Immortal Amid the Mortal World

Good writing can lead to success. I was reading *Red Heart Sky Patrol* when it first came out, and the writing style alone gave me the feeling it would be a hit. While it's true that success doesn't happen overnight, I did see *Red Heart Sky Patrol* and its author climb the ranks. I hope the author of this work will also have a good outcome. I'm giving a small reward to show my support. Of course, it would be great if one day they really gave up writing light novels instead.

I'll hit you!

With over 30 chapters remaining, the author's handling of the protagonist and Xiang Nu leaves me feeling uneasy. Xiang Nu was ultimately raised by the protagonist before transforming into a human; in my understanding, she's always been like a daughter or younger sister he raised. It's hard to comprehend how they could develop into a romantic relationship where they share a bed. It's disgusting, and genuinely uncomfortable. Of course, everything else is handled quite well.

Everything else is fine, but to be honest, if you can't write about emotions, don't force it.

Well, how should I put it? It's too bland. It doesn't feel like a travelogue, and the perspective is too disjointed. It's a bit like an episodic drama, but apart from the first temple exorcism scene which was somewhat exciting, the rest is too fragmented.

I initially liked it, but suddenly he started involving women and even teaching them martial arts techniques. Although the protagonist cultivated his own techniques, he knew they had a source. Teaching people from other sects without their consent feels inconsistent with his initial character design. Seriously, why include women in the story? I'm about to abandon the book.

Seriously, if you can't write romance, you don't have to. The transition when Ma Shiqing's pageboy was arrested for poisoning someone was too abrupt. And there's a comment below saying that Miss Chai later dies and becomes a ghost; this kind of episodic writing makes the story flow awkwardly.

The story was going well until, for some reason, a female lead suddenly appeared. This kind of story is not suitable for having a female lead. And author, you don't know how to write romance, so why are you so persistent?

Honestly, the beginning was quite well-written, I don't understand why the author suddenly focused so much on the Chai family girl. Wouldn't it have been better to save her and then go on a cultivation journey? The Chai family girl died out of nowhere, and there was no explanation of what happened to the Chai family afterwards. It felt like a letdown. Maybe other people like this plot, but I'm outta here!

From Chai Ruyi's betrayal by her childhood sweetheart, to her death and becoming a ghost, to her burial in a foreign land, the plot transitions feel abrupt and disjointed. It feels like a deliberate attempt to advance the story, with only a few chapters dedicated to these transitions, making the plot feel very forced. It's like today I'm traveling through the mortal world, and tomorrow a great demon invasion occurs, and I have to rush off to save the world.