A Flying Sword Seeking Immortality

There's nothing to say about the writing, but it's too messy and complicated. It's like a new chef who hasn't even found a chef yet and starts cooking here and there without even learning a single cuisine. At least you have to learn and master one thing well, and the main plot is also well arranged. The protagonist wanders around every day and feels like he doesn't know what he wants to do. Everywhere he goes is a chance or encounters an enemy. Even in the game, there is a specific route for killing monsters and upgrading. Each map is cleared step by step.

It would be so exciting to join the sect in the early stage if you didn't write it earlier. I guess if there weren't so many readers' opinions, I would have joined the sect only after it was published. Write about people from the protagonist's family to express the protagonist's state of mind that is devoted to seeking truth. To be honest, with the protagonist's strength, how can you write about his family's contemporaries to express his state of mind? Instead, he acted like the Dragon King had returned. There are also things like monsters and Wei Gouzi. Wouldn't it be better for you to write similar stories after joining the sect and studying Dharma before traveling around and writing similar stories? It would be fine if the protagonist did not meet the immortal cultivators after becoming an Immortal on the Earth and searched for immortal fate along the way. But in fact, he has already met the immortal cultivators, obtained the first few levels of the Shenzong Kung Fu, and knows when the Xuantian Sword Sect will recruit people. Shouldn't the first task be to go to the realm of the Xuantian Sect and wait for recruitment? Why go on a time-consuming and irrelevant branch line on the road? Wouldn't it be better to spend the money when we arrive at Xuantian Sect's realm and wait for recruitment?

The writing style is fine, but the introductory chapter is too long and contains too many events, so many readers may leave before you can start cultivating immortality.

I came in from the Daily Poison Guide. I thought I would be poisoned, but I didn't expect it to be Benxiangcao. Unfortunately, I discovered it too early. I finished reading it in a long time. I am now anxious and scratching my head.

What a rubbish! Why didn't the male protagonist reach the sky and become a powerful soul? They still need to practice step by step, which is simply useless. Those supporting female protagonists have become famous all over the world in just two or three years. What about the male protagonists? Still wandering around in the first and second realms, he is simply a waste. It is better to be a big devil and establish the authentic Xuanmen, slaughter all the hypocritical people in the world, and turn the real authentic Xuanmen into a demon sect, so that everyone can kill it.

It's so messy. I wrote a little bit here and a little bit there, mixing in all kinds of causes and effects. I haven't found a sect to join and there are so many things. At best, it's a leap of thinking. At worst, it's a blur of priorities. I just write whatever comes to my mind. In the end, the Xuantian Sword Sect is exactly the same as the Emei Sect in Jet Li's version of Heavenly Sword and Dragon Sword. The plot is as classic as it gets, and it's as ancient as it gets. I can't figure it out. Is it because you can't write a classical fairy tale without using those ancient plots?

I saw the latest chapters. The first few dozen chapters are very good, with the feeling of classical fairy tales. The story of She Jiangshan is almost interesting at the end, but I can still watch it. However, when compared with the ordinary plot at the end, it doesn't make sense logically. In the beginning, She Jiangshan's flying sword was not practiced, and he could fight against several demon cultivators who had been practicing for hundreds of years. After a year, he completed the experience and became proficient in swordsmanship and martial arts. In the second turn, a bunch of blessings and improvements, and then after hitting the lowest level demon cultivator with one sword, it was said that it was too late to stop the demon cultivator's soul from escaping. This is illogical no matter from the perspective of cultivation, vigilance and defense, or the strength of the flying sword. The author forced this kind of thing to happen for the needs of the plot. In general, it can be predicted later, and it can be watched without thinking.

It's not that it doesn't look good, it just feels awkward. As a reader who has read Shushan and many Shushan fans, I personally feel that it is a bit awkward and looks unnatural. It doesn't matter how good the author's writing or writing skills are, but there is a sense of grafting. It looks like a replica of Shushan, but it doesn't count as such, and it doesn't look like a fan of Shushan either. Some plots had that familiar yet unfamiliar feeling, which made me feel awkward. In addition to this book, Toad's Sword Cutting also gave me a similar feeling.

The apprenticeship was too abrupt The killing of Xuan Yuan and Xuan Heng had no foreshadowing, it was just a deus ex machina The story was suddenly too fragmented It would be better to reveal the inheritance after seeing the real Wu sword, and then others come to put out the fire and understand the cause. The three of them all learned the skills from the True Wu Sword, but they were not talented enough and only partially understood it. Then Zhen Wujian recognized that the protagonist had also practiced this skill, and by the way, he got a new skill to complete it, and was then taken to the sect.

The protagonist has been practicing martial arts for several years, and at the beginning the martial arts is at the highest level, a land immortal, but once he cultivates to become an immortal, he is dragging his feet, and it is just a side plot, I say hurry up and add more.