From Tenfold Lifespan to Immortality in the Golden Core Realm

If you were to write about everyday life in old Beijing, people would find it perfectly reasonable; the flavor, the authenticity, would be incredible! But you wrote "Cultivation of Immortals," and the title you chose should be meant to show the ruthlessness of time. In reality, your writing style is so bad that you practically write an autobiography for every supporting character.

Tomato's writing style and quality make it difficult to break through on the big stage of Qidian. There is a missing hook at the front. Normally in this kind of book, there will be a childhood sweetheart girl at the front to make you look forward to it. The author did nothing, not even behind, no hostile people, very flat.

Please don't wait until the end of the new book period to read it; please just read to the end of each chapter to count as following the story. If you'd be willing to give me a monthly pass, I'd be incredibly grateful. 🙂

The writing is still good, but the characterization is a bit thin. I feel that every character has the same personality and there are no surprises. In addition, there are often inappropriate sensationalisms in some places. Anyway, I don't understand why it is sensationalistic. It seems quite abrupt.

The plot doesn't have any major flaws, and the conflicts aren't forced; it's a fairly evenly distributed story. The plot holes are filled (all characters have their own storylines and roles, not just random, useless supporting characters. However, it's relatively easier to develop supporting characters in longevity stories), which is a good habit.

A plot without conflict is boring, but watchable. Why? Because it's a monotonous, chronological narrative. The conflict-filled plot points are even less interesting because they're poorly handled, which can easily turn you off. I was initially going to complain about how the author makes a pretentious, artsy comment at the end of almost every chapter, but it seems that's the only memorable aspect of the book.

It seems the author intended to write about the ups and downs of life, the impermanence of existence, and the coming together and parting of relationships, but the writing lacked skill, making it incredibly awkward to read.

To be honest, I personally really like this novel, but the author's update frequency is just too low. I have absolutely no motivation to keep reading. Keep in mind, the author is a complete newbie, and this is his first novel; he can't even keep up with the update frequency, yet he expects to achieve anything? He's dreaming!

I'm exhausted. It's so bland, just like a glass of plain water.

The writing is immature, the narrative is mediocre, and the character portrayals are abrupt; it's clearly written by a newcomer. However, it's barely readable. Let's be forgiving of newcomers and not be too harsh.