A Flying Sword Seeking Immortality

The writing style is fine, but it's too messy and disorganized. It's like a novice chef who hasn't even found a master chef yet, and starts cooking everywhere without mastering a single cuisine. At least learn one thing well and master it, and establish a clear main plot. The protagonist just wanders around all day, and it feels like he has no idea what he's trying to do.

Why didn't you write the huge, satisfying moment of joining a sect early on? I reckon if it weren't for the numerous reader feedback, you'd only have to put it on sale before it happened. Writing about the protagonist's family to show his single-minded pursuit of the Dao is pointless.

The writing style is fine, but the introductory section is too long and involves too many events, so many readers might leave before you even get to the cultivation part.

I came in from the Daily Poison Guide. I thought I would be poisoned, but I didn't expect it to be Benxiangcao. Unfortunately, I discovered it too early. I finished reading it in a long time. I am now anxious and scratching my head.

I saw the latest chapters. The first few dozen chapters are very good, with the feeling of classical fairy tales. The story of She Jiangshan is almost interesting at the end, but I can still watch it. However, when compared with the ordinary plot at the end, it doesn't make sense logically.

It's not that it's bad, it just feels very awkward. As a reader who has read *Shushan* and many *Shushan* fanfictions, I personally find it a bit awkward and unnatural. It's not about the author's writing style or skill, but there's a sense of grafting. It feels like a remake of *Shushan*, but not quite; it's not exactly *Shushan* fanfiction either.

The apprenticeship scene felt too abrupt. The killing of Xuan Yuan and Xuan Heng was a deus ex machina without any foreshadowing. The story suddenly feels too disjointed. It would be better to discover the true Wu Sword and its inheritance, then have others come to the rescue and understand the cause and effect.

This is utter garbage! Why didn't the male lead instantly become a powerful Nascent Soul cultivator? He still has to cultivate step by step; he's practically useless. Those supporting characters and female leads became famous in just two or three years, but what about the male lead? He's still stuck in the first or second realm—he's utterly useless.

It's too chaotic. I've written a little bit here and a little bit there, mixing in all sorts of causes and effects. I haven't even found a sect to join yet, and there's already so much going on. To put it nicely, my thoughts are jumping around; to put it bluntly, I can't distinguish between primary and secondary points. I just write whatever comes to mind and whatever interests me.

Without a cheat system, what makes you stronger than others? Even if Han Tianzun didn't have the Immortal-Calming Bottle, he wouldn't survive past chapter 100.