Immortal Amid the Mortal World

Good writing can make you popular. I was watching it when it first came out. When I saw the writing, I felt that it became popular. Although it did not happen overnight. In the end, I saw that Chi Xin and the author climbed up. I hope the author of this work also has a good result. I will simply give a reward to show my support. Of course, it would be great if one day I really give up and write cool articles.

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There are more than 30 chapters left, and I always feel weird about the author's treatment of the protagonist and Shannu. After all, Xiang Nu was raised by the protagonist and later transformed into an adult. In my understanding, Xiang Nu is always like a raised daughter or a raised sister to the protagonist. It is difficult to understand that it will develop into a lover's relationship sharing the same bed. It is disgusting and uncomfortable. Of course, everything else is handled well

There is nothing wrong with anything else, but I have one thing to say. If you don't know how to write about feelings, don't forcefully write them down.

Well, how should I put it? It's too bland. The travel notes are not like travel notes, and the perspective is too different. It's a bit like a unit drama, but except for the first one where the demon is eliminated in the temple, it's quite exciting, but the rest of it is too trivial.

I really liked it at first, but suddenly he started to take care of girls and teach others the exercises. Although the protagonist practiced it himself, he also knew that the exercises had a source. He taught people from other sects without the consent of the other party. It was a bit inconsistent with the character design at the beginning. Really, there is nothing to write about women. The good ones have to abandon the book again.

Really, if you don't know how to write emotional scenes, you don't have to write them. When I saw Ma Shiqing, a book boy, poisoned and killed, the transition was too abrupt. There was also a comment below that said that Miss Chai died and turned into a ghost. The unit drama was not written smoothly in this way.

It was well written before, but I don't know why, but a female protagonist came out of nowhere. This kind of novel is not suitable for a female protagonist, and you, the author, don't know how to write about emotions, why are you so persistent?

Really, the previous writing is quite good, but I can't understand why the author suddenly focused on Mao's writing about the daughter of the Chai family. Isn't it good to go out and practice Taoism after saving people? The daughter of the Chai family died inexplicably, and the Chai family did not explain anything about the situation. I always feel like I'm inferior. Maybe other people like this plot, so I'll leave first!

From Chai Ruyi, being betrayed by his childhood sweetheart, to dying and turning into a ghost, and then burying the body in a different place, the plot transformation felt so disconnected. It felt like it was all done deliberately to advance the plot. The transformation in the middle only took a few chapters, and the plot was too blunt. Just like today I want to travel in the world of mortals, but tomorrow the demon will invade, and I will go and save the world right away,