Douluo Dalu: The AFK System, Spreading My Teachings to the World

After reading 5 chapters, I didn't understand any of my writing. Instead, I wrote a lot of narrations about the original plot...

There are too many narrations, talking about various things in the original work, but too little description of the protagonist.

I feel that the few books you have written have too many narrations, too many explanations, and too few real-life descriptions. For example, in this book, the protagonist was taken to kill the soul beast, and he only wrote a few sentences, and then there were long paragraphs of narration and explanations.

Uh-huh, everyone who writes this kind of Douluo novels has a problem. They like to increase the IQ of Tang's continent, and they like to add endless obstacles to the protagonist's path. No buddy, I came to read a book not to see the endless obstacles on my face, but to feel good. I was just about to feel good in chapter 63. I could develop and grow first, and then a ferocious beast brushed my face. I knew it would definitely be solved but I didn't want to read anymore. Think about it for yourself. It can be said that the protagonist has been being determined in so many chapters. He could obviously develop to the point where he can make his own decisions, but he threw himself into the whirlpool of being determined. It makes people laugh.

It's so ridiculous, it's like writing an outline and then using AI to expand the sentences. I ramble on and on, wishing I could explain the solar system to you just by looking at the sun, and give you a science introduction to the composition of air after taking a breath.

Not bad,,, it has been good, almost 100 pictures, and there is no content at all. It's amazing.,,, The protagonist has been trying to kill himself from the beginning, and he is still self-righteous. It's inexplicable. The plug-in can't be used yet. It's written like this.,,, It's also a talent., I can't even tell whether you are mass-produced by a studio or Ai, and you can still send it out without writing anything., The author is amazing

Rubbish, really. The protagonist is idle and is still joking with his own life. In order to prevent Xiao Wu from exposing himself, he gambles with his own life. Please, for a hundred thousand years, a pig will not be stupid even if it lives for only one hundred thousand years. During this period, how many people have been killed and eaten too much? Young beasts, a cold-hearted group, The original book likes Tang San, not because of blood attraction, or directly, someone controls it, Anyway, I want to persuade him to quit, The protagonist has cheats, a prophet, and is very likely to become a god and live forever, and you bet on this?

I don't even know how to comment. First I said that I would compete with Tang San for the divine throne, but now I'm saying that I don't want to compete with the God Realm, and I will become a traitor 🤔

Chen Shushu, have you considered setting up a group? I feel like your writing is getting worse and worse now. The real world novel is really the best Genshin Impact fanfic I have ever read.

After watching it, I felt like I had a headache. We found a small amount of plot in the large amount of analysis and settings in the book. The protagonist is not important, the setting is not important, and the analysis is the most important.