The Circumferential Warlock

What a stupid book. I read two chapters and it took me 20 minutes to give this chapter a thumbs up.

Seeing that "Warlock Around the City" has been completed, I am delighted that Black Robe has successfully completed another work, but at the same time I feel very complicated. I am also one of the readers who has reduced the order of "Warlock Around the City" from 10,000 high order to 4k. Taking advantage of the opportunity that Black Robe has finished this book and started a new journey, I would like to say something from my heart. Why did I abandon "The Warlock of the City"? I first met Heipao Da in "Watching the Dawn". It was really amazing. His writing style is smooth, his imagination is big, the plot is compact, and his IQ is online. When the traditional unlimited flow began to decline, I felt love at first sight, and I started to pay attention to Heipao Da from then on. Then I came to "The Warlock of the City", with a stunning start, a grand setting, a wonderful plot, and an infinite world of travel. I really felt that this book had the potential to become a god, so I started killing it when it reached 200,000 words and followed it all the way. But why would I give up on such a wonderful book? 1. The protagonist is too perfect. Backed by the God of the Gods, he has his own system of ladies around the city. He has an invincible aura as a stallion, an incomparable IQ, a beauty that is loved by everyone, and a group of loyal 100+ strong men. He can win in the face of disaster and take advantage of all the benefits. There are no accidents in life. ... If placed in the historical text of the Three Kingdoms, he would be the general He Jin, Yuan, Cao, Sun, and Liu Tangqian's younger brothers, Chen, Xun, Jia, and Cheng Zibi's disciples, and the lackeys of Wei, Shu, and Wu generals. , Dong Zhuo holds the sword to clear the way, Lu Buti rides to guard, Diao Chan, Xiao Qiao, Zeng's harem, once the Ling Emperor dies, he immediately kills the eunuchs and takes control of the world. What is the value of this kind of Three Kingdoms literature? 2. The harem is endless. I probably saw the pit that the protagonist abandoned when he was defending the city against the demons. I wonder if there is a 500,000 word? With just that few words, how many women can come out? As far as I can remember, there are beautiful bosses, ex-girlfriends, girlfriends' best friends, elf princesses, beautiful mercenaries, grand duchess daughters, the Duchess of Hell and her best friends, and demigod druids. These women have basically the same characteristics. They have profound backgrounds and are beautiful. They all favor the protagonist and take the initiative to kneel and lick her when they have the opportunity. Not to mention anything else, the setting of this book is based on DND. What are the concepts of the Duchess of Hell and the level 30 Druid? This mentality of being a strong man in all planes is like that of a little girl? I love you every day and you love her? The protagonist's journey and the main plot are all about planting seeds in the world? 3. Lack of sense of immersion and unrealistic characters When I and other assholes read online novels, they always get involved unconsciously and have adventures with the protagonist. But isn't such an awesome protagonist just here to slap me and other assholes in the face? To sum up, the characters lack realism, such as the emotional female lord of hell, the team of archdukes who dote on their daughters without any boundaries, the perfect protagonist, various women with facial makeup (such as the duchess of hell and her best friend, what is the difference in personality if the character background is changed to that of the ex-girlfriend and her best friend?), And speech and behavior that do not fit the character's image. (I would like to mention here that there are many inexplicable complaints and jokes in the article, which are not only not funny, but also easily make readers laugh. After all, this book is a Western fantasy novel, not a Japanese two-dimensional novel). These characters who lack realism cause the book to have a poor sense of immersion. Reading the novel from time to time also interrupts the reading experience, making people lack the desire to keep following it. 4. In the final analysis, I personally feel that there is a problem with Heipao Da's positioning of its readership. Is it targeting students in their 20s who have not yet graduated, or people in their 30s who have entered society? If it is for the former, students who have not yet entered the society have a relatively simple way of thinking and are full of fantasies about the future, then the book should be simpler and more straightforward, do it if you don't accept it, push for women, and follow the path of the invincible god. If it is for the latter, 30-year-old social people have been slapped in the face by life and know that life is not that simple. And what about this book? There are too many ambitions, and I want to have both sides. It also has various layouts, plot twists and turns, and provides various plug-ins to provide benefits to the protagonist. For novice readers, the book is secretive and unpleasant. For experienced readers, the book is too straightforward and unreal, and it does not please both ends. I am afraid that is the reason why the subscription of this book has not been increased. 5. Finally, I wish Heipao Da's new book will fight against his ambitions. Of course, if I am asked to give my opinion, the new book I hope to see should be: (1) The protagonist is not so perfect, has shortcomings and advantages, and is more like an ordinary person. He can have cheats and backgrounds, but not too many to crush the opponent; (2) The harem must be cautious, one real heroine is worth 100 ***, and from the readership point of view, harem books The first step is to isolate all female readers, thus losing half of the potential readers; (I looked at the top 50 of the Qidian monthly ticket list, and there is no harem stallion article); (3) Heipao Da puts aside his high self-esteem, and the unrestrained complaints in the article are really meaningless and do not increase the sense of reading; (4) Finally, do not pursue ideal and natural perfection. For example, when did I give up on "Watching the Dawn"? It was when Zhao Min entered heaven to work as a clerk for the protagonist. This plot completely turned me off, and I no longer had the desire to read the book.

The monthly votes are full, and there are 10,000 rewards. Lao Lei, why don't you add more? There happens to be an event.

I like Lao Lei's books, which have a "romantic" feel. For example, the appearance of "Arrow Man" here has the feeling of a "superhero movie", such as the part in "Dawn Watch" where the new Elona sets sail for a trip, visiting beautiful alien planets, using super-light navigation to photograph the changes in nebulae, etc. Super touching!

Cry, cast two or three monthly votes, and recommend 8 votes per day. I just like to see Lao Lei Yan'er being bad. But Lao Lei is giving up, woo woo woo

In fact, I feel that the name of Lao Lei's book is more appropriate to be called "My Bohemian Life". Like Brother Sanlang, he has all kinds of promiscuity. 🤭🤭🤭

Let me tell you a true story about running a group. It's true, just treat it as a joke. The PCs (players) discovered a group of gangs abducting children for begging and stealing at the dock, and decided to eradicate the gangs. Then I found out that the gang leader's wife lived in the xx pub. As a result, other teammates said that they would consider the long term, and Leng Touqing, a level 1 little paladin, went to the tavern to threaten the boss, but was frightened by the boss (passed the intimidation test). Then the PC felt shameless and placed the detection camp randomly in the tavern, and everyone in the tavern stood up 😃 As for what happened to this little paladin? A group of people ran to the dock area, and were dropped directly by the minions at the door ╮(￣▽￣)╭The teammates saw that she was knocked unconscious and ran away, and then she was thrown into the sea by the minions. (Tearing cards is an important part of the game, don't play if you don't feel comfortable with it) (What was I doing at that time? Of course I was a happy DM)

It turns out that the volume of "Chasing the Swan" was okay without looking into it carefully. I picked it up again today and saw the Nikita chapter. What is this about? I can delete three-quarters of this chapter without affecting the reading. It's a bunch of bad jokes. It turns out that Dawn Watch had this problem in the later period. The memes became more and more niche. Lao Lei himself became more and more high-spirited, but as a reader, I became increasingly incomprehensible. This is also the case now, and I am becoming more and more free of myself. Long Kong once wrote a book review that was particularly good: I opened the book and looked at it. The words "funny and humorous" were written on each crooked page of the book. I couldn't sleep anyway, so I read carefully for half the night, and then I saw the words between the words. There were a few words written all over the book: "Laugh! Everyone makes me laugh!"

The recent plot has been very boring. I have messed up several gods, but I have to lower my strength and go back to messing with children. I also regretted voting for the monthly ticket at the end of the month after seeing the latest ones. I knew I was in a bad situation. In what age are you still playing Qiong Yao dramas? If you don't know what to write, just take a break. Don't fool around with plots scheduled for 8:30. People who come to read your book probably have little interest in reading these things.

I've seen about thirty chapters, and I'll give you a brief review. Writing DND has always been a problem. I have read this author's previous works, and the values ​​​​have been written to collapse from the middle. And in this book, when Goldfinger said that you can develop extreme attributes in more than 30 chapters, I also realized that sooner or later it would collapse. The biggest problem for the author of this book is that he cannot put aside the numerical value. He always struggles with the strength of numerical values ​​like a newbie in a group or is obsessed with the overpowered characters made by some veteran players, which takes up a lot of writing space that could be used to advance the plot or improve the characters. The most important thing to imitate when writing DND novels is the indifference attitude toward tabletop games like the Dark Elf trilogy or the Dragonlance series - learn to ignore the numerical values ​​and look at the characters, instead of being blinded by the numerical values. But this book is finished anyway. If I have a chance to read the author's new work, I don't know if there is any progress.