From a Small-Town Qi-Refining Drudge to an Immortal Sect Dao Lord

This guy is a piece of shit. He was given a cheat code to cultivate so quickly, and then he has to hide his true strength. Fine, he can't reveal it, but he's constantly causing trouble for the protagonist. Even when the protagonist is eating at home, trouble still manages to find him. If he can't write novels, he should just find a factory job.

The pacing is too slow. It's chapter 230 already, and the protagonist hasn't even reached the Foundation Establishment stage yet. Then there's this development-focused cheat, and he's constantly causing trouble, being threatened and sabotaged. For over two hundred chapters, it's been a depressing experience with no satisfying moments.

Do you know why it's bad? The first chapter felt like a modern novel disguised as a cultivation story.

The twenty-year-old Shennong (a legendary Chinese physician) has completed his assessment; currently, the food and fodder are non-toxic and the supply is ++.

I feel there are a few issues: 1. The plot is too mundane and lacks substance. 2. The numerical values ​​are filled in somewhat arbitrarily, including but not limited to money and combat power, especially money, which often doesn't match the context. One moment he casually slips ten dollars to the gatekeeper, the next he says he only spent two dollars on bribes and feels bad about it.

The level of the cheat ability is too low, it's not attractive at all (a cheat ability can start with some limitations and be a little weak, but it can't be too low-level). A cheat ability at the Golden Core stage, what's the difference between your protagonist's cheat ability and that of a cultivator in the cultivation world who gets a stroke of luck?

Why are there always so many people targeting the protagonist? Why does the protagonist always get into so many trivial matters?

Cultivating immortality is inherently about self-centeredness and defying the heavens, making one the ultimate tyrant. Those who start out with a wife and children, burdened with family responsibilities while cultivating immortality, lack the "burden of responsibility" and the uncomfortable, labor-intensive mindset that aligns with the logic of cultivation and deviates from current mainstream aesthetics.

You just kill someone like that, then you're afraid of being discovered and don't dare touch the body, and even if you do, you don't dare keep the storage bag. This is a fantasy world, what good is destroying evidence? Either don't do it, or go all the way. You left so many clues, any deduction will lead back to you. Does physical evidence really matter in a fantasy world? Don't project real-world settings onto it.

Through the author's description in the first chapter, the image of the little protagonist leaps off the page.