The Origins of Magic

It's rare to see a well-written book and I just babble a few more words. Recently, there is really a shortage of books, and there are very few books that can read more than three chapters... It's rare to see a book with such a serious attitude and not low level. A few words of praise. Pick some bones later. Advantages: The world view is relatively solid, the details are rich enough, the overall progress is relatively stable and will not make people worry about writing, and there are no extremely stupid and unreasonable three views that are extremely incomprehensible. Friends, it's not easy to come across a book like this... There are only a few of them every year... So don't let it go if you come across it... There are also what I think are shortcomings. For example, although the background is grand, it currently feels a bit dry. It's just that the frame is big, but the flesh and blood is not full. But to expand a little further, I would like to propose a solution that I think is a solution, that is, we can start from the perspectives of decorative style, art school, and object materials from different periods to create a sense of historical depth. It does not necessarily have to be a "historical story." It can be seen that the author is somewhat self-conscious, but I feel that he may not have dug very deeply. So far, we have seen the historical background, many prehistoric stories, and many details with rich causes and consequences. The author has consciously made distinctions between the food, clothing, housing, and transportation of people of different status, but the wording is similar to that of nobles who are more exquisite, and civilians who are relatively simple. This feeling of wording. In fact, it can be distinguished by style. For example, a wealthy aristocrat may prefer a style that is simple overall, but uses high-end materials and is full of complicated small details, which are reflected in cuffs, collar pins and the like. Special materials and particularly advocating patterns can bring a strong sense of strangeness and understanding to people. For example, for a society that advocates physical strength and spiritual practice first, people may particularly favor some totem patterns that represent physical strength, or there may be some fashions that are different from our society, and they may particularly favor a certain style. This may become clothing patterns, murals, architectural or decorative styles, or even spatial design. Speaking of this, I think of the person with the tattoo. In fact, the author dealt with it in this way in many places. There are causes and consequences, but the specific core object only gives a vague description, which cannot make people form an exact impression - what kind of tattoo is it, where is it on the face, is it a picture or a word, etc., As readers, we don't know. This matter is complicated to explain, but it falls within the text. If you want to solve it, it will not increase the number of words. But are you saying that these things are necessary? It is indeed not the case. Moreover, for online articles, readers may still find it cumbersome if you write it this way. Maybe quite a few people will not like to read it. Personally speaking, I still like to read things like that, and they are more enjoyable to read. Anyway, it's up to the author to weigh it. I actually quite accept this level at the moment. There are actually very few books of this level. I gave an example elsewhere, the current example of the heroine. I don't know if this is a character that the author wants to develop in the long run. But in online articles, generally speaking, when it comes to love, it will basically not break up... Otherwise readers will easily criticize her and abandon her... Then just treat her as the heroine. Regarding the heroine, I have a problem, that is, the author seems to have no feelings for her, and he probably wants to cultivate her slowly. However, there is a problem here, that is, you have to really cultivate it. Now it feels like I just found someone randomly without any emotion. Do you like it? What level of favorability? This is also very vague. Generally speaking, if a man has feelings for a woman, it is not necessarily as serious as "love", but he has a good impression, likes her, or even wants to sleep with her. He will also pay extra attention to the girl's makeup, clothing, expressions, demeanor, and other things. The author needs to let the readers see the things that the protagonist pays attention to, so that they can understand the protagonist's attitude towards her. At present, I rarely write about these things, and when I do, they mostly use adjectives. Compared with other descriptions such as the environment, the protagonist pays less attention to people, especially the heroine. In fact, it's a little bit unreasonable. When describing a character, in addition to telling his own story, the protagonist's attention to the character, his overall feelings about the person, and his feelings about a certain behavior will all affect the reader's judgment. What the protagonist "sees" is not just about the heroine, but I feel like it could be more about most of the other characters. Here I am just taking my heroine who is by no means outstanding as an example. But, having said that, this is really not a big problem. People generally don't need you to write to this level when reading online articles. I don't mean that you can't do a good job. Well, it's easy to talk too much after staying up late. Say no more. Whether it is right or wrong is up to the author himself, and he does not need to be interfered with by anyone. If this book is written like this, it will definitely become popular.

The writing is good, but the plot design and characterization are very poor. There is no outline for the characters, and the girlfriend just throws them away without any warning. There are loopholes in the plot of the protagonist. The butler's son can completely replace the female mercenary in the plot, and the female cashier does not need to break up with her by exposing her secrets. The protagonist's IQ is erratic and many of his actions are taken for granted. These problems are all caused by the author's improper handling of the plot, and it can even be said that there are too many poisonous points. The writing does make up for the problems, but the plot logic still needs to be strengthened a lot.

When the protagonist levels up, he can basically beat the ninth-level knight, right? ? Are you still interested in running these political things? The mage profession, which combines personal power and power, has suddenly become a farming stream… In the early days, you did politics to serve yourself, but now? ? Now that you are the Minister of Magic of a country, do you still have the heart to be a messenger? So what if the production of magic potion drops? The most important thing is to make your own breakthrough... Now it is not the Mage Association serving you, but you are serving the Mage Association...

I saw the first time I arrived at the tribe. Generally speaking, it is still much better than the large number of novice novels in the starting point. There is no plot that is too silly, and there is no poisonous point that is too explosive. It is a Western fantasy work worth reading. So far, there are several areas that I think can be improved: 1. The setting of the appearance of magic elements. I think there are some logical loopholes in this basic setting. The most fundamental contradiction is that science is developing locally, but the protagonist believes that "magic is the future." But according to the reasons for the emergence of magic elements mentioned in the article, it will be difficult for magicians to go to the sea of ​​stars in the future. The reason is that the speed of magic diffusion is smaller than the speed of meteorite flight, so it is difficult for magic to fill all areas of a galaxy, let alone the entire universe. What science explores is physical rules that are universally applicable. Compared with magic that is controlled by magic elements, it currently seems to be significantly more promising. The improvements that can be thought of are "because magic can quickly increase combat power and productivity in the short term, so develop magic first, and use magic later to accelerate scientific development" or "research the essence of magic until you can use a substance more microscopic than magic to explain the rules of magic's operation, and be able to use it to get rid of dependence on magic itself", or "magic is widely present in the entire universe, but the change in the spiritual power of creatures here begins with the arrival of meteorites." 2. The protagonist's reaction to some characters is a bit inconsistent, such as the "gratitude" to the princess after the assassination in the musical. In order to avenge her "private revenge", the princess pulled hundreds of people including the protagonist to support her, and the protagonist still had to be grateful to her, which was weird. 3. Too many characters. This is my feeling after reading it so far. With the author's "abandoned naming", the feeling becomes even more obvious. Many of the protagonist's apprentices have names, and their origins and background stories are also written, but so far I haven't found out how many of them play a role in the story. I don't know if it will play any role in the story later on, but the density of appearances and the lack of concise and rich descriptions make me think it's a bit laborious to read carefully. It can be seen that the author has set small backgrounds for many characters, which really helps to flesh out the characters. I just want to say that there is no need to output too much of their backgrounds at once for some non-main characters. Even the main characters can be done slowly and little by little. 4. The name is useless, maybe the author wants to come up with some names that seem to have a feeling. I think common names such as Pete, Charlotte, Raj, Joshua, Yuri, Justin, Zach, Cruise, Joe, Leon, David, Cindy, Christian, Catherine, Shirley, Deanna, Arison, Brett, Ella, etc. Can be used. Search some European and American influential celebrity lists, and copy them.

I have to say that at first I thought it was an orderly evil protagonist like the Kosma Empire, but I didn't expect that the further I looked at it, the more I felt that the protagonist was leaning towards orderly neutrality or even orderly good, such as spending 70,000 to buy a manor. Since the protagonist has vaguely guessed that the woman is the leader of everything, if it were me, I would use mine. The official identity found definite evidence, and then used it as a handle to lower the price. I think if it were me, I would lower the price by at least half, which is the market price of 35,000 gold pounds. This money is enough for that woman to live well enough. If she chooses to accept it, everyone will be happy. If this woman chooses to be greedy, she will have no choice but to die. This is my idea, which can not only save the protagonist some money, but also allow the woman to vent her dissatisfaction of being charged a price increase for helping her. In the back of the princess, the stupid female princess used herself as bait and ran to the theater. At this time, the protagonist, like Jiang Liaozhi, did not remind his sister and friends, but allowed it to develop, and then almost got punished. If I were the protagonist, I would put it in the future That princess had her whole family cut off. The reason is very simple. Family is the bottom line. Her behavior threatened the safety of her family and almost caused the death of the protagonist. All this was because of her stupidity, and her guards even wanted to hold the protagonist accountable for this. I can't bear it! Her whole family must be killed!

I found it on the new book list before, and it was a good read. But after signing the contract, I couldn't find it on various lists. For newcomers and new books, you have to think of ways to promote it, such as which great master you go to chat with, make friends, kneel down, ask for introductions, give you a tip at the end of a chapter, old bookworms will work, etc. Although it is a slow start, follow your own outline, but there should also be some fun and small conflicts. For example, Chapter 44.45, Is this part what we want to read and care about? Do we need to write 2 chapters? You may have plans for this character in the future, but you can introduce it later. But at this stage, don't be too far away from the pig's trotters. Write more about the progress of the pig's trotters. The progress process is mapped to the actual progress results. You don't have to describe these results directly, but we must see that the patience of readers cannot help but be tested, especially new books.

I'm almost fully booked, but I suddenly found out there's an event where you can buy the entire book for 999 points…

From the very beginning when you had only written a few chapters, I started recommending it with a unanimous vote of 12. I have always thought it was good for a newcomer to write like this. My monthly votes are basically distributed to a few books that have been subscribed, and yours is at least 1 vote per month. This is the only book that I have pre-ordered, but I can't find it in the top of the monthly ticket rankings. The other pre-ordered books can be found in at least the top 50, which shows that I am optimistic about you. But since the battle to conquer the Phoenix was just passed by me, I stopped posting recommendations and distributed them to other newcomers, because at that time I realized that I had to finish writing. Oh, I'm very sorry, really sorry. In fact, the spaces should be finished as soon as they are opened. For example, it would be better to have another story at that time than to end it hastily like this. If I can't write it down, I still need to round it out.

I feel like it's a little off center. I'm here to see magic. The result is a book covered in officialdom

There's too much about politics and power, and too little about magic.