply called "Mysterious Resurrection". It's boring for an established writer not to polish his writing skills but to use other people's gimmicks every day to increase his appeal. The main thing is that you are a horror infinite streamer. The core is mainly about rules and weird stories, and the male protagonist's hidden profession can directly modify the rules. Dude, what's the point? I can finish it for you. This skill does not quantify the rules that can be modified and the scope of the modified rules. As a result, the development of the plot depends entirely on the author's words, and the readers do not have a clear understanding of the limits of the protagonist's abilities, which is very boring. To be honest, I thought it was a small author who could write such a plot. You have your own readership, so why do you do all these bells and whistles? To sum up, it is a very mediocre work, without Huo Zhong's own style, and it is considered poor even in his own books. From the bottom of the large cup to the middle level of the large cup

The ultra-slow pace in the early stages and the incomparable character creation of the Tang Dynasty make people feel cowardly, and those who like to feel cowardly are in luck. In the early stage of cultivation, it takes seven or eight years to upgrade to the second level of Qi training, which is the lowest level. It takes three years of salary to earn one spiritual stone. It is hard to save enough money to take drugs to upgrade. It takes a whole year to eliminate erysipelas. Human blood undergoes a metabolic process in 14 days. Why is the poison so cruel? The pressure level is so ridiculous that you can't help but watch it to see how disgusting it will be. Goldfinger is trading lifespan with a tortoise. Of course, it means nothing. Because the whole world knows that it is impossible for the protagonist to practice cultivation until his lifespan is exhausted. If that were the case, only dogs would watch it. The development of the plot is that the protagonist, a casual cultivator, and two men formed a small group to help each other. One of them got involved and asked his granddaughter to join the group, and later a woman was brought in. The two women have been acting as children, constantly isolating the cold-eyed one and the warm-hearted one. It is disgusting to watch. This author also wants to teach readers the ways of the world. Goldfinger tied a turtle to help him raise fish, and later learned how to make talismans, which basically provided resources for cultivation. Speaking of which, she is really a loser. The protagonist has raised fish for several years and let the turtle do it for him. One month when the turtle was not around, he couldn't even control the fish killing each other. So what did you do with your free time without raising fish for such a long time? I didn't do anything. I had more time than others but my cultivation level hadn't improved, so I just learned two bad little tricks. After I started making talismans, I became even more of a loser. Learning to make talismans, I paid half of the profit I earned from making talismans for ten years. Not to mention working for others, the author also mentioned twice that learning to draw in my previous life was a bonus. In the end, after practicing for so many years, I still failed to draw lower-level talismans. It felt like this if I crossed a zone. In the first fifty chapters, there are so many people and sophistication at every turn, and a few nonsense words are repeated over and over again. Mrs. Xianglin is reincarnated. I really don't understand that there are so many male videos who like to teach people and sophistication, and they are so stupid. He still keeps peeing and peeing all the time, and a chamber pot chants more than 20 chapters. He is really invincible. After Chapter 50, the pace picked up, the drama stopped messing around, and the viewing experience improved a lot. I was quite disappointed, as I thought I could maintain this useless atmosphere. Summary: Although the plot is extremely useless, the characters are not well developed, and most of the wits are not as good as those of primary school students competing for class president. Stinky medium cup

I have read most of the new works by the author of Freshman Dongxi and re-evaluated: Although the author prefers to shoot arrows first and then draw targets in terms of intellectual combat in the last book, the jokes and daily writing are still quite interesting. Not only has the writing style of this book not improved, it has even regressed significantly. The characters are portrayed as not being human, which is quite disappointing. A strange world view. As a failed student, the male protagonist has a golden finger that can open a trumpet across time and space. On the one hand, the NPCs on our side are almost completely portrayed as mere tools, and the whole school is trapped in the realm of deception. When the life and death situation is on the line, the male protagonist blocks the deception and asks her teammates to move rescue soldiers to ask for information. When the NPC runs back halfway, she suddenly starts to explain the battle to the male protagonist with eyes full of admiration and gasps. In order to let the male protagonist pretend to be cool, she completely ignored the logic of the plot and the shaping of NPCs. Dozens of classmates died, and when someone was about to die, she was able to stop and act as a commentator on the spot regardless of her own life. It was a miracle. On the other hand, the enemy NPC is a genius. Although it can be seen from the previous book that the author is not good at wits, he will not write the villain to the level of the Qinglong Gang in kindergarten like this book. I deceived you, I kidnapped you morally, and whoever was behind me was brain-numbing. The villains are either pure wild monsters, or they have Down syndrome, which is pretty boring. Overall, I would rate it as a large cup. If it weren't for the interesting design, I would have gone directly to the medium cup.

Finished chasing, re-evaluate: It is a Western fantasy novel with a world view based on the design of Kanhara 2 and Warcraft. Its advantages are smooth writing, vivid supporting characters, and interesting battle system design. But as the plot develops, this book feels more and more strange to me. The male protagonist is like a ruthless level-up machine. He seems to be indifferent to everything in this world and just wants to level up. The male protagonists of traditional Western fantasy are basically characters with strong personalities and desires. Some like women, some like power, some love to show off, and some just love to save the world. For example, in "Mission Manual" the male protagonist is drunk now and drunk the next. Even if the players themselves play the game, they are not playing purely for combat power. For example, some people want to collect unique props, some people want to play tricks and unpopular tricks, etc. But the male protagonist is very conservative in choosing talents, adding points, and behaving in a very conservative way. He is so rational that he doesn't even look like a living person. In most cases, upgrading is a means to advance the plot. When there are difficulties in the development of the plot, let the male protagonist upgrade. Then the male protagonist can face the next conflict, and the readers can also experience the next plot. Only traditional male fantasy literature will regard upgrading as the only driving force for the protagonist, but they usually arrange high-intensity plots to dilute the sense of repetition. But the plot intensity of this book is very low. The male protagonist is indifferent to the world and at the same time very wealthy. He has few desires and at the same time is very rational. All these combined lead to a story in which the plot is bland, the male protagonist is bland, the world is turbulent, and the male protagonist's years are peaceful. Dude, have you really come to travel to the Bright Medieval Times? Some of the plots the male protagonist is currently involved in are indeed exciting, but you can see that the male protagonist's subjectivity in the plot is getting worse and worse. He was either involved in an accident, or he entered the battlefield because of the set restriction that only by defeating intelligent creatures below level 2 can he gain higher experience. If this setting is not forcibly added, it is easy to imagine the scene where the male protagonist decides to practice leveling in a sub-professional profession in a dark corner for ten years until the end of time. The current situation is that the combat power system is exciting, learning new magic with unique characteristics is exciting, the secrets behind the gods are exciting, and the conflicts and conflicts between various NPCs are exciting. But every time the camera returns to the male protagonist, why is it so boring? The character with the most descriptions is the most boring character in the whole book. I would rather read the stories of the low-level NPCs than the male protagonist. Generally speaking, I can rate it from a large cup to a medium cup. Depending on the later adjustments, the writing style is okay, but the core feels very boring. Once I put it down, I don't even have the interest to open it again.

It's rare for me to see a male protagonist who is so powerful that he can be reduced to sugar. In the first chapter, the system introduced the possibility of earning money. The original text of Chapter 33: Han Wu suddenly slapped his head: "Isn't there a way to gain luck and gain money!" After thinking about it for several months, Chapter 33 finally became a human being, why don't you take a few more shots to remove the water. Enough sugar ~ enough energy A mediocre Yakuza-ryu, mediocre in every aspect, mediocre in every aspect.

This is a novel with a very comfortable writing style. The writing style and writing skills are very strong, but the grasp of cool points is relatively average. The story is about traveling to another world to play the role of a priest and making up a sect of his own. Goldfinger is also related to faith. In the early stage, it mainly protected the poor, gave strength and developed faith. The plot itself is unremarkable, but the author's descriptive ability is quite solid, and each of the characters in the novel is vivid and very comfortable to watch. As the plot develops, there are slight discrepancies between the unfolding of the story and the readers' expectations. Everyone thought that they would continue to develop their faith and rely on a large number of extraordinary people to overturn this old world with a high degree of class consolidation step by step. Not everyone is like a dragon, at least he himself becomes the king and the ancestor. However, the NPC introduced in the subsequent plot is too high-level. The Lord not only sees through the male protagonist's golden finger at a glance, but is also full of lofty ideals and foresight. Appeared in more than a dozen chapters, changing tax laws, reforming territorial laws, centralizing power, eliminating dissidents, and loosening restrictions The magician's appearance was even more impressive. It was these two who sealed the gods and locked down the technology. Compared with him, the male protagonist is like an eminent monk. He has neither ambition nor courage. I don't know who is the protagonist. Although the subsequent plots gradually shift to the aristocratic perspective, the protagonist of the new plot seems to be looking for opportunities to have sex with the minor aristocrats. I feel that this development is still interesting and I look forward to it. What's more interesting is that the author seems to be completely immersed in his art. As the plot develops, the dialogues of different characters become more and more biblical, and some illiterate villagers on the roadside also speak in a refined manner. The character of the protagonist has also begun to look more and more like an ascetic monk. To sum up, I will tentatively decide on Xiancao and wait for further development (the writing style is the first priority)

A new work by the author of Forty Thousand Years of Cultivation, a behind-the-scenes story full of two-dimensional elements. I read it again and re-evaluated it. At the beginning, it was very exciting to start with Xiao Bo Da relying on the Ten Thousand Soul Banner to kill monsters and criminals, but later on it became more and more formulaic. On the one hand, the male protagonist likes to be a teacher and likes to teach people the principles of life in long lectures, which is very greasy. On the other hand, in terms of character design, the garbage bug who grew up in a polluted area is also polite when talking to the male protagonist. He expresses various abstract words casually. It feels like in this world, even beggars start with a bachelor's degree. A lot of the plot is about the male protagonist pointing out someone, being praised by someone, cutting the scene, and switching to another person to praise. You can cut into any chapter of this book and you will see the male protagonist teaching others something. It's a bit boring to watch too much, but it's still within the tolerance limit. As a result, the arena match started and the fight continued, with the classic male protagonist hiding behind the scenes to provide means. The players on the stage praised the male protagonist, the audience praised the male protagonist, and the villains praised the male protagonist. I feel that the author's pretentious style is a bit out of step with the times. This is the only way he can improve the character's self-identity, which is a bit embarrassing. The same plot that causes trouble behind the scenes, such as the pretentiousness of the Tarot Club among the best friends, is handled better. The members make guesses about the vague male protagonist. They think the information they have is more (or less) than the actual information. This is the so-called Dihua. At this time, it's fun to show off, and it's fun to have biased intelligence. It's a double secret. For example, in the scene where the protagonist's influence changes the lives of many people, Big Eyeballs is written much better. He won't simply write that the protagonist is awesome, but that everyone will be grateful and praise him for what he has changed. He cuts directly to the camera and inserts some short stories from the first-person perspective of passers-by between his stories, allowing readers to intuitively feel the specific impact on their lives. In this case, it's very satisfying to write about the reforms, and it's also a double secret to write about the NPC's perspective that responds to the previous reforms. This book is very formulaic and has all the characters taking turns praising the male protagonist. This way of handling the plot is too low and crude. I had high expectations for this book, but unfortunately the author's level is still not good enough. To sum up: it is not a particularly good but not bad behind-the-scenes flow of the second time travel. It has many two-dimensional settings but the plot development has nothing to do with the two-dimensional. The protagonist belongs to the Madonna who is decisive in killing and has a level of food and grass.