The Supreme Being Who Devoured the Starry Sky Asked

Please write a long review. After all, such a good Devouring fanfic is too rare. I hope the author will improve it. When I first started reading this book, I had the urge to give up the book and leave almost three times. However, there were too few fans and the results were pretty good, so I forced myself to endure it. Let's talk about the poisonous point first. The protagonist of a book was beaten once at the beginning. Apart from anything else, the protagonist is an 18-year-old senior martial artist, and he can even become a quasi-martial artist in no time. If you don't say good friends, at least you won't be beaten. So this is a huge poisonous point at the beginning. To be honest, it is too torturous to do this at the beginning. The reason turned out to be because the protagonist has the same name as others. The second point is that the villain at the beginning is brainless. Why does Li Wei get into trouble with the protagonist? Because he likes the same person as the protagonist. Please ask someone like Li Wei, but his parents are the top gods of war who can offer a reward of 100 billion. Can a big star like this without a backstage be able to run away with just one sentence? Even if someone loses their mind and wants to pursue her, they will look down on the protagonist who just likes the heroine, so they can't deliberately target the protagonist. This section shows that the villain has no IQ. The third point is that Uncle Eagle is chasing the protagonist. There is a lot of foreshadowing and a lot of descriptions of the villain. It is really uncomfortable to watch. I have a suggestion for this. Author, you'd better revise the content of the previous ten chapters. It's better to remove the appearance of Li Wei and his younger brother. It's better to change the reason why the protagonist offends him. This kind of plot about women offending the villain was popular many years ago. It's poisonous now. So here is a suggestion, try not to use a large space to describe the villain. For example, for example, in Snow Eagle, the Warcraft assassinates the protagonist, do not describe the whole scene of the Warcraft dialogue. If you want to write about a villain who attacks the protagonist. Just write about the protagonist suddenly encountering some kind of crisis, such as an assassination or other reasons. Just make it up during the process, or write down the reasons after the end, so as not to make the villain appear too brainless or make the protagonist particularly uncomfortable to watch. If you have to describe the crisis that the protagonist will encounter before the incident begins, try not to reveal too much. For example, take an example, which is basically a plot that is indispensable in the Devouring fandom, which is the incident of being assassinated by the Zerg. Don't make the assassination machine too unpredictable, lest the villain appear to be brainless. Many book friends are saying that Lord Snow Eagle takes place an unknown number of years after Devouring. In fact, this point can be easily solved. After all, it is inevitable that there will be differences between the fanfic and the original work. It can be easily solved by saying that it is a parallel time and space. Secondly, there is one thing that I hope the author can pay attention to, and that is the comparison of realms. In my opinion, there is no problem that the true god in Snow Eagle should benchmark against the strongest person in the universe. This means that the progress of the Snow Eagle chapter cannot be too fast. After all, the time to become a true god in Snow Eagle Lord is too fast. It cannot be said that it is fast, but it can only be said that there is too little written about the protagonist from the first level to the fourth level of heaven. However, the protagonist will quickly realize the true meaning of the first grade in Snow Eagle and then be accepted as a disciple. Therefore, the protagonist will soon become a true god, that is, the strongest person in the universe. The advice given here is that it is best to focus on swallowing in the early and middle stages. After writing the swallowing starry sky, you can go through reincarnation. It is best for the protagonist to have just realized the heart of a first-level god and become a world god, and then use Snow Eagle as the main character. Just slow down the flow of time to almost a stop. Otherwise, this book will be finished quickly. I remember that there seems to be a setting in Lord Snow Eagle, that is, the Dharma learned before becoming the God of the Universe seems to be impossible to use due to the differences in the source world. For example, Snow Eagle re-understood the void when he first traveled through it. However, because the origin has figured out that as long as one understands the way of the universe god, it can be used in other origin worlds. I hope the author doesn't throw away this setting.

I have been looking for a good fan novel since I finished Tomato Swallowing the Starry Sky. Until I saw this one, my wish for many years was fulfilled. I highly recommend it.

This chapter says that you can only post 150 words at a time, but you can't finish it. It's troublesome to post more than once. Now I'll summarize my feelings after reading this chapter. Dear author, this is your book. My comments seem to be a little prescriptive. But there are some things that would be uncomfortable if left unsaid, so please don't suggest them. First of all, there is the issue of the Zerg Mother Queen. You may have forgotten the author. In the original work, Luo Feng held 500 billion Hunyuan and failed to achieve the Zerg Mother Queen to break through the immortal level. I just re-read it and mentioned it in Chapter 15 and Chapter 60 of the original work. This is just a small problem. The second point is that even if the master of the protagonist is the Lord of Darkness, it is impossible to give the protagonist a high-level soul treasure. The theoretical value of the high-level soul treasure is higher than the top attack treasure. Only a master of the universe in the human race can give a top treasure. The high-level soul treasure must first be satisfied with the master of the universe of the race. In terms of value, it is comparable to the Sirius Palace of the Lord of the Heavenly Wolf. Of course, there is no problem if the Lord of Darkness gives it to me forcefully. After all, what I get is my freedom. However, the soul defense function is only at the level of ordinary treasures, and high-level treasures that can only increase the power of the world master by tens of millions of times are really not suitable for his identity. I remember saying this when King True Eye became the Venerable. Generally, the venerable ones have 100 million times the power of the world lord. For the Universe Venerable, the increase is less than ten percent. Moreover, the will of the Lord of the Universe is not yet able to deliver all the high-level soul treasures with enhanced abilities. Might as well set it up as a slightly special soul defense treasure. The third point is to quantify the soul. It is better to directly set it so that the will of the world lord can get ten times the power of the world lord, the ordinary immortal will can get a hundred times the power of the world lord, the immortal will of the lord can get a thousand times the power of the world lord, the will of the king level can get 10,000 times the power of the world lord, the will of the universe lord can get 100,000 times the power of the world lord, the will of the high venerable can get a million times the power of the world lord, and the will of the universe overlord can get tens of millions of times the power of the world lord. In this way, the introduction is very clear, but the data quantification is incomprehensible. In the end, I actually want to see the protagonist kill a venerable person at the realm lord level. It is impossible to create a record. In fact, it is not impossible. First of all, if the protagonist can deliver all the abilities of the treasure, it is tens of millions of times the power of the world master, and the amplitude of consciousness is 100 times. In theory, it is the power of one billion world masters plus the magic sound secret method. It is completely possible to kill the universe master at the world master level. Don't worry that this book will collapse. The simple truth is that the power of the realm master given by the treasure is just addition, so it is simpler and more crude to say it this way. With the protagonist's foundation and tens of millions of times the power of the World Lord, it is completely possible to kill the Lord of the Universe. In the original work, Luo Feng stayed in the immortal stage for a very short time. If he didn't make progress quickly, he would soon be overtaken by Luo Feng. After all, Luo Feng was so crazy. It only took him tens of thousands of years to reach the level of a high-level cosmic master, and then he even rivaled the Lord of the Universe when time accelerated. If you don't turn on larger plug-ins, you won't be able to play at all. And according to the pace of this book, the 900,000-word book has not yet become a world leader. When the time comes, I will write 100,000 words for Snow Eagle, that is, 1 million words will be returned to Swallow. During the realm master period, I will be able to become a Universe Venerable by writing only 100,000 words. In other words, 1.2 Million words are written about the Lord of the Universe. One and a half million words were written about Master of the Universe until it was finished and swallowed. Theoretically, 1.7 Million words can end Devouring. But because of the cross snow eagle, I am afraid it will take 2 million words to finish the devouring journey. Then focus on Snow Eagle and finish it after writing a little bit. Promise me, okay? I want to see the protagonist, a world lord, kill a cosmic lord. But when the time comes, the Breakthrough Master will probably directly become the overlord of the universe. Haha, after writing so much, I finally vomited out all the shortcomings I had after reading this chapter. The above is all my nonsense. Please don't mind me. .

After reading Chapter 73, although the plot feels a bit copied, at least the sentences are smooth. There is no feeling of chaos. I offer two monthly tickets and three recommendations as a token of encouragement. Come on, write down your own feelings.

The protagonist travels back in time and has no relationship with his previous family and friends. Don't bring him in directly. It's easy to create drama. If it's not easy to write emotional drama, it will be downplayed.

There is not much passion in these recent chapters. In the previous chapters, the fight was too fast and too high. Now the protagonist has no opponent.

It's too easy to reduce the popularity of a novel after updating it all the time. If the topic of the fandom is so popular, if you are stuck on innovation or don't have time to write it properly, you may get some inspiration by posting a few pictures. At present, this book is considered a good one in the fanfic, but it cannot be updated. Most people see this update speed. The first idea is to keep a few, and then I will either forget about it or read pirated copies. The updates are not fixed at night or in the afternoon, so it is better to post them at a fixed time. Also, if you really want to write a chapter, then write a few more chapters a day. The quality is not enough, so you have to make up for the word size! Come on, author!

Finally I saw a fanfic about "Lord Snow Eagle", I was so moved! ! ! Thanks to the author. As long as you dare to write 8 million words, I will keep chasing you.

Chaos City is in the universe of the original ancestors, and the origin of the law cannot come.

This book is still good. Support the author.

I often take leave recently. This is very bad

This is my first tip, come on with the wind, your body comes first!

This book is actually quite good, but I still can't hold it up anymore, so I have to withdraw it. The heroine I wrote in the beginning has a disgusting character, and then the author said that she should tone it down, and then I thought about reading it again. But every few chapters, the woman will appear once to disgust people. It's not that you can't have a heroine, but even if you are a flower vase, you have to write it in a lovable way.

I hope the author will not be lazy and let the protagonist go to the world of Blood Luo, let alone crush Luo Feng without thinking! The first Blood Luo World is a mission in the Secret Realm of Taichu. I personally think that it was specially selected by the Virtual Company in order to train Luo Feng, the man who took away the golden-horned beast. It is impossible for the Virtual Company to arrange a mission for Xia Zhi, a person who walks in time and space, to go to the Blood Luo World to train like this. The task of raising beasts and gods, The attitude of the virtual company towards the core members who are born in genius warfare is very obvious. Before Immortality, they tried their best to cultivate and protect them. Of course, this kind of cultivation and protection is to give you the opportunity. Whether you can get it depends on your own chance and choice rather than giving it directly! In fact, normally speaking, the golden-horned giant beast should not be given up to Luo Feng. After all, giving birth to a clone is more valuable and more in line with human nature for Xia Zhi. The existence of Xia Zhi itself must have changed Luo Feng's trajectory. It is lazy to let Luo Feng follow the trajectory of the original! For example, it would be more reasonable for Luo Feng to obtain the Nine Tribulations Secret Code in advance and other opportunities that he did not get in the original work. It is normal to rely on the Nine Tribulations Secret Code and opportunities to become second only to Bo Lan or even kill Bo Lan. Luo Feng himself is a very talented person! At least compared to Xia Zhi, Luo Feng's will and understanding are stronger than those of Xia Zhi. Luo Feng's choice of gains and losses is the most important factor for him to reach the end. If he relies on his clone ability to be greedy and pursue all the time and space, he may not be able to achieve immortality and his life span will be exhausted. You don't have to crush Luo Feng to get the feeling of satisfaction. To be honest, normally Xia Zhi There is no other chance to catch up with Luo Feng and Bo Lan who has gone the wrong way. It is only reasonable to work a hundred times harder than Bo Lan, a pervert, and Luo Feng, a guapi. Bolan's choice of the time and space monument clearly proves that it is more powerful to develop at the upper level, but it is more difficult to comprehend. The speed of traveling through time and space to comprehend the laws is naturally not as fast as that of the lower level, let alone Luo Feng's clone! I personally think that Bolan's path of time and space is not necessarily wrong. With his level of genius, if he gets some opportunities, it may not be impossible! What he did wrong was that when he saw Luo Feng and the others surpassing him, he wavered and changed his path. This was destined to make him impossible to become a super strong person! One star period's space perception exceeds that of most World Lords. In the World Lord stage, it takes more time to gain some opportunities and may not become immortal as early as Luo Feng, but it is normal to become a Venerable earlier than Luo Feng! Xia Zhi's supreme inheritance can at best offset the difference in the speed of the lower ones' law awareness. The two clones of Demon Killer and Golden Horn are very incomprehensible. At least in the early stage of Xia Zhi, it is impossible for Luo Feng's enlightenment to develop as fast. It would be too big to rely on the Snow Eagle clone to crush the opponent. After all, the bloodline of the Snow Eagle world clone is the blood of the Time Demon God, which can offset the Golden Horn! Time eats up the worthless, because a virtual company has ten thousand times the time limit! The only chance to keep up with or even surpass Luo Feng is the skill system and opportunities of the Snow Eagle World, and relying on the protagonist's wisdom to integrate the resources of the two worlds into practice qualifications is much more interesting and more reasonable than simply opening the Taishang Heritage. If the Taishang Heritage is too powerful, Xia Zhi will not be able to suppress it unless the reverse golden finger is opened. It is more suitable as a stepping stone to the path of time and space before immortality and as a speed awareness aid! For example, will the existence of Xia Zhi make the mountain guest change the choice of inheritor? Should he directly change his mind and choose Xia Zhi or prepare other resources for him to provide double insurance? For the reincarnation of the powerful God King, just missing something can make the Lord of the Universe choke to death! For example, is it possible to use chance treasures to guide Xia Zhi to obtain the inheritance of a powerful school? And if the protagonist is such a genius, will the Lord of Chaos City accept Luo Feng as his disciple? Will it increase or decrease the difficulty of the test? At least you have to give a reasonable explanation for why Xia Zhi can keep up with or even surpass Luo Feng, whose backer cheated him, and he himself cheated, right? You can't just brag about the supreme inheritance and the snow eagle clone and crush it without any brains, right? The author is carefully thinking about the power system and development route before writing. There are too few good ones written by Devouring fans, and it is a pity that the writing collapsed.

This time I was bragging. I was as awesome as I was, and then I pressed my state to death, and then I kept chasing. It was too strong, it was really too strong, how could it be possible? The first genius in tens of millions of epochs, my fucking ears exploded.

I believe everyone who has read Snow Eagle Lord knows that Snow Eagle Lord is a future world that swallows the stars. The original book tells that Dongbo Snow Eagle met Luo Feng's son Luo Hai when he was the Void God. Luo Hai was also the Void God at that time, and now when Luo Feng is at the planetary star level, the protagonist relies on Yuan's A piece of World God Token traveled to Lord Snow Eagle, and it was the same generation as Dongbo Snow Eagle. They were in the same world, which meant that they would use the same timeline. In other words, when Luo Feng had not yet risen, the creator of Tianyu Universe was most likely not born yet. So Dong Bo Snow Eagle? Writing this kind of flow that travels through different areas in the same world has its own bugs. How can you fix the bugs if you use a dollar to increase the bugs? You might as well write a system document. The final right of interpretation belongs to the system. At least the bug system flow of the timeline is easier to explain than the enhanced version of the Yuanhe Jie Xin Ling's Jie Shen Ling, right? After withdrawing, I couldn't see a bit.

The Silver Alliance was originally planning to reward the new book. It's a pity that Suifeng cut it... But it's normal. After all, Suifeng's new book preparation time is very short, and it can be seen that he wants to succeed too much. Recently I read an old book again, and this one should be for free. Later, I looked at the starting point that I just came to and added my subscription. In this case, the Silver Alliance will give it to Laoshu. This is Sui Feng's first masterpiece, and I hope to keep up the good work in the future! A silver alliance is disrespectful! Don't keep me waiting too long for the new book.

There are too many bugs and the author is a fake fan

In fact, Tomato fan fiction is the most difficult to write, in my opinion the main reasons are these. First, the protagonist of Tomato has a very upright outlook on life. He has feelings for his family, country, and nation (race). He is also very measured towards his friends, brothers, lovers, and family. He is a good person from the perspective of ordinary people. He is kind to his friends but not selfless, he is strict but caring to his children, he is filial to his parents, he is consistent with his lover, he performs some slightly unprincipled but common acts of help to the brotherhood, he always takes care of his family and loves everyone at the same time, but he loves everyone not only for others but also for himself. This is basically an impeccable protagonist template. The protagonist is unambiguous about right and wrong, has personal characteristics and charm, and is reasonably selfish. If you write a fanfic about this kind of protagonist and overpower him, it will make the audience of Tomato novels that are attracted to it unhappy. Therefore, how to balance the fanfic protagonist and the protagonist of the original novel is a big problem. Second, the golden fingers given to the protagonist by Tomato are extremely critical and outstanding. What's more important is that these golden fingers are gradually assembled and are useful at every stage. Different small adventures are matched with different stages to maximize the use of the golden fingers. And the golden finger given by Tomato to the protagonist is usually matched with the protagonist's personal qualities to maximize the benefits. For example, in the chapter of Swallowing Stars and Transforming into a Dragon, Luo Feng got the golden finger. One of the bugs was that it was matched with his family concept. Third, Tomato's writing is plain, but the plot is intertwined, and there is a lot of room for imagination. The scenes are grand. Although he is not good at writing about specific battles, he is very good at writing about personal growth and changes in racial families. This will make it very painful for those who write fan fiction. If they don't follow the original work, they will use Tomato's spare space to write. The writing will not be brilliant. If you follow the plot, you will not be able to get rid of the protagonist's light. Just like the second half of the book we are currently looking at, if we continue to write plots such as extraterrestrial battlefields, cosmic secret realms, and cosmic seas, most of our imaginations will not be as good as Tomato, and it is easy for the writing to be unexciting. This is also the reason why there are many eunuchs in the Devouring fandom that I mentioned under other Devouring fandoms.

This book has been on the bookshelf for a long time. The bad points in the front made me give up. I really haven't read the book recently. After resisting the front, I found that the later chapters are getting better and better. Although there are still many bugs, it is still enough for me to read.

The author needs to be rigorous in his writing. It's really not okay to leave loopholes easily. Even if I try to figure it out later, it will still be uncomfortable to watch. Especially some low-level mistakes! The so-called fan works are some modifications made within the original framework! Anyone who can insist on reading this is considered a generous reader. Otherwise, the opportunity to snatch Luo Feng would be enough to wipe out half of them. Then adding the deeds that are almost exactly the same as the protagonist's, it is nothing more than changing Luo Feng into Summer Solstice. Some people will be wiped out again! With an original framework, add some of your own things, and write with care, everyone will support and be interested. Don't just copy the original text! Don't even write about the Venerable taking random actions on the battlefield! I know good advice is hard on the ears, so if you don't feel comfortable hearing it, don't reply. I won't talk any more! If you don't get along with each other, just ignore each other! Tomato's success today is due to his sufficient imagination and rigorous writing attitude. Fans are just copycats, the real writing still needs to be done by yourself! ! !

Since the author said that he would consider revising the article. I would like to make a few suggestions here for reference only. Of course I don't dare to say they are brilliant, but I hope it can give some inspiration to the author. After all, I have read it chapter by chapter, and even if I am distracted now, I definitely like the book as a whole. Before, I wrote a long review in this book review circle about why the timeline issue is a huge failure and the reasons why the plot collapsed and the performance dropped after the Snow Eagle part of God of the Void. I won't go into details here. Originally, I was looking forward to the author coming back, but I have been too busy these days to catch up on updates. Yesterday, when I clicked on the title "Want to Slave Me", I felt something was wrong, and I was really put off by it. It seems that the author himself did not think of a clever way to bring this plot back to life. In this case, I will venture to offer some thoughts and discuss the plot as an enthusiastic book lover. I think the timeline issue needs to be changed to be relatively reluctant and reasonable. Changing only Chapter 562 will definitely be a waste. The solution I can give is that it needs major changes since Tianyu Universe came out. At least all the parts about meeting Luo Hai, her daughter, and Hong should be deleted. These sections are super stretched, and leaving them would be a failure. Crossing the timeline and traveling to the world of Snow Eagle, I have to admit that it made my eyes shine from the perspective of fan innovation, but from the perspective of plot rationality, it is the biggest fundamental failure of the book and the source of all the problems today (the details are explained in the previous long review, if you are interested, you can read it). But this problem is also the foundation of the existence of this book, so it cannot and cannot be changed. I can only pinch my nose to round it up. To complete this section, we must first add settings to Lord Hunyuan, and add a super patch that allows Lord Hunyuan to be certified forever. After being certified, his power will penetrate all time and space in the past and future. Although this patch is obviously not established in the original work (otherwise Luo Feng in Snow Eagle would have known this "lord" when he first met Snow Eagle, but in fact the Lords and Hunyuan Life were not sure about Snow Eagle's future and could only cultivate it by casting a net), but without this patch, it would be impossible for the two souls of Xia Zhi to communicate across time and space with the two source worlds across billions of epochs. This patch is finished, and another patch needs to be made, that is, who is "Tai". I don't know what Tai's identity is in the author's outline, but if I were to set it up, he could also be a Hunyuan Lord, an old friend of the same camp as Yuan, but he should have fallen. Lord Hunyuan is the supreme being and the ultimate of everything, but he has only reached the end of his cultivation realm. If he is not true, he cannot be killed. After all, if I remember correctly, Xue Ying's original work mentioned two lords who were killed: the two kings of the natural Hunyuan life, the terrifying serpent and the Ten Thousand Touches Dragon Mother. Since the Hunyuan King who was born on the Hunyuan life side will die, there is obviously no reason why the Hunyuan Lords of the same level as him in the acquired cultivator camp cannot be killed. Tai was killed by a certain Hunyuan King, but left the Tower of Taiyu and the Bell of Zhouji as the inheritance of the lord. Because if Tai was still alive, the First Taiyu Tower would not have fallen to this point, and Pan et al., As the inheritor of the Taishang Sect, would not have died so miserably. Secondly, it would not be Yuan Lai's turn to form a good relationship with Xia Zhi. Then let's talk about the most critical point in the plot modification: Xia Zhi himself must not have become a lord when the second soul left Tianyu Universe. Otherwise, there is no need for the second spirit to continue practicing, and there is no point for readers to continue reading. After all, Lord Hunyuan has reached the end of his realm, and you have already reached the ultimate level. Why do you still have to watch a second-spirited spirit re-cultivate in a meaningless way? This is unreasonable in terms of plot, and not creatively satisfying. Therefore, the second soul has to be given a meaning of cultivation - to cultivate a semi-Hunyuan life, become one with the original deity, and become the Lord of Hunyuan in one step. This at least makes sense plot-wise. So is it possible that the summer solstice is slower than the peak of Biluo, which is practiced in the Origin Continent? From a rational point of view, it is entirely possible. After all, according to Xue Yingli, Luo Feng's journey through reincarnation was the most extreme road to quick success—to prove the Tao completely through force. I remember it was said in Snow Eagle that it was incredibly fast for Luo Feng to go from arriving at the Source World of the Origin Continent to becoming Lord Hunyuan. To be honest, I think judging from the starry sky chapter of this book, Xia Zhi and Luo Feng's talents are basically on the same level. In terms of pure talent, both of them are actually far inferior to Dong Bo Snow Eagle. What Xia Zhi has more than Luo Feng is that he has practiced the Hunyuan level secret method from the beginning, as well as gained the insight and understanding of an additional source world. But there is no essential gap between these after Luo Feng obtained the Lie Yuan Technique or was inherited by Yuan Zanzhong in the Origin Continent. And I personally feel that Xia Zhi is following a more orthodox path of divine power breakthrough and law enlightenment, rather than being as extreme as Luo Feng. In this way, it is more reasonable for Luo Feng to achieve Lord Hunyuan faster than Xia Zhi. Only in this way can it reflect the extreme speed of cultivation that requires hard work to prove the Tao or death. Furthermore, after all, Xia Zhi has a soul that has not returned, and the true spirit is incomplete. It makes perfect sense to say that it has an impact on breaking through the world-class Hunyuan life and even the lords. And make up for the timeline issue. In this case, when the second spirit of the Summer Solstice traveled to the chaotic void, he should be a semi-chaotic source life in the real time line. If we want to patch the timeline, we can only pull Yuan over. Yuan Ying sensed that Tai's inheritance had been acquired, so he came over to make a connection with Xia Zhi to see what the inheritor of his old friend looked like, and by the way, he gave him a super opportunity to go to the Chaos Void. The chaotic void can be the source world created by Tai or even the hometown source world refined by Tai. In it, Tai retains something that is very beneficial to the inheritors. After Tai's death, Yuan has been managing this source world, so he threw away the inheritors of Tai. However, due to the influence of the Chaotic Divine Beast, the second soul of Xia Zhi fell into the turbulence of time and space during the fight and traveled to billions of epochs later. But for Lord Hunyuan who is entrenched on the timeline, there is no essential difference between billions of epochs later and now, and they are still within the reach of his power. The fact that Xia Zhi was thrown into the turbulent flow of time and traveled into the future by the battle between the two Hunyuans was unpredictable to the lord because it involved other Hunyuans. However, when the second soul of Xia Zhi fell into the turbulence of time and space and appeared in the future, the influence of the other Chaotic Sources had disappeared. Of course Yuan, who had seen it with his own eyes and had a causal connection with it, would immediately be able to observe the Summer Solstice Lord after infinite years in the future. After all, time was meaningless to the Lord. But for now, although the lord has a permanent certificate, the Summer Solstice lord has not completed the "one certificate" in the real timeline, so there is no "eternal certificate" achievement that will last through the past and the future. To the other Lords of Hunyuan, the Summer Solstice Lord after infinite years is just a false reality that is temporarily unattainable and can be changed. However, for Yuan, he must be happy to see the birth of a new Hunyuan Lord of the acquired cultivator camp. Especially as the inheritor of Tai, he can definitely join Yuan's camp and strengthen his own power. Under this situation, Yuan could not let the other Hunyuan lords, especially the lords of the hostile camp, come into contact with Xia Zhi, lest they use their great power to block the future of Xia Zhi lord. So he split the timeline of the chaotic void source world. The chaotic void source world was peeled off from the entire infinite source space. This helps Xia Zhi, who is at the semi-Hunyuan life level in the Origin Continent or elsewhere, to avoid the time paradox, and also creates an absolutely airtight and safe environment for Xia Zhi's second soul in the chaotic void. This is also the reason why Xia Zhi can communicate across the time of the source world and billions of epochs by using the imaginary clock of Zhouji. Because the moment the second soul reincarnated into the Tianyu Universe, Yuan had already established himself in the real present timeline and fished out the chaotic void source world where the second soul existed billions of epochs later. Therefore, at that time, there were not hundreds of billions of years between the two Summer Solstice, but a real "parallel" time and space - when Xia Zhi's second spirit grew up in the Tianyu Universe, his true form was not Xia Zhi, the semi-chaotic source life form that originated from the mainland, but the human Xia Zhi in the original universe who was at a similar level to him. As for the half-Hunyuan being Xia Zhi, his second soul is not in the same real reality as him, and he may even be unaware of the existence of the chaotic void captured by the yuan. Since the chaotic void itself during the Devouring Starry Sky period is the source world managed by Yuan, I believe that Yuan, as the oldest lord, has the means to do this. Even the significant time flow rate difference between the Snow Eagle World and the Starry Sky World in the early part of the article can be used as evidence of this - it is precisely because the Chaotic Void Source World was fished out of the real timeline by Yuan that the time flow rate of the two source worlds is inconsistent. After all, the original work specifically mentioned that the time flow rates in the two source worlds of Chaos Void and Jiexin Continent are almost exactly the same. And considering that the ultimate realm of Chaos Void are super old otakus who have not wanted to go out for hundreds of millions of years, it is normal for them to be completely unaware of the changes in their source world. Even if they have the ability to realize it, Yuan Ye must have a way to prevent them from realizing it. Since Xia Zhi's true form entered reincarnation, Yuan's "novice protection period" for Xia Zhi began to gradually end. This is the first time point when the chaotic void source world begins to quickly return to the right track of real reality under the control of Yuan. Time inside the Chaos Void is passing normally, but the entire Chaos Void is rushing down the river of time in real reality. Until the second time node appears - the second soul of Xia Zhi emerges from Tianyu Universe. At this time, the chaotic void has completely re-integrated into the real reality, that is, the reality of Xia Zhi's deity has become a semi-Hunyuan life. This is also the reason why Xia Zhi can no longer sense me after my reincarnation, because during this period of time, the entire chaotic void is surfing in the river of real time, so naturally I can't sense it. As for why it still cannot be sensed after the timeline is synchronized, it is because Xia Zhi's original deity wants the second soul to use a completely different route (body + soul) to achieve the semi-Chaotic Source. When the two gods merge into one to complete themselves, they are trying to achieve the world-class and lord-level double jumps like the original Dongbo Snow Eagle, and quickly rush from the Semi-Chaotic Source to the Chaotic Source Lord without bottlenecks. As for Luo Feng's problem, this is another trouble. The simplest solution is that Lord Luo Feng is protecting Xia Zhi himself and keeping an eye on the Chaos Void with Yuan, without actually managing the source world. In this case, a lot of self-created content is required, for example, there is no Star Tower but Yuanshen Palace, and there are no Star City, Sword Emperor and other characters. A more complicated solution is to still let City Lord Luo manage the Chaos Void, but this requires double time nesting. When Yuan handed over the Chaos Void source world to Lord Luo Feng, the Chaos Void had already reached the real reality. At this time, Xia Zhi was already the top semi-chaotic source. Luo Feng must have taken over Chaos Void to fully support him in becoming a lord. However, Tianyu Universe has not yet reached the real reality at this time, and is still surfing in the long river of time. It was not until the eve of the summer solstice that Tianyu Universe reached the real reality. In this way, there will be fewer self-created plots in the later stage, and the pattern of Chaos Void can basically follow the original work. But no matter which way, the daughter of Luo Hai and Xia Zhi should not appear, and Hong should not stand in front of Xia Zhi. Instead, he can serve as a secret protector. But to be honest, there is no need for the second spirit of Xia Zhi to go to the Jiexin Continent. After all, there are two lords and a top semi-chaotic source who are paying close attention to them, and any necessary inheritance of skills can be properly and reasonably arranged. In this case, they should be a safe group in the Chaos Void. City Lord Luo should not meet the second soul of Xia Zhi before the second soul reaches the semi-chaotic source (or at least the ultimate state). When the second soul of the Summer Solstice has cultivated the semi-chaotic source that is the opposite of the original deity, the mystery is revealed, the two gods merge into one, the chaotic void is refined, and the legacy of Tai is taken away, then it is logical to become the lord. Letting Dong Bo Snow Eagle refine the Realm Heart Continent will not affect his achievement as a lord. In this way, everyone is happy and it is a successful conclusion. Moreover, the later plot can be long or short. If it is shorter, the ending can be written quickly. If it is longer, you can create an original plot during the time when Snow Eagle takes the World Heart Token and reincarnates to the World Heart Continent. I personally think this is a remedy for plot logic. It may not be good, but at least I hope it can inspire the author.

I think that although this novel is written by a fan of Swallowed Starry Sky, the plot of the male protagonist at the beginning is completely copied from the original Swallowed Starry Sky. From a powerful villain, because the woman is hostile to the male protagonist, to later being tested for manipulation, to sending people to hunt, and then to sending people to hunt, there are monsters giving birth to children. Let's not talk about the previous conflict between the male villain and the male protagonist. It can be said that a bad routine is used here, but why is it so coincidental that the male protagonist is out on a mission, the villain sends people to hunt, and at the same time, a monster gives birth to a child. This can't be called a bad routine, right? As a person who has traveled to the star-devouring sky, can't the male protagonist have some new experiences? At least change your routine a little bit. You wrote that Luo Feng's scene can use the original plot, but now the male protagonist has not met Luo Feng, nor is it said that he is in the city or place where Luo Feng is, so the opening chapter should be regarded as your original plot, and the setting of Swallowing Starry Sky can be used. However, if you write this plot that belongs to the male protagonist, can it be said to be plagiarism in a serious way?

In fact, the front part of the book is pretty good. I feel like the front part of this fanbook is good, but the back part is forced to cut off the plot and write randomly. It feels like it's not as good as a eunuch. It's better not to write it at all. This kind of writing makes people feel messy and makes them feel like they're being fooled.

I just saw the encounter with Baba Tana. Will the protagonist steal Luo Feng's chance later? Personally, I don't like the idea of ​​grabbing someone else's when I have one, but I can understand what Babata said. After all, I have to leave the earth, but there is no need to grab other opportunities, so I want to ask.

The new chapter is quite well written, but it's just a little bit different from the original work. Only with new ideas can it attract people; if everything is similar to the original work, it won't be interesting.

Swallowing the Starry Sky Level: Apprentice -> Planet -> Star → Universe → Territory Lord → Realm Lord → Immortality (Ordinary Immortality → Military Lord Immortality → Marquis Immortality → King Immortality) -> Universe Venerable (Elementary Venerable -> Intermediate Venerable → High Venerable) →> Universe Overlord -> Lord of the Universe (Level 1→Level 2→Level 3→Level 4→Level 5→Level 6)->The strongest in the universe, please improve.

The beginning of this book is to persuade people to quit.

Give a tip and leave a comment. See Chapter 43. Isn't this book always feeding Ollie? There are too many poisonous points in the early stage, so I won't talk about it. Let's talk about taking off in Chapter 40. The result is the inheritance of the Dream God Machine in Yang Shen? One hundred and ninety-six hundred years at the level of Yang Shen's power is an epochal catastrophe. Those ministers in the central world are also the combat power of the violent star. I feel that a world leader can crush Yang Shen to death. Detachment supports immortality. Good guy, here, Yang Shen is benchmarking against Hunyuan Lord. The boast is outrageous. How many years has Hong Yi's original work been detached? I haven't found any bright spots so far and it's still blowing up... I just stepped on it and blew it up.

In fact, the book gets better and better later on, and it's very good starting from the battle of geniuses, but the first few dozen chapters are really poisonous. If it weren't for the comments in the comment section that it would get better after more than 40 chapters, and the love for devouring fans, I would have given up long ago. To be honest, I picked up your book when I first wrote dozens of chapters, but then I stopped reading it. Finally, this time it was promoted and I endured the discomfort and read it again, only to find that it is really good. Actually, if you spend a few more nights drinking and polishing the first 40 chapters, the results of this book will probably be much better. Don't worry about your grades and money, brother. In a word, the tastes of book lovers are becoming more and more cunning. The world of adults is not black and white. Don't write the villain like a clown. We don't really pay attention to how smart the writing is in this kind of novel. We win with plot. As long as we follow the path of Tomato and don't force the opponent to dance like a clown, and spend a few nights to revise the front, the book can be expected to achieve success. We have only got a hundred chapters so far and will reorder later.