Grand Leader of the Heterogeneous Races: Starting from Being Picked Up by a Dragon Girl

If I said the first half of this book smelled a lot like Sword of the Dawn, I think the author would agree. If I said that this book changed from the middle of the third volume, I think the author would agree. Then let me try to talk about what I think this book lacks, just compared with Sword of the Dawn. I think the number one cause of mid-term weakness is insufficient stressors. What pressures does Gawain face in Sword of the Dawn ? The first is internal development, which is present in this book and supports the essence of the first two volumes of the novel. The second is the domestic nobility. There is a regent in this book, but there is not much ink, and it is not clear how the author will develop it. Finally, there is the Magnificent Wall and Demonic Tide. These two are the biggest sources of pressure for Sword of Dawn. One is a numerical monster, which dominates the whole game from the early to late stages, and the other is a mechanical monster, waiting for the protagonist's final BOSS before the end. These two are the core driving force that constantly pushes the protagonist Gawain to move forward, and I think these two are the key to the later power of Sword of the Dawn. There are many things that can be used in the world view of Ring World, such as mechanical clusters or high-tech attacks such as Miriam clusters. If I were to write the story, I would drop a small mechanical cluster from the sky a year after the main character. Instead of using the mechanical clan, I would arrange a small turret and a smoke generator or something like that, so that the protagonist can easily solve it, but also leave a hook for the threat of the mechanical clan to slowly surface in the later stage. But now that the author has written almost one million words, it doesn't mean much anymore. I suggest that the author should carefully consider the source of stress. If he does not carefully think about what kind of enemy the protagonist will face, the protagonist's behavior will be meaningless. The rhythm of the first half of the article is well grasped, and the use of various narrative perspectives is very like a seasoned writer. However, later on, it feels that the author did not seriously think about the work. What opponent the reader has to face is very clear in the first two volumes. The baron's army and the internal poverty are all objects that can be clearly described. However, after these are overcome, without a clear portrait of the opponent, the protagonist's behavior is stuck in a constant circle, and the pain of writing will probably breed here. Sword of Dawn is good-looking because of its good rhythm. If you give it pressure, it will give you motivation. Then it will release the motivation and turn it into development. Finally, it will give an answer sheet to cope with the pressure. It cannot be said that all authors are required to have big eyes, nor can it be said that narrative rhythm is easy to imitate. After all, narrative rhythm is something that all writers should ponder for a lifetime. This novel is the most old-fashioned farming novel I have seen after Sword of the Dawn. I really hope that the author can keep writing and reach the end even if he stumbles. I wish the author to be full of literary thoughts, his shoulders will never be sore, and hemorrhoids will never develop.

pose a squirrel camp and collect some cats, pet the cute newts, and engage in daily activities with climbing technology. Why turn around and take over human territory? Isn't this novel a fan of Huan, not to mention that you can't see any benefit from collecting medieval serfs. Pure Holy Mother. Most of us who play with the ring don't collect lungs from passers-by, donate human organs, and so on. Myanmar simulator. I'm going to get mysophobia... Even if it's true, good, and beautiful, I can just write about the interaction between rats and mice... The Holy Mother has come to save the suffering, where can I find a sense of empathy? Do you know that my morals are so high? It's okay to recruit some high-quality people, it's okay to have a hodgepodge of races... It's okay to have a utopia where everyone is equal. What the hell did you write? Rat wrote about people. Weaken the individual and highlight the collective. As for the interaction between rats and mice, it will be very satisfying to write about how farmers and the lower class are grateful. Later, it is okay to go to the death realm for resources. Why write so much about saving people? This kind of essay was broken a few years ago. (Personal opinion)

Coincidentally, I read the author's book just after reading Dawn for the third time (I have stacked armor first, and I have never played Ring World. I think the potential of this book can reach the level of Dawn or Witch if it can be written well, so I will use Dawn as the main reference. This book is already good, but I think it can be better). Now I have followed the update, and the author's writing style can be seen to be getting better. The relevant knowledge currently seems to be within an acceptable range, but compared to Dawn in terms of plot arrangement, I feel that there are some things that can be improved. First of all, the author's chapter arrangement always gives people the feeling that the protagonist lacks long-term planning and passively accepts the challenge. Basically, he encounters a certain problem to solve it and lacks a mid- and long-term goal (the early stage of Dawn is to counterattack the wasteland and eliminate the aberrations, and the later stage is to start a war with God). The ultimate goal of the main line has never been clear, which makes the whole plot look a bit messy. At the same time, the author's farming speed in this book is compared with Dawn in all aspects, regardless of politics, economy, military science, etc. This is aggravated by the fact that it is all slow and slow; the author has not written enough in the climax, especially in the diplomatic aspect. Compare Liming Gaowen with the chapter of Mao Ren in this book. Whether it is the early stage trip to the royal capital or the subsequent trip to the Dragon Clan, Liming has the initiative in the whole thing with the protagonist. The pace is slow, although the final result is okay, but the process is too bland and even a bit frustrating; at the same time, the author lacks the awareness of multi-line narrative. In the process of removing the hair, the perspective can be brought back to tell the development of the territory. For example, referring to Gawain's time when he went to the Dragon Clan, the territory can also have some big events or development; the last one is invention and creation. I don't know if the author has watched Dawn, but I feel that the improvement of the steam engine is very inspired by the Dawn Demon. Qing Na tastes, but the protagonist is missing a lot of what he should know. Even if you want to highlight the wisdom of the native race, you can also refer to Li Ming. What impressed me deeply is Gawain's sentence "The people don't need you to teach." The protagonist thought of it but before it was implemented, someone gave the protagonist suggestions. Then the protagonist reflected on himself and a very simple protagonist should have thought of things. The protagonist did not expect it at all. It was made by other people to reflect on the protagonist. The difference in the feeling is quite big.

Keep me in mind, I used the digital tablet and drew unfamiliarly for three hours, lightly spraying. Then Kavin died, Abba. Other races and characters... Probably have to wait until later.

Without the power of the extraordinary God's Chosen, the marginal world would be a huge northern Myanmar plus. Mercy's extraordinary intelligence gives players the ability to upgrade technology and obtain stc construction templates by solving problems. Without this skill, it would be impossible to play.

Chapters 1 and 2 were pretty good, leading Shushu to build his own city out of chaos, but then the author felt lost. Maybe he wanted to attract more readers? Suddenly, the element of adventure is added. Farming can involve adventure, but your adventure is for farming, for resources, or to understand the situation and expand your horizons. But in this adventure, the protagonist just established Fenglin City, captured the barony, and ran away. For example, after the founding of the People's Republic of China in 1949, Lao Mao and Lao Zhou left the country alone and went to Europe to inspect for four years. What kind of heart is there to do such a thing! You must at least arrange your development plan and get the development off the ground before you can go out. Then there is the farming part. In the early stage, Shushu was having a miserable life, so the protagonist dragged Shushu forward. No problem, the writing was beautiful. But after taking the barony and entering the development period, there were problems with this method. Simply put, the reform did not go deep. System reform is not involved at all, there is almost no administrative system, how officials are appointed, what are the scope of their duties, official performance and assessment are all not included. Even if there is a guild in the baron lord city and it is inconvenient to use it, then Fenglin City and the surrounding villages can do it, there is no movement! The same goes for the economy. It was a completely planned economy. After the Cat People came, a market economy finally appeared. It was not easy. There is also military. I don't know if the author intends to only have a demi-human army? The area under your control is already the size of a city. As a result, there are more than 100 troops and part-time police officers. The surrounding regents have obviously shown hostility and will not expand the army. Do you intend to reduce the safety of the surrounding large landowners? To be fair, the regent's footing was already unstable, but the surrounding nobles actually obeyed the regent and didn't come to rob Fenglin City? Even if the regular army is not dispatched, mercenaries can come directly and pretend to be bandits. There should not be too many methods. The author also found reasons for not expanding the military because he was worried about destroying the basically newly developed autonomy. Stop making trouble. If you are expanding the military, you have to stand still with a carrot (distributing food and building roads) and a stick (suppressing bandits). There are also trade routes. It is said that the regent is not allowed to cross the border, but it is also said that the regent himself is unstable and his position is not correct. Isn't this contradictory? Are you writing with the centralization of power? Just a word from the regent and the nobles will obediently abandon their trade routes? I directly trade with each other at the border and use gold coins to open the way. Not to mention smuggling enough for the surrounding nobles to eat a pot, I will be very happy if they can secretly get a piece of the pie. The last part is the Great Khan. Apart from expanding the world view, it really has no effect. The minerals provided by the other party are not needed yet. You have outsourced the military provided by the other party. Why didn't you just vote for the regent from the beginning? Probably the only useful thing is that a group of cats come and create a market. The problem is that this doesn't require cats to come.

Have you ever been a rat? Some things are written randomly, taking it for granted

The latest chapters are indeed a bit unbearable. There are no elements that I want to see. The mice have also become unlovable. I feel that I have lost my innocence and happiness, I feel that I have lost the spirituality of the early stage, and some only have the feeling of an old-school lord novel. To put it bluntly, I have already tasted the plot trends in these recent chapters in many lord stories. I hope the author will make adjustments in time.

I watched the latest one in one go, but I just feel like the beginning is a bit hellish. The rat people are not good at innate attributes. It is good to have a dragon lady, but it is too difficult to lead a group of primitive people to advance technology. It feels like the author is already trying his best to improve the technological level of the rat people, but it still feels difficult to lead the rat people to defeat humans. Moreover, the Skaven are so fertile that they have a long growth period. Their life span is forty years, and they do not reach adulthood until they are ten years old. Will the Skaven soldiers have enough to eat later? And I would like to give you a suggestion: use less sensationalism from the first-person perspective. Confessions of a Rat Man and Confessions of a Hairy Man are not human beings, and the writing is very awkward and difficult to empathize with. This kind of subject matter is really rare, and the rhythm is not bad. If I keep writing, I will be well off at the starting point.

I clicked in to read it after seeing Dragon Girl, Shushu, and Maomao But when I saw Chapter 230, you said that the army uses humans as its main force Do you know what the audience of this book wants to read?

It was very frustrating to watch, and I couldn't describe the feeling. I want to see the exhilarating feeling of watching muskets and artillery smash the bullshit nobles, and the steel industry crushing the Middle Ages. What then? Actually looking for the nomadic cat? Still on trial? Isn't this farming? God among gods.

When will Qiluo come out? I want to see Qiluo, angel, wolf girl, horse girl, ice cream girl, snow cow girl, moose girl, cute salamander, snake girl, villain girl, fox girl, three-tailed fox girl, foodie dragon girl, machine girl, electric dragon girl, dirty bag, big dirty bag, bug girl, trash demon girl, lady, mechanical girl, abnormal entity girl, bee girl, beast girl, ant girl. I don't want to watch cult religious dramas.

If you have any comments, you can leave them here and I will read each one. By the way, I would like to ask for reading and monthly tickets. The data seems to affect the traffic. Readers who have time can also send more free comments. Praise for the mouse eggs!

🙂 Although the Rat Tribe players start with medieval technology, the Rat Tribe mod comes with a Rat Tribe Kingdom from the Industrial Age, and among the cultural relics that can be selected by the Rat Tribe mod itself, there are Rat Tribe charges, indicating that this Rat Tribe Kingdom once had technology close to the space age.

It might have been fine in the early years, but now that I've seen so much of what the so-called electoral democracy in the West is like now, it's just a piece of cake, and I feel like the feudal monarchy isn't that bad anymore.

It doesn't matter if I can read the farming adventure. After all, what I read when reading novels is the story itself. I feel like there are only two main problems at the moment. One is that the author obviously wanted to create some "very powerful characters", such as the Chough, the Great Khan, the Great Shaman, the Regent and his patrol envoys, and even a group of cultists, so he spent a considerable amount of space on these characters. But the end result is often that these characters are not very likable even if they are created. These powerful characters are either a profit-seeking businessman who uses all means, or a cultist who pretends to be strategist even if his brain is broken, or a monkey king who wants to rule more naked apes (although not all of them are naked) and occupy more territory. They are not the protagonist's fellow travelers. Perhaps some of them can understand and join the protagonist, but some people have irreconcilable conflicts with the protagonist, which causes readers to feel pressure. It could have provided a sense of security to offset this pressure through the character creation and growth of the protagonist and the subject of farming itself, but it was hindered in this area. The transformation of the role of the groom from humbleness to understanding and trust to being a peer was originally a very good role model, but later he began to become marginalized and became a tool man. The charge of the little knight and the cause and effect and love between father and son are very well written, but he is still a marginal character at the moment. I believe that the author has plans to continue to shape this character. It is a wonderful development for a thaumaturgy to contribute from a bloody cultist to a scientist pursuing the truth, but his pursuit of knowledge has always been crazy and chaotic. He has no motivation as a human being, and his essence has not been changed. In order to truly judge a person, you must at least change him from a ghost to a human. As a result, this character was consumed in an abrupt way and became a marginalized person in the prison. It can be said to be very regrettable. The characters such as Rhine and Snowball are even more disastrous. As a major element of this book, and can even be said to be one of the protagonists, they almost always act cute, help the protagonist, and serve as husbands. The fellow travelers who are closest to the protagonist are far less numerous than the "very powerful supporting characters" in the past. Although it is reasonable for Rhine to be close to the protagonist, but how much of the plot do these two communicate and understand each other? Anyway, I have no impression. Xueqiu and Ma Lanhua also changed from talented Shushu to top students and future technical master reserve members at the speed of light, but I still don't know their past, and I don't know how they specifically view the protagonist. I don't know if they have ideals themselves. In the end, they are left with labels that are full of taken-for-granted things like "I like the protagonist because he helped them and he is really cute." It can be said that these characters combined are not as many as the male Captain Rat, and this one is also in a crisis of marginalization after his guilt is relieved. In the end, it's the protagonist's problem. The protagonist fell from the sky, and suddenly understood the language here and almost didn't think about this problem. After being rescued by Shushu, he wanted to repay the favor, but he felt that people couldn't live like this, so he helped and then became bigger and bigger. He has worked hard to achieve this goal until now. But his portrayal ends here. My impression of the protagonist is very empty. A person who can help others in this way must be in love with something. These things are hidden in his past, but I don't understand them at all. He himself has no memories at all. Engineer is just a label that makes it easy to take out technology, and helping others can only leave the label of being a good person. How can I like a person who only has labels that I don't understand? Although the origin of the protagonist probably hides the underlying setting of the world view, it really shouldn't be hidden completely. If you don't write it, there is no setting for the readers, and some things will appear inexplicable. Generally speaking, I feel that the author is deeply influenced by the so-called group portrait drama theme, so that he always strives to create some "very powerful characters", but to be honest, the label group portrait can almost be equated with Lei Dian in online articles. The label group portrait means that you have to write every character with a high proportion of the plot to be fleshed out and full of charm. But if you can't even portray the protagonist and the people around him well, how can you write a good group portrait? Then the second question, which is easy to say, is that the author tends to add value to the plot in order to appear powerful when writing the plot. For example, the vulture transportation this time is really a bit too hard. This may be a shaping of the values ​​of nomads and shamans. It was made, but it didn't have much effect. It was more inexplicable than tragic and touching: Aren't the vultures trained by you yourself responsible for saturation transportation? The warriors in the Blood Mountain Camp did not make a fuss. The number of people the Khan killed in unification was not mentioned in one stroke. The few vultures that died were numb. If the value is used too frequently and with too much force, once the object of the value and the value itself cannot withstand scrutiny, the perception will easily decline to the level of "annoying". Therefore, it is recommended to use this type of method with caution. Compared with the previous character creation problem, this is also a minor problem.

The overall impression is good. After the town is conquered, all the plots become hollow and idealized. This is actually a sign from before. The process of repelling the lord's army seems reasonable at first glance. However, if you think about it carefully, nothing is wrong. The lord's army is being beaten like a human machine. Later, the plot of finding the cat warriors after regaining the town became more and more abstract, especially the furry nomads. The empire was so arrogant, and the nomadic furry descriptions were so awesome, so why not just go south? Don't you want to? The Imperial Regent knows the awesomeness of the system under the protagonist's command, and blocks it without doing anything. There is a sense of beauty that the Demon King is sitting in the Demon King's City, waiting for the protagonist to develop well and come knock on the door. The whole book can be read in general, but it is still not to be read too intellectually.

I took one of my lungs and one kidney away from me because I glanced at the commander while passing by the colony😰

Admit it, You simply can't stand those weird aliens!!! They are different from us, You can't stand the disrespect for the remains, Today it eats the corpses of your family, and tomorrow it will use you as food! You can't bear to live surrounded by these creatures that are no different from the monsters of ancient legends, Our emotions are incompatible!!! Our logic is very different!!! Coexistence is impossible!!!!!! Now is the time, Let us regain the traditions of our ancestors.

Why do you keep writing about the protagonist's reflections when you have nothing to do... So you want to create a protagonist with extremely high morals? I don't object to having high moral standards. The question is, what does this shape? We went into the city to save people and reflected for a long time. We said that we did not transport supplies to save people with all our strength, and we also transported blue cloth to promote ourselves. While we were saving people, we were still thinking about how to let everyone remember our contribution to saving people. This is because considering the future, we need credit to take over this land. Anyway, oh, I am in so much pain - make trouble, this is no longer nitpicking, it is just looking for trouble. After that, the Holy Skull was found again soon. The protagonist said that considering the future, it cannot be used to save patients now. I want to study this. Oh, I have to reflect on how painful it is... No, let's just say, there may be similar things in reality, but everything in the novel is written by the author, and the author must have some ideas when writing this. So what is the significance of creating such a protagonist image for you, the author? Does it mean that he has extremely high moral standards and loves to reflect? It shows that he doesn't take it for granted when he takes advantage, better than those coquettish bitches who are the protagonists of other novels? Does it mean that he is extremely smart and considers future plans professionally? I wonder how many major events you wrote about the future didn't give him any dignity at all? Only a few days after taking over the city, the regent suddenly cut off the trade routes, and it was as if the sky was falling. Nothing could be transported. The Ming Dynasty and Shanxi merchants all laughed and called you a weakling. The Middle Ages, which you had laid out for half a book, suddenly became a response to the regent's will and implemented it throughout the country. Then suddenly something like death or sweat pops up, and the protagonist packs up his backpack and leaves that day... In a situation where you are constantly changing at any time, you still give up the present for the future. This feeling of separation has reached a certain level, okay?

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At present, I have read more than 300 chapters and I can't stand it anymore. The more I read, the more irritated I am. I really just want to watch the farmers. I don't want you to export so many negative emotions to me. Can you open Wushuang for them? The Thaumatologist handles it inexplicably. The Hairy Man Trial is like a hot head. I haven't been stable for two days and I am unprepared to attack the next territory. You are traveling through a different world and not playing a game! I feel like I was beaten by shouting something in a daze, and I won again in a daze.

It can be said that all the writing after the establishment of La Mancha has nothing to do with the protagonist Dragon Girl. Halfway through the writing, Cat, Mouse and Hairy Man started to write about jackals and wolves inexplicably, exaggerating the evil of the empire, but did not mention any internal problems of the empire and human beings. It seems that the whole story is completely incomprehensible. I just write whatever I dream about happening in this world.

The early stage is very good, but the later stage is inexplicable and I don't know what to do.

What are you taking risks? There is less and less sense of existence. The more you watch, the more confusing you become. The more you watch, the more boring you become. It's just a plot that doesn't involve the main character. Isn't the theme of the line bad?

How about this book? Is anyone else watching?

The author is obviously very good at starting from the small, and this book is quite outstanding in its ability to see the big from the small. But the problem is that once it fails to reflect the whole well, the story will look like a riddle, and the description will actually arouse readers' disgust.

Isn't it all in vain? It gives people a very frustrated feeling It really goes high and low At the beginning, I watched the territory construction, and then kept fighting I want to watch the war, and I also watch the battle for fun, instead of watching the characters being tortured. By the way, the readers are also tortured. Isn't the author also being tortured? Three loses, right?

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The first chapter made me think of it. I originally wanted the little dragon girl to be the dragon knight's mount. In the end, Xiao Long Niang was just a beggar Xiao Long wandering around. Later, I took her with me to cultivate fantasy novels.