All Heavens: True Martial Arts and Demonic Will

1. Literary Youth Disease 2. The protagonist lacks a sense of agency and his behavior is even more hypocritical. 3. The setting is too novel, Dugu Qiufei is a woman, Xiao Longnu is a descendant of Murong Fu and Wang Yuyan, and so is Dugu Qiufei. For those who can accept the above, this book can be regarded as food and fodder. I only read about Dugu Qiubai and Xiao Longnu's life experience, but did not read the rest.

If you don't advance the plot properly, why are you so crazy about adding those nonsense secondary designs of yours? I'm really convinced

What the hell is that Pasiba you wrote about? He is so powerful that he cannot reach the heavens. Your golden wheel will reach the tenth level in the blink of an eye. Even if you are tenth level, you beat Hong Qi like a dog. Just spank the conference, and Hong Qi will not be able to do it? Where do you put the Five Jue when you write like this? Sixteen years later, even the tenth level of the Golden Wheel will not be able to defeat Qiu Qianren. You just upgraded your Golden Wheel, and your skill doubled in just a few days? Joke! The martial arts moves are weak, and the use of weapons is even worse. How can you beat Hong Qi, not to mention that Hong Qi is now much more powerful than Jin Lun. You wrote that Jin Lun is more powerful than Hong Qi? Hong Qi couldn't catch it. Sixteen years later, the Ecstasy Palm is as powerful as the Eighteen Dragon-Subduing Palms. What's the performance of your Golden Wheel? Who can't catch it at the Wujue level? It's illogical to brag. You shouldn't do this to set off the protagonist, it's disgusting!

Really invincible: push everything, hit more than one, and win for sure. Invincible at the same level: If there are more than one at the same level, you will win for sure. Invincibility in the eyes of the author: In a one-to-one duel, I have a high winning rate. Don't trick readers into thinking they are Japanese and trick them into killing them.

As far as what Li Mochou did was done, it was not unjust, and Xiao Longnu was imprisoned. Why do you want to make such twists and turns?🙂

The battle strength is not the least bit broken, it makes people disgusted when watching it. It really makes the Tibetan barbarians look like gods, and the five unique skills of the Central Plains look like dogs. What does the author want to express in this way? He is really just like the current Gou Gongzhi, a double-standard monster who tells lies with open eyes.

The writing of Golden Wheel is so awesome! Is the Longxiang Boruo Gong blowing too hard? It is said to be a huge power. Sixteen years later, the ten-level power of the Golden Wheel will be much greater than that of the Five Jue. Not to mention it was just a breakthrough. Did sixteen years of training appear out of thin air and be even more powerful than sixteen years later in the original book? And why did Yeluqi fight Yang Guo? It's reasonable to cheat!

It's too poisonous. In order to highlight the protagonist, the author uses Hong Qigong as a stepping stone. Even if you write that the protagonist defeats Hong Qigong, I will accept it. After all, it is a combination of nine yins and nine yangs, and there are cheats that can win. It's normal, but if you write about Jin Lun The Dharma King mastered the tenth level of Dragon Elephant Prajna Kung Fu sixteen years in advance. It is already very poisonous. This directly doubled the qualifications of the Jin Lun Dharma King. It is also written that the Jin Lun Dharma King can defeat Hong Qigong in a single challenge with 300 moves without any injury. Five rounds are better than the dog-beating stick method. , Beat Hong Qigong to the verge of death, and Wu Jue had no cards at all. Qiu Qianren still fought fiercely with Jinlun Dharma King sixteen years later with thousands of moves for three days and three nights before he ran out of gas. He could still hold on until he apologized to Yinggu. The person who passed away after his great enlightenment, to put it bluntly, was consumed to death. As for the actual combat of Jin Lun Na's crotch pull at the beginning of the Divine Condor (in fact, the actual combat of Jin Lun sixteen years later is still far behind compared to Wu Jue). How can he defeat Hong Qigong? Can he throw away five wheels with every move? Can Guo Jing be allowed to come and go freely in the Mongolian camp with him and the three Mongolian heroes? (If Yang Guo hadn't tricked Guo Jing, he would have escaped unscathed at that time.) The author should respect the original work when writing fan fiction.

Are you traveling through time with your family? Boring

What is the author doing in that crazy second set? It's disappointing to watch, and it's not the main plot. What's the use of giving Xiao Longnu such a stupid identity?

This is writing martial arts as fantasy. The battle scenes have no details at all, and they are not willing to expand the plot, so the novel can only be reduced to a running account. The plot relies on the villain insulting Xiao Longnu to advance, which is too crude. It is said that it is on par with Tian Dao, but I don't see the respect and fear the characters have for the protagonist. Shang Xiuxun has become the first disciple. Under the influence, Li Tianfan still comes and speaks rudely again. It can only be said that it relies entirely on the lower third route to advance the plot, which makes people uncomfortable to watch. The evil king died so easily. Has the author ever thought about how much of the plot in the original novel is related to the evil king? How to advance the plot after the evil king dies? In the first volume, there was a Pasiba for no reason, and Hong Qigong, a five-level master, was beaten half to death by a golden wheel, another extremely poisonous thing. Writing about martial arts fan fiction is not appropriate. I suggest you finish the second volume hastily and start the fantasy book directly.

Author, you wrote about Dragon Elephant Prajna Gong so outrageously, are you a Buddhist? 5 Pieces of rubbish put together to beat up the protagonist Guo Jing, Zhou Botong and Yang Guo and run away? Take a look at what you wrote? Pasiba is your father, are you bragging like this? It is even more exaggerated to belittle the Five Jue and exalt the Pasipa Golden Wheel. A few rubbish can beat the Five Jue like a dog? I simply don't know what it means. I read more about the original book and write and make it up randomly.

In the original Jinlun actual battle, the crotch was pulled, but the mentality was not good. Before coming to the Central Plains, I probably had never encountered any real top masters to fight. Even Nimo Xing dared to fuck him. Sixteen years later, he beat Qiu Qianren to the tenth level of Dragon Elephant Prajna Kung Fu for three days and three nights. He even let people run away. He was beaten by Yideng Laoyu behind him. Tong Huanglaoxie was captured alive without any injuries (both sides were uninjured). Even if he cheats and rises to the tenth level, he still can't kill Hong Qigong without getting hurt. It's very difficult to improve the skills at the Wujue level. There is no adventure and no magical skills. Sixteen years later, Hong Qigong won't be able to kill himself without getting hurt.

The fairies living in the world are so powerful. The urban entertainment type has already dominated, and now they are attacking the heavenly types. One word is absolute.

The Dogs of Tang Dynasty are really disgusting. The main character Ssangyong is a trash talker and has a disgusting mouth. The Dugu family has already drawn swords and yet they accept disciples. It's really cool.

I read the last book, Ma Xingkong, and it was very good. The author is really suitable for writing martial arts, stories, fighting, training, and the writing style is very good. This book also continues the writing style and can write its own story within the original framework. You can tell what most chapters are about just by looking at the title. The lack of expectations is a big problem; This is my first time traveling with my wife and children, so I must be very excited. If nothing else, after the Tang Dynasty, the son had a wife and children. Will you have to wear it again with a big family? Are you driving a train? There are endless descendants! Also, there is a lack of details. Different worlds have different character relationships. The Divine Eagle is okay. After all, some character relationships have naturally developed since childhood. By the time of the Tang Dynasty, it was basically empty. It was all castles in the air. There was no excitement and no story. For example, the arrangement of the story by the big eagle is a huge failure. People ride the eagle everywhere, and all possibilities for story development on the road are eliminated. What else do you write? In this regard, you should study hard. The sword comes from Hengshan and the sword comes from the Tang Dynasty. So, based on my many years of experience, I predict that this book by the author will still be a success. It's a pity about the writing style. Let's think about the writing method again. Toad once said that writers usually write with a 4 or 5 score and write a 6 or 7 score. I feel like you are doing exactly the opposite. After the adjustment, the future can be expected.

Can the author come out and talk for a while? I am the one who encouraged you and was cummed by you. I have read your various responses to this plot, and let me remind you that this is not a question of who is stronger or weaker, Hong Qi or Jin Lun, this is a question of the Eighteen Palms of Subduing the Dragon! What are the actual achievements of Dragon-Elephant Prajna Kung Fu? Is it impossible to defeat the top players? Isn't it controversial that the sweeping monk Jinshu ranks first in martial arts? The three-foot air wall is indestructible, right? Gang leader Xiao vomited blood with a subdued dragon strike, and he could be killed by turning on his health bar! He personally admits that he is the strongest in the world. Doesn't he know the secret Tibetan Dragon Elephant Kung Fu? Then if you write about the Three Kingdoms later, will you break Lu Bu's Fangtian Painted Halberd and Guan Yu's Qinglong Yanyue Sword? Did you break the Ruyi Golden Cudgel by writing about Journey to the West? As long as martial arts from various schools use palm techniques, are the Eighteen Dragon Subduing Palms the first to appear?

Divine Condor

The protagonist can create kung fu, and the only kung fu he can obtain is the Iron Palm and the Divine Foot Sutra (it should also be the original one from the Shendiao Era, right?). The Yi Jin Jing has too many tricks, so forget it Internal Kung Fu has Yin and Yang, swordsmanship can be complex or simple, and there are Light and heavy, skillful and clumsy, hard and soft palms, surface and interior, fast and slow It's time to eliminate the unnecessary and keep the essential, cut out the complex and simplify it, extract the essence and use macros, outline and draw out the lead, accumulate thick and thin, integrate and comprehend, and introduce the new.

Get rid of the label "Invincible Flow". You can't deceive people like this.

I see in your profile that the protagonist is the Patriarch, a sword master. Why is Yang Guo also a sword master? What do you mean, the patriarch and the disciples below are on the same level? Don't say that Zhenwu is better than Ziwei. To put it more seriously, Ziwei can be said to be a candidate for the No. 1 Position.

When do you go to work? Do you really think of yourself as a member of a public institution? Do you have to take seven days off?

The second change was correct. There was no unreasonable bloody plot between Master Xiao Longnu and Ouyang Feng. The reason why Ouyang Feng regained his memory was also changed to practicing the correct Nine Yin Manual, coupled with Li Mochou's finishing touch, and Ouyang Feng did not kill Grandma Sun for Yang Guo, and his literary proficiency plummeted.

The writing is good, and the ideas have been explored by various authors. It is good to just describe love, hate, love and hatred in the magical secrets. There are too few updates and I can't catch up. See you in a year.

In fact, bookworms are very familiar with these popular novels by Jin Yong, from the stories to the characters. If you still want to write fan fiction, you have to start from other aspects in order to have new ideas.

It's still pretty much the same as Jin Yong's colleagues in the past, with no new ideas.

Should I write or not? Why don't we talk?

This rhythm is pretty good. Don't pay attention to what some people say and keep your own style. I seem to be dreaming back to the passion I had when I watched "The Immortal in the Gourd". I read it day and night without noticing the passage of time. I talked about my cultivation and growth, and my actions were logical. I like this kind of rhythm that is not brainless and invincible. Come on, the author, monthly tickets are supported 😁👍

Doesn't the swordsmanship in Chapter 6 have internal strength?

Go to Lingjiu Palace. There are martial arts in the cave.