Island Survival Journal

I actually like the sandbox survival game system but saw Xiu Xian. . Instantly mmp, it's normal for Chinese people to like the element of cultivating immortals. . . However, it feels weird to have an immortal cultivator in a sandbox game. With this sandbox game system, it can basically survive the early and late stages and even dig through the earth. There is no need to have an immortal cultivator.

I originally wanted to give it a thumbs up, but the author of the book review seems to be very active, so it can be seen that he is not a seasoned veteran, but a newcomer. It's not easy for a newbie, and some flaws are inevitable, as long as you don't make them again in the future. I am also a street writer. I have changed my waistcoat several times and still get sprayed all over, so I will just give you a few small comments. First of all, the transition from start to finish is too abrupt, coming suddenly without any warning, and is too stiff. For example, after the female protagonist appears, the description of the male protagonist's performance and the female protagonist's performance are normal, but why do so many readers complain about it. The summary is that there is not enough foreshadowing, in other words, there are too few water words. Before the heroine appears, there is no description of the male protagonist's tendency towards women. In addition, the description at the beginning is mediocre if not smooth sailing. Without a trace of conflict, there will naturally be no mundane fireworks. In other words, it is not grounded enough and has no human touch. Naturally, your readership has been screened before the heroine appears, and many of the readers left behind are the kind of readers who are quiet and leisurely in the midst of the turmoil. In other words, they are the sultry readers. These readers like to read ambiguous, seeming, and nonexistent, real gentlemen with a bit of coquettishness. As soon as your heroine appears, the male protagonist immediately becomes emboldened and can't move. It instantly gives this kind of readers a disgusting feeling of eating flies. To put it bluntly, it is vulgar, not tactful enough or not coquettish enough. Therefore, it naturally disgusts a group of people, and this group of people is key among your readers. As for the second turning point I saw, the scene where the robber appears was still too abrupt and blunt. Originally, it would be okay if all your readers were left with was the boring kind. Because although these people have boring personalities, they are calm and composed. Naturally, if you continue to chase them, you will see the fun points later, so your grades will not be too bad. But your down-to-earth attitude in the front disgusted these boring people, and they ran away. However, it also attracted a group of viewers who like to read straightforward articles, so that no one read the content that requires people to be patient. People who read cool articles are not here to be angry. Naturally, it is the face you mentioned, and you are so disgusted that you directly sprayed it. Therefore, this is the biggest miscalculation of your book. In the front, I can't hold myself back because of the sound insulation, but in the back, I can't hold myself back and I'm pissed off by you. Why did you write these pictures? The cool articles are not straightforward enough, and the farming articles are not boring enough. If you think about it from my perspective, it's just because you have reached a bottleneck and can't continue writing without some conflicts. But if you don't write about such an abrupt turning point, I think you are a newbie and have been criticized by some veteran writers who are second-rate than me. The routine is very bloody and the turning point is too abrupt. This is a brief summary. If you think my words are too unpleasant, just come back and block me and delete the comment🙂

Ever since Su Su appeared, there has been something wrong with the protagonist's brain. It is not recommended to fall into this trap.

After reading about the heroine's release, many people were poisoned by their desire to be free and could not accept this. I can't accept it either. Originally, this obedience was because one person could not take care of too much and wanted to have a subordinate to help the protagonist develop. But after discovering all kinds of mentally retarded sweet dogs, I can still accept them because they are too lonely. But what I can't accept is that I don't know much about the heroine's character when I first came here. Various things are given away for free, just explore the map to understand it, it is quite courageous and prone to violence. This kind of character is not afraid of him seizing power in turn, which is a plus. Also, the protagonist worked hard to complete achievement tasks and only earned a few hundred achievement points. He didn't even have complete trust, but he agreed to give her freedom just because of the heroine, regardless of the consequences. According to normal people's approach, one should be a servant of others or a master. If you were a normal person, you wouldn't think that your life would depend on someone else's thoughts. I don't peel the pig's feet, they are so black. But as the saying goes, you must not have the intention to guard against others, and you must not have the intention to harm others. But you should also take precautions. If you are a student, for example, you can develop this island with me. The main thing is that if you show enough trust, I will definitely give you a free body when the time comes. This way is easier to say. Just like drawing a big pie, you first want him to recognize you, obey your command, and develop well, which is Xiaodao. Otherwise, maybe you are a person of absolute ability, so you can hold him down without fear of her betrayal, or there is something wrong with seizing power. It is hard to say whether you can fight him or not. The system has prompted you, but it is still too vicious to be such a licker.

In order to increase everyone's sense of participation, 🤭🤭, we are now opening this collection post for supporting players. Due to the particularity of this article, all supporting characters may survive for a long time and be upgraded to supporting roles. Everyone is welcome to use your imagination. Requirements: Character's name, gender, personality. Character identity (player, soldier, hero, freeman, pirate, etc.) Character strength, skills and all related matters. If you are interested, you can also design a unique line. If you have the chance, you may be able to say it. Finally, I invite everyone to come and sit in the group. The number is in the introduction.

I won't talk about pirates who abuse their masters. After all, this is not a game where the protagonist is alone. The real world may indeed develop like this. But! Your follower system is too useless. Co-authoring is basically not mandatory. Like the traitor, I thought about it and the protagonist had no choice but to kill him, and he could still fight back! Even if you are a woman, there are a lot of girls nowadays who don't care about sleeping with each other, so they can still ignore the protagonist. Is this a follower or a boss? Then let's talk about the traitor. Did you, the author, use the trick of subduing intelligence? You are a follower. Even if you are a slave to a pirate, I am still afraid that you are a spy. How dare you offend your master? What are the benefits of this operation? I thought about it and decided that the only advantage was that the protagonist would not dare to kill him. What kind of brain circuit would he have to become a traitor? I'll just look at the author's actions in the next two chapters. If the traitor can't do better than Su Su, then give up as soon as possible, because it means that the author only wants female followers, and all the men are trying to kill them. The most disgusting thing is to build a memorial arch for a cousin!

Thanks: Boss, everything unknown is burned to ashes, for not letting me spend a New Year's Day in embarrassment, thank you!

If you're not good at writing emotional scenes, don't write them. It's okay at first, but then it becomes a bit uncomfortable when the woman comes out. Just keep the original style.

I beg you all to favor me.

It's on the shelves today, it's the first time for a newbie. In the previous November, I received support from many book friends. Of course, there were also many who were unhappy, but I won't mention them here. Thank you To_the distance Playful little eyes Peng Tianpeng With your support, I will definitely continue writing, thank you