Longevity Begins as a Sect Servant

There is a real ghost in this novel. Others' breakthroughs are like drinking water. The protagonist's breakthroughs can never keep up. Everyone is in the Qi training period, and the protagonist is far ahead. Later, the protagonist is exhausted and exhausted to reach the golden elixir. His original Taoist companion Tan Qingxue has also practiced the void, and there are Nascent Soul, God Transformation, and Void Refining in the middle. This makes no sense. It takes another two thousand years to practice these three realms. Hasn't Tan Qingxue already become an immortal? My wife Gu Hong died, the Taoist monk ran away with her, and my son and grandson were hacked to death. This is not the protagonist. He is clearly a miserable master 😭

To briefly summarize the plot, in order to make up for his regrets, a big devil who has exceeded the limit of the map plans to sacrifice himself, start a world-destroying war, and restore the past. With his planning and fueling, the map-limited combat duo executed most of the plan. The protagonist is the sacrifice at key points in the plan. He sought life from death and achieved immortality. The story is not novel, but the setting is a bit confusing. But the writing is very good, the description of wisdom is insightful, the characters are well created, and the emotional description is very tense, which makes the text have extraordinary credibility, appeal and vitality. This is the quality of a masterpiece and the basis of a phenomenal work. From this perspective, the author already has the foundation and possibility to write a hit masterpiece. In terms of specific writing, the author has reached a considerable level. But it is a pity that compared to the text, the author's macro control is quite poor, which is why this work is not accepted. Firstly, this article is by no means a Gou Daoliu. The essence of Gou Daoliu lies not in the description of Gou, but in the interpretation of flowers and moon under the power of time: they are both fragmented, lamenting the ruthlessness of time and the insignificance of individuals; but they also have the reunion and separation of flowers and moon. Every performance of Hua Yue makes people feel helpless but heartbroken. As long as such scenes are frequently written in a novel, it is Goudaoliu. The most exciting part about Gou Daoliu is the pretentious plot where Gou Wan comes out to clean up the mess. These two points are almost absent in this novel, but the label and novel title emphasize them. This results in the book's audience being unable to see it, and those who do see it will be disgusted by this behavior of selling sheep's meat to others. This is the number one factor affecting performance and reputation. Second, the work is too short, resulting in high information density. However, it is not intuitive emotional information. It cannot provide readers with rich emotional experience and at the same time, it cannot smoothly convey information to readers. The length of this book needs to be at least 300,000 words longer, and all the events in the second half of the book will be told in a more simple way, so as to meet the casual nature of online writing. Thirdly, there is a problem with the rhythm of the work, which makes the reading experience too tiring. One wave after another, without any rest and relaxation in between, just slap the reader to death on the beach, which does not look leisurely. Fourth, the protagonist's character is not likeable. Of course, this is the author's deliberate decision after multiple considerations. The protagonist's character serves the entire story, which ensures the integrity of the story. The protagonist's character is reasonable and self-consistent, ensuring characterization. Only the process of shaping, that is, the form of expression, is open to question. Like Master Gu's Fang Yuan, he is just as heinous, but he still has a unique charm. This is what the shaping process looks like. For example, Tan Qingxue in this article can actually consider changing to a different approach, changing to a entangled character, instead of appearing in such a way that readers are alienated. All in all, this is a work that can give people an extraordinary emotional experience, the words touch the soul, and it is a masterpiece of expression. However, some fatal problems prevent it from being known to others, which is really a pity. So I wrote this, hoping that the author can keep up his efforts and write a real hit. At the same time, I also hope that some readers can see it and give a certain degree of tolerance to a work above the standard.

Crazy tormenting the protagonist, it's so frustrating to watch, and he's reincarnated, and everyone plots against the protagonist 😰

This author likes to write cuckold stories so much? Why don't you write a protagonist who plays the flute outside the screen? It's all just as disgusting anyway.

After seeing the Battle of Tianyang City and hiding in the stinking ditch for 22 years, I finally couldn't continue reading. Here are my thoughts on this book. The early writing of this book is very good, and it has a sense of substitution, but the plot begins to fall apart from the moment the life is threatened 1. The world of immortality is actually dominated by conspiracy and conspiracy. In this world where great power belongs to oneself, the game of strength must be put first, not conspiracy. The destruction of the Xuanyang Sect was too magical, and the duel between the top leaders was not written. The Xuanyang master made an overhaul of the alchemy, but the death was brushed off, too lightly. To win by righteousness and surprise, strength is the first priority. 2. The demon sect is too magical, and the robbery of the body at the risk of life is too unreasonable. If the seizure of the body has no cost and can be performed easily, then the world of immortality will inevitably have a solidified class. The younger generation will have no future, and the seizure of the body must be restricted. The dual cultivation method of plundering is somewhat reasonable, but Objectively speaking, it will cause women to have no future. The accompanying ability to change body shape and appearance is too outrageous, and the disguise is acceptable, but imitating another person is too magical; the puppet technique is also outrageous, and the puppet can actually break through the realm. It is too natural, and it is better to write it as a prohibition, coercion and control. 3. The golden fingers are not written well. There are two golden fingers for the protagonist, the memory of the Immortal Casting Technique and the True Pill Overhaul in the previous life. The skills still have some sense of existence, but the difference in the level of the skills is not written, which is somewhat lacking; the True Pill Overhaul is not noticeable at all, which is a failure. 4. The feeling of satisfaction is not expressed in the writing. Gou Daowen writes that the protagonist behaves in a low-key manner, secretly develops, and sacrifices stimulation for stability. The feeling of satisfaction lies in the sense of security. The protagonist often fights for his life and performs various extreme operations. The author also writes that he is constantly being watched, which is so outrageous that he feels like a ray of light on his back. The protagonist does not write much when he is at ease, but focuses on writing about extreme excitement, which has deviated from Gou Daowen's starting point for writing. If Baihu City was refining the foundation-building elixir and refining the formation for Xu, why not leave? You have to make a fuss, right? 5. The changes in the improvement of the level of strength are not written out. The strength of the immortal world is the first, but the protagonist still looks like a Qi-training monk after building the foundation. The changes brought about by the improvement of the big level are too little, so that there is no deserved sense of satisfaction. 6. Mechanical deity, the two sisters in the spirit world are too outrageous. Tan Qingxue, who has no intention of cultivating immortals but can rise step by step, is outrageous.

，，，，，， As far as several relationships are concerned, Ang Lee's first wife, Tan Qingying, had a honeymoon period, but the author has repeatedly emphasized that Ang Lee has no love for Tan, only benefit.       At that time, Li An obtained the first magic skill, Yin Yang Magic Skill, and he was with Tan for the purpose of practicing. This is the reason I think it was just for profit. In order to feel guilty, Li An saved Tan once (rescued once without any human kindness), and that time it was Xuanyang. The sect was destroyed, and as for the time when he attacked Fangshi with his life in hand, it was the Xuanyang sect who acted as the bait, and Xu Qiuhui saved Tan. It was also because of that time that Li An recognized Tan clearly, so he practiced magic with dual cultivation, and felt a little guilty towards Tan, so he saved Tan once. Later, Li An felt that he no longer owed him anything, and then Tan was possessed by the demon queen, and he felt the breath of the life seed during the blood exchange. Li An didn't know, even if Tan gave Li An a top-quality infant transformation pill, Li An didn't have much ripples in his heart, so Tan remarried, and the two broke up peacefully. The second wife, Gu Hong, may be a difficult passage for most readers. Li An is the kind of person who does not fall in love first. He needs someone to warm him up before he can enter his heart, but he will not give up his life for anyone. In this setting of the world, the person who often enters his heart must be the kind of person who can give up his life for him, so happiness will be short-lived and the end will not be good. Back to the topic, Li An used Gu Hong from the beginning. He does that to everyone. He thought about how to use it from the beginning. Gu Hong was kidnapped and used as a furnace, so she was not a virgin. She has been keeping her virginity since she was rescued by Li An. She is not a slut, just a victim. Li An has always avoided sluts. The only few times he did it were when Li An's life was threatened and he had to make compromises.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                       . Maybe it was because of Gu Hong that Li An was kind enough to Shangguan Xiaoxiao after he fell in love with her. Or maybe it was because he only had Yuan Lingshi and didn't do any tricks. He was of great help to Li An and the two of them had been together for a long enough time. Shangguan Xiaoxiao's Ang Lee is completely capable of handling the snack machine, but Ang Lee has been avoiding Shangguan Xiaoxiao's feelings. I think it is because of the three major tribulations. It is not clear how the author will write the follow-up. Personally, I feel that following Shangguan Xiaoxiao will not have a good result. To sum up, at least I don't think it is a cuckold story. However, if I say that Li An is a scumbag, I agree with both hands. This is from God's perspective. Readers can see that his eldest apprentice, Lihua, his second apprentice Yun Mo, and his third apprentice won. I don't remember what they won 🤭. Xiang Yuntian and others all think that this guy is really a good person 🙂

After reading novels for so many years, this is the first time I have seen someone with a selfish and cold nature written in such an upright and honest way, which is awesome 👍

After reading Chapter 6, an old monster who has been reborn for hundreds of years is living like a dog in this life. He also laughs at others for being like dogs. At least others are really fledgling and bullied. The protagonist wants to be a dog himself. He has been practicing as an immortal for hundreds of years. This is his character.

Oh, Sun Jinxue, who had slept with the protagonist for a long time, went to sleep with the protagonist's enemy because the protagonist's backer had fallen? Great idea from the author! The protagonist doesn't care at all, and the author also said that if the protagonist has a little mood swing because of her, it will be a waste. The author has practiced ninjutsu to a high level! So, who said this was a cuckold story? Of course there are many readers!

It was good in the front, but why did it turn into a cuckold story in the back?