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Abnormal Mutation42

Childish Dreamer

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The new book "Super Magician: The Magic Network Collapses Again at the Beginning" is released. Thank you for your support! ... [Extraordinary Path] [Sequence Level] [Steampunk] [Abnormal Mutation] The purple and red moons compete for glory, and the dark moon and stars shine together. This is a spiritual cemetery and a paradise for madmen. Roland accidentally traveled through the extremely cold land of the North, the wave of the steam revolution was just rising, the afterglow of the Nine Pillars was still there, the extraordinary was hidden in mystery, the glory of the empire came to an end... Everything was so novel and interesting! ... Your rules are not rules, and authority cannot restrain me. I just want to break the rules and turn fantasy into reality. ... Involving elements: mystery, spirituality, magical items, Battle of the Golden Shovel, Teamfight Tactics, bonds, strengthening runes...

Curator6

The power system of the world itself is a mysterious path, and using Hex as a golden finger is a very interesting design. But actually recruiting people to make gold shovels in another world was something I never expected. Isn't the decline of Yu-Gi-Oh enough to show that the world view of influencing the world by playing games is no longer interesting?

Stop Hypnotizing Me, Villain Princess!43

Fish Flavored Cheese

1.0M8.4152

[Order 30,000 each, feel free to eat] Traveling through a different world, Lin En was kidnapped at the beginning. The other party is the villain princess in the original work. In order to control him, he must be used for hypnosis experiments. At the critical juncture, Lin En quickly resorted to wisdom, pretending that the experiment was successful, and used his acting skills to deceive the other party. But this is only a stopgap measure. Because her ending in the original book was very miserable, and the people around her didn't end well either. So in the following days, Linn created the illusion of being hypnotized on the surface, but secretly was ready to run away at any time. But gradually, things started to go wrong. ..."Diary of a Princess" [The experiment was successful! ][As the only sample, I decided to keep him with me. ][Due to the curse mark on my face, I look hateful in the eyes of the world, but he says I am beautiful. ][I am very happy because people speak the truth when they are hypnotized. ][When I was alone, I kissed him on a whim. ][This feeling is very strange, which makes me a little bit embarrassed. Fortunately, after the hypnosis is released, he will not retain the memory just now. ][So, it doesn't matter if you are bolder, right? ]

Curator5

I expected it to end badly. Relying on extremely exaggerated characters to cover up his lack of narrative ability and plot handling. Putting aside those parts that are used as gimmicks, except for a few psychopaths, the whole story actually doesn't create anything clear. Even if there is no eunuch, it will become an infinite reincarnation of saving women - setting up a Shura field with witches - finding new women, and interspersed with some main plots. As the plot develops, you will find that there is less and less life, and all the contradictions are superficial. Fighting life and death until the final puzzle is revealed is not a big deal.

Who Said You Have to Be Loyal to the Witch?44

Sad Dove

2.1M7.936

Damn Asgen, what are you doing all day long? What is so important that you are so busy that you have no time to write another letter to your noble and respectable patron? What feelings suffocate and crowd out the loyalty you promised her, your commitment to be with her? What is this wonderful thing - money, status? Or fame? What is it that can take up every minute of your time, occupy your time every day, and prevent you from paying a little attention to your patron? Asjean, be careful! Maybe on a dark and windy night, I will break in like an assassin! So that you can kneel down and confess to me! Asshole! Not hearing from you really makes me restless. Write me a four-page letter immediately, a four-page apology letter full of sincere feelings, and then rush to me without stopping, and I will try to forgive you! __________________________________________________ Winter has arrived, and the dragons are migrating. The witches shouted: "Faced with such giants, mortals can only kneel down and beg for protection from the witches." The time traveler raised his sword and swore: "The scepter in the hands of witches should not be more noble than this sword."

Curator11

The violent conflict and dramatic battle ended in two hundred words, and the heroine's psychological activities could be written in several chapters. It is also a classic of light novels. It does not understand the importance of non-daily grand narratives to the daily plot. It thinks that the background story is just a backdrop and does not write it carefully. In the end, the non-daily parts are like playing house, and the daily parts cannot be replaced by people. The focus of daily writing is on the daily, but the daily and the extraordinary are two sides of a mirror. The extraordinary plot promotes development while making people cherish the everyday more. The daily plot gives people motivation to fight against the extraordinary to protect it. The two complement each other. It doesn't mean that you have to write a long and grand narrative in daily writing. You can describe it with less description, but you can't write it in a vulgar and childish way. It can be a secret under the iceberg, but it can't be superficial. Otherwise, even the daily parts are boring against this boring background.

Cultivation of Immortality Begins with Rubbing the Computer with Your Hands45

Mumu Loves To Draw

808K7.820

Fang Jun traveled through the world of cultivating immortals, but found that he was just a five-spirited person with a low cultivation speed. Unwilling to be mediocre, he decided to find another way and use his computer knowledge from his previous life to change his destiny! He made the computer himself and created the most powerful auxiliary tool in the world of cultivation! From then on, Fang Jun's path to immortality was like cheating: Others have worked hard for ten years, but his algorithm can run for one day! Others tried to make alchemy and explode the furnace, but he simulated it a thousand times and succeeded once! Others rely on recklessness to fight, but he analyzes data and strikes with precision! Let's see how Fang Jun uses computers to help him cultivate immortality, step by step to reach the top and become a true immortal! ------- Introduction 2: In a world made of atoms, why does spiritual energy subvert the laws of physics? When Fang Jun traveled through the world of immortality, he discovered the most absurd paradox-- Everything in this world conforms to the physical laws of the previous life, but the cultivators are different. The "spiritual energy" is suspected to be the Higgs field, and the "mana" actually fits the model of the Grand Unified Force! In order to get rid of the shackles of longevity and pursue the theory of everything, Fang Jun made a computer with his own hands and began his journey of physical cultivation. ------- This book covers: quantum field theory, vacuum catastrophe, dark energy, dark matter, Yang-Mills equation, grand unified theory, theory of everything, Kolmogorov entropy, Langlands program, homologous mirror symmetry, topological data analysis, compressed sensing, P vs NP problem, etc. The above contents are all covered in books. In order for most book friends to understand them, they are described in loose language or vaguely summarized. Book friends who understand should not find fault. If it is written in too much detail, it will be like a textbook or a paper.

Curator9

The setting is intentional, but the plot is boring. It's a classic ethics drama between time travellers and natives. What's the big deal? You've been chatting with a stepmother for so long, and you can kill or leave whenever you want. You still have to prove something to her when you co-write.

Infinite Blood Core46

Gu Zhenren

3.1M8.8649

The Beast Knight leads a survival group to obtain duel godhood, and the world is suspended at this moment.

Curator21

Teacher Dagu's classic analysis of human nature, the plot of cannibalism=profound=dark, who pulled this, Damn

Who Among the Gangsters Falls in Love?47

What Kind Of Autumn View?

2.6M8.156

When he woke up, Zhao Wumian entered a different world for the first time. He had no system, no grandfather, and no memory. He only had high-strength martial arts that he had practiced instinctively. People in the rivers and lakes are in danger, and they are dying on the streets at every turn. Who is in love? He initially just wanted to know who he was, but he was involved in the struggle for imperial power, and the rivers and lakes are full of rain. Looking back, I saw that I was already a very popular minister in the temple, with the rivers and lakes covering the sky with one hand, and surrounded by pearls and greenery. Now you say, I am actually a rebel? --------[Temple palace, rivers and lakes, delicate emotions, martial arts harem, great works of art, ready to be slaughtered]

Curator7

Those who know that the male protagonist is a time traveler, but those who don't know think that the male protagonist started his career by selling Dali Pills. For a second, you put yourself into the position of a Jianghu person and scold the court as a hawk at every turn. The least you can do is observe the world before deciding where your butt is? The classic martial arts formula of Licking Little Heroine and Little Witch

Unlimited Employment48

Quickly Use Water Splash Jump

566K7.721

From [Insect Slave] to [Parasite Gu Immortal] who controls the insects From [Dragonborn] to the glorious [Star Dragon King] From the [little ghost] to the [Emperor Yama] who is in charge of reincarnation From [novice monk] to the impure [Nirvana Buddha] From [Taoist] to [Qinglian Taoist] who regulates yin and yang. With an attribute panel capable of unlimited employment, Chen Sheng, who awakened the [Jambuddha] profession after time travel, suddenly realized that he was actually inside a certain fruit of the [South Jambudvipa] treasure tree. So, he set a small goal for his spiritual path: In this world where the immortal civilization has reached its peak, Gan becomes the Lord of South Jambudvipa! Ps: All astronomy and projection texts, if you don't like them, don't enter.

Curator15

Even if I write about Nantong, I still write about it in a disgusting way. Is licking pustules a sexual fetish that humans can describe? I'm going to vomit my lunch

Begin Immortality with Liver Proficiency49

Crows Are Better Black

1.9M7.639

When he closed his eyes and opened them again, Xu Yunfan had become a mining slave underground in the mine superintendent's house. With a proficiency panel that can practice all the skills in the world, he has been making great progress in this era of the last years of the dynasty, when heroes are divided, and demons are gradually emerging. From the "Red Bronze Body Kung Fu" that grinds the body, to the "Vajra Prison Suppression Sutra" that is indestructible; From "Scud", which walks like flying, to "Glimpses", which travels in the air; From "Tiger, Leopard and Thunder", which breathes arrows from the mouth, to "Golden Crow's Glorious Art", which burns mountains and cooks seas! From a humble beginning, he rose to greatness, and later on he was invincible, looking back. 'Finally, the sun shines through the vast sky, and the clear river is protected by the wind. '

Curator9

It's a excrement work of the Yakuza style. The male protagonist kills people and doesn't wait for sneak attacks when he is alone. He wants to kill in public, a god. It would be fine if they just exploded after killing the person, but in the end, they would have to cover up the evidence, and the way to advance the plot is ridiculously low.

Gou is a Talented Person in the First Saint Demon Sect50

Crane Guards The Moon Over The Pond

3.5M9.1812

Lu Yang traveled through the world of immortality, but became a disciple of the Demon Sect's First Saint Sect. Thanks to the rare treasure [Book of Hundreds of Worlds], you can restart your life after death and start everything over again. You can also bring back the treasures, cultivation level, life span, and even awaken special talents from your previous life. However, the number of times is limited and it is not truly immortal. Seeing that the world of cultivating immortals was about to be in chaos, Lu Yang originally decided to live in the Demon Sect and practice hard all his life until he became an immortal. However, the Demon Sect was extremely dangerous and full of talented people. In the first life, Lu Yang was assassinated by his senior sister. In the second life, he finally killed his senior sister, but was poisoned by his senior brother again. The third life, the fourth life... It was not until a hundred lives later, when Lu Yang looked back, that he realized that he had become a giant of demons, the most beastly one in the First Saint Sect. "Everyone in the Demon Sect is talented and well-spoken." "I like it here very much!"

Curator66

Each combat stage of the work is set relatively well. It is no longer a small fireball for Qi training and a large fireball for foundation building. The differences between each stage are obvious. But the extreme crushing of high and low still makes the battle less interesting. The excitement of this book lies beyond the battle. The process of using files to collect resources and intelligence to gradually reveal the worldview, the secrets of high realms, the differences in the cultivation routes between various forces, etc. Are all exciting. But now it's starting to feel a little lifeless.

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