Warhammer: I'm a Batling

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Bat cub? A giant bat! Before you stands the eldest son (scratch that) brother of the Eighth Primarch! The regent of the Legion's homeworld Nostramor and its hundred worlds.

The emperor is portrayed too anthropomorphically; this savage has become intelligent.

The premise is reasonable, neither overwhelmingly powerful nor invincible. It follows a strategy of combining resource management with combat. It's a decent story, the only downside being its conventional approach. Many Warhammer fanfics focus on the Astartes, primarily because the protagonist is already immortal, able to learn Dark Words from Olperzon, and possesses powerful psychic abilities.

The Conrad Coates in this book doesn't seem to have been tormented by prophecy. The overall style also doesn't quite resemble the dark and grievous character in the original work.

He was the most hated Primarch among them. How much of the Moon Wolf's glorious record was made up of the sacrifices of other Primarchs who hadn't yet returned? He utterly despised ordinary people, believing that he and Canned Man had sacrificed so much, while ordinary people hadn't.

The writing style is quite good, but the atmosphere is a bit too lighthearted and lacks a strong sense of realism. I personally suggest the author could write it a bit more serious; the characters need to have presence and can't always be so carefree. The protagonist is alright, but the others shouldn't be like that.

Is the Bat Cubs' army even any good? All I hear is that they like to bully weaker opponents and play with corpses, and they love to launch sneak attacks.

Is the author planning another major rebellion and some fancy twists? Iron Man and Deathguard can still be brought back.

There are quite a few typos; some of them are still not grammatically correct even after reading them several times.