Shut-Ins Are Really Amazing

This is my first time writing a book review (please don't comment) Recently I like to read daily novels, and the title of this novel "Dead House" attracted me, so I tried to read it. The result was a huge disappointment, far from the otaku novel I imagined. Seeing that the author updates two chapters every day, but there are almost no comments on each chapter (meaning that readers have no feeling about the content, or are not even interested in posting comments), I simply wrote a book review. I have written more than 50 chapters in the novel so far. To sum up, there are the following problems: 1. This "otaku" system is quite innovative, but it is no longer enough to set all aspects of the male protagonist very high at the beginning of this article. In so-called daily love novels, in addition to the frequent interactions between boys and girls, there is also a very important factor, which is to see the growth of the male protagonist, whether it is physical or mental. 2. My daily writing is average, or I write too fast. Generally, it is because the article gives people the feeling of a running account, and often adds a lot of professional descriptions, which makes people turn the pages quickly involuntarily and want to skip over. Moreover, the transitions in some places are too abrupt. Too fast is because the pace is too fast. In fact, daily writing can be written very slowly. Various things that happen in the morning, noon and evening every day can mainly promote the plot and can be described in detail. For example, after the Moonlight mother and daughter met the male protagonist and became a family, the author mentioned it in one sentence, which can be expanded upon. The mother and daughter came to the hero's house as guests, and the hero recognized their identities, so everyone decided that the mother and daughter would move in and live together tomorrow. The father of the male protagonist sent the mother and daughter back. In the rented house, he described the dilapidated room. The mother and daughter had a private conversation and summarized what happened today. Moonlight said some thoughts about the male protagonist, and the mother clearly felt that there was something different in it. As for the move tomorrow, the brothers and sisters will interact more, get to know each other better, and cultivate their feelings for each other. Anyway, while promoting the plot, there is a lot of communication between men and women. 3. The most important point is that the sense of substitution is not strong, or the excitement is not enough, or almost non-existent. And recently, in order to forcefully promote the plot, the author added the "r3", which gives people a feeling of collapse. It can only be said that it is getting further and further away from the direction of "dead house". 4. Speaking of it alone, the glowing dish is quite surprising (even if the author gave a scientific explanation). The delicious food can be expressed through other people's faces, appearance, language, etc. There is no need to add this slightly science fiction color. Actually, to be honest, the direction of "dead house" is quite easy to write, but the author's choice of perspective is lacking. For example, there are the following settings. System: Improve the male protagonist's abilities in all aspects through home attributes. It's still the same here, the acquisition of otaku attributes is the degree to which everyone recognizes you as an otaku every day. The more people there are and the deeper the degree, the more you will get. And special events can also enable you to obtain a large number of otaku attributes. Special events can be: how many doujinshis were sold at comic exhibitions, how many light novels you wrote were sold, etc. The obtained otaku attributes can improve the author's various abilities, such as appearance, language expression, IQ, painting, etc. At the same time, there can be a store that sells various things, such as magical paintbrushes (which can only be used by yourself, and are just ordinary pens for others). Background: The author was an ordinary otaku in his previous life, with both parents deceased. He liked all kinds of otaku-style things, such as Little Butter, light novels, comics, cosplay, voice actors, etc. Although he is a homebody, he usually does some kind deeds, such as helping an old lady cross the road. Once while doing volunteer activities (you can get special figures after the completion), he died unfortunately and joined a Japanese family. The boy in Japan happened to be in the hospital and was in critical condition, so the male protagonist took his place. The boy was critically ill, either due to illness or because he was hit by a car while trying to save his sister. After the male protagonist woke up, he found that he was a primary school student and had an otaku system. After recovering, he decided to be a homebody. The doctor said that the boy had some mental or neurological problems due to the accident, so his parents were very understanding of him and allowed him to do what he wanted to do. Opening: Since you want to start a relationship, let's enroll in high school. Due to my parents' job transfer, I came to a completely new area. My former elementary school and junior high school friends (who were also homebodies) were separated and I needed to make new friends again. Note that otakus can also have friends. Ability, due to the blessing of the system, has been strengthened in all aspects, just don't go too far. There will still be growth in the future. The following are the characters: Male protagonist: With the help of the system, he has become a handsome boy. Since he needs other people's approval as an otaku, he can keep his hair longer (similar to the male protagonist in Hori and Miyamura) and wear big glasses. Anyway, just give people the feeling of being an otaku again. If you have a gentle personality and are not good at communicating with women, you can have some works in light novels, comics, etc. (These works can be new and your own, it is recommended not to be a copywriter), games, and computer skills are also acceptable. In life, the system also gives you specialties such as cooking, so you can cook well and have good physical fitness. Often attend otaku gatherings. Sister: It depends on whether you can conquer it or not. If you want to conquer it, write sister-in-law. The family is a reorganized family. Very beautiful and good grades. Because the male protagonist saved her when she was a child, she is very dependent on him. The male protagonist has participated in both light novels and comics. In daily life, I find many advantages of my brother and want to take him as my own. I am a bit yandere and do not want my brother to interact with other women. Because of his brother's otaku appearance, he felt a little relieved about the male protagonist. For the time being, the male protagonist only has a brother-sister relationship with her, so when his sister recommended many brother-sister works to him, he didn't take it to heart. Parents: It is recommended to have parents. The interaction between families is quite interesting. You don't have to be a member of the Qidian Orphanage. School Beauty: Beautiful, rich, with a personality similar to Yukino, she founded a special club of her own. This kind of female protagonist can usually only conquer the game mentally. In order to interact with the male protagonist, she can say that she has written light novels, or has read novels, comics, etc. Written by the male protagonist. Teacher: I just graduated from Dongdong University and was dissatisfied with the male protagonist's choice of a club for otakus. I taught him in my first year and wanted to change him, so I recommended him to the school belle. (If you want to be different here, you can say that the male protagonist refused and still joined the otaku club, but at the same time he got acquainted with the school beauty). Senior: Sluts have become more popular recently. Add a character like this (similar to Mai-senpai in Love Game and Shin Terajima in Professional Boyfriend) who is indifferent to everything. When you care about the male protagonist, you can see the scene of the male protagonist taking off his glasses and washing his face, or the scene of the male protagonist stroking a kitten under the sunset. Friends: There can be one or two friends in the classroom who can talk. Otaku Club: Some friends with common interests can design games, draw, etc. Together. There are also girls with special hobbies (similar to the club in My Sister). The plot of the story is that in the interaction between the male protagonist and multiple female protagonists, he strengthens himself and finally opens a harem. Finally, let's talk about some points to pay attention to in daily love writing: 1. The emergence of the system is to gradually strengthen the male protagonist's skills so that the male protagonist can truly have the ability to open a harem. This must be remembered. 2. In fact, daily writing is relatively easy to write. Generally, the first four heroines can be written to 400 chapters, and an additional heroine can be added for 200-300 chapters. You can write as long as you want, as long as it advances the plot. You can write it slowly, but you must include an interactive plot between the male and female protagonists. One Conan was written until I was in the third grade of elementary school, and one with 2,000 chapters for high school students was still in the first year of high school. As long as you write well every day, people will read it. 3. You need to learn to drive. Whether your driving skills are good or not will greatly affect your early subscription. This can refer to the interaction between the male protagonist and Kujo in the love game, and the communication between the male protagonist and the female protagonists in Professional Boyfriend. The main thing is to learn how to be able to give the author random ideas while driving and still pass the review. 4. The sign of the end of a chapter is to make readers have the desire to follow it, which tests the author's ability to break chapters. So it is better to write two small chapters a day than one chapter a day. PS: Finally, let's talk about the novel. In my estimation, this book is bound to hit the market, whether the author admits it or not. You can continue to write, just practice writing. I suggest that if you want to achieve results, you should rewrite and reimagine it.

Every time I watch Riqing, it gets related to the club. Every time, the male protagonist is reluctant to go but has to go for some reason. I really feel uncomfortable watching it.

，                                                                                                                                                                                                          A dandy with no knowledge and skills, wants to fall in love with a beautiful woman, and then conflicts with the protagonist. If you want to write about light novels or daily life, it feels too redundant. If you want to write about urban superpowers, it feels lackluster and not strong enough.        ，， . . For example, the older sister who wants to share the burden for her younger brother but actually does a lot of harm to her, the young ladies in the school who are waiting to donate their eggs, etc. This led me to read fifty or sixty chapters, but the female characters did not leave a good impression on me. Anyway, just looking at it from the front, I always feel that the protagonist's life would be more colorful and comfortable without these women. . .

Talk about the shortcomings of this book (1) What do you say when a fan shows up at the comic exhibition? First of all, a man's desire for control already doesn't want his girlfriend (reserve) to be seen by others. The cosplay character can choose other characters. Then she encounters some technical problems, and the protagonist helps solve the problem. (2) Common sense: As a 30-year-old person, with some experience and a variety of knowledge, skills and information, he should understand people's hearts, have emotional intelligence, and assess the situation Know how to resolve interpersonal relationships. When I first met Miss Tachibana, I was able to solve her problems like a gentleman and not let myself waste energy studying. In this conflict plot, the pseudo-otaku would rather do less than do more, so as not to waste his time dealing with unnecessary things. (3) Going to that middle school where elites are concentrated, conflicts with dandies are inevitable. Young people are immature and have all kinds of weird things. Whether it's because of being an otaku or not, what kind of opponents the protagonist has when he first rises, can you write down how much power the protagonist has? An advantage over the enemy? Otherwise, it will make people think that the protagonist has an emotional intelligence defect. The protagonist is not alone, he has a family. He is not the rogue who took care of the flood after I died. When the protagonist gets up and there is a conflict and enemies appear, you write that the protagonist's power can crush the opponent's power and family, so that the opponent cannot threaten his relatives, friends, and harm his family. This is how I felt when I saw the protagonist encounter the enemy. I don't know the balance of power. The author deliberately wrote it this way, which made me very uncomfortable. I felt that his family's life was in danger when the protagonist was implicated. I hope the author will polish the plot and not let the protagonist make unnecessary troubles and conflicts, so as not to make the plot seem rigid. Good works are those that conform to the logic of reality and the logical relationships of interpersonal communication... Etc. The author can delete the post after reading it

Good guy, I thought it was a good novel, but as I read it, I started to lose my wits.

I digress, the title of the book should be "I Beat the Rich Second Generation After Living in Tokyo for 2 Years"

Just stay at home and stay at home, what tricks are you doing?

Digressing from the topic, it's still Japanese to pretend to be a dead house. . .

I feel like writing about this otaku is not enough. For in-depth otakus, you can refer to otakus like "Eromanga Teacher" and Sagiri Izumi. After all, homebodies can't go out without going out, and they try their best not to go out. It's none of your business Hang high.

I saw a place to add a club, so I said that. The writing has been very poor since I was in school, and the plot is a mess. Why do I say that, because the character selection does not match the personality, and the standard of the protagonist's character level is seriously substandard, which is the so-called combat power collapse. However, online novels will not give you too many opportunities to add settings. In this case, you might as well choose a funny comic background and write your own story. It will be much more reasonable.