Douluo Dalu: I Loaded Odyssey Kayn's Voice Pack

I just read the second chapter, and I suddenly had the idea that I could write a book with Su Yuntao as the protagonist. His specialty is stacking buffs to let many time travelers in, and then Brother Tao will stack buffs for them crazyly to give feedback to himself, and it will be a direct battle between gods.

The more I look at it, the weirder it becomes. You said that you, a genius with three martial souls, did not go to the Wuhun Palace to be a seed, but instead went to work as a dog for a family whose strongest person is level 60 or 70, and your parents and relatives were even taken as hostages. What are you trying to do? Picture the 1 cubic soul guide he gave you? Or the 500 gold soul coins he gave you?

No, Niu Mang and Monkey, these two gatekeepers, are you really writing them as invincible in the world? At the current pace, other ferocious beasts are sucking ice silkworms, and they are not even qualified to absorb these two things. One hundred thousand year Xiongjun Biji made me laugh, why these two ten thousand years are from one hundred thousand years to four to five hundred thousand years, right? 😅 Did you write this thing without reading the information? 😅

It looks so strange. 1. While saying that Jiao Xiaoan's theory is a piece of shit, he also said that if he hadn't cheated, then he would have to follow Jiao Xiaoan's theory to absorb the soul ring. If this is the case, then for the Douluo natives, isn't the theory of prison anus absolutely correct? So why do you say it's a piece of shit? 2. In the original work, after Tang San absorbed the first spirit ring, it seemed to be level 13, but here it becomes level 11 3. The protagonist did not want to have anything to do with Yu Xiaoan, but after absorbing the first spirit ring and coming back, he met Yu Xiaoan, who asked him about the soul ring. He said that he had absorbed a soul ring that was more than 500 years old, but it was actually a soul ring that was more than 800 years old. . But since you have already lied, why not just say it is lower, less than 423 years. He wanted to talk about a soul ring that was more than 500 years old and exceeded the theoretical limit of Jiao Xiaoan, and then attracted Jiao Xiaoan's big attention and reaction! Everyone knows what a dick in prison is like. Once this 500-year-old soul ring comes out, can the protagonist not attract his attention? So later on, the little anal devil in prison was stunned. He felt that the protagonist was lying and wanted to fire the protagonist. Then he started talking about a bunch of nonsense. Isn't this just pure intelligence?

Some mediocre books can reach Sanjiang and reach the top of the monthly ticket list just by relying on money. However, some food and grass jelly are not even approved for signing, so they should go to Beijing.

It was quite fun to watch at first, but as the plot progressed, the supporting characters and the protagonist gradually turned into crazy people, each one more crazy than the last. Sometimes for the sake of plot development, the author can write very outrageous character dialogues and psychological descriptions, and the characters are seriously OOC. This subject matter feels good, so at least let the protagonist be normal, and don't force the plot just for some reason or plot development.

The pig's trotter's three views are also crooked. Even if he had the nerve to mess with Tang San, his three views are also wrong.

Daming, how could Erming have two watchdogs so strong, and they even asked Brigitte to call them supreme

This soul ring configuration makes me uncomfortable. At level 10, the first soul ring hunted alone has a lifespan of 890 years. With such strength, the second soul ring is still a hundred years old! The reason is actually that in the original work, there are only century-old soul beasts but no thousand-year soul beasts.

The title of the book doesn't quite work. A simple book title that is easy to understand and you are more than half done.