Mercenaries and Adventurers

That is to say, I don't think the protagonist will develop in the direction of a magic swordsman in the future. If he is a pure warrior, why not learn magic? Are there any considerations? And the knight, what I want to talk about is the protagonist's fighting style. Will he fight immediately like a knight? Will you do mounts again in the future?

Why no guns? Doesn't it mean that magical civilization is highly advanced? At least there should be fire guns! And why don't you just post a long comment? It's so painful to read paragraph by paragraph! You didn't even see the comment I just posted below.

What I am talking about is, is there a country with a central unified system similar to an empire? In that case, mass-producing weapons shouldn't be a problem, right? And didn't you say that magic in this world is highly advanced? There should be a magic gun, right? Or is it similar to World of Warcraft?

It's actually on the shelves. It's a sign of perseverance to persist for so long, from never signing a contract to signing and finally being put on the shelves.

This "Power for Love" is really awesome. I watched it for a while when I was 23 years old. At that time, it only had 14 monthly votes and 3 million words. One year has passed in the blink of an eye, and I didn't expect you to still keep writing. I remember you said at the time that you were interested in starting a sci-fi wasteland in the future Dude, I guess you're middle class or above in reality? If finances and time permit, let's write and have fun. After all, this is really not the traditional way of writing online articles. You want to write it as a diary! I'm afraid I didn't come from another world, so just edit the diary and send it back 😁 It is definitely impossible to write down your grades. If you look carefully, you will find that you are really trying your best to write every detail clearly. Do you really regard the protagonist Zhao Ji in the book as yourself in another world? Another one, even though your plot is ridiculously slow, even though your plot is as bland as water, and even though your results are unsightly, there are still 600 people leaving inscriptions of appreciation for you in the comment area Between the lines of the book, there is no desire for fragments of Ferrari, just plain and relaxed, like taking a nap on a recliner in the afternoon, and suddenly a copy of "The Story of the Horizon" flies into the palm of your hand. It is very comfortable. Of course, you can also really try to write a purely descriptive chapter. The imaginary scenery of another world is very interesting. I rarely see this kind of online article. This kind of extremely long online article is just really boring. Having said this, it is no longer necessary to keep it secret. I wish you happiness every day when you write.

The kingdom's capital city, dwarves, and elves said they wanted to go out for a walk, but after three and a half years and more than 4 million words, they have only left Novice Town. Can't you rush to write 20 million words?

This author is much better than other authors. Other authors would have run away long ago if they wrote like this.

The writing of this book is not good. What attracts me is that the author details the growth of a young man in a fantasy world (both in terms of strength and mind). There is a simple view of good and evil at the beginning, including helping farmers fight goblins, and fighting robbers later. But in the third volume, the flavor changes drastically. Following Knight Crow, he burns, kills and plunders in the name of knights. If it is said that killing surrendered people in the Chamber of Commerce is life. However, when I was escaping from the eagle monster and dealing with the village later, and later after receiving the refugee mission, I only focused on completing the mission and destroying the lives of various towns and villages. When I went to the Dwarf Valley to forcefully invade and fight, what I saw was a bandit who did not regard the lower class as human beings, just to complete the mission, and likes to use the mission as a name and legitimacy to comfort himself and the readers. Of course, you can tell the way. The protagonist has also accomplished some "just" things, such as rescuing refugees and killing bandits. For example, the Dwarf Valley may have liberated the squeezed human farmers. (I stopped reading the third volume after entering the Dwarf Valley. There may be similar whitewashing later, but in my opinion, it is indiscriminate to force into a land that already has original residents in order to allow refugees to have land. The protagonist does not consider the original inhabitants during this period. With the destruction of the residents, there is only the excitement of completing the task. No matter how I try to make up for it later, I think the protagonist is disgusting), but the protagonist's attitude towards the people below and his obedience to the so-called unreasonable conditions of his superiors, such as forcibly killing surrendered people and disregarding his own strength to complete the task, completely illustrate the so-called cowardly style of flattering the superior and bullying the subordinate. What is the personality charm of this protagonist? Of course, the author can say that the people below are not all kind-hearted. The medieval Western European peasants who are generally used as the basis for farmers in fantasy worlds are inherently ignorant and rude. For example, it can be said that in this Western fantasy world that only pays attention to strength, it is rare for the Baron and Crow Knight to help the protagonist grow. How can he disobey? After all, he must grow. However, such a world has always been like this, but in such a world, some people can write a mercenary character who has personality and is not disgusting (open your mission log), but some authors can only write a mercenary character who is disgusting, flatters superiors and subordinates, and is blindly arrogant when dealing with things (the expansion before fighting Spider Warcraft in the second volume, the expansion when fighting werewolves) and temporary disregard for the bottom class. Why is this? What I want to see is the growth of a protagonist with a bottom line, charisma and shining points, rather than a gradually alienated protagonist who can only talk nonsense and run around here and there, recognizing a bunch of scum as his respected elders, so I will give you a reward of 500 points to say goodbye. By the way, the last thing I want to say is that the fighting you wrote is terrible, and the various characters can't stand up when talking. Even if you try to supplement it with various life details, they don't look like people at all. Overall, the story seems too boring. Although today's fantasy books There has also begun to be a trend of micromanaging everything, but if you look at your mission log, I have a mission log and Goblin relies heavily on these books. Yours is a real book. The characters have no shining points, the plot is boring, and the force settings are ups and downs (I don't understand what you wrote. The book is also 21 years old, why do you still use the ridiculous knight class and the so-called life force? There are so many good books in DND to learn from? How do you get into the knighthood? In this kind of slow-paced book, the accumulation of force can be slow or small, but the settings and standards for force growth must be clear, otherwise readers will be impatient to get through what you said at the beginning, which is why you have never been able to sign the contract). Although it can be seen that you wrote this book with great care, and your plot is not unintelligent, it is really not because other book reviews said that you are not a novice and therefore your grades are so bad that you cannot sign a contract, but because the settings, plots, and characters you wrote are not interesting enough (although you have shown many of your settings and characters in the post) The background story, but the knight's life force gave me the same sense of déjà vu as seeing fighting spirit. It's really hard to comment. I thought this was written by a junior high school student who had never been exposed to excellent western fantasy works? It feels like the protagonist of Chapter 1 and the protagonist of Chapter 1000 will be surprised by each other when they meet. I hope you will continue to work hard, and I hope you can write better books in the future.

What is the main point of this book? It feels like neither a character nor a story. The whole article is filled with tons of details. You may say it's sloppy, but it's very solid in every aspect. You might say it's not slick, but it feels like the writing is not refined. It just feels like it's splashed out. Everywhere is uniform, but the focus and backbone can't be found. However, the author is still very talented. He can write what he wants to write, and he also likes what he writes. This is better than many people. I wonder if the author will continue writing after he finishes writing this book? I feel that the author has the qualifications to become a great master, but is slightly lacking in experience. It would be a pity if he didn't write.

I know why the author has poor grades and can't sign a contract, because you are writing a story rather than a novel. For example, this sword-forging competition has twenty-one chapters, and some things are written in too much detail. After all, you are writing a novel, not a story. Even if the stories are honest, they are rarely so detailed, which leads to unsatisfactory results. For this sword-forging competition, the daily plot can be simplified to three to five pictures instead of twenty-one. I don't know how other people feel, but to me this is a running account. . . I don't know if the author understands what I mean.