A Mysterious Journey into the World of Pirates

Well, how should I put it? It can be seen that the author is very thoughtful and does not follow the main line to write new ideas. He must have put a lot of thought into it. This may be more difficult to write than pure originality. From this point alone, I think it is worthy of praise. But after reading dozens of chapters, I still don't think these original plots are very interesting. They are neither interesting, enjoyable, nor deep. I think I have read a wide range of books. I have read interesting articles, passionate articles, funny articles, and some books that are not very interesting but have something to offer. However, I can't find what makes me read this book. It just uses the setting of pirates and mystery to write a series of not very interesting stories. Maybe it will be more interesting later when the protagonist becomes stronger and the timeline enters the main line, but I can't read anymore. I really want to continue pursuing it and support such thoughtful authors, but I really can't do that now. The author can also check the reading time. You should know that I didn't just read a chapter or two and just fool around, but I really can't stand the boring plot now, sorry.

The book is definitely a good book and the creativity is very good. Here are some suggestions for everyone to discuss rationally: 1. In the first chapter, don't describe the protagonist in such a servile way, as this will give readers a very bad sense of involvement. It is recommended to change it to have the opportunity to be a singing slave. The protagonist feels lucky, instead of thinking that he is no longer a slave and mocking other slaves. This paragraph must be deleted. 2. There are too many 5 ways, and only one way for sailors is enough. Modify the sailor path. In the path, navigator requires knowledge, so the ability can be reading and learning abilities. Observation hand, the ability can bring about the embryonic form of knowledge. There can even be a ship doctor, so the ability can bring some treatment, self-healing, etc. You don't need that many professions at all, you can add more later if you have ideas. 3. The plot is slightly weak. When pirates write it, the plot can only be one dungeon after another, and one island plot after another. You can arrange a plot with twists and turns. For example, after liberating slaves, you are chased by a general. The protagonist attracts enemies and escapes all the way. Or after the escape is over, you can start writing from Fish-Man Island later on, such as carrying out reforms, uniting fish and human slaves, secretly uniting with the revolutionary army, and building Fish-Man Island into an iron wall.

Let's talk about the overall review. The setting is okay, at least it justifies it. The emotions of the main story have been suppressed and accumulated in the early stage, but when it is released later, it is like a squib, without being vented! The fighting scenes are barely interesting, and the characterization is average. 6 Points

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The idea is good, but the writing is not very good and does not create a sense of mystery. Although the combat power of the five paths of God is not strong in the early stage, it is not weak in other aspects. Not to mention the five paths, even the "audience" can play with the Celestial Dragons. Moreover, the audience is more arrogant than the Celestial Dragons. He regards everyone else as a dramatic actor. How could the protagonist, who was almost tamed by the Celestial Dragons, be regarded by the audience as a theatrical clown performing for him as his master?

How should I put it? It feels like the protagonist can be easily brainwashed by empathy. The Draco at the beginning and the Murlocs at the end all gave me the feeling that I forgot who I was as I was doing it. I would say he was acting, but it did not meet the first rule of acting, "Always remember that you are just acting."

You can use your imagination. No one has written about the path in Lord of Mysteries, but you are too greedy. The end of the complete path of Mystery is the fingers opened by the gods. It is too big, too many, too empty! The most suitable thing for pirates is sailors, one piece is enough. Write each stage of the path in detail, write down the characteristics, and use your imagination to play with it! It's a great book! There is also a big problem with the way you write the plot. In the first chapter, the protagonist knows the world of One Piece and its secrets, but why does he seem to become a native in the later chapters? And his character is really servile! Nausea! The author will revise it or rewrite it, and it will be a good book!

When I was in junior high school, I was dragged into the anime pit. When I was in college, I discussed the three major comics with my classmates. You, the Death God, are too open-minded. You might as well end it with Aizen. You Hokage can't escape the bloodline and talk about fatalism. There are only a few people and a few things coming and going. Look at how well our pirate rubber fruit has been developed. One person My friends who are going overseas are all on the way, and now you tell me that this thing is [Renren Fruit-Phantom Beast Species-Nika Form]. Now when I answer calls from my classmates, I hope they are asking me to borrow money. Sure enough, all efforts, struggles, victories, and passion are all lies. Cheating, blood, and destiny are all small🇯🇵He can't write anything else!

Maybe for the sake of fun, the author felt that a single path was not satisfying enough, so he added five paths to the protagonist. Later, I still felt a little unhappy, so I castrated all the unfavorable negative things in the path, such as losing control, digestion potions, and promotion rituals. But I still don't think it's fun enough, so I incorporated the pirate's Devil Fruit. And to make it even more fun, I may see multiple Devil Fruits incorporated later in the plot. Then, it became what it is now. For some popular science, Lord of Mysteries has a total of 22 paths to God, and the setting is the best I have seen in the past few years. Drink the magic potion, enter the extraordinary sequence, digest the magic potion using the acting method, and after digestion is completed, you can drink the next sequence of magic potion. Starting from the middle and high sequences, in order to increase the probability of success in promotion and reduce the risk of losing control, a promotion ritual has been introduced. As the sequence increases, the promotion ceremony will become more demanding. In low-sequence, if you master the acting method, you can quickly achieve promotion. The purpose of the role-playing method is to speed up the digestion of magic potions, and since this book castrates the magic potion, the role of the role-playing method is unknown. It is only known that the protagonist can use the role-playing method to advance, but it is not clear how to advance. At the same time, the subsequent high-sequence promotion rituals will most likely be omitted. The combat power in Mystery, if there are no sealed objects in the low sequence, it is basically difficult to fight against the pirate world. For details, you can look at Zhou Mingrui's performance in the low sequence 😏. Starting from the middle sequence, the combat power displayed by various channels of Mystery has essentially changed. At the high sequence of demigods, angels, etc., They begin to play with concepts and basically crush pirates. As far as the audience path is concerned, low-sequence battles basically rely on weapons. Starting from the middle sequence, since the pirate world has almost no resistance to psychic abilities, the protagonist can use the ability of the audience path unscrupulously to tamper with the thoughts of the Celestial Dragons, and later modify their consciousness, from slaves to the masters of the Celestial Dragons in just one thought. Even at high sequences, tampering with the entire world government and even world consciousness is just like playing games. We must know that the audience is a Sequence 0 dreamer, and everything he dreams of will come true. Under this premise, if the author does not reduce the mysterious combat effectiveness, this book will be out of control from the beginning. This is still a single path, five paths will be even more explosive. Faced with such a situation, it is easy to understand that the author must greatly weaken the capabilities of these paths, otherwise there will be no way to play at all. Even since there is no magic potion and no digestion, the author has the final say on how to advance. The author can limit the protagonist's path to a low sequence to act as an auxiliary for the sake of reasonableness. The battle still relies on the local strength of the pirates, such as devil fruits, knowledge, color, and armed color. So don't complain about why the author wrote it this way. This is for the sake of reasonableness and can only be written this way. Otherwise, the path is still so strong and there is no risk of losing control. After staying with the Tianlong people for a few years, the protagonist will become a god. Can we still fight a war on top? It is not certain whether there is a world government or not.

The protagonist awakened Goldfinger and was trained to be a dog. He was almost castrated before he woke up. It would be better if you deleted this diary. It is extremely poisonous.

Except for the mystery, this book is not much better than other pirate novels, and is even worse in some aspects. At least the other heroines in One Piece fanfiction are pretty, what the hell is this Bellemel?

It is tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away. The plot is redundant, and the protagonist has no ambition and just goes with the flow. Either being a slave or on the way to being a slave, no one with a little bit of fame can defeat him. The Overlord Peach Rabbit is trying to persuade him to quit, the redhead is trying to quit after eating a Devil Fruit, and the protagonist is trying to quit by eating a Prison Fruit. There are already 5 paths of omniscience and omnipotence, but the skills are messy and a bunch of fruits have been added, and no one is specialized. He was beaten by Kizaru after escaping from the slaves, and then by Kaido, Whitebeard, and Big Mom. He joined the red-haired ship as a navigator and ended up spending so little time on the ship. He often walked alone on the ship. What's the point of getting on the ship. Forget it, no more complaints, I have high poison resistance. The ideas in this book are quite good.

The writing is very messy, for example, the performance of the singer, because the world of Pirates cannot be completed without the Sequence 0 Sun. Can't we directly praise the real sun in the physical sense? It is not necessary to praise the Sequence 0 Sun. The acting method is not dead, and everyone's summary of the key points of the performance may be different.

I just watched it, but I hope it won't be written too well in One Piece. The World Government has Celestial Dragons who can't be vindicated, but there are a lot of bad guys in One Piece!

The abilities of the five paths are so low that they don't exist at all, and coupled with the power of the Devil Fruit... It's too confusing. Originally, it was difficult enough to write a path. After all, one path corresponds to nine types of roles that need to be played, and the five paths are sixty-four. In the end, the protagonist plays nothing, how can this be played? The acting was very poor to begin with, and the Devil Fruit was inserted into it, adding chaos to the situation, and relying on Xiaoxianrou's acting skills to forcibly improve the sequence. This is not the way of God.

Damn it, isn't it disgusting? Didn't they say that pirates don't want women? What's going on now? There's mercy everywhere. There's a navy, a woman from an empty island, and I forgot who it is. I don't know if there will be more in the future. It's really disgusting. You can't have a single heroine. You have to have a harem.

The first chapter is very well written, but those who are trying to persuade them to leave are those novice readers who only know how to act as substitutes. They only bring themselves in, thinking about how awesome they would be if they were themselves, kicking the Tianlong people, punching the Five Old Stars, What is poisonous to me is all the chaos behind it. After changing the settings, Momotu didn't have the overlord color without fruit. When Akainu, Aoki and Kizaru were still lieutenant generals, Momotu was actually a candidate for general. The Red Earl turned out to be a Shichibukai, and was defeated by the red-haired one in 1506. How many crew members did the red-haired one have in 1506? Bellemere, who was supposed to have lived with Nami Nokigao for several years in the East China Sea, was forcibly arranged to be acquainted with the protagonist in the Grand Line. These are really more poisonous than the last, and anyone who respects the original work will not be able to stand it.

Compared with the Dimension Forum, it feels like a different person has written it. After reading a hundred chapters, I feel that it is both good and wasteful. The protagonist is also extremely passive. After writing so many chapters, there is not much content. I wrote it for the mystery and ended up with nothing happening for a long time. I wrote five sequences and I usually use them poorly. I might as well write a single sequence 😅

When I think about having multiple powerful gold fingers, I don't want to eat Devil Fruit after becoming a fishman. I have all kinds of abilities, but I still have to find a weakness for myself.

Goldfinger gradually adapts to this world and caters to this world. He appears to be the Lord of Secrets and has no real character. He has the feeling of being a young general like King Chu. He feels inexplicably unhappy.

I have read less than 100 pictures. So far, I only feel that although this book combines the best friend's sequence and devil fruit, it is not as exciting as other fans writing a separate book. It successfully explains what 1+1=0 is. This fusion is worse than no fusion. The two golden fingers together become a waste. . . I am also very speechless. I don't know what I will write next.

Shennong is here! First of all, the author wrote that Peach Rabbit has a domineering color. Secondly, the red-haired Shanks is a devil fruit user. Thirdly, the protagonist's battle suit ate two devil fruits. Note that the battle suit ate two fruits.

Personal tips for discouraging drug addicts—— (Subjective analysis, these are all personal evaluations. Although I am just a trainee, I read it all before it was put on the shelves, and I also skipped through it afterward. I basically scanned the free paragraphs in front of each chapter of the paid chapters, but the fan value is not as high as that of apprentices. After it is put on the shelves, the overall level is no different from before it was put on the shelves, so the points of dissuade I mentioned are basically common to the whole book) 1. Regarding backstabbing. Personally, I think the first and most dissuasive thing is that this book was written a little early, there were too many conflicts with the original work, and the backstabbing was so painful. This is the most important reason why I can't continue reading. In the past two years, Pirates has thrown out a lot of important information. Looking at the conflicts between this book and the original work, it is difficult to accept it and I can't stand it at all. This is also the biggest problem for many fans who write unfinished works. 2. About slaves. The slave life in Chapter 1 was extremely dissuaded, especially being brainwashed. I have talked a lot with others about being so hamstrung in Chapter 1, so I won't go into details here. If you want to talk, you can go to Chapter 1. I was brainwashed in Chapter 1 and was persuaded to quit 5 times. 3. About the fusion of pirates and mystery. My personal evaluation is that I care about one thing at the expense of the other, or even miss the other. It doesn't please both ends, and readers on both sides are not satisfied. I watched Mystery and Pirates, and my personal evaluation is that the integration and balance are very poor. I personally don't accept the integration of the power system. I don't feel comfortable watching it if I want to watch Mystery and show off, and I don't feel comfortable if I want to watch the plot of Pirates. 4. About the many secondary designs. Some people say that the large number of secondary designs is the author's characteristic, but from my personal point of view, the author's secondary designs are not good. Sometimes there are too many unimportant private designs that make the plot boring. Sometimes they are the author's private designs that I cannot accept and strongly disagree with. The most important thing is that a bunch of private designs are being stabbed in the back. My personal evaluation is that instead of making so many private settings to forcefully make up the settings, it is better to blur the settings like other fans and focus more on storytelling. 5. Regarding the plot rhythm and unfinished ending. First of all, I personally feel that this book is obviously bad. Although it cannot be said to be very bad, it is still unsatisfactory. Secondly, before it was put on the shelves, it was obvious that the author's pacing was not good. There was nothing exciting about it. It was always very depressing and bland. It can be said that it was very watery. Most of them were completely useless and ignored and had no impact at all. How could it be interesting to watch a plot that makes no difference whether it has or not? In addition, because the mysterious high-end power is too strong, the author can only suppress the protagonist's progress all the time, suppressing the protagonist and not getting stronger. This leads to the fact that the mysterious power that makes the pirates show off is almost completely gone, and only a little bit at the end is okay. These are my personal points in persuading people to quit poisoning. It is really hard to read on. Although the evaluation is subjective, the discussion is objective. Later readers can see if you can accept these poisonous points of mine. If you think they are all fine and not poisonous points, then you can read this book.

This first chapter is really well written Especially when you come to the comment section of other pirate fans and see that many people really have the same thoughts as the protagonist when he was a slave. This irony is so refreshing

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In fact, the current Pirate King today is quite poisonous. Writing One Piece fan fiction is inherently difficult, and some of the poisons are even inherent in One Piece itself. To this day, I don't know what he is drawing after One Piece. I feel like he is just wasting money and maintaining this IP, just like Boruto. However, Boruto was released after everyone else's Naruto story was finished. You, Pirates, haven't finished it yet. It's as smelly and long as a foot wrap. How much content can you hide? In the words of book friends, Pirates fandoms are all bad, and there are so many different ideas and hidden tricks that have been written. Nowadays, pirates rely on emotions to support themselves. (Of course, if everyone in the book recognizes the plot created by his political level, then I have no life to say)

Most of this book suppresses the protagonist, which is a bit frustrating to read. At the end, the plot suddenly accelerates in less than a hundred chapters, and then there are about less than twenty chapters of exciting content, which is the most enjoyable in the book, and then it ends badly.

The more you look at it, the more awkward it becomes, but this is not the author's problem. The author tried his best to make it smooth, but Oda has already written the plot badly, which makes the Wano Country plot and the Vegapunk part look weird.

If it were a pirate world, the hunter path would be the most interesting.