Raphael the Battle Mage

He used montage shots to present the extremely large-scale scenes in the early stage, which is really better. However, in the early stages of the story, readers cannot fully engage with this pessimistic epic. The emotions change too quickly and it is difficult to empathize. However, if you keep writing, author, really, I am willing to support you, come on!

The description of female characters is so annoying. The first twenty or so chapters are clearly a brutal meat grinder war, with various personnel configurations, skill exchanges and casualties between the enemy and ourselves. Suddenly, an uncle-turned-girl catman comes first, describing the opponent's body shape, appearance, and all kinds of eye contact. Is the war a background board for you? Suddenly there is a chapter where a real-world female idol sings and confesses. The female angel who appears at the end of the war does not direct or look at the overall situation. She runs to the protagonist and chats with him 😅. When writing about war, just write it well. You must add drama to the interactions between various female characters and the protagonist. It will be a drama.

To be honest, as someone who has been in the non-CP group for many years, I don't think there is a big problem with the description of female characters in this article. There won't be any messy descriptions like skin-like skin, big breasts and long legs, staring at other people's breasts, feet, etc. Basically, I have never seen any description of body shape. Just say "good-looking" and then go into the normal description. It won't be like the kind of pig brother who casts a charm on the kp, and then the charm is successful, and then just stares at others. Male protagonist, I like the description of the long legs. Who doesn't like handsome guys with long legs? If the protagonist is more handsome, he will feel more immersed. Come on, make progress faster and reach the big size, and I will give you a reward.

I admire the author's courage. In this environment where online game novels are sinking, he still writes about his dreams. I haven't seen an online game novel that is so deeply rooted in people's hearts for a long time. The writing is really great, especially the war scenes before the public beta. It is really deeply rooted in people's hearts. I will continue to support it, come on!

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the slightest praise begins to sound, and the number of ridicules begins to decrease. When you watch the fifth update, readers' support spontaneously forms, and the voices of praise become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in a long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updating may not solve all difficulties, but more than 90% of the problems come from insufficient updates. So how long has it been and you are still trying to catch fish without updating, are you doing this to everyone?

Damn it, the starting point of the virtual online game is Solitary Miao. It feels like I watched Aetia at the beginning, Su Geng 😍

This is too retro. These days there are still authors who play virtual online games 🙂

It should be about eunuchs. There are too many plots of dancing on the tip of a knife. It is tiring to watch and not many people can follow it. I'm tired from going to work every day, but I still want to read a relaxing story. The protagonist has the best control over which feeling is the best. It's enough to dance with the edge of a knife once in a while and stir up emotion. I can't watch it if I keep dancing with the edge of a knife to stir up emotion.

Personally, I feel that the tone of the Fortress of Sighs was too high. When the server officially opened, it gave people a huge sense of gap and fragmentation. Others don't know. I read the fourth and fifth chapters of the second volume and always felt that it felt bland and tasteless. It was like eating Sichuan spicy rabbit head and then eating Guangdong steamed grouper. It's not that it doesn't taste good, but the taste has been washed away and you can't taste the freshness of the grouper.

The war has come too quickly. The protagonist has not developed much and can only use one level of spells. He is participating in a super large battle. Has he participated? If we raise the situation to this level now, the protagonist will not be able to bring about many new changes in the background of the situation if he develops in the future.