The Demon World I Designed

Brothers, I withdrew, I couldn't bear it any longer. The Riddler was too disgusting, and the cool text couldn't be any fun. The abuser didn't dare to torture her too much, so he just highlighted one point of grievance. I feel like the author has no outline and just starts writing with an immature idea in mind.

I read three hundred chapters, and I feel really good about it. Even though I don't like Shinto, it's because the world view is completely settled. The setting and plot design are okay. It was fully booked and I was waiting with great anticipation for the Dragon Palace to open, but I was immediately hooked. I'm surprised. Other books emphasize that the reader is at the top of the information chain, so it's cool. In this book, the reader is at the bottom of the information chain. The supporting character knows, the villain knows, the protagonist knows, but the reader doesn't know. Everyone is a riddle. I suddenly figured out one thing. The author has always been a riddler. In fact, he kept it as a hook. A large number of riddles are hooks. You can add them to explain anything you think of. As soon as you think of it, it comes out. The twists are all made up and patched on the spot, and then reversed. The author may also be proud of "I left foreshadowing", riddle foreshadowing. There is also the abuser. This book is particularly uncomfortable. This discomfort comes from the fact that the protagonist is free and easy, omniscient and in control of the overall situation, but in fact he is restrained at every turn and encounters unexpected cognitive conflicts, which is both refreshing and depressing. There are many well-written novels in which the protagonist is walking on thin ice and is restrained in every possible way. Go and see how other people write. There are more novels in which the protagonist is omniscient and controls the overall situation. Go read more.

1. The content of the novel is very messy and tiring to read. There are many branch plots, but they are of little significance. The plot moves here and there, and Chen Qing goes behind the scenes in Liuzhou. There is less about him appearing, and more about him being promoted through other branch plots and characters. It is not exciting and unpleasant, and the story is not full. 2. Chen Qing is not a designer + player, then what is he? He is a bunch of human-input data? Both old players and new players invest in fixing bugs. As a result, the more bugs are fixed, the more bugs there are. What is outrageous is that old players become bugs? If this is the case, why can't Chen Qing just play? Home + designer, get through all versions of the game world, and then return home perfectly or stay in the game world to live a good life? The result is that the main line is actually a mess, the plot is outrageous and abstract, and there are veteran players, the Federation, and immigrants. Don't you think the whole story line has collapsed to the sky? Don't you think the novel is very messy and everyone doesn't like it? The Shinto style is very good, so why not keep pressing this button to clear the level? Conquer the north, go to the government capital, conquer the southern wasteland, and create a perfect world? Start a federation and engage in immigration, so why not write science fiction at the beginning? Cut leeks instead?

Farm well, farm well, and stop relying on the Riddler's behavior to advance the plot. It's fine once in a while, but it's really annoying if it happens once in a few chapters.

If you don't have that ability, don't create such a high-IQ character, okay? What you need is your own writing level, not the whole Riddler thing. It's really stupid. You can't grasp it at all. The writing is watery and poisonous.

A simple game alien world or a future virtual world is fine, but the combination of the two is particularly messy. When you get to Dragon Palace, you can say that the snowball of the protagonist has already started. Suddenly adding that everything is fake and you are just data people who can be cut off at any time is boring. Just farm well and don't bear fruit quickly and just uproot it. To a certain extent, it can be said that this book has too many tags, time travel, game alien world, fantasy, and science fiction. I can't stand it anymore.

It's all booked, so I can talk about it. It's quite interesting overall, but the author obviously set up various conflicts and confusions. Let's summarize the following points: First, he started to set the background of ancient scholars, so the scripture imperial examination is considered a normal setting, but then there is a setting where demons have been suppressing humans, and humans are the weak side, so where can there be a safe environment for you to develop the imperial examination?

I have read almost 500 chapters, and the plot is quite good, with the potential to be a masterpiece. The reason why I rated it so low is probably because the plot is too slow. Let alone creating a two- and three-dimensional era from one map, the plot advances too slowly. There are all kinds of pitfalls, both deep and shallow. If there are too many pitfalls, it won't make you feel brighter. Instead, you will feel that the author is speculative and has an impure purpose. The entire plot also has various reversals, resulting in many logical errors and inconsistency. On the one hand, there are all kinds of great people and abilities, a mixture of good and bad, and the main and branch lines are in a mess. On the other hand, the pig's feet have always been very powerful, all relying on the "advantage" of the prophet, but others are also reborn. The most important point is that Pig's Knuckles is incompetent, and then he brags and talks about secrets every day. I think this is for the sake of advancing the plot, but it's not a bit excessive.

As for the Mirror Demon scene, as well as Master Yang, and the pitfalls in Chapter 136, do we need to fill them in?

Died from poison... I regret reading chapter 300

Update

"I take the God List and fight zombies while farming"

I feel like the writing is very good. Come on, author (ง •̀_•́)ง Come on

Read one of the 100 chapters behind Dragon Palace

Well written, I will follow it. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

Overall evaluation, the creativity is good, the setting is also excellent, and the characters are fairly three-dimensional, but this is not a good novel, it is more like a script, or it is like a text movie, which is too obsessed with details and neglects to advance the main line.

All I can say is that it's okay, don't think too hard when watching it.

It's okay, especially the early part looks very good. I'm also following the next book.

Speed ​​update OK? I can't wait any longer. It's as uncomfortable as if you were halfway through playing games and your mother started doing housework. 😭

I saw more than 300 pictures. I thought you would give me a surprise, but I didn't expect you to pull a big one. Ziyue, Millennium Fox, both of them want to kill you. You have the strength. Instead of killing them, you feed them. I thought you were going to use them for something. But as soon as the protagonist left, they took control of your men, occupied your city, and killed an unknown number of people. The Millennium Fox ate the people who believed in you. In the end, the protagonist managed to defeat them. Instead of killing them, he fed them. I really wanted to vomit. The Millennium Fox also confused the heroine. You yourself said that the Millennium Fox can turn into a man and modify its memory. Even the heroine herself does not know whether the heroine has been tricked before. That Murong Yunji likes power, but is unwilling to join the Shinto system. Anyone with a discerning eye can see that there must be something wrong with her, and the protagonist is just as stupid. The protagonist is divided into two sides. He is a sworn enemy of the emperor's lineage, and he has to raise children for the emperor. The protagonist's brain circuit is really outrageous. In the beginning, I boasted about how powerful the Azure Dragon Warlock inheritance was for several chapters, but I gave it away casually and said it was not important. Since it is not important, why don't you brag about it. I finally figured it out. None of the villains in this book could die. Both the protagonists had to be tortured by monsters. The heroine was manipulated, had her memory modified, and was beaten to death. The worst part was that the generals who were loyal to the protagonist were beaten to death, and those who collaborated with the protagonist were thrown into thin air. The seventh child of the Shen family was killed by Zi Yue for the protagonist. The protagonist even licked Zi Yue's smelly feet. The Shen family did not rebel because of the protagonist's halo. The boy from the Murong family had such a good character. I thought the protagonist was going to use him to control the north, but he turned around and died. The reason why the protagonist left Liuzhou City is also outrageous. With just one word from the enemy, you left. But any normal person would consider whether it was a trap! The protagonist went there, but nothing was negotiated. He was still smiling even though he knew he was being tricked.

This is not a cool novel, it is a pseudo-farming novel, and it does not look like a behind-the-scenes boss or group portrait. I can't really tell what genre it is. Anyway, I don't read books by genre. As long as the plot is complex, there are many pitfalls without rushing to fill them, and the logic of the character's behavior is based on human emotions and bad habits, I will like it. Broken chapters can also remind me of the years when I was a teenager and read novel serials in newspapers and magazines. At that time, let alone 6,000 daily updates, maybe not even 1,000-2,000? If you mind the fragments and lack of connection with the plot, I suggest you re-read it before watching it. Readers will not find a sense of immersion in this book. What the author wants to express must be analyzed and interpreted objectively. . . Thing. I guess it's because the author didn't want to water down the inner drama of a few thousand words (after all, water was the most criticized thing in the past) and slow down the progress of the plot. The protagonist is a superficial weakling who is ruthlessly involved in the struggle between rights and interests before he develops. The protagonist does not have a 100% God's perspective. The world after traveling was very different from the game plot he knew, so he could only take it one step at a time. The protagonist has no cheats or systems. The way to become a god has always existed. The protagonist is not the only one. Someone might have crossed over earlier than him, or there might have been a group of people who crossed over. Readers who like simple articles, refreshing articles, full of sense of substitution, and no so-called poisonous points of online articles should not waste their time. The subject matter of this book seems to be very popular, but the core is very niche. You can tell by looking at the comments that so many people are complaining about it. Really, don't come in if you don't like it.

First of all, I think this is a good book. This is one of the few books I have seen where the IQ of the supporting characters is online. It was originally a world of monsters and demons, and the protagonist was God? Is there nothing missing? Many people are confused from God's perspective, what can they do if they are left to themselves? Other people say it's watery, because the author doesn't foreshadow it. You say it's a brainless and cool story, but the author has little foreshadowing. You say it's too blunt, and the author has too much foreshadowing, and you say it's watery. Reading some books does not require thinking, but reading some books requires some thinking. Come on author, I think it's great!

Gave up. Shen Nong is about to be poisoned to death. When the big scene comes, the main character disappears and a bunch of blind supporting characters come out to chat, and they chat for more than ten chapters. A riddle from beginning to end. I don't know what you're talking about at all

I felt that the writing was getting more and more complicated, and I felt that it might collapse. There is no plot that requires brain use like before, and the hooks are getting bigger and bigger. First, I came up with a so-called Shinto, then unlimited food, and now all kinds of technology, including modern weapons, are created from scratch in half a year. You must know that during this period, we are still fighting a war. Don't say that the protagonist was just a programming dog before time travel. Do you understand this? Even modern step-by-step teaching will take years or even decades to be widely popularized and applied because it needs to be digested. In just half a year, you have developed to the level before World War I. It is really six. Are all those who traveled through time fools in the past?

One thing to say, the writing is good, but it's uncomfortable to watch From a God's perspective, the protagonist obviously has a better way (taking the line of the demon King Qin) (There is a certain probability that King Qin is another mastermind, at least it feels like King Qin suddenly knows too much, just like the protagonist) but now he is so aggrieved. This does not mean that the protagonist must not be deflated, but from the reader's point of view, the protagonist can avoid these deflated places at least a few times, which makes the reader uncomfortable. The first time was not to investigate the case directly. The second time was to talk more with Mr. Miao and Master Huang during World War II at the hot springs, get some information about the King of Qin, and take the line of coexistence of humans and monsters. The third time was to not go to Beijing and take the line of escaping from the world (it may also be the line of coexistence of humans and monsters, after all, we can talk about it), but there is no protagonist. (Due to poor information, the protagonist does not know the King of Qin deeply, but the reader should know better). This is the most frustrating line now. He was attacked by both parties, repeatedly threatened by the emperor, and there were no countermeasures (from the perspective of God, there is no other way to go, so we must take this path)

People always say that it is watery, but a book does not only have a main plot. To be honest, I did feel that some places were watery when I read it. I also think that some parts of the book are watery, but some branch lines (I always get angry when I see people saying watery in some beautiful places), such as I really don't understand the scenes depicting Shen Xue and Murong's imperial examinations and Shen Yuan's return to Beijing (which is obviously related to the exchange of resources between the capital and Jiangnan, and the plot itself is also very interesting). The supporting characters other than the protagonist are well portrayed and are actually very interesting, right? Of course, it is actually possible to increase the proportion of the main plot (with the current progress, I really have to do the main plot). The main reason is that if it is written well, no matter the main plot or branch plots, I think it looks good. But the recent chapters have been really bad. It does not mean that you can't write those characters, but you can deal with them faster. The unimportant people can be dealt with in one stroke. Then Lu Ming's concubine and daughter have to be written, and Shen Yu also has to be written. It is completely unnecessary and the characters are not attractive at all. To write such a long chapter, the story about Lu Ming's concubine can be cut off after the underworld (I don't know why I added a paragraph asking for marriage to Lu Ming's concubine's daughter?), And the story about Shen Yu should be cut off after the reunion between Shen Yuan and his mother. Keep it. The most essential part is not that I want everything, and if I want everything, it won't be a sword, but Feng Huo's group portraits and plot design are much better than you, the author (from my understanding, only good plot design can have the basis for group portraits, But I'm not saying that the author's plot design is bad, but that the upper limit of the plot of this type of novel is there, so don't write so many unnecessary supporting characters). To sum up, 1. The proportion of main and branch plots is actually okay. Some branch plots are indeed quite interesting, but when writing branch plots, you need to keep them contained and don't let them go as you write. Put the space on unimportant people (I'm talking about you, Chapter 316 and Brother Shen) My brother wants to kill Shen Xue, etc. It feels really meaningless, so long-winded. To me, it's like a waste chapter. I didn't even register a word in my mind and just skidded to the next chapter. It's like spending money in vain) Finally, I feel that the author is really good at describing female characters. I hope there are more emotional lines between the protagonist and some sexy older sisters (more sexy older sisters!! More sexy older sisters!! Haha)

Everything was fine before, but the fox and Ziyue forced their way out of trouble and went straight to the protagonist's base camp to cause trouble. It was a real failure. The fox was so scary before, but in the end, they had no backup plan at all, and they relied on a barrier. It's been two years, and I can now face the court. It doesn't matter if I don't kill this fox. There are no restrictions. Let her communicate freely with the outside world. You say it.

Has the author changed? Or did the studio take over? The one that is on the shelves and the one that is not on the shelves feel like two novels. A lot of settings before it was put on the shelves were completely thrown away, such as ghost children and mirror monsters. I spent so much effort to get it, where are they now? If there is a replacement, I won't watch it, and I'll save money for the studio.

The main character, Pan Xia, couldn't bear it and lost 6 yuan of blood just to give a warning to the brothers who came later. Remember to read book reviews before reading.

The more you write, the more watery and rubbish it gets. Newcomers are not advised to read it, it's very confusing!