This Is What an Immortal Should Be

I finally understand that the author doesn't want to follow the route of Lan Ke, but the new ideas he comes up with are not as good as the old ones. He is eager to surpass the past, but it is counterproductive. I suggest the author take a good rest for a while, come up with a very good idea before starting the book, and improve the outline so that he will not write step by step and then collapse. I believe in your writing, it is an idea, and I really like your feeling of downplaying the realm.

When I saw the part about recruiting people into the valley, I felt that they were accepted too casually. The protagonist and the four orphans wanted favors but no affection. It didn't matter if they wanted relationships. It didn't matter if they wanted help. I didn't observe their moral character. It didn't say whether they had talents or talents. I didn't know about the orphans' family. It was really pitiful. Moreover, the protagonist also helped her husband go home and have a dream reunion. If it was properly arranged, I think it would be okay, but directly entering the valley was a bit abrupt. After all, according to the previous article, entering the valley is considered a destined person and has the opportunity to cultivate immortality.

There is a widow with three children. The protagonist sees them as pitiful and refuses to give them money or land. Hey, he is directly sent to the Paradise of Cave to provide food, food, food, and cultivation of immortality for the rest of his life. I am confused. There are frozen bones on the road, and there are so many beggars and poor people who have not been rescued by you. Why do you have a soft spot for this family?

The beginning is amazing, but later the plot can even be said to be simple, just beating a few little monsters. I originally thought that it would constantly change time and space, upgrade the power system, and witness celebrities who do not understand the times. How could I know that it would be so bland, just two time and space going back and forth, and the plot is very simple and repetitive, which is a pity.

I guess the beginning will be absolutely perfect, the middle stage will be overturned, and the late stage will be hydrological.

A very imaginative but weird book. There are obviously many different routes that can be written for this kind of opening, such as group travel, cross-travel, parallel time and space, paradise, God's perspective, spiritual recovery, and bad luck. But in the end, I didn't choose any of them, but chose a bad road - classical cultivation of immortality. After more than fifty chapters, I discovered that the book was not as I imagined, but that after the protagonist embarked on the path of slaying demons alone with a peach wood sword, he could no longer follow him.

Let me provide the author with an idea. It seems to me that you just want to surpass Lan Keqi Yuan too much, and you also want to use different ideas and different themes to innovate. In my opinion, there is no need to do this. Look away, he is a Yakuza style master who has mastered one theme. Although the books are all in the same style, the level of his books has been maintained. , I suggest you put aside those so-called innovations and study a traditional fairy novel with fairy spirit. It is based on Lan Ke and can incorporate other new elements, but it cannot lose its priority. This novel is about the unfamiliar theme of time and space travel. If you have thoroughly understood the theme of Xian Qi Liu, I believe that the next one will not be inferior to Lan Ke

Damn it, it was really attractive at first, and then I subscribed to 150 chapters, but the more I read, the more wrong it became. It hasn't been updated for half a month, and I was hesitating whether to read the latest chapter, but when I came to review the book, my heart dropped instantly.

It was a little too abrupt to see the protagonist taking the widow from the village back to the Hidden Fairy Valley. Why bring it back to Hidden Immortal Valley? Because he is miserable. Ah this. . . It seems that in the future, cultivating immortals does not need to depend on talent or character, as long as they are miserable enough. It's a bit like Xing Ye's "Tang Bohu points out Qiuxiang", who is more miserable. This is different from winning a music competition not because he sang well, but because he was worse. If the author made the widow look like Meng Jiangnu, it would definitely make sense to bring her back to the Hidden Immortal Valley.

Celebrities are so miserable. They were tricked into ancient times and went to brothels to live out their daily lives and live out their daily lives. This may be a normal thing for celebrities. Their money was stolen, their calves were broken, and they were thrown in jail for dozens of days. When I turn around, I meet the immortal who is above me and plays with the fate of others, and I have to be pua to fulfill my so-called promise. If he didn't hate Zhuang Lin, it would be unreasonable. If he did this, it would be abnormal if he didn't have a psychological shadow.