From Tenfold Lifespan to Immortality in the Golden Core Realm

If you were writing "Daily Life in Old Beijing", everyone would think it was reasonable and authentic. But what you wrote was "Cultivation of Immortality" and the name should be to show the ruthlessness of time. In fact, the way you wrote it made you want every supporting character to write an autobiography. The one who rescued the neighbor's mother, I can barely understand that you and he became close friends. But the one I collected was the ink grinder, You pay, and they work, but you don't provide any extra help to them. They start to suffer psychological problems after being deceived, and you don't do anything. In the article, there are crazy words like "nothing to say" and people get sad after they die, and they start to miss them at every turn There is also the chapter about Jin Dan, which is written like an authentic old man in Beijing. Jin Dan is two or three hundred years old, showing off his descendants. At that age, in the stage of life, it is equivalent to only passing half, or even a small half, not so sluggish The summary is that this is not how immortals are cultivated, and neither is Gou Dao. There are fewer passers-by, especially passers-by who rush to the street very quickly. You can use a lead to introduce the plot, but not everyone wants to introduce it

Tomato's writing style and quality make it difficult to break through on the big stage of Qidian. There is a missing hook at the front. Normally in this kind of book, there will be a childhood sweetheart girl at the front to make you look forward to it. The author did nothing, not even behind, no hostile people, very flat.

I beg you to read the new book. Please turn to the end of the chapter to read it. If you are willing to vote for one of the monthly votes, thank you. I am so grateful that I shed tears 🙂

There is nothing too poisonous about the plot, and the conflict arrangements in the plot are not forced conflicts, but rather flat. The holes dug will be filled (the characters who appear have plots and arrangements instead of writing a supporting role that is inexplicable and useless. However, it is relatively easy to arrange the supporting roles in the longevity novel), which is a good habit. The level of writing is the level of the top 50 monthly votes ten years ago. Nowadays, I am much more picky, and it is difficult to get into the top 100, not to mention the level of updated articles. First, there is nothing wrong with the portrayal of the protagonist. Changsheng-ryu is the greatest wealth. Changsheng-ryu takes risks for a little thing. I really feel that my IQ is being rubbed. After living for hundreds or thousands of years, I still take risks. It's like there is an opportunity to make 200,000 yuan, but you have to exchange it for 50 million yuan. This is a flaw in most immortal streams. The author does not have this problem The second is the writing style. The writing style is relatively old. I am not saying that I am sophisticated, but I am learning from those old people. Various descriptions bring up one thing and it is over before the chapter is finished. But it is true that I can continue to read it at the age of thirty, and the description is appropriate. The main problem is still that sentence, the tenth update has its own great scholars, and the shortcomings of the first update are magnified. Book shortage➕As I get older, I can read this kind of slow writing. The quality is passable. I heard that it is the author's first book, which is very good. The level of writing is much better than that of brushing dragons, but the financial resources are probably not comparable. I just write what I want to write to earn money for practice and food. There are almost no people who immediately become rich with the first book The disadvantage is that I am not a person who pursues books, especially slow articles, let alone reading. I add bookshelves and slowly keep them. If the author is still a student, please stick with it. After graduation, you can work as a side job. If you do well, you can become the main job and earn hundreds of thousands of monthly votes for a year. The ending is much better than eunuchs. The important thing is that eunuchs can only be used once and countless times. It is difficult for people who have been eunuchs two or three times to get on the monthly voting list.

The plot without conflict seems boring, but I can watch it, why, because it is a running account The plot with conflict seems even more boring, because it is not handled well, and it can be dismissed directly I originally wanted to complain about the author's last sentence at the end of almost every chapter, but it seems that this is the only point in this book that can be used as a memory point

To be honest, I personally like this novel very much, but the author's updates are too exaggerated. I don't even have the slightest motivation to pursue reading. You know, the author is a complete newcomer. This is his first time writing a novel. He can't even update it enough, and he still wants to achieve results and daydream.

I'm exhausted. It's so bland. I just want a glass of boiled water.

The writing is young, the narration is mediocre, and the characterization is abrupt. At first glance, it looks like a newcomer, but it is barely watchable. Give the newcomer some tolerance and stop trolling.

It feels like I want to write about life and death, the ups and downs of life, the confluence of fate and the separation of fate, but the writing is not strong enough, and it makes my toes pinched and awkward .

This book doesn't look like a fairy tale, it looks like a martial arts novel, or a low-level martial arts novel.