The Gray Wizard of Hogwarts

Let me give you a little suggestion. The protagonist's power grows too fast, just like what Dumbledore listed on Christmas. He has done too many things in one year. He is so genius. He steps on Voldemort and looks down on the White Devil. The whole world is catering to him. You see, a genius like George Fred also has to stay up late and read for several months. Why can the protagonist read a book, read it all night, have an inspiration, and then immediately generate profits? It's like the Fire Dragon book. You just put your head in it once and that's it? Furthermore, the setting of this clone and the chess piece is a bit poisonous. The author's idea should be to crush the Animagus in his predecessor and then evolve, but I remember that his soul has been fused once, so why does this happen again? Since it is a fanfic, everyone still wants to read the story in the castle. Since he is a student, he cannot be too invincible. In a flash of inspiration, it is a ground-breaking development, and the readers are a little numb The author has borrowed Snape's words to say that the protagonist's foundation is not very good, so why is he invincible even though his foundation is not very good? Is it possible to simply go to class, complete daily tasks, and have a slower pace? Or something went wrong? The soul is damaged and you can only use a little magic? The author encountered problems that writers often encounter, such as power failure and later collapse. He underestimated the geniuses in the novel a little too much. For example, Sirius, who was obviously the main plot of the book, turned out to be a sowing robot. Sirius has such a strong will, so how can he be so bad? The protagonist crushes everyone he meets, so what's more exciting to watch? A random idea can shock the wizarding world. He's too out of touch with the masses.

How can I put it, the Hermione in this book is the middle-class one, not as good as the previous one, but more than the next one. Although she is still very good, I think wizarding may not be the most suitable profession for her. In fact, she herself is one of those children who loves to break the rules, but she has been emphasizing to those around her not to violate school rules. She has always wanted to refute Anton's point of view, but she It can be seen from the fact that she studied dark magic with Grindelwald and has been absorbing Anton's knowledge (don't say it's not in the text, Harry knows a few dark magics, but Hermione doesn't?), She is contradictory. In reality, many smart people are like this. The latter sentence should be added by the book friend. The previous sentence is from the Analects. The Hermione in this book is very suitable for this evaluation. I even think that she does not really like magic. She just likes to study school subjects. She is used to being a top student and puts herself in a leading position compared to her peers, so she met Anton. She has such a strong sense of competition. I think if she has always had this kind of mentality, whether it is the Muggle society or the wizarding world, it can only be said that if you enter the Ministry of Magic or a large company as soon as you graduate, you will have the opportunity to rise step by step according to the system. But if you want her to start a business from scratch to become a Fortune 500 company, or come up with a groundbreaking magic theory, it will be a big success. I think it is very difficult to greatly promote the progress of magic. Such people are successful people in the ordinary sense. But you have to say that they are far away from Dumbledore, Nicol Flamel, Newt Scamander, Grindelwald, Voldemort, Anton (think about it, Anton is now considered a great man), this kind of magical attainments or strength are at the top of the pyramid. There is still a long way to go between being a human being or a demon king. Judging from this book, she only studies well within the scope of the textbook and can master magic knowledge one step ahead of her peers. But in terms of future achievements, I think it is difficult to reach Professor McGonagall, but there is some hope, but there is a high probability that she will stop at the elite Auror level, which is the middle level among the Order of the Phoenix elite. After all, wizards don't have universities where they can take postgraduate entrance examinations. If those children from pure-blood families have graduated, know how to study, and are talented and have a rich collection of books (Draco), they may catch up with or even surpass Hermione (after all, according to the original book, Draco is still talented in alchemy). After all, she is a Muggle wizard. Unless she graduates and wanders around, she will soon hit her ceiling and start working in politics. This may be how she became the Minister of Magic in the original book. Speaking of this, I feel a little helpless towards Hermione. After all, she is one of the more charming characters in the original work and can be considered a representative of Muggle wizards. I hate her a lot, but when I think about it, I feel that this is the best a child can do. The above is my humble opinion. It is my first time to write a long review. If you don't like it, please don't criticize her. Invite everyone to eat wife cake. 🙂🙂🙂

Wizards are gods, I like this kind of magic, especially when the lake floats, it is so magical Also, because I am also a fun person + fully subscribe, give me a title 😏

This book's narration of Harry Potter's second creation and worldview structure is amazing. It also handles and recycles dark threads well, and has a good understanding of the plot characters themselves. However, I personally think there are several fatal flaws in the story, which makes me more regretful. I look forward to the author's ability to transcend these subsequent works. I have read about 600 chapters so far, and I will write down my current thoughts. First, if all stories are to be engaging and interesting, they must have story tension. Movies, novels, dramas and games, no matter what the medium, inevitably require conflicts and contradictions in the development of events. Use the conflict of events to depict the characters, and use the characters to express the author's own thoughts. There are not many dramatic conflicts in this book, or most of them are not obvious. The only obvious ones are Anton's life and death in the early stage, how to transcend the closed loop of time, then Anton, Tom and Lao Deng in the Sorcerer's Stone, and Anton, Lao Deng and Lao Ge in the Chamber of Secrets. It can be seen that there is still a general rhythm control, but the small details are not handled well, there is a lack of conflict in small events, or the motivation of the characters lacks support. This support is the combination of human sensibility and logic, and the "emotional" part of this book is rarely seen after the second year. There should be foreshadowing and climax for every small incident, and there should be a more intense scene or the reveal of a hidden thread at the end of the volume. This will make the overall story more layered and more exciting to read. In summary, the straightforward narrative makes the story a bit boring, and in the end, large sections of content description can be skipped. Secondly, from a reader's perspective, the most exciting thing in a Harry Potter fanfic should not just be the magic. It's magic, people, events, the miraculous interaction between magic and people, the mysterious influence of magic on events, the mutual influence between people, and the overlapping of events that together build a gorgeous magical world. This book focuses on describing many details of magic, has many wonderful secondary settings, and describes many scenes of magical life. This is very rare, and similar styles are rare nowadays. But there is a problem here. There are too many descriptions, and many places are even repeated many times. This weakens the motivation of the characters to do things, thereby weakening the conflict of the story and making the reader's imagination deviate. When depicting a character's thoughts, it is not necessarily necessary to pour out everything, but to leave room for the reader's imagination, such as what this action means at this time, what this sentence means, and why he did it. These require the author's restraint and control, because this is the right of the reader's imagination. Examples of characterization: The grief of those who are deeply sad is silent. In summary, the space for imagination is left to the reader, and the direction of imagination is left to the author, but the key points need to be clear. Third, character growth. This book spends a lot of space describing the nature of wizards and magic. It interestingly uses some of the collective subconscious concepts of Jungian psychology to describe the growth of the protagonist. But the relationship between character growth and events is very weak, which is a sentimental feeling. Because depicting the growth of a character often does not require directly stating "because he has experienced XX, he is now XX". It's that he did it before and does it now. For example, Severus in this book can see the character's growth in the story because of the blessing of the original work, but Mag does not have this feeling. The part where Mag saves her husband is more like promoting the plot, so we write it like this. The most important thing is Anton. There are too many descriptions of Anton's magic principles, but the character of Anton does not grow much because of the development of the story. It is more about what abilities he has, so he can do this or that. On the contrary, it is not as lively and vivid as it was at the beginning. I have no choice but to do that. I have some choices, but what to do and what not to do is the key. At present, it is more like promoting the plot and growing up logically. The reason why many people hate Ron is actually because Rowling didn't write much about the growth of this character. He was always like this, and in the end everyone was annoyed when they saw him. In conclusion, the promotion of the story should actually proceed spontaneously from the growth of the characters. I personally believe that no matter what kind of story it is, people are the core thing that needs to be described. Stories are born from people and eventually return to people, thereby conveying the indescribable touch and fun. This is true inside, and it is true outside.

It took me three days to catch up on all the previous content, and I felt a lot after reading it. I read Harry Potter when I was in junior high school. Since then, I have been full of imagination about the gorgeous magical world. Just like Anton, the magic I think is not to use a wand to make waves. This is too unmagical. The magic in my heart can accomplish everything according to my imagination. That is magic. The world written by the author made me feel this way. What's even more amazing is that the author uses reasonable descriptions to analyze what he thinks is magic, and rationalizes it from the perspective of world consciousness. Although he doesn't like the various self-perception descriptions of the protagonist in the middle, he also understands that this is the source of the power of magic. One last thing, author, are you really not from the magic world? How did you break through the secrecy law? Will my memory be wiped out by Oblivion?

A short book review after reading This book is the best one I have ever read among HP fans. If Rowling gave everyone in the world a piece of stone when she wrote "Harry Potter", then the author used this stone to carve the "Along the River During the Qingming Festival". The most powerful part of this book is the description of magic, as if he really knows magic, and there is real logic in it. All worldviews are developed based on the logic of the original work, and are consistent with the plot logic. The most interesting thing is that the author's writing method is the same as Lockhart taught Anton in the article, magic theory ➕ adventure story. I really once doubted that the author really knew magic. After finishing the manuscript, he flew away on a broomstick. This book is simply a magic paper! This book is really great. It is not just an online article, but more like a literary work. Come on, the author, and look forward to better works! Readers, if you keep reading, you will also see a different magical world.

Under extreme illusion, the world gradually becomes distorted.

This is the most awesome fan fiction I've ever read. It's so awesome.

Write what you want, don't care too much about comment areas and posts, grades are everything, new writers can easily be fooled by others, you know. Since you like writing and so many people like to read, you don't need to care too much about what others think. Writing is a very simple thing. You write, and I see, both parties don't need to know each other or communicate. I won't teach you how to write a book. If one day I leave you, it will be quietly. You will still be you, and you will not be able to find your own author because of my influence. By then, this book will no longer belong to you. So, I quite like reading it now (progress chapter 88). Let's talk about the results. The comments section should be blocked. The results are so good, so you must be confident.

I have read most of the chapters in this book that have been updated so far, and I would like to share my thoughts. First of all, I think this novel is well written. I rarely say this word, but this book deserves this evaluation in my heart. In fact, I started reading this book purely by chance. I am not a die-hard Harry Potter fan, and I was just looking for a harem novel to read. But I accidentally fell in love with it after reading a few chapters. Of course, I realized at the beginning that this book might have a single heroine or even no heroine. However, I thought the author's writing style was good, and the writing style had a western magical flavor. In addition, although it had this color, it was not excessive, so I continued reading it. Then the second point I realized is intention. In terms of setting the framework and plot direction, he not only wrote his own style, which made me feel like JK Rowling knows nothing about Harry Potter, but he was also able to write unique ideas based on fitting each plot of the original work. Really, this is what I like very much. I think the two most important things about fan works are that the character's personality fits the original work and is not OOC, and the second is to write a novel plot and not copy the original work. Among the latter, I think the highest level is when new characters are added, and an additional driving force for the plot is added, and the development can be based on the original work in a reasonable and well-founded way. The author did it. Of course, the above are all the advantages I think. Next, let me talk about my regrets. First, it is naturally the emotional line. At least where I saw it, it should be in the direction of a single female protagonist. Of course, I have no intention of letting the author satisfy my selfish ideas. Now that there are so many chapters, it is unrealistic to forcefully change the love line. The purpose of saying this is to hope that the author will not make repeated horizontal jumps in the future. I am already mentally prepared. The second thing is that the protagonist is a bit too "dragging the whole family around". Regarding the family line and the wooden house classmate relationship, I didn't feel the emotional depth at all. I can only feel that the protagonist doesn't know why. He doesn't have a deep emotional foundation, nor does the other party bring him much help or, to put it mildly, benefits or value. Judging from the subsequent plot, the role played is not irreplaceable. It's far worse than the teacher-student relationship with Voldemort and Snape. It would be nice if this could be changed.

The story is very creative, the plot is novel, and the plot is exciting. However, even the donkeys in the production team dare not rest like you!

Much better than those popular Harry Potter books.

As a single author who specializes in making HP fan book lists, I always firmly believe that whether a HP fan is well written depends on how well the protagonist's school life is written. But the protagonist has not entered school yet😥 So I don't know how the writing will be in the future From the perspective of character creation, the characters in it are quite reasonable, although they are a bit too facial expression I always feel that the protagonist is already very mature in combat and psychology before entering school, and he is very likely to collapse later From the plot point of view, the development of the plot is quite reasonable, and it is quite good in the original plot. The author also has his own understanding of the curse But to be honest, it really has nothing to do with HP. This is more like a Western fantasy in the skin of an HP fan Some shortcomings: The character of the protagonist is not very coordinated, sometimes too childish, sometimes too mature To summarize: 1. Not poisonous 2. No school content If my poison test helps you, please can you click on my book list, take a look, add it to your favorites and get a flower or something, or give this post a like

This book is a good novel for people like me who love Harry Potter. The HP is very magical. The first volume is full of foreshadowings, which are revealed in more than 200, 700 chapters, but ignoring those foreshadowings, the first volume creates an Anthony who has traveled through time: Weasley has a plug-in for "wizard eyes" and forms a bond with Lupine and others (this may explain why the protagonist appears so clearly and saves people everywhere), thus having the main line of solving the werewolf problem. If you can see the listed chapters, it means that you are gradually attracted by the author's magical world. If you read it volume by volume, you will find that the summary at the end of each volume is very interesting, as if the seven and eight changes to HP's original work in the book are still writing about the events of the original work.

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This book is definitely of high quality among Harry Potter fans, and is several Lockharts higher than those Muggles who can't copy the original books well ( Advantages: interesting personal settings, unique perspectives, generally reasonable time loops Disadvantages (personal opinion): the protagonist is obsessed with Lupine and Rosier The family is great, and there was no problem in wanting to be protected at first, but from the time when I tried my best to save people from Snape to becoming a family and solving the blood curse across time, I was a little confused (they became a bunch of old monsters and became their biological father). It was probably because the protagonist, an orphan, had lacked love since he was a child and was tortured by his teacher and wanted a family (no derogatory meaning).

It's very interesting. I especially like the author's additions to the HP magic world, including the ancient wizard folklore stories and ritual magic. It feels really amazing.

The best hp fanfic, Gaga looks good

What can I say, I can only say that it is awesome, this is the best one among all the Harry Potter fanfics I have read (✪▽✪)

At this point, they are only 31, which is far from the mark!

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In Chapter 196, Lao Deng asked the protagonist to help him make a Horcrux, and Lao Deng already knew that this was a novel world. Just give me poison and kill me. The only interesting thing about this novel is the magic theory, which is very imaginative, but the author is so imaginative that the character cannot stand up at all. He is completely based on his imagination, making the story logic extremely confusing. And hey hey hey, hahaha, woc, all kinds of shock, very old-fashioned writing style. The character design is extremely poor. Story, logic is confusing. Brain, currently the top class in Hogwarts. That's it, I abandon the book and say goodbye.

What impressed me most about this book. Fantastic magic (×) Delicate characterization (×) Ups and downs of the plot (×) Quack (✓)

I couldn't stand it anymore. While talking about cherishing my life and not getting involved in Harry Potter's affairs, I hung out with Quirrell and even passed out in front of Quirrell two or three times. No, I was really so assured that Voldemort would not be a killer. I was still confident that Dumbledore could intimidate Voldemort. Just for those two curses, I ran over to help. Quirrell was doing trouble in the Forbidden Forest when black magic was banned and he didn't know about Dumbledore's protection. If that protection hadn't blocked a life-killing curse, the protagonist would have died. No, he was only in the first grade and 11 years old. He was so anxious to step into the battlefield between Old Deng and Voldemort. It was a bit ruthless to seek death, and he still talked about cherishing life.

I can't understand it. I really can't understand it. I hope someone can explain it to me! ! ! I saw Chapter 92, where Dumbledore told the protagonist that he hoped that the protagonist would influence Voldemort and become kind again (?) To be honest, I really couldn't stand it when I saw this, even if it appeared earlier that the protagonist only talked to Quirrell once in class, and when they met in the office, Voldemort immediately appeared in person (he just inexplicably took a fancy to the protagonist, without any testing, and just lost his temper). I can tolerate it just like this, I just assume that Voldemort is a person who is so ambitious that he is brainless. After all, in the movie, Voldemort does behave like a brainless person. But Dumbledore hopes that the protagonist can influence Voldemort and make him good again. I really can't convince myself! Dumbledore's performance in the movie does seem to have Fudge in his head in many places, but I think the strongest white devil of the century shouldn't be so sweet! He shouldn't be able to forgive a Voldemort who killed countless people, right? This treatment is almost equal to that of his old lover! When did the relationship between Dumbledore and Voldemort become the same as that of his old lover? Did he suddenly become a role model for others at this moment? Really, can love forgive everything? It really doesn't matter how big a mistake you made, but because you have love, can your sentence be reduced? (Example) I was really confused when I saw this. I kept thinking about this in my mind. After turning the page, I couldn't read it at all. My mind kept thinking about the plot, which greatly affected my mood when I read it next! So I hope that a book friend can kindly come out and explain to me whether there is such a plot behind it! Is it really the protagonist who wants to influence Voldemort? (The protagonist was cautious and wary of others before, but then because of Dumbledore's words, he really thought, "How about giving it a try?") Was Voldemort really influenced in the follow-up? Please kindhearted people, please save me from this terrible sense of substitution!

I just finished reading the public chapter. The protagonist has no system, but he is more ruthless than the system. The so-called study of the magic system is basically "the power of my thinking". I haven't graduated from the first grade, but my achievements are as follows: 1. Created my own magical animal transformation spell, which can even turn into an optimized version of the original magical animal, such as a dragon-skinned werewolf; 2. Developed a "prank candy" that can transform into a viper or a werewolf after eating it (can be used as a prank candy) Obviously the cost is not high); 3. You can easily use the Cruciatus Curse and use it as a "soul scalpel" to treat soul damage; 4. Easily bypass the black magic ban imposed by Dumbledore. As long as the protagonist "I think" is white magic, the Cruciatus Curse, which can only be used with malicious intentions, can also be used as white magic; 5. Greatly reduce the blood curse beast The conditions of humans and werewolves (have not yet been completely treated); 6. A floating spell makes the entire black lake float; 7. After listening to it once, you can use the Divine Guardian, in the form of a magical animal; 8. Improved the "Wizard Eyes" potion that the black wizard has studied for a lifetime, and by the way, improved the potion into a magic spell; 9 , after studying Grindelwald's alchemy works, it was of course improved into a spell; 10. Learned to make Horcruxes; 11. Optimized the learning method of Animagus; As for learning the goblin's "Elf Eyes" magic, Dumbledore's "Mud Knight" magic, Quirrell's knot magic, etc., I will not list them one by one. In general, there is a strong beauty of learning the immortal mode at the age of eight.

I really can't stop watching it. What kind of magic does Rowling know? She has to be a fucking Chinese author! Fantasy, weird yet reasonable and orthodox. Sometimes I wonder if Anton is as cool as I am in the Harry Potter world!

After reading more than 500 chapters, I finally couldn't stand it anymore. To put it simply, it didn't meet my expectations. The character of the protagonist is very strange. Sometimes he does whatever he wants, and sometimes he is not afraid of death. He does things like hitting a hammer here and there. While saying that he is satisfying his curiosity to explore magic, he also directly cuts off the connection with the top "magical creatures" such as the Dementor Nebula. A lot of magic theories have kept me from understanding what the main plot is, and I never insist on one thing. You can say that you are indecisive or don't like killing, but it always feels like it's not straightforward enough. And for me, the biggest problem is that I have significantly modified the main plot, but I have no other main quests. Although some people say that magic theory is very good, I do not deny that I have really written a lot of settings in this area, but it seems too boring to me, not lively and interesting enough. Basically, whoever said something, the protagonist immediately becomes enlightened, understands some magic principle, creates some magic theory, how amazing it is In short, if you want to watch something with a main plot and a likable protagonist, it's best not to watch this. To be honest, Professor Magic is much better.

This is a magical world, Anton's magical world, not Harry Potter's. This is a real world, not just a fan.