Miss, Let Me Check That

This kind of love that requires constant self-sacrifice is too heavy; this kind of love that ends without saying goodbye is too burdensome. In this day and age, does anyone still believe that sacrificing oneself will necessarily make the other person's life better? Love is about mutual support and understanding. I think the female and male leads saying goodbye before leaving is far more touching than this act of leaving without a word, far more moving for oneself but causing pain to the other.

Ah! Let me say a few words. I'm not trying to belittle it, it's just that I personally don't like books that incorporate political intrigue. The main problem is that the plot is too subtle. I feel this book follows the path of high-dimensional martial arts immortals. High-dimensional martial arts immortals are more exciting; you can cut down anyone who disagrees, and you can cut down everything that disagrees.

I've read it through from beginning to end, and it really gets better with each chapter. The first few chapters were so awkward they made my scalp tingle, but the later ones were mostly fine. There are two issues, though. First, the male lead's plans repeatedly put him in danger.

Will you take in the entire harem? This is the only flavor I like.

The romance is well-written, but the main storyline is really slow. I initially thought the protagonist was going to rebel, but it turns out it's about helping someone else rise to power and the end of the world. Judging from the protagonist's current abilities, he couldn't accomplish anything without being a kept man. One female lead helps him today, another tomorrow.

Damn it, Los Angeles was already burned down at 4 a. M.

It's well-written, quite on par with my own writing back in the day, very good!

You're still young, so why not grit your teeth and write 4,000 words? After all, it's online writing. But 4,000 words seems a bit lazy, and readers won't enjoy it. Why not just write 6,000? That would be much more standard. But since you've already written 6,000, why not add another 4,000, making it 10,000? That would be a completely different level.

There are still a few chapters left until the latest chapter. I'm getting a bit tired of reading, so I'll rest for a while. Overall, it's not bad, but the pacing is a bit flat (the only ups and downs I felt were in the part where the prince is imprisoned after killing him; that part was well-written, but the scene of the people pleading for justice felt a bit awkward, like the foreshadowing…

My post got deleted. I read over ten chapters, and there wasn't anything particularly bad about it, just one or two places where the descriptions felt a bit overdone, haha. The beginning was great, very enjoyable. I'll leave more comments below this thread later.