Building the Foundation of Douluo, Roaming the Heavens

Author, you who wrote Zhu Tianwen just killed Tang San in this competition, and then fucked Shura, and then Zhu Tianwen became invincible. Don't be so cheap and annoying. You have been writing for so long, and there is no climax. It is just mediocre. What are you doing? Tang San is obviously so disgusting, just because you want you to write so disgusting. If you kill them, why are you dragging your feet now? You still hide your level and hide a ball. Just kill them all in one go in the finals.

You have to worry about this Under One Person. Even if you write about a dragon, it will be better than Under One Person.

It's well written, but it's a little offbeat in some places. For example, in the latest chapter, Xueer, you also know that in some fantasy worlds, there are spiritual chefs and herbal chefs. And you don't stop writing, which is very uncomfortable to watch. You didn't fix the quotation marks in the dialogue. You can break up a few more chapters. Overall, the writing is good.

I hope you can stop licking Bibi Dong, the little fairy, and let her die. Don't accept such white-eyed wolves. It's so disgusting to see that there are so many good women in the world, why do they have to wash themselves like this?

The first three chapters have been identified as self-interest stories, and they have been setting up nonsensical wishes.

The author worked hard and spent tens of thousands of words in the previous chapters to give the protagonist so many awesome settings and background. In fact, you don't have to work so hard. You can just summarize the protagonist in four words: "All your wishes come true"

After reading so much, I still don't want to deal with Tang San, so I'll say goodbye

Not segmented? Is such a long paragraph appropriate?

Byd AI's water-filling writing is so verbose

There are too many fandoms under one person, and the quality is poor, and now it has become disgusting.