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Dark Dungeon 2 and a different world dungeon double traverse, it's a very interesting seedling, I'll wait and see. I really can't read it if I just write about fanfics. Fanfics are very embarrassing. Either I have to reread the original work and not be able to write my own thing, or I destroy the original work. Putting it here in a dungeon would either marginalize a group of dark heroes and highlight an original protagonist. Or it would be a waste of a lot of space to write something that is present in the original work. If you don't have your own style, you might as well read the original work. But it's fun to have an original copy and just borrow part of the design.

Finally found a subject that is more disgusting than light novels, I don't even need to describe it [Remnants of White Rose (Level 2): Boss! You arrived in the city so soon? Can you tell me some information! We really can't help you with this matter, but thank you for your experience. I will be a good boy when I encounter a hotel...] "Yeah, that's right." As soon as this original text is posted, you will know how outrageous it is. Only when it is outrageous is it powerful enough.

The villain's intelligence is no more than three years old, and conflicts are manifested as "what are you looking at" levels of Yakuza style

I thought it was a cool article like a witch farming and pushing the natives to open a harem, but in fact most of the space is devoted to the harem. The setting of the main plot is very detailed, but it is very dry and uncomfortable to read. As for the harem part, a lot of the plot was wasted on teasing and playing house. Overall, it was completely unsatisfying, and the characterization was also average. The author strives to describe an atmosphere in which the male protagonist and a large number of female protagonists have no conflicts and make dumplings in harmony. There is no conflict between the male protagonist and the female protagonist, and there is no conflict between the female protagonist and the female protagonist. The turbulent social status quo is just the background, and everything about the worldview is just for making dumplings. It's really boring.

Traveling back to the Nitiannu channel to kill everyone is actually the story of an investigator analyzing the Cthulhu worldview. The setting and conflicts are well written and interesting to unfold. However, the author's own writing style and logical skills are relatively average, which makes it almost meaningless. It's interesting without being too serious and worth watching

There is a saying, although the Ring of Fate is very annoying, it is not even a little bit better than Tiangong Kaiwu. Don't be angry, Mr. Gu. It is common for commercial works to have no commercial results. There are many problems with rings, and the fundamental reason is that they don't look good. You can write several articles discussing the reasons why it doesn't look good, but the core is that Mr. Dawu relies too much on solving puzzles of an unknown worldview to promote the plot and he places too much emphasis on "rationality." On the one hand, when most of the worldview has been familiar to readers in the previous work, Mr. Dawu doesn't know how to write it. In each book, he unveils the worldview while upgrading. When the worldview fails to make an article, he panics. On the other hand, Teacher Dawu tried his best to give Lumian a plot so that he could participate in the plot, but Lumian's personal strength was too weak and he was not worthy of such a high-intensity plot. And our teacher Dawu cares very much about the rationality of the plot. These points combined together lead to a very outrageous development. Teacher Dawu came up with an idea and wrote a few demigod angels to serve as bodyguards. He happened to leave an enemy whose strength was exactly at Half-Step Sequence Four, just within the strength range that the male protagonist could handle, for the male protagonist to fight. The deliberate development and boring characterization are evident. As a result, the plot became neither exciting nor reasonable. The male protagonist turned into a tool and went around working for the characters in the previous game. The protagonist did not look like the protagonist. Either the former convicts came together to act as babysitters for him, leaving just one person that he could fight for him to keep. War is not like war, the protagonist is portrayed as different Another teacher in this book, Dawu's writing style has deteriorated to the point of jaw-dropping, writing a bunch of amazing sentences. Taken together, it turns out to be a regrettable piece of shit.

It's a very interesting historical novel, but the writing style is a bit like a light novel, with endless dialogue and psychological activities. If you can accept it, it's quite interesting.

I copied the Genius Club setting, but the writing is obviously much better. But the writing style has the flavor of a light novel about Asasi's warm-tempered man. He falls in and out of love at every turn. The "I will only save you when the world ends" thing is a bit disgusting.

The male protagonist has no charm at all. He has no decent chivalry and no domineering hero. He is a villain who is hesitant and takes advantage of everything. The characters are well developed, but the development of the plot is still cliche and nothing new is written. After reading another paragraph, I couldn't bear to make another comment: the male protagonist is better than a prisoner. He opens a harem and even distinguishes his concubines. The order of hierarchy and order is here. He thinks that he can't stay with the maid. The most important thing is to describe the psychological activities of the maid and the concubine. Can you help me with some money? I can't stand it when I go back in time and drive in reverse. If we travel back to the Ming Dynasty and don't optimize productivity or innovate production methods, what if we can't cultivate immortality? Playing with power and scheming with a few Zhu Zhu every day, it's really power and scheming

It is also a light novel, but the writing style of this one is very good, and it is worthy of being written by an expert in defeating demons. Book Eater is very good at describing characters who are paranoid and crazy in certain aspects, and sometimes it even feels like they are personally experiencing it. The protagonist's exaggerated behavior can be understood as a disguise for madness, or it can be understood as tsundere. The author grasps this degree very well, and the writing is both cute and crazy. The protagonist's character is extremely rational and paranoid. The two seem to be mutually exclusive, but the author handles them quite harmoniously (after all, several books on The Book-Eating Demon share this character). The protagonist's goal is outrageous, but when it comes to practice, he is very rational. In addition, the character design with no bottom line looks inexplicably cool.

The light novel section is full of sections, and the way the characters speak and the logic of their actions are really embarrassing. When the masked male protagonist said, "I know everything behind everyone's masks," I got goosebumps all over my body. It was so earthy and sad. This type of doppelgänger flow is easy and enjoyable to write, but the author has created a lot of useless settings and messy character relationships that are completely unbearable. It's not about having too many settings, it's about using them well. Bestie's worldview can be said to be among the top settings in the online literature world. Did you see that in the early stage he talked about the settings at length? What is used is said, layer by layer is revealed, this is the basic logic of writing. The character creation is floating in the air, and this problem is particularly serious in light novels. The appearance of a character has its own set of behavioral logic. Whether he is a good guy or a bad guy, he is at least the same person. To describe a gangster, what is his life like, what is his chain of interests, and what are his social circles? You don't need to write these things out, but you have to know them in your mind. If you just draw a character out of thin air with nothing, it will look light and airy.

It's a rather boring and mediocre novel. It arranges a relatively strong character to disgust the protagonist at the beginning. The conflict begins with a bloody misunderstanding and the villain's lack of brains. The way to break the situation is to spread rumors, and if something big happens, it will cause trouble in front of the land gods. The design of contradictions is perfunctory, superficial, and boring, and the process of resolving contradictions is mediocre. There are also some scenes where the fiancée is pursued by others and laughed at in the sect. It's pitiful.

The beginning can be said to be the best short story I have seen this year. The plot arrangement ability of "Grass Snake Gray Line" has been revealed one after another, making the plot more three-dimensional and exciting every time. Even every scene change in the story is carefully designed. Although the rest of the story is not as good as the beginning, I recommend almost anyone to read the free part of this book.

Although Futame Uemoto's witch farming style sucked in the later stages, in the mid-term it was still very satisfying to vigorously develop productivity and use modern weapons to crush the natives of other worlds while sleeping with the witches. It's surprising that this book is so poorly written. It's a hostile organization that plays like a house, and the conflicts are very superficially portrayed, because the ultimate goal is the same, and dumplings will be made in the end. The characters of the heroines are basically cute and gentle two-dimensional Tang syndrome. At a glance, what follows is nothing more than recruiting women into the Shura field and saving the world. This kind of dinner plot in which everyone is a cute and nice person, and everyone reunites to make a pot of big dumplings is really uninspiring.

The infinite flow of gods and men that defy the heavens, the male protagonist and the supporting character are trapped in a flesh and blood prison, and with the back of their necks intubated, they have to use honorifics and modest words when talking to each other. It gives people a sense of déjà vu when the wife is being pinned down and says, "Hello, excuse me, can you get off my wife?"

I want the traffic brought by the married woman gimmick, but that's not okay if readers who can't stand niche fetishes spray me. Finally, I created a dinner work about a virgin wife

The quality and writing style of Infinite Horror Stream are excellent, and it is considered top-notch when most of the Infinite Stream authors cannot even speak Mandarin. Choosing the meat pigeon style to reset the protagonist's strength every time to keep it fresh is a good design, but the author does not grasp some of the techniques of writing novels very well. For example, at the end of the first instance, the protagonist received three rewards, but he could only bring one in, so he threw away the other two. It's better to just give out a reward. This kind of plot is not only unnecessary but also adds to the frustration. The plot design of the dungeon is very average. The first two stories are not new, but the plot outside the dungeon is more interesting. The most important aspect of Infinite Flow is the battle of wits. The difficulty of the dungeon is designed to be extremely high, making it difficult for the protagonist to collect complete information. In most cases, the only way to break the game is to rely on gambling. Although it increases the sense of terror, it weakens the traditional Infinite Flow's pleasure of collecting and sorting out information to break the game. For example, in the first dungeon, she relied on a phone call to hide the truth about Boos's plot so that she could win the battle with Big Boos. However, whether Boos can understand human speech, whether he can answer the phone, whether he has normal behavioral logic, whether he will take revenge, etc. Are all unknown. If the bet is wrong, everything will be lost. This kind of plot adds a lot of uncertainty and weakens a certain degree of enjoyment. The overall evaluation is that it is a high-quality work in Infinite Streaming, which mainly focuses on creating a horror atmosphere, and other elements are slightly weakened.

I haven't read many books by Elbow, and the look and feel of this book is really strange. The battle of wits is all about shooting an arrow first and then drawing a target. The protagonist is drifting with the general trend and struggling to support himself. Then a mastermind pops up and says that everything is our plan. He finally solves some of the incidents. There is a mastermind behind the scenes. The author only reveals the ending, not how they arrived at it. Each of the masterminds behind the scenes seems to be a mastermind who has no plans, but if you think about it carefully, there are all uncertainties in the plan. The author did not explain it and just pretended to be the Riddler. In terms of emotional shaping, the love between the male and female protagonists and the friendship between several friends are lacking in foreshadowing. After all, Bai Li is considered a prince. The male protagonist builds a ladder for her and they become friends. He saves her once and falls in love with her. It's a bit abstract. In turn, Bai Li feeds the male protagonist some food and says nice things to him. The male protagonist also falls in love. It's hard to understand why he risked his life to save people just a few days after they met. Liang Gou'er, on the other hand, is in the Tao-seeking realm and rushes into the house without knowing the male protagonist and wants to teach him how to use a knife just for a few meals. This book is sensational and freehand, but to be honest, the plot supporting these things is too far-fetched. If you look carefully, there are too many bugs.

A very mediocre piece of work in Infinite Streaming. What is more interesting is that the traces left by the male protagonist in one copy are reflected in other copies. Or the male protagonist takes a disciple in a certain dungeon and leaves a legacy that affects reality. This kind of interference between dungeons and between dungeons and reality is quite interesting. But these account for a very small proportion of the full text, and the parts where the author puts a lot of effort, such as combat and puzzle solving, are precisely the worst-written parts. The writing and worldview design are very poor, and there are a lot of grammatical errors in the early stage that make people have to read it over and over again to understand what it means.

Tingri's new book, the previous book also includes thoughts on various aspects of life under different fantasy worldviews and the collision of various social systems. In the new book, apart from torturing the natives, he also falls in love with the nobles. What is the difference between Tingri's writing now and his defense? The head of a declining family, a woman who shoulders the burden of revitalizing the family, lies in bed every day, pulls other people's sleeves and acts coquettishly, saying "good sister, good sister" at every turn. If you didn't say she was the head of the family, I would have thought she came from the elementary school. After writing books for so many years, I still can't tell the difference between cute and Down's syndrome. The women in the novel are all drooling candy lovers who will captivate the whole country.