There's Something Terribly Wrong with My Hogwarts

It's so good. It's the first time I've read a Harry Potter fanfic. It's very exciting. Even someone like me who knows little about the original Harry Potter can still be very immersed in reading it. Come on, author, please provide more.

Update quickly! Looking at Chapter 18 that has not been read, I suddenly want to remind you here. I also have to remind other authors on my bookshelf. There are still few books to read...

This author has some personal stories, but this book is actually pretty good. But the premise is that please don't be led astray by the author's obviously crooked "butt". The Soviet revisionists are not very good, but no matter how bad Big Brother is, they are still better than the Angsa gangs in North America and the white gangs in Western Europe.

Spending money to subscribe, but the book ends up being unfinished. What a waste of money. What kind of broken software accepts memberships and then has to spend money to buy it separately? I spent almost 50, but the book is unfinished. I am really speechless for a novel that is so expensive and yet the book is unfinished! ! ! ! !

I hope the author can properly explore the "role" of the heroine as the main character in the development of the story, instead of treating the heroine as a pendant of the protagonist and participating in the plot as a pure emotional adjustment machine. Many of the heroines (no matter who they are) in HP fanfics on this site are only responsible for blushing, heartbeat, crying, and emotional adjustment. They are almost useless to the growth of the protagonist and the development of the story. There is no sense of disobedience if their roles are removed. It can be regarded as the product of "setting up a heroine just for the sake of having a heroine." The emotional development in these works is often inexplicable (extremely embarrassing), either licked without principles (such as HG) or licked with a "heroic" aura. There is little analysis of the basis of the emotional development of the male and female protagonists and the subtle changes in the male and female protagonists' behaviors and positions after the emotions sprout. Conventional emotional development routines include frequent meetings (participating in the plot in various ways), long-term bickering (exchange and influence of ideas), and giving appropriate holiday gifts (such as the mokeskin pouch given in HPMOR. According to HPMOR's annotation, "According to the book "Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them", a moke is a deformed lizard. The mokeskinpouch should be a bag made of the skin of this deformed lizard." "This should be considered a "legal" item. Unlike the Invisible Stretch Spell, which is an advanced spell strictly controlled by the Ministry of Magic, it is only allowed to be used on daily items approved by the Ministry of Magic, such as family tents. It is not allowed to be used for private purposes. HG's beaded bag and Arthur's flying car are illegal abuse.), The stimulation of the suspension bridge effect, and the confirmation of feelings at the Goblet of Fire dance are often not well written (conventional routines can be written well enough, and more delicate depictions are not necessary). Many of the protagonists (only pure HP fans on this site) are too versatile. They are fully proficient in magic, potions, transformations, black magic, magic literature (not referring to all O's in the exam), and some works also include alchemy. Each one is like a combination of Dumbledore + Nicoléme + Voldemort, which is slightly inconsistent in a pure HP world (strong dueling ability and high combat literacy are still necessary, otherwise the strength is too low and nothing can be changed, which is meaningless). The overly versatile protagonist also makes the heroine extremely "cumbersome" and has little value and meaning. Now that I've finished complaining, let's get back to this book. The plot of the first year is good, and the relationship and communication with HG, who is positioned as a "half-childhood sweetheart," are also relatively normal. I agree with the evaluation of "The Light of the Moon" and will continue to support it after it is put on the shelves. Once again, I hope that the author can add appropriate roles to other characters (not necessarily the heroine, but it is more suitable for the heroine to arrange this kind of role), responsible for the traceability analysis of magic spells (split, combination, re-creation and improvement)/magic potion component analysis and potion production/curse magic research and anti-curse methods/transformation research and the use of transfiguration in combat/magic literature analysis/alchemy item analysis, etc. I also hope that the author can do more "various types of magic analysis" for expansion, so as to fill in the plot and reasonably enhance the strength of the protagonist group (too strong will not follow the plot, and too weak will have too little interference in the plot, so a balance is needed). In addition, this is a system text after all. It is acceptable for the protagonist to be more versatile, but it may be more appropriate to focus on "creative talent". PS: I personally appreciate the scene in "HP American Transfer Student" (which is blocked next door to this site) in which the male and female protagonists support each other and face the "test" together. The emotional scenes in this work are more natural, and the depiction of the male and female protagonists' changes in behavioral patterns and positions after confirming their relationship is also more delicate. Then there are Harry Potter and the Dark Room, Forever Knight, The Untold Secret, Second Life and its companions The Reason, Manacled and so on. The authors of these works' analysis and speculation on character behavior patterns under the HP framework is worth a look. Of course, the focus of these works is different from that of the colleagues on this site, so there is no need to copy them. It would be worth looking forward to if this book could add "the role of other main characters" or add personality independence and subjective initiative to several main characters. It would be better if it could depict the subtle changes in behavioral patterns and positions before and after identity changes (key events).

I feel good about the setting, but the various jokes in the main plot are all about cleverness, which makes it very embarrassing. There is no need to force your brain to explain. No matter how funny an adult is, he is just in private, doing business as if he is doing business. The protagonist is always making jokes to show his cleverness regardless of the occasion. What is particularly attractive about the HP fandom is the learning of various magic spells and the research of imagination. The protagonist's strength depends entirely on the system, and there is no sense of self-effort. This article should be called Genius Me's daily fun at Hogwarts.

Present the facts and make sense. No matter how bad the Soviet revisionists are, capitalism is better. You can look at what the colonies of capitalist countries are like. I quote Mr. Marx here. Marx once said: "When we turn our gaze from the homeland of bourgeois civilization to the colonies, the extreme hypocrisy and barbaric nature of bourgeois civilization are nakedly presented to us, because it still pretends to be very decent in its hometown, but once it arrives in the colonies, it is not disguised at all." Actual Example: The Desperate Father in the Congo Free State (Story and Photos on Baidu) Not to mention that the Soviet Union was probably a paradise compared to now. Let's take a closer look at the Soviet Union's work system... I wrote this mainly before I was about to read this book. I noticed that the comments below said that the author had a private job. I saw the content of my review from a review of another book. It seems that this kind of content can also be posted. (The picture has been deleted) Goodbye, I am going to read a book. If there is anything wrong, please point it out.

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Hermione and the hero

Talking about politics without sufficient management experience... A lot of personal stuff

Network picture, just missing a pair of wings

It feels pretty good. The writing is up to standard and there is no big problem in understanding the original work. Although it is Hermione again, although it is suspected to be the Sandaime, even though it is a system text. There are too many fans of the heroine Hermione, but I quite like the character of Hermione. As long as Hermione is not written as a direct criticism and the emotional line is inexplicable, I am not disgusted with the heroine Hermione. And the heroine Hermione is the safest choice for the heroine. If I don't know who to choose, just choose Hermione 😏 system text. In fact, the HP world uses system cheats, so it is better to give a good talent. However, system writing is easy to set up. As long as the plot and writing are up to standard, system writing is relatively easy to write. It's the only one that seems a little irritating to me when I look at this suspected Sandaime... With the recent HP, are you too embarrassed to be the protagonist if you're not a Sandaime?

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Why does the author like to write plots outside of school so much? Before it was released, the chapters about losing magic and gaining blood had already received feedback from various readers. After it was released, he started writing Russian plots again, and plots related to the protagonist's bloodline. Your previous explanation of identity, foreshadowing, etc., These are all your assumptions. As an author, you cannot impose your assumptions on readers. There must be some people who like you, but who is the majority of the audience for fanfics? If the plot is known, how can the protagonist change the plot? You must write about the unknown, why not write something original? You know best how the subscription volume is until now. Now enter the book raising mode and see how it develops in the future.

Book it all and read it in one sentence. A relatively smooth running account.

Hermione must be beautiful

This is the second HP novel I've seen that is well-written but ruined by jokes that ruin the reading experience.

A word of advice, don't stray too far from the magic theme. . Although we know that political rights are everywhere in every world, whether extraordinary or ordinary, there is no need for Harry Potter fans to describe so many power struggles or class struggles. . Because the power of the extraordinary world is fundamental

Oh my god! This is so beautifully written, I give you my daily recommendation votes!

When I saw the protagonist planning to rectify the school and giving Dumbledore a lesson in moral integrity, I suddenly felt that I was on the wrong set. Then the protagonist goes to Su country again, which feels like he is going to engage in politics. . . When reading HP fanfiction, what I want to see is how wonderful the magical world is and how fantastic the protagonist's life is, rather than the sublimation of human nature and the progress of society. . . If we have different paths, we will see each other again.

I can't bear to watch the pirated version. I came back and ordered them all. Hey hey hey. Isn't this a compliment to me?

The ending was too hasty. It was unfinished.

From watching it, I feel that as the protagonist's strength continues to improve, he suddenly becomes a straight man. Even the schoolmates who are five years older can clearly feel it and reject it. Later, my mother's best friend and Hermione will directly become the protagonist without knowing it. I don't understand the role of the senior at the beginning: is it just to lure the senior who can fight and torture her love rival, or is it the senior who is unintentionally seduced by the title to show off... To be honest, after understanding it, I thought the plot was quite vulgar. To be honest, I don't think there's anything bad about the first original plot. The second creation between the protagonist and the saint can be said to be the highlight for me personally. On the contrary, Su's plot afterwards is very annoying: since it has nothing to do with right or wrong at this point, but the protagonist saved the woman at the beginning, and it was because of that woman that the other side found out that he was alive. Even in the plot where the woman helps those children mentioned earlier, I think the protagonist might as well stay and protect these children... Anyway, when I was given two choices when I was substituted, I was more willing to protect those children. Anyway, when I saw that sentence later, whether it was right or wrong, it really shocked me. Furthermore, the author's private goods are quite obvious and unclear (it's not right or wrong, so I'll help the other side...). I don't understand what the purpose of this plot is: is it written for the sake of originality? On the contrary, I think it is better to expand the part about the saints...

I have been reading the original version until this point, and I always thought this book would be very good. Praise me.

Wow wow wow, it's so good. This is the first HP fanfic I've read. Wow, it's so awesome. My HP soul is so good. Come on, author! ! Ah, how can I order all of them? Because this is the first book that I want to vote for monthly. I don't know how to order all of them ww

Ahhhhh why is the update so slow so slow so slow so slow so slow so slow ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh that I love watching this so much I didn't know anything about HP before and then because our class did well in the English test the teacher played this to us and we got hooked on it. I just finished watching Harry 3 yesterday and the author really wrote it so well. Woohoo, come on, update. I will definitely watch the original version and show my wife by the way Please add more details

Hermione's actual role in the Harry Potter world is just a vase

10 Monthly passes have been given at the end of the month. Should I add more or update more?

It's okay, you can watch it in the early stage

Order everything and add details 😁